This is good. However, if you want to be accurate, then here are some little things:
- Dominique's sister is called Victoire, not Victorie.
- I take it you're American. In Britain, we don't use the word 'mom', we use 'mum' and as all your characters are British, they should use 'mum'.
Other than that, this is good.
Please read and review my stories!Author's Response: Thanks for the advice. I grew up in Britain for a few years then moved to the US. I'll be sure to. Report Review
Really good, but just one thing. It's Weasley, not Weasly. Sorry, but I'm really fussy about stuff like that.Author's Response: Thank you for that :] Report Review
This is good. I would recommend using 'Mum' to refer to characters other than June's parents, as I presume they are supposed to be British, so they wouldn't say 'Mom'. Other than that, I'm impressed. xDAuthor's Response: Yeah, I was beginning to make that change in later chapters, then forgot to do it in the earlier ones. Thanks for the review though, I'm glad you like it! Report Review
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