Its good, but your summary just turns it off :P Do you mean thaker pronounced like "Thakur?" Like 'Thakur saab' :P Krishna? Isn't he a guy? What about Sita, Durga? :PAuthor's Response: Are you Indian? xD
Well, no. Thakur and Thaker are two completely different last names having reaaallly different origins. "Thaker" is pronounced like "Thaa-cur" like, "curd" without the "d" xD I know it's all too confusing :P Well, Krishna is a unisex name. MANY girls are names Krishna :) And Sita, Durga are really, I don't know... last century names? :P Krishna is still contemporary! I like the name :) Anyway, glad you like the story, and about the summary... haha, I know :P Thanks for reviewing! :) Report Review
How many epic chapters are left? ;) Report Review
VividImagination from the forums at your service!
This was hauntingly good! So different, yet refreshing. I was a little disturbed by the fact of Draco being a veela but if you work with it you can make Draco work! ;)
And also I think veela is a gene, so he is human. I don't think the veela gene does anything but make the person handsome/pretty. But its really good! I expected Hermione in the beginning but it was Daphne!Author's Response: Well thank you so much! This was a blast to write! I just wanted something different! Report Review
This is really beautiful! I would normally be neutral to these time lapse stories but you've written it in such a fantastic way. It is really believable, and I think you portrayed Teddy and Victoire very nicely.
Very believable, this actually summarizes my view on Teddy & Victoire ship and how it might go! The imagery is great (like always) ;)
This was very refreshing, different from the previous Teddy/Victoire I've read and because of this, I might start reading/liking the ship/stories more! Continue with epic writing!
I know I am about a few weeks late, but oh well!Author's Response: Hey there! I'm glad that you liked how I portrayed the pairing. I've gotten a few compliments on my treatment of Victoire, but it's good to know that readers also like the pairing as a whole. I can sympathize with you; I normally stay far, far away from Next-Gen, but a bunny pulled me in, and now I kind of like this pairing.
Thanks for your very kind review! :)
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OH MY GOD. I am blown away. This is the most amazing, unique one-shot I have read. Why doesn't this have more love? The last thing I expected for her is to see such an evil her in the mirror. And your mirror is spectacular, terrific!Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I'm not too good at promoting my stories so they tend to stay pretty unknown! But thanks so much for your review :)
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THIS SHOULD GET SO MUCH LOVE Author's Response: thank you so much for taking the time to review! I appreciate your words very much and i'm pleased that you liked it :D Report Review
So excited for the next chapter! EK! :D Report Review
Wow. This is just so amazing! The idea is so original, and fabulous! And your portraying of Teddy is beautiful x) Sorry, not really much of a good review? More like a 'love your story, gosh its amazing!' review :) Report Review
Megan, this was REALLY good!
The depth of Dominique was beautiful, her emotions and her no-ability to say those simple words was very convincing. You made this very convincing and I love how you didn't use Alex Pettyfer for dear Scorpy ;)
I can definitely imagine Rose being like that, and this fic shows the other side of her instead of the quiet one who always ends up with Scorpius. Honestly, this was very good and the flow was great. It wasn't choppy or any of that other nonsense. So good day :)
ImagineHarmony aka. Tawi ^^Author's Response: Thank you very much! Haha I'm a bit fed up of seeing him being used for Scorpius too - but it's very difficult to find someone who looks exactly how you want them to! aspen_aureline did a fabulous job with it :-) Thank you again :-)
- Megan xo Report Review
Hi! This was actually very nice! I enjoyed it and smiled along ^^ Well I find it believable, I'd stick to napkins in the beginning too :P The characterization was good and cute to be honest. Yet I don't think the 'falling in love' in the summary applies here! *laugh*
Sorry, isn't much, overall, its really good ^^Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Report Review
WOOT WOOT FOR TOM/ROSE! Report Review
Hello! I was a bit confused on how many chapters you wanted me to read, so for now I'm reading the first only unless you re-request it? Okay then.
Well, I sorta found it a bit... rushed. If you plan this as a Novella, then I as the audience would have needed to have a sympathy/sorry/pity side for him (Matthew). I think that him being attacked right after he left Fenrir believable, but Matthew meeting Fenrir for the first time then being attacked? Err... no. And if I was bitten by a werewolf, I would take a long time to get attached to it.
Overall, it isn't bad, but with some changes, this will be a very good story! ;)
ImagineHarmony aka. Tawi xxAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'm thinking I'll go and change/add some stuff later but I wrote this all in one sitting... Chapter 1-4 was all at once. I had a huge idea... So I wrote it... Then forgot to edit... I might go and fix these early chapters as I continue the story. I don't mind how much you read/review. XD If you want to you can continue, I just really wanted some criticsm. Thanks! Report Review
I'll be honest. As a HPFFer, it is everyone's job to help new comers and assist them to write better stories. Please don't get offended or insulted, this is my opinion and advice so feel free to take it or consider it.
I didn't like it. At all. I'm sorry, but no. It was just too rushed! I'll start from the beginning and comment my way through. I thought that the idea of Ron and Lavender was totally no. I really don't think they'll start using muggle phones that early and Hermione is not the one who'll go home when she is said to while investigating or doing something. She would've asked Ron on why he even took a video of it. Also, it would've been better if it was not said "Four years later, two years later" etc. because that annoys me.
Everything was just to rushed. You should be able to slow down and add more dialogues. One chapter for me is 3500 words plus, but this can be considered as a prologue. Anyways, I really don't like the idea of him being a double agent unless you can come up with a REALLY good back up story like Snape's (which was amazing in every way). And the war was on May 2nd not August 25th, so they will have a war reunion on May 2nd.
And the time like "6PM"and "6:55PM" is not necessary and just distracts them (audience) a lot. You can write it as "They reached there a few minutes before it started." And I don't think anybody will think she died, by the time Harry and Ron would've been aurors and would have loads of search parties going around. That may be possible in 5-6 years, but you mentioned that ""Everyone in the wizarding world thought I was dead, one year later and I was living as a muggle in muggle America until I met a guy."
Personally, I wouldn't give up for like 3-4 years. She could be easily recognized from the wizarding newspapers (there are wizards and witches in USA who read whats happened to Voldemort). So I wish the best to you for your next chapters :)Author's Response: hi, thankyou for your respose, i'm really glad someone has given me some critisism I found the chapter really hard to write and i will take into account as much as i can about what you wrote, thankyou for your review x Report Review
A Roti what Prata? =S Is this in any way supposed to relate to the hindi words? xD
I like it so far :)Author's Response: A Roti John Prata is this sort of food you get in singapore. Imagine a prata, with ketchup and mustard :P.
I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
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Wonderful chapter! Report Review
Woohoo! Amazing amazing amazing :D Continue! Report Review
You're horrible Leanne! How dare you do that to Rosie? Y u make Hermione OOC? XD Great job on the writing!Author's Response: HAHAHAH! Thankyou for this (I think? :P) You think Hermione is OOC? O.O I thought it would be something she would do if Malfoy was calling her daughter Rosie, and basically trying to get her to flip... Thank You Tawi!! XD Report Review
Amazing story so far :D :D
The characters seem so real and its very well written! I haven't got much to say xD Continue with the epic work! Me want more chapters!Author's Response: Thank you so much hun, you're way too sweet! I'm writing more, I hope that the next chapter will get done soon. xD Report Review
Hey you! This is a dark/angsty-ish fic! My summary doesn't match the situation AT ALL! :P You seriously should have told me that! *pout*
Well I love it :) First attempt? Seriously? It doesn't look like your first ;) It was nice to see a Dramione Draco's POV on the torture and it was just heart-warming.
I'm giving you a 9/10, mainly because you didn't tell me that my summary was so sucky :PAuthor's Response: Yeah, but it was defiantly better than the summary I had before. Your summary is really good, even if it doesn't match the story %100.
And yeah, that was my first one-shot
Thanks for reading and reviewing :D Report Review
Yay for using my title :) Your welcome!
Well its my favourite pairing - HARMONY!!! Anyways, I just thought it was a bit rushed, it would have been much better if you could elaborate their feelings more, specially Hermione's when she ran away. Couple of flashbacks would be nice too! :)
IH TawiAuthor's Response: And thanks, your title is awesome! It worked so much better than my title before 'atone'.
and i know it is quite slow and slightly boring, sorry about that.
I'm going to go back and re-edit it one day x Report Review
Great job Leanne ;)
I love your characterization of Scorpius and the others if Rose was in Slytherin!Author's Response: Awh. Thank you so much! I'm glad you like the characterisation :) Report Review
Great story so far ;) I find Sonam Kapoor (your Anjali) very beautiful!Author's Response: Thanks! She's gorgeous, isn't she? :D Report Review
AMAZING PIECE :O :O :OAuthor's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'm glad that you enjoyed it. Report Review
I love it :) Do continue Leanne!Author's Response: Thankyou for this review! I really hope to finish this. I've written up to chapter 4 so far, and chapter 3 is in the queue, so I will continue! Thanks again for such a kind review! :) Report Review
Great job! However, could have been better if you explained why it didn't work :) I like it and appreciate it ^^ Keep up the good work!
PS. I'm the VividImagination in the forums!Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. I didn't really have a reason in mind, maybe I should have thought it through a little more... :/ I'm glad you still liked it though!^^
~LL Report Review
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