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Review #1, by SpringSinger19Mask: Mask

25th January 2012:
This was wonderful, terribly sad, but wonderful. You captured all the emotions perfectly. I felt as if my heart were breaking right along with Marlene's. I've felt a lot like her before, and I think many other girls have to. I just wanted to comfort her the entire time. She was being so awful to herself :( but I did love her ending revelation. It was perfect.

I also loved how you described James. He acted just as I thought he would. Slightly oblivious to other people's feelings.

This was perfect

Author's Response: Wow thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it, I worked hard on it to try and make it seem realistic, I'm glad it worked! :D Thank's for your great review!! :D


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Review #2, by SpringSinger19A Stone Memorial: Pennies in a fountain.

25th January 2012:
This was so lovely :) I'm so glad I read it. I loved your writing, I loved the concept and the POVs were wonderful. Everything wound together wonderfully and you could relate everything so perfectly. I loved the metaphors. Just wonderful. I think you should write more angst. you have talent for it!

Author's Response: Wow! This review has totally made my day, I feel so proud, and generally amazing. It's such a lovely review, thanks a whole heap! I will have a go at some more angst, but i must admit, it intimidates me a bit :)
Thank you again!

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Review #3, by SpringSinger19Still Delicate: The Other Side of Normality

18th January 2012:
Incredible :) as I said, I'll miss this story so much!

this POV made me cry. I could really identify with Scorpius as I recently just had someone very close to me pass on. and oh dear, you can't just throw away Scorpius now and let Rose marry Tom now! ;) that would be cruel! haha, either way, I can't wait to see how this story ends! great chapter

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Review #4, by SpringSinger19Unravel Me: Unravelling

14th January 2012:
Awww, I wish there were more! :) This is so wonderful and lovely. I am really rooting for Dominique. I feel bad for her, even though she has made so many mistakes. Again, the writing of this chapter was perfect. I thought you did a wonderful job of wrapping up the story.

This was perfect!

Author's Response: Awww :) Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Your reviews were so sweet! :)

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Review #5, by SpringSinger19Unravel Me: Cinderella

14th January 2012:
Ohh this was wonderful again :) I love your writing. This was again, believable and sweet. The beginning description about her room was wonderful. And Dominique is continuing to grow on me, as is Brad! However, be careful with him ;) he seems a little too perfect right now. I'd like to see some of his imperfections!

Again, great chapter! Can't wait to see more!

Author's Response: You're right, I should probably fix Brad up with some more imperfections. Thanks for the tip! :)

Thank you so much!

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Review #6, by SpringSinger19Unravel Me: Thank You, Come Again

14th January 2012:
Hey dear! :) Sorry this has taken so long, but I'm here to review!

This chapter was amazing! I instantly fell in love with Dominique. She was sweet and likable. Your writing also flows very well :) You know how to transition and write things that the reader really relates to and comprehend. I also loved the flaws you gave her and I thought her perspective on magic was fresh! She's just lovely!

Great start! I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: No problem, thanks for stopping by! :)

Wow, I'm glad you liked it so much! I wanted Dominique to be different from the typical really-awesome-at-everything-and-loves-it character.

Thanks again!

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Review #7, by SpringSinger19Her Dark Wings: Her Dark Wings

25th October 2011:
Lovely job! I adored your fluency, vocabulary and concept. you translated your metaphors to your audience well! some need to be a little rethinked - the second paragraph is a bit confusing with the photograph remarks and the run-on sentence. the first sentence is also a bit jumbled. that's my only critique however! great job :) I loved it!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the lovely review! And you know - you're very right about that sentence. I normally write in much clearer short sentences and putting such a jumble in the beginning of the story was a bit risky (since it could put off the reader). But I kind of at the same time like it like this because it "fits" with the whole jumbled up mess that is Lily's mind. I'll rethink it again when I do an edit though. ;) Thanks again lovely!

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Review #8, by SpringSinger19Lost in the Dying Light: Lost in the Dying Light

1st October 2011:
totally knew the banner was your the second I saw it! :) fabulous! just like your writing! I adored the fact that you changed the james/lily dynamic and made it so they didn't fall in love at Hogwarts. That's pretty fresh! at least for me, never seen that before!

your introduction was lovely and hooked me right off the bat. you have a wonderful vocabulary and style of writing. and as you continued, I loved that you added Lily's little observations about James. that was intriguing(:

I liked the reference back to canon too! and Lily's thoughts about Severus. it made me want to cry when she was talking about losing her innocence.


^then I got far too wrapped up in reading to provide a detailed analysis/review. it was so wonderful though and it positively broke my heart. I thought there was going to be a blossoming of romance in this but I was pleasantly surprised by the lack of it. I think this is a completely accurate, gritty sort of interpretation that I love. sometimes I think fanfiction authors fluff up the world of Harry Potter far too much, and it's refreshing when I read a story that doesn't do that.

amazing job susan!(: you're incredibly skilled at both the art of graphic making and writing.

you just couldn't leave any talent for the rest of us, could you?(;

Author's Response: That banner was the third one I'd done for this story - the first two didn't fit, but then I went back to another set of folders and come up with something completely different. I'm very glad that you like it - something in the colouring just worked out - but it is rather like my style of earlier this year, so that's probably why it's recognizable. Thanks for the compliment on it! :D

It's great that you liked the introduction! I wrote this story out of order, then rearranged the bits and pieces, finally filling in some of the gaps afterwards, so it felt like a giant mess in my brain, rather than a cohesive story. I wasn't sure whether making them fall in love after Hogwarts would work out, but I'm glad that it did because it better suited the idea I had. Both characters had to grow and develop together, along separate lines, before they could have a relationship. To have them already in love would have made that far more difficult.

It was supposed to be more romantic. *headdesk* It was frustrating when it didn't appear, the focus instead resting on that grittier side - it's all that film noir that I watch, I guess. Yet it is more realistic, like you said, because it is the middle of a war and they get caught up in it. There isn't really room for fluff (which makes it easier for me).

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this story! It's a great relief that people are enjoying this story and that it isn't the horrible monster I felt it was once I'd finished writing. XD It means a lot to have heard from you! ^_^

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Review #9, by SpringSinger19Social Skills: Social Skills

26th August 2011:
Haha I liked this!(: I've never really read a Flint story, so this was interesting to read! It seemed realistic and believable. I enjoyed it! There were a few grammatical errors here and there, but nothing major. Great job!

Author's Response: thank you :) I finally got a chance to answer back your reviews :) It was my first time writing something to do with Flint, and I liked it so you might see him again on this page in the near future :)

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Review #10, by SpringSinger19Building Dollhouses In The Sand: Chapter Four

23rd August 2011:
This was another very good chapter. I like Katherine a bit better and I also still love Fred and George. Nobody really jumps out at me though. I'd love to love them but I don't :( yet.

However, another thing I'm a bit curious about is - is this AU or are you going by the books? Because I've seen no mention of Harry, Ron or Hermione. Additionally, in their 3rd year, there was no mention of the Chamber of Secrets but now there is the whole dementor thing in their 4th year. I'm a bit confused.

Great job though! You write well, grammatically correct and everything flow well!(: I look forward to reading more!

Author's Response: No this story isn't AU, I don't mention the trio much but they do make appearances. I jumped from their third year to their fifth year. The Chamber of Secrets happened in Harr's second year which would be the twin's fourth year. But I guess I didn't make this clear enough so thank you for pointing it out so I can start the edits. :)

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Review #11, by SpringSinger19Building Dollhouses In The Sand: Chapter Three

23rd August 2011:
Good chapter again! You are really great at writing quidditch scenes and you also have wonderful flow. I like this story. However, I feel like Katherine’s a bit boring. I’d like to see her expanded. I really want to be interested in her! She’s sweet. I also think she’s a bit too casual concerning her father. It’s probably a sensitive topic and that sort of thing is hard to openly talk about.

You did well writing the interaction with her father. I enjoyed it! And when you wrote about Egil, it made me miss him. If that makes sense...? I really do hate her father though.

And I liked the last part with George!(: I'm excited to see what comes of it all!

Author's Response: Hullo again :) Thank you! I love Quidditch :) So I really enjoy writing those scenes in particular. I think your write Katherine is acting too casual, so I'll change that around. Though when I come to think of it she acts indifferent towards it even though it does hurt her.

:) Thank you I like George too and I wish I could bring Egil more into the story.

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Review #12, by SpringSinger19Building Dollhouses In The Sand: Chapter Two

23rd August 2011:
Great chapter again! I liked your inclusion of the quidditch! However, I feel like they all act a bit too old for their age. And I feel like Angelina wouldn't simply spill all Katherine's secret (like about her father and her uncle) to anyone, even Fred and George. I like how you portray Fred and George though(: they are very in-character and very enjoyable!

Author's Response: I'll read that up, I mean I haven't been that young in.loads of years jajaja so it does get hard to image myself inside a child's head but thanks for the heads up :) Aww thank I love Fred and George so that means alot to me :)

Thank you :)

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Review #13, by SpringSinger19At Great Personal Risk: A Little Bit of Chemistry

22nd August 2011:
Great chapter again!(:

I love how you portray Lily. She always seems incredibly outgoing and quick-tempered in all the stories I've seen so it's interesting to see her as a quiet and reserved child. Oh and for some reason, the whole "it's...flexible" thing made me chuckle(: just thought I'd mention that.

I think you're doing a great job so far! I kind of wish it was a complete role reversal. Like...Snape has a snotty (squib?) sibling like Petunia and some girl was vying after Snape's attetion or something...hahaha(: actually on second thought, don't listen to me!

Great job again!

Author's Response: Hey again!

I didn't make it a complete reversal because I thought it would be more interesting to switch up certain elements, add in AU ones, keep a few from canon... you know, really make it my own :)

Glad you're still enjoying it, including my unorthodox portrayal of Lily :)

Thanks! I hope you continue reading!


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Review #14, by SpringSinger19At Great Personal Risk: Two Owls

21st August 2011:

I loved this. This is such a unique idea(: I am so excited to read more! There wasn't a moment that I wasn't fully enraptured by this. It was intriguing. The beginning was a good intro too, and I was definitely interested by it.

It was odd to see Snape in such a peaceful environment and Lily in such a chaotic one. I can't wait to see how much a reversal this is. Will Lily be in Slytherin. Will Snape be in Gryffindor. Hopefully James isn't asking Snape out al the time! ;) haha

I'm curious as to how this plays out! I want to see some Petunia and I'm wondering if this story ends as a Snape/Lily or a James/Lily. Since I adore James/Lily, I hope it's that but it'd be interesting to see a...Snily? hahaha I guess there aren't many good name mashes for those two(;

Great chapter! I can't wait to see more(:

Author's Response: Hey there!

Well, I can't give too much away, but there are some definite twists and turns in there :) I'm sorry to say that there won't be any Petunia, though. I decided to really change things around and make it my own rather than simply swap the personalities and call it a day; that makes it interesting, you know?

Glad you're enjoying it so far, and can't wait to hear your thoughts on chapter two! :)


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Review #15, by SpringSinger19Building Dollhouses In The Sand: Chapter One

20th August 2011:
Great chapter again! I was a bit confused at the beginning, but I may just be tired.

I rather like Katherine. I like the fact that you didn't make her all cliche and super out-going and perfect and Mary-Sue-ish(: it's refreshing.

I also liked the fact that you included smaller characters like Cedric. It's quite interesting. I love to see that.

I thought the fact that she couldn't tell them apart was hilarious, and I can't wait to figure out what really happened with her father, Egil and her mother!

Great chapter!

Author's Response: It's because I'm tired too XD School takes alot out of me :) I'm glad you find good ol' Katherine to be likeable. I love her :) Se's my favorite Oc up to date, I love minor characters plus I think they ground the story. You'll find out what happens soon enough. ;)

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Review #16, by SpringSinger19Building Dollhouses In The Sand: Prologue

20th August 2011:
Ahh I adore this(: how come I didn't read it sooner?

Well anyways, I was, for some reason, incredibly worried for Elizabeth and Katherine at the beginning. Like actually, the way I'd feel in a movie. It was weird for me...but good! haha sorry this makes no sense but I swear it's a complement on your writing(:

Even though we barely knew her, I was so sad at Elizabeth's death. Poor Katherine :(

I loved Fred and George. I mean, who doesn't. But they were very in character here. I would've liked to see a bit more originality in their dialogue but hey, you can't have everything!

I'm excited to see what comes next! Great chapter!

Author's Response: lol I don't know why you didn't read this sooner XD I have been told that this is like a movie :)

Thank you :)

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Review #17, by SpringSinger19Cheater, Cheater, Pumpkin Eater: Hate: Marina

16th August 2011:
This is wonderful!(: I would give you a nice, long review but I'm far too tired. When you next update (see what I did there?) I'll give you a veryyy long one. But for now, this will have to do. I loved it, it was very clever and I'm so very excited to read more!

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Review #18, by SpringSinger19Annabel: Annabel

12th August 2011:
First - thanks for entering(: This was lovely. I enjoyed it and I thought it was refreshing and new.

I loved Louis. He was a little mopey but I guess that's understandable(; I felt so bad for him and it made me so angry at Annabel.

I thought your writing was lovely and you did a great job at the flashback. The entire story seemed realistic. It was a little bittersweet and a bit harsh, but believable. Things aren't perfect in reality and you portrayed that wonderfully. The only thing I didn't like as much was the abrupt ending. I wanted more!

Thank you for the entry!(: I loved it a lot!

Author's Response: Thank you for the challenge :) Of course he'd be mopey, Poor thing really loved Anna :)

It was harsh but it is believable something similar happened to me with my ex :( So this was a bit hard to write.

Maybe later I'll write more XD

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Review #19, by SpringSinger19Experimentation: Experimentation

7th August 2011:
First - thanks for entering! Second - this was great!(:

I loved the beginning, it seemed casual and relaxed and believable. Both seemed very in character and I loved it when Seamus cracked that stupid joke. And I positively laughed out loud at the whole 'why do girls like girls?' thing. I don't know why but it just seemed incredibly funny to me! haha(:

And the whole "I was trying to think of something to do" ohh that made me laugh too. I could just imagine this semi-awkward situation between the two.

But the best part for SURE was the encounter with the parents. All that talk of experimenting had me chuckling to myself.

Overall, I loved this. It was hilarious. I loved how casual they acted at the end and I loved how, for some reason, I believed it.

Great job and, again, thanks for entering!!(:

Author's Response: You're very welcome. ^.^

Thank you so much. Haha. It just randomly popped into my head. After you told me who I picked the first thing I thought of was "Seriously? Seamus and Neville? That's incredibly weird. Especially as a couple." And then I thought about it for a few moments. That's when it hit me. Everyone knows that girls are more likely to do it then guys, but why can't guys do it? Haha.

I'm glad that it was entertaining and made you laugh so much. Thanks. :D

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Review #20, by SpringSinger19Le Scorp!: This is the chapter that comes after chapter two!

6th August 2011:
I love this.
So. So. So. Much.

Author's Response: AWESOME POSSUM.

Thank youuu!!!

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Review #21, by SpringSinger19Le Scorp!: This is the second chapter!

6th August 2011:
it's Gilderoy Lockhart reborn...hahahahaha oh man I adore this

Author's Response: Gilderoy Lockhart wishes he could be this awesome. FO SHO.

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Review #22, by SpringSinger19Le Scorp!: This is the first chapter!

6th August 2011: a masterpiece.
hahahahahaha 10/10 and added to favorites. new favorite story RIGHT HERE! hahaha(:

Author's Response: WOOO YEAH

thanks for readdinngg!!!

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Review #23, by SpringSinger19Just a raindrop: Just a raindrop

6th August 2011:
Awww this was so sweet(: I loved the ending. Interesting pairing but you did it well. I loved that even though Lysander wasn't quite as odd as Luna, he still had some odd tendencies and you showed that(: I also loved the quidditch scene and all the going back and forth between qudditch and watching the break-up scene.
Great one-shot(:

Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! And the quidditch scene was so fun to write, you have no idea! Thanks so much for reviewing! :D

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Review #24, by SpringSinger19One Night: One Night

5th August 2011:
Great piece(: I loved it! Your imagery drew me in from the bat and you kept up quite consistently throughout the entire story. You kept pretty consistent to cannon as well which was a definite plus.

I loved the conversation between Sirius and James. It was believable, which I loved. Both were very in-character which was refreshing(:

I also liked how you characterized Narcissa. It seemed natural. I was a little surprised at how human you made her out to be at first but you showed me when she went all seductress on James.

I also liked James' hesitation because of Lily and the fact that he wasn't a ladies man. That was realistic. I hate it when Marauder Era stories make Sirius and James out to be total sluts. It just doesn't exactly work for me.

Great job! I love how this fit into Sirius' running away and living with James. I wish I could've seen his reaction to James' actions. That would've been a laugh!

Good job and thanks for entering(:

Author's Response: Thank you! I've been picturing the Marauders for years, since it's my favourite era but I must admit, I never pictured THIS one night stand haha. Narcissa was fun to write, since you never see her to anything big until the end of DH. I'm another one who didn't picture James or Sirius to be super slutty. Just because they were good looking doesn't mean they have to be jerks! Thanks for the challenge, it was a lot of fun to write!

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Review #25, by SpringSinger19Abandoned: It's okay to be afraid.

4th August 2011:
First off - thank you so much for entering(:

Second - this was amazing.

I loved the beginning sentence. It was perfect and I thought you set up the post-war atmosphere perfectly. George's fear and grief was captured wonderfully. I absolutely adored this section in particular:

"The room had been abandoned when the twins had gone off to do bigger, better things. And now George was abandoned while Fred had gone off to a bigger, better place."

^ Beautiful(: As someone close to me recently died, I identified with the loss and it just made me so sad :( But in a good way!

I loved Luna as well. You portrayed her perfectly. That's one of the best things about this story -- how in character George and Luna are. The interactions were so raw and beautiful and poetic and, most importantly -- believable (which was the point of this challenge)

So all in all, I loved this. If all the entries are as good as this, I'm going to have a hard time judging!(:


Author's Response: SpringSinger19,

Ah!! You make my work sound so amazing, it's incredible. All this came from YOU who gave me Luna and George to work with and I spent the longest time trying to figure out when they would possibly get together and then. . .THIS.

I'm really glad you enjoyed it, and that sentence, I makes me go 'did I really write that?' which is both worrying and amusing.

And hearing that they were kept in character--that's just really, I dunno, exciting (for lack of better word) to hear, because I was worrying about that a lot.

Thank you again, for both the challenge and the lovely review!

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