Hi there! First of all; I like the idea of your one shot! I've always wanted to read a story from one of the Longbottom's POV, and you wrote it wonderfully! I think I'll definitely want to read more story's about them in the future.
The way you used descriptions was really, really good! It got me pulled into the story, and it made me want to read on to find out how things would turn out. It was dark indeed, but it was so real.. I felt so sorry for Alice. It was a little short though, I'd love to read more about Bellatrix and how it happened in the first place. But nevertheless, you did an amazing job on it. Well done! =)
x IndianSummerAuthor's Response: First of all, thanks for the fab review, you're the first for this story! I'm just gonna say I'm terrible at responding to reviews so bear with me!
Thanks for the comments, I wrote this stort about a month ago and it has been gathering dust in my documents so I thought it was finally time to post it! I decided to write this from Alice's POV because I have always wondered what the Cruciatus curse would feel like and I know thats horrible but I wanted to write something like this where people feel the pain (yes, not very nice!).
I could edit this longer, it would be nice to see how everything happenes in order though I was trying to write this with as little/no dialouge whatsoever so its a bit shortere than I originally planned out!
Thanks again for the review, it made my day!
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That was beautifully written, well done! I really love Remus as a character, and I always thought Remus & Tonks were great together, such a pity JK Rowling cut them off both.
Even though it made me a little sad, I really loved it. It's so realistic.. like it could easily be a chapter from the original HP books. The characterization of both of the characters were spot on! This was just excellent, and it makes me want to read so much more about Remus and Tonks. The ending was amazing, sad, but amazing. All I can say is; keep up the great work! =)
x IndianSummerAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for this lovely review! I'm beyond flattered at your words. Also very glad that you are now more willing to look at more Remus/Tonks. :)
Wow that was an amazing first chapter! You write everything so well; the descriptions, the conversations between other characters, her thoughts, it's amazing! You really pulled me into the story.
I like Draco in your story as well. He's still Draco, but he has obviously changed after the war and become more grateful and nicer person. You've written him very well!
I can't wait until you update again, i'm so excited lol! Keep up the great work, and I will definitely review again when you posted another chapter! =)
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Wow, that was a really interesting one-shot. I've always thought it was pity that Cedric had to die, he was a pretty interesting character in my eyes. I absolutely loved it, and I really think you should, as someone else already pointed out, consider adding more chapters to it. What happened to Cedric? It makes me curious to read more.
Anyway, you've wrote it beautifully. Keep it up!
x IndianSummerAuthor's Response: Oh thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :) I have considered expanding the story, but I have no ideas as of yet, so for now it will remain a one-shot. I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
Hi there! Oh I know exactly how you feel.. I haven't wrote anything for more than a year now, and it's always hard to make a comeback. Anyway, back to the point!
I absolutely love it! I'm impressed with the way you describe things. It's like you're really get pulled into the story. The way you wrote Lily was simply beautiful, and of course Snape, perfectly done! He's one of my favourite characters, and you wrote him so vulnerable and realistic.
Please do continue writing, because you're obviously very talented! Well done.
x IndianSummerAuthor's Response: Thank you so much, IndianSummer. It it hard to get in the groove again but I'm really glad you liked it. I'd never written Lily before so it was certainly something new. Thanks so much for the comments. I really do appreciate them a lot! Report Review
That was a great start, I really enjoyed it! I've always been a great Dramione shipper, so i'm curious how this will turn out. Keep up the great work!
xx IndianSummerAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for this nice review! :) My first favorite ship on HPFF had been Dramione and it still is. ;) Report Review
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