If I could send you a virtual sound of a hoard of clapping through HPFF - I would! Because honestly; this is a really, really, truly, utterly, fantastic; beautiful piece.
I love how you were able to portray this fantastic canon couple in such a light, not many people are able to do that. It was sad, it was definitely sad to know that Arthur was dying. The lines "He had not been able to remember her name for several weeks. Generations of children, gone. Spells, lost. But he smiled at her now." broke me. Like literally.
I really am at a loss of words - as I always am.
I found the use of the fantastic imagery helped the 'Molly's mind' effect, the imagery you used was perfect actually. The way you used it to write and flesh it out and make it realistic, that my friend is a strong point in writing! And that helped the audience to understand Molly, the sadness in her life and the pending darkness yet to come. Her characterization was really good, it's hard to make a canon character not OOC - but you've made the cut!
It was very easy to understand and it was really good. Honestly. I also liked one more thing, the repetition of the line 'one tragedy at a time' - it felt so... nice. It matched with the mood and the scene but other than that it felt very captivating. I don't know how to say what I'm thinking exactly but yeah. I feel the repetition reminded me of Molly (and you think I'm so absurd 'cause the fic is about Molly :P ) - it just had this very strong connection to the character and I felt that. I just love that line.
One tragedy at a time.
This is a really fantastic story, your writing is (brace yourself, fangirling is coming) aslkdfnsaldkfansdfklnaskf.
Ehehehehe :P (Accept my apologies but Tom was too attractive for me not to click the story.)
I really hope you get the recognition of epicness for this. This is utterly a brilliant piece. Good luck in the challenge Amanda! :)
(also do pardon if I went into... literature mode. I have my Lit First Term Exam tomorrow so I'm sort of... preparing?)
- Tawi :)Author's Response: Wow, Tawi, thanks so much for coming by :)
It's sad to think about how despite all the miracles made possible by magical medicine and advances in spells, wizards still have to die sometime, just like the rest of us. It's especially sad for Arthur, because in the process he's losing all these skills he's acquired and forgetting his children and grandchildren one by one, and Molly's name.
Molly is really tough, and I wanted to show the contrast between her strong personality and the fact that she too is growing old in this piece. I couldn't be so cruel as to just end with their deaths or something equally hopeless, so I chose to go out on a little bit of a high note with Molly taking up her duties.
Yeah, poor Molly has suffered a lot. I knew I couldn't write this without somehow reflecting on Fred and the continuing pain of his loss.
Thanks so much for this lovely review!
-Amanda Report Review
This is wonderfully written! Great job in this Harmony fic! :D Report Review
Yikes! Who knew I'd love this one-shot so much? It's so emotion packed, and this is rather amazing, and it matches Lily perfectly and her views on their friendship. Personally, I love the Minister of Magic paragraph, because you linked and compared the brewing war to Lily's views and that's really clever!
But really, an amazing fic! I'm heading over to the spin-off to start reading, then I'll go and finish reading All that Glitters :D
Tawi XAuthor's Response: Hey Tawi!!!
Thanks! I've had most of the reviewers comment that that was their favourite part of the story (can i even call it that? it's more like a drabble) as well. Lily has always been hard for me to write so i'm glad that she seems in character here. I feel like she's been a little idolized in the books and then also in ff so trying to find the right characteristics of her can be hard.
Thanks for reviewing :D Report Review
Aye! This is such a flawless piece, truly!
Your flow was really good, I never stopped reading! I'm guessing it's non-chronological order? But the story! Oh gosh, the suspense and the relationship was just wow! Too many exclamations? Definitely :P
Anyways, this Frederick character was very weird, which I like, and I also liked that his relationship with this 'monster' is so different, unusual, unlike something. You're portraying this young man, this proper genius (Sherlock anyone?) who is a lycanthrope or wants to be a lycanthrope and you've done it so well!
The idea is very good and original, definitely worth the read :)
- IH, HufflepuffAuthor's Response: It's not really in non-chronological order, and thank you so much for the review! I'm glad you liked this story, and yes Frederick's character was rather odd, I agree with you. But he just thought differently from the others who were infected to become werewolves, he thought that maybe they could fight as one instead of as enemies.
Anyway, I'm glad you liked it. :) Report Review
I just happened to land on your story and I really think it has very good potential! I love the idea of The Master's ideas inspiring Tom, that is very unusual idea which gets us all thinking. It's not like any other DW/HP crossover, or atleast not any crossovers I've read.
Very different and very nicely written! I think a bit more reaction on Tom's side would be great, perhaps him pondering how this madman happened to come and sit in the Library. But overall, this is good and with some tweaks this can be a mind-blowing piece!
I love the original idea again, great job :)
- IH, HufflepuffAuthor's Response: Hi :)
The idea originally occurred to me while listening to Chameleon Circuit's song The Sound of Drums (hence the lyrics at the start- I highly recommend it if you haven't heard it). I figured that, to some extent, it could be a possibility, at least in the world of crossovers.
Thanks for the tip on the reaction- I'll put in a few edits when I get the chance. I'm really thrilled that you think it's great, and thanks for reviewing :)
~Anna Report Review
Hi Amanda! C:
TheVividImagination from the forums to your request, excuse for the delay! Had some things that were keeping me.
Anyways, this is a very intriguing piece, and has got me thinking. It's very well done, the characterization of Lily I think is just so different and all the while very canon. You've captured the love and care Lily always had for Snape. You've also captured a very strong side of Lily, a dark side. I think it's very canonical, because Lily is very strong and she would have some downfalls and dark thoughts. I think that's very clever and not many people can put it through together. So good job on that!
The characterization of Snape is just marvelous. I'm gaping at how you managed to just do his character! His love for Lily shows in this, I really loved the frog scene and how much patience he has and that's just something you don't regularly see of Snape. I think you've captured Snape and had done it very well!
I'm not entirely sure the second-person was actually working for me. I felt it was a mix of first and second person and I'm not really sure what I got from it, but generally it is okay and understandable. Though it was very effective!
The non-chronological narrative was honestly, brilliant! I think it worked perfectly okay rather than a piece going chronologically because the non-chron. has that thing that makes you want to read it! At some points it's a bit confusing (the unbreakable vow scene was something I had to read twice to get, but it's okay) but that's only up to the reader. You've given all the clues to pinpoint where in time it is.
I was reading the other reviews and just thought you have a brilliant plot, and you've left it with unanswered questions which really get's people thinking, so great job on that!
This really is a brilliant piece, it's different from other Snape/Lily fics and I enjoyed reading it! The end just flabbergasted me and I didn't know what was happening and that's actually the charm in your writing of the last part :)
So thanks for asking me! I do look forward for you to ask me to review more, you certainly know I love Snape and Lily ;)
-IH, Tawi.Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for coming by, and I'm sorry that this response took so long :)
Yep, you got it - I wanted to play with dark Lily here. I often fall prey to the trap of writing her as sweet and simple, just because of how much I love her and how much she reminds me of myself, and so I deliberately played with the less savory parts of her here.
Snape is my favorite, definitely, so I'm glad you liked him. I hope my unusual depiction of Lily meshed well with his character. The frog scene was my favorite part - I'm a scientist, so the thought of Severus spending lots of time in a lab and agonizing over his intellect really rings true for me.
I get what you're saying about mixing first and second person, and you're right. I'm glad it still came off as generally effective. It's also good that the non-chronological order worked for you, for the most part. Thanks!
Different is good, and I'm happy that you liked the ending, especially in its confusion. Thanks so much for this wonderful review! (Self-promo: Post Scriptum has lots of Snily!)
-Amanda Report Review
Hello! VividImagination from the forums at your service ;)
Honestly, I really, really loved this chapter!
The plot (this chapter) was very simple, very realistic and believable for a girl who is very strong. I think you portrayed her very good, you didn't make Roxanne like the usual characters, and I think you'll be able to do a good story because you have a good plot (this prologue is perfect as a prologue, it has suspense!) and great characters to base it on.
The flow is perfect, you weren't lagging at any points. I think you should add a bit more descriptive details in the next later chapters, but that's just me, so don't mind that if you don't want it. I think though the paragraph above "Then realization hit me." could be separated with more details in it, such as like sometimes answering the rhetorical question.
I haven't noticed any grammar mistakes except for 'realisation', the S should be a Z :) (or is it spelled with an S in other countries out of UK?)
I read the other reviews and I agree with Julie, try as much as to flesh the characters out because the next chapters, the characters are very important!
Overall this is a good start, so keep it up :) I can't wait to read more!
Do keep requesting :P
-IHAuthor's Response: Hi thanks for the review :)
I'm glad you found the plot realistic and believable as that it's very hard to write. So thank you :) I'm also glad you thought there was suspense in this prologue as I wanted people to be left with a lot of unanswered questions so they would come back to find out :)
I'll put the Z back in realization when I look through it. Probably the middle of next month :) and I'll look through that too and add more to where you'd suggest. Thank you for pointing that out!!!
Yeah I know I need to tread carefully especially writing a story where my MC is pregnant. I'm trying me hardest not to make this story cliche and hopefully if I built a good enough characters it won't turn out in such a way.
I feel so much pressure to not slipped onto the cliche route haha
Thanks you for reviewing! It helped a lot and I shall be back to re-request for the next chapter :) Report Review
OH MY GOD MY BRAIN JUST WENT MAD
this is epic without a doubt!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
I'm so sorry I didn't review sooner!
This is an extremely talented piece :) It shows perfectly Neville's evolution from that dorky (ish) boy to a hero. The letters are just so good, the emotions are real and you really captured what Neville could've felt there.
This is a rather fresh start to any letter-stories I've read, fresh in the sense of the content. The language, the realization of disappointment, writing a letter to himself!
Continue the good work :)
ImagineHarmony/VividImagination, HufflepuffAuthor's Response: Wow, I'm so sorry I didn't answer this sooner. I apologise but real life is crazy and answering reviews was just so far away in my to-do list.
But I get to it now so, it's not so bad, right?
First off, thank you so much for those kind words, you are making me blush like crazy over here! I'm so touched that you enjoyed this chapter and felt it was true to what Neville was going through.
Thanks again, you really made my day :) Report Review
I can't believe this is the end. Thank you so much for the most entertaining story ever which I started last June :) Good luck xxx Report Review
OH MY GOD I AM HYPERVENTILATING I can't wait :D Report Review
Amazing, raw emotions expressed in this short, talented piece by you :) It's amazing! I love your ending line, 'death had claimed another victim'. This one-shot toys with the mind, imagery is mind-blowing. Great job, continue epic writing! ;)
-IHAuthor's Response: Oh wow, thank you so much for your lovely review! I am so glad you liked that line - I was scared it may be a little too cliche, but I guess it fits with the piece. I have such a 'thing' for ending lines. :)
I definitely will continue to write - whether they'll be epic, we'll see!
Thank you very muh again! xo Report Review
Firstly, I see Harmony? *in bliss*
This is without a doubt, beautiful in every way! The emotions are raw and their love is so passionate (in a way). I love your portrayal! Also August 8th = my birthday!
If you don't mind, mind explaining (21.) to me? Sort of didn't get that.
Overall, beautiful and wonderful piece I'll be recommending my Harmony friends :)
-IH (TheVividImagination on the forums)Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for your review!! :)
(21.): That is the last scene, really. Harry is going off somewhere, doing something, because he can't really deal with Hermione and his broken heart. Hermione finishes up by lying to herself, telling herself (and Harry) that their love really wasn't anything other than a friendship. Harry goes off, telling himself to move on, to stop this. So basically this is the point where Harry stops running after Hermione, stops trying and settles for Ginny - well, not really settles per say, it's more like he gets over Hermione and he finds Ginny.
Oh! I've seen your graphics, I think! I loooved those! :) Oh, well, thank you so much for reviewing and I hoped that explained it all ! xx Report Review
You're story has officially muddled up my brain, thank you. (btw love it)Author's Response: My intention exactly! Haha, thank you very much, I'm glad you like it. :) Report Review
MY GOD THIS IS AMAZING. Report Review
I actually really love this pregnancy story ;)
And I see Colin Morgan, who comes in my mind - everytime 'merlin' is mentioned. Report Review
This seems a rather interesting idea and I'm excited for the rest! Though a bit more on emotions here and there, this chapter is really good!
Keep it up C:Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it - I really loved writing it, and I hope you like the next chapters too!
Megan xo Report Review
OH MY GOD! YES! THEY KISSED!
I love you thePhoenix! Report Review
Hi there! VividImagination here from forums!
Want to say that you did an excellent job on this one-shot. This is a really believable phobia for Roxanne, to be honest I freaked out a bit :P
10/10! Keep up the good work! (as always! I love your stuff!)Author's Response: Thank you so much :)
Aw wow, that means a lot! And I have to admit I freaked out writing it aswell! :P Thank you so much again :) Report Review
Definitely fun to read! :) Report Review
This is really good! I love Ron's characterization! :D Though I want to inform you, Wherever You Will Go is originally Charlene Soraia's song. The Calling just sang a cover of it.Author's Response: Thanks, that's great feedback and I really appreciate it! It's great that you think I've characterised Ron correctly as that was the main aim of the story really!
Oh? I thought Charlene Soraia brought out a cover for the UK Twinings Advert and the Calling originally brought it out in 2001, that's according to Wikipedia anyway? Wikipedia is probably wrong though so thanks for the correction! :D
Thanks once again for taking the time to review and it's great to hear that you liked it so much! [: Report Review
I think you portrayed Hermione very nicely! Her thoughts were convincing though I felt that the Ron walking out scene was... unconvincing. It was a bit rushed, you could've explained it better on how she found it.
Though, keep up the good work :)
8/10Author's Response: Thank you for taking your time to review! :)
And I understand what you're saying. I was doing it from Hermione's prespective and frankly, I wasn't quite sure on what she would be thinking at the moment. She was disoriented at that moment (as you know) and she wasn't believing what she was seeing. Saying that, I mean that she was not viewing the situation with the usual normal rational thinking. So it had to be a little vaguer. Though, I'll admit I had trouble thinking about what I should write about... I know it was rushed. I read it through a couple of times; I need to work on having patience when writing about certain scenes. :P
Thanks for reading!
-Dee Report Review
You make me cry, congrats. :PAuthor's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you thought it sufficiently emotional. :) Report Review
OH MY GOD. YOU MADE ME CRY. MISSION ACCOMPLISHED. THIS IS THE SECOND FIC EVER THAT MADE ME CRY, THAT EVEN THE TEARS KEPT ON FLOWING. Though I'm talking about Chapter 10 :PAuthor's Response: AW, TAWI! I'M SORRY FOR MAKING YOU CRY! ALTHOUGH, I ASSUME THAT MEANS YOU LIKED IT, SO THANK YOU! X Report Review
Its good, but your summary just turns it off :P Do you mean thaker pronounced like "Thakur?" Like 'Thakur saab' :P Krishna? Isn't he a guy? What about Sita, Durga? :PAuthor's Response: Are you Indian? xD
Well, no. Thakur and Thaker are two completely different last names having reaaallly different origins. "Thaker" is pronounced like "Thaa-cur" like, "curd" without the "d" xD I know it's all too confusing :P Well, Krishna is a unisex name. MANY girls are names Krishna :) And Sita, Durga are really, I don't know... last century names? :P Krishna is still contemporary! I like the name :) Anyway, glad you like the story, and about the summary... haha, I know :P Thanks for reviewing! :) Report Review
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