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Review #1, by LadyL8The Halls of Hogwarts - A Collection: To Theodore and Bianca

4th February 2016:
Hello Again, June!

Wow. This episode type of writing really works for you. You do it so well. It doesnít feel like randoms jumps in time, but like each episode have a meaning, they all add something to the whole story. Thatís really what I wish to see in stories with a structure like this, and youíve done it in both your chapters, so Iíve really started liking this way of writing already. Itís creative and really good!

I have to say you kind of broke my heart with this story. Like you, I was rooting for the two of them. It really felt like theyíd be a great couple, but then you twisted the whole thing around when we finally got to see his view on the same scenes weíd already seen from her POV. I could really feel Biancaís pain, and while I feel sorry for Theodore too, because heís obviously having deep issues himself, it doesnít excuse the way he treated her.

But that twist, that switch in POV, it was so effective, so powerful. It kind of reminded me of the book ęGone GirlĽ by Gillian Flynn, because that one too shows that every story has two sides. Sometimes they are somewhat the same, but other times they are completely different. Bianca falls in love with Theodore, so she doesnít really see the signs of this not being a good relationship until sheís in too deep. Itís sad to see, but very believable. And so creative. You really surprised me, even though I obviously knew they wouldnít end up together because this story is for the ęI donít love youĽ Challenge. Wow. That really was good! Keep up the good work, and I really hope to come back to read more of this in the future!

Lots of Love

Lotte

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Review #2, by LadyL8The Halls of Hogwarts - A Collection: Say a Prayer

4th February 2016:
Hello June.

I realized I never actually reviewed your story like I said I would, so I decided to leave you two reviews now to make up for it. It looks really good, and the summary and banner is just amazing. I canít wait to read it really, because my expectations are really high right now :)

I have to say that Iíve only read like three stories that have been structured the way youíve done it here - with episodes and jumps in time like this. Normally I find it difficult to follow, because I never feel like I really get any of the scenes completely - the author tends to jump in time a little too quickly. Here however, I actually think you nailed it. You showed us just enough to really set a scene, and then each jump in time really gave us a new piece of the puzzle. It was like we were peeling of layers to understand this boy, who Iím still not sure about the identity of (Iím guessing Ted Tonks because of the Snatcher-thing and the description and all that, but I could be way off), but itís like 3 AM when Iím writing this so that could possibly be the reason :P

I liked Melinda. Sheís a great OC. I find OCs so hard to write, because they have to believable, and very often they end up just being very Mary Sue-ish. You did great though. It just felt like she belonged in the HP-universe, and I believed in her character. I think her connection with the mystery guy, or Ted Tonks as I will refer to him from now on, is interesting. He has cleared had a traumatic experience (well, heís dead, so thatís very obvious), and if Iím right then itís interesting that he would bond with a Black (because Iím guessing Melinda is a part of the Black family), considering their dark reputation and their role in the wars. But then again, Andromeda was also a Black, and he loved her, so I guess I can imagine him seeing past the name alone.

I love the ending scene. That last sentence is such a good end sentence. It really has an effect, and I think you built up to it just enough. You didnít overdo it, you pretty much nailed the suspense. So I really loved this story. It was great, powerful and tragic, but great. Youíre a really good writer, June. Itís a shame more people havenít reviewed it, because I think you did amazingly for being so new to this site and all that. So good job! I loved it!

Lots of Love

Lotte

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Review #3, by LadyL8How to Fix Your Sibling (The Art of Getting Even) : Chapter 7

20th December 2015:
Hello Meg and Em.

Iím sorry for taking so long to get here. Iíve had the worst three months of my life. My exam was moved forward, I got sick with a throat infection, my father was hospitalized and had to go through three operations and now Iím sick again with the flu. But better late than never, right? :)

Okay, so Iíll be doing something here to make sure I get the results up quickly. While you will get a review on every chapter regardless of the results of the challenge (that was one of my promises after all - a review on every chapter), I will only review the last chapter now. I have read every chapter and will now give you a review that basically sums up my opinion of the whole thing. And I will leave the review after the categories in the judging point system. Also, when you read this, the results should already be up (Iím posting it right after I post this), and I just want to say congratulations guys! I really loved the story! :)

Iíll start with ďfirst impressionĒ, one of the new categories that give very little points, but help me a little. I love the banner, and I think it really helps draw the readers in. But itís not just the banner - the title and summary are both good, and it really makes me want to read the story, so good job with that. And I can tell just from that, that itís going to be a really funny story. I have three sisters myself, and recently got two stepsiblings as well, so I feel like Iíll be able to relate to this a lot.

I have to applaud you for several things. First of all the idea. I love that you guys have written something completely different from all of the other entries, and it gives you a high score in creativity. As you guys might know, I love Next Gen-stories, and there's actually just two (you guys included) that have written in that era. And itís just great that youíve taken the family/friendship theme, and actually included a little of both. You show the great things about family, but also that family, and particularly siblings, can be the most annoying people in the world... sometimes. Theyíre the ones that get on your nerves the most, but also the ones you love the most. And then you see that bonding over siblings can lead toÖ you could say a partnership, but I like to think of Rose and Teulia as friends-in-the-making. Itís a clever idea, and I donít think Iíve seen anything quite like on HPFF. So yeah, I love the idea!

Second of all I love the dialogue and characterisation. Iíve always felt like you two are excellent at creating these recognizable voices; you donít need to be told whoís speaking, cause you can tell by the line or just the wording. Itís a difficult thing to do, but youíre both really good at it. I love that we see Teulia, whoís the outsider type of girl, bookish, quiet and keeps to herself, together with Rose, whoís more social (perhaps because she has to be in the family sheís born into), loud and outspoken. Itís a really interesting contrast, but at the same time we see that theyíre not really that different either. They both have disagreeable siblings, and thatís what makes them bond in the first place. And itís really believable and, if you ask me, perfectly done.

And then thirdly, I have to applaud you for your teamwork. You guys, more than anyone else that have participated in the challenge, have shown true teamwork. Youíve written far more than anyone else have, and you can just tell by the story alone that youíve enjoyed working together. You have similar writing styles, and your writing really blends together perfectly. And youíre both hilarious when you write on your own, but even more so when you write together. I have truly had a blast reading this, and youíve made me laugh several times (Iíll get more into detail about this when I leave the other six reviews). I hope you continue to write it, because itíll get a favourite from me and Iíll definitely do my best to continue to follow it, because Iíd love to see the unbearable siblings get paired together :P

Sorry again for the long wait. I hope you can forgive. Now I just want to finish this by saying thank you for participating in the challenge. Iím honored you guys even considered it, and even more that you actually wrote an entry. Congratulations guys! I hope you have a wonderful Christmas and happy new year!

Lots of Love

Lotte

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Review #4, by LadyL8Shine: Shine

18th December 2015:
Hi Kristin

Iím sorry for taking so long to get here. Iíve had the worst three months of my life. My exam was moved forward, I got sick with a throat infection, my father was hospitalized and had to go through three operations and now Iím sick again with the flu. But better late than never, right? :)

So with the collab entries Iíve review after the categories in the judging point system, but since this is a one-shot thatís linked to another, I think Iíll actually just leave my thoughts and comments and just ramble on like crazy. And then maybe bring attention to the categories I feel fit the most for an entry like this, but I wonít tell you the score because that would reveal the winner before Iíve announced who it is. Iím also just going to say right now that Iím reading this after Iíve read Chiaraís part, but Iíll come back and re-read hers again after Iíve read yours, because I want to make sure Iíve read it in both possible orders.

Okay, so now that that is done, Iíll talk about the actual story. I want to start by saying that you should probably read Chiaraís review as well, because Iím not going to repeat everything I said about the idea and all that here. So I recommend you read that one as well, because this one will focus on your story as well as the link between the two one-shots. Also, should the review end up being too long, Iíll PM the rest to you in a group message, but it hasnít happened so far so I doubt itíll come to that. Just letting you know in case it should happen.

And Iíll actually start by saying a little about the link. I mentioned this Chiaraís review, but I didnít say much about the link between the one-shots in that one cause I hadnít read yours yet, so Iíll add some about that here. I really feel like you two have solved this challenge well. I thought it was really clever to use a canon character and add a sister to him, and then use that relationship to explain a canon event. And I love that you see it from both siblingsí perspectives, and that the stories really fill each other out. But what I thought was actually the cleverest, and youíre the only ones that have done this so itís definitely high score on creativity for that, was that you have structured your stories in the same way. You both start it with these short paragraphs that capture the readerís attention, and leaves us with a whole lot of questions that we want the answers to. And then you move on to a paragraph with description, and it really helps set the scene. And I just love that youíve actually done more than just tells the same story from two different perspective, but actually written it somewhat similarly as well. So itís just really clever, and good job!

Itís really great to read this part after having just finished Chiaraís. I love that in her part she quickly mentions her brother playing Dumbledore and Grindelwald when he was younger, and here we actually see it. And I also love that this part just explains so much of the questions weíre left with at the end of Chiaraís part. Your stories just fill each other out so nicely, and I love that you mention to keep the same characterisation and the same - I donít know what the word isÖ feeling I guess - to both of the one-shots.

You know I didnít actually say this in the other review, but I guess thatís because itís the most obvious here. Zacharias is just a true Hufflepuff if you ask me. Itís honorable to acknowledge your own weaknesses and fears, and to stay loyal to your family and do everything in you to keep them safe. Itís as heroic to do that as it is to fight in the Battle if you ask me, because heroes they come in all shapes and forms. Zacharias is scared, but he stays and protects her. And thatís admirable.

I love that you guys take an unliked character and make him seem misunderstood and actually more likable. Itís a really original and clever idea, and Iím so happy you guys came up with it. I have to say Iím happy and honored you guys decided to participate in the challenge, and Iím so glad I got to read this because you two really brought out the best in each other. I hope you have a wonderful Christmas and a happy new year!

Lots of Love

Lotte

PS: The results should be up this weekend. Look out for a blog post :)

Author's Response: No worries on delay - it's far more important that you take care of yourself and your real life first. I hope your dad is okay, and that you feel better soon! *hugs*

I did read your review for Chiara as well - I'm so glad you like the idea of our stories! Because Zacharias is so negatively portrayed in the books, we figured that his own POV and the POV of someone who cares about him would show an entirely different side to him. As for making the structure match up like that, I must give Chiara all the credit, it was all her idea. I had started writing mine in nonlinear sections just because I felt inspired to, and then when I saw her draft of her fic I was really impressed with how she'd united our stories so well and how it turned out. Thank you, I'm so glad you appreciated that structure and the similarity of the two!

Ooh, that's so wonderful to hear that both stories have the same feeling to them and that each fills in the gaps of the other.

I'm really glad you saw Zacharias as a true Hufflepuff in this! One of the things that always kind of bothered me about him in the books was that he really displayed no Hufflepuff traits and I couldn't imagine why he was one, so with these stories we were hoping to explain him a little more in depth and while not negating his faults, make him a bit more understandable. I'm so glad to hear that you thought it worked. And for the record, I'd probably be really scared of fighting in a battle as well, and scared of hearing Death Eaters breaking stuff in the flat below mine, and I really can't blame him for just hiding with Ariadne.

Thank you so much - I hope you know what a wonderful reviewer you are, because this is such an insightful and kind review and I loved it. Thank you for this review! And I saw the results and I'm just blown away! Thank you SO much for this challenge, and the wonderful opportunity to collaborate on a fic - it was so much fun, I absolutely loved working with Chiara, and I hope you had as much fun reading the entries as we did writing our stories!

♥♥♥


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Review #5, by LadyL8The Way Out of the Maze: The Way Out of the Maze

18th December 2015:
Hello Chiara.

Iím sorry for taking so long to get here. Iíve had the worst three months of my life. My exam was moved forward, I got sick with a throat infection, my father was hospitalized and had to go through three operations and now Iím sick again with the flu. But better late than never, right? :)

So with the collab entries Iíve review after the categories in the judging point system, but since this is a one-shot thatís linked to another, I think Iíll actually just leave my thoughts and comments and just ramble on like crazy. And then maybe bring attention to the categories I feel fit the most for an entry like this, but I wonít tell you the score because that would reveal the winner before Iíve announced who it is. Iím also just going to say right now that Iím reading this before Iíve read Kristinís part, but Iíll come back and re-read it after Iíve read hers, because I want to make sure Iíve read it in both possible orders.

Iíll start with the first paragraph. Itís really intriguing. I like that you just give us a lot of questions right away, cause that really makes us want to read the story to find some of the answers. Iím curious who this ďheĒ is and why heís considered a coward by some. Itís just a really clever way of starting the story. So I can only say good job with that! Also, I have to applaud you for that second paragraph as well. I really love getting description early on in the story, because I feel like that helps set the scene, and your description in that paragraph is just flawless. Iím extremely claustrophobic, and you almost made me feel that panic I always feel in confined spaces just through reading that - you just captured that feeling so well :)

I love that you guys did something completely different from what everyone else have done. Youíve taken a canon character and added a OC sibling, and use this relationship between these two characters to explain a canon event - Zacharias not helping in the final battle. And Iím sure many would consider him a coward for that, but I feel like - and you really get message across as well - heroes come in many different shapes and forms. Sometimes being heroic is saving others life, other times it can be equally heroic to run for your life or hide. In traumatic situation is just about surviving, and Zacharias is a true hero if you ask me. He does what Iíd do - he protects his sister.

Itís difficult to create a bond when you have two characters that we are not already familiar with. You really need to make us feel like we know these characters and that their bond seems real and that weíre in on it in a way. I felt like you did that really well, and I really loved your characterisation. Not just of the siblings, but also of Theseus. He was so dominating, that I actually felt scared from the first time we met him. Something was just really off there, all the alarms went off, and the way it developed so subtly to actual, physical violence was just terrifying, but unfortunately so realistic.

Youíve taken on a serious and sensitive theme. Some of the other entries have done the same, and youíve all just managed to do it so well. I feel like this is probably one of your best stories Chiara, maybe even the best one youíve ever written. Itís just the way you capture the feelings, make us feel like weíre as scared as Ariadne (I love that name by the way) and as angry as Zacharias when he discovers the truth. It feels like weíre their sibling too, weíre as scared and worried for her as he is, and thatís just so impressive to do.

Iím so glad and honored you two decided to participate in this challenge, and Iím so glad you wrote this part Chiara. Itís a really good part, and I canít wait to read Kristinís part now, because Iím sure sheís written a part that is just as good as yours. Also, I hope you have a wonderful Christmas and happy new year!

Lots of Love

Lotte

PS: The results should be up this weekend. Look out for a blog post :)

Author's Response: Lotte!!!
Don't you dare apologize for the lateness! By the way, I'm so sorry about all your troubles... Hope your dad is fine now... *hug*

I love your rambling! :) And I'm very excited and curious to know your final verdict! Let me tell you, however this goes, it was a great challenge!!!

I'm glad you liked the first paragraph. It was actually Kristin's idea in the first place, but I liked for the two pieces to have a similar structure, and I must say that I'm quite happy with how it worked! :)
And I'm so glad you liked the dream sequence too, and that the description of claustrophobia was so convincing. Thank you so much for all your compliments!

Once again, the first idea for the plot was Kristin's (I love that girl... she's amazing...) We wanted to show a different side to Zacharias, and of course we really wanted to show that sometimes you can be a hero even if you choose not to fight. He put his family first, and that's a really Hufflepuff thing to do, isn't it?

I'm so glad you felt I did a good job with the characterization, both of the siblings and of Theseus. I must confess, I was a bit scared of broaching the domestic violence subject, but I just knew that was Ariadne's story (does it make sense?) Anyway, I'm so glad you feel that I managed to approach the topic well.

Oh, thank you! *blushing* I must say, I'm quite happy with how the story turned out in the end. And I know I have to thank Kristin, because we really helped each other a lot to make our stories... shine.
By the way, I read the review you left for her as well, and I loved this sentence:
"I√ʬĬôm so glad I got to read this because you two really brought out the best in each other" It's really true, and just what I was trying to say.

Thank you for the amazing challenge and for this absolutely wonderful review! A wonderful Christmas and happy new year to you as well!!!

All my love,
Chiara.


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Review #6, by LadyL8Always On My Mind: Lily

18th December 2015:
Hello Sophie.

Iím sorry for taking so long to get here. Iíve had the worst three months of my life. My exam was moved forward, I got sick, my father was hospitalized and had to go through three operations and now Iím sick again. But better late than never, right?

So normally Iíd review after the categories in the judging point system, but this is actually the first entry Iím reading that is a one-shot thatís linked to another. Because thatís a bit different from a collab entry, I think Iíll actually just leave my thoughts and comments and just ramble on like crazy. And then maybe bring attention to the categories I feel fit the most for an entry like this, but I wonít tell you the score because that would reveal the winner before Iíve announced who it is. Iím also just going to say right now that Iím reading this after Iíve read Anjaís truly heartbreaking part, and therefore comments on the link between the two will be found in this review and not in hers. Also, look at Anjaís review for more comments on certain things in the story (like for example what I think about the idea)

So Iíve just read Anjaís story, and I have to say youíre part is just as good and heartbreaking as hers. I love that you guys chose two characters you wouldnít really imagine having a bond, but it has happened almost unconsciously, because theyíre both mothers and theyíve both lost their child because of death - Lilyís and Fredís. Youíre part really explains a lot of what Mollyís feeling in her part, because we didnít actually see Lily whispering to her or helping her there, but here we do. Itís like your parts fill each other out, and reading Anjaís part again after reading yours, it really makes the story even better. So Iím just amazed at how well youíve solved this whole linked-stories thing. This is how it should be done, and Iím just really impressed.

Like Anja, youíve captured the characters and their feelings so well, and it really just makes the story so believable. Like how Remus immediately wants to go back to Tonks and his son, or how Fred is looking for his twin and feels so lost without him. And then Sirius and Snape obviously, but it was great to see that you made James actually act nicer to him now since he saved his sonís life. It was all so believable, and thatís impressive cause the situation is definitely a difficult one to capture right.

Thereís a lot of things going on, and the whole ďworld of the deathĒ seems really chaotic, but then thatís really what death is, especially when itís deaths in war. So I felt like it was fitting here. And I said this to Anja in the review of her part but Iíll repeat it here, that ending is just so heartbreaking. Iím still in tears after her part, but it certainly didnít get any better after reading this one.

You know I said to Anja that her part was her best story ever, and I think I can say the same about you and this part. It just seems like you two bring out the best in each other, and itís really amazing to see. I hope you guys write together again in the future, because the results of your collaboration is just amazing. Youíve both broken me, and sure it mightíve helped you a little that itís a sensitive time for my family right now, but I think itís first and foremost because youíre writing is just at itís best.

Thank you so much for participating in the challenge, and thank you for writing this story. Iíve really enjoyed reading your parts. Also, I hope you have a very merry Christmas and a happy new year!

Lots of Love

Lotte

PS: The results should be up this weekend. Look out for a blog post :)

Author's Response: Wow. I don't know what to say to this lovely review.

Firstly, I'm so sorry you've had such a hard time- if you ever need to rant please feel free to pm me.

Secondly, I think this was a definite labour love for both of us. We seem to have an affinity for our respective characters. And I loved working with Anja. We worked on making our stories fit together so that some of Molly's story was explained by Lily's.

I think this is a story I a proud of, more so than my others I think.

I don't know what else to reply as I'm so overcome.


I hope you have a fab christmas and 2016 is better for you.


Lots of Love

Soph xxx


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Review #7, by LadyL8Forever in my Heart: Molly

18th December 2015:
Hello Anja.

You already know why itís taken me so long to leave this review, but I just wanted to apologize again for the long wait. Iíll hopefully be less busy in the year thatís coming, so I can get done the stuff Iím suppose to get done. But hey, the challenge results can be seen as a early Christmas gift for whoever wins it, right? A Christmas surprise or whatever. So I suppose itíll work out fine in the end :)

So normally Iíd review after the categories in the judging point system, but this is actually the first entry Iím reading that is a one-shot thatís linked to another. Because thatís a bit different from a collab entry, I think Iíll actually just leave my thoughts and comments and just ramble on like crazy. And then maybe bring attention to the categories I feel fit the most for an entry like this, but I wonít tell you the score because that would reveal the winner before Iíve announced who it is. Iím also just going to say right now that Iím reading this before Iíve read Sophieís part, but Iíll come back to this again once Iíve read hers, because I want to make sure to read this in both the possible orders.

First of all, I really love the idea of taking a canon moment, and just switching the view to let us see it from other characters perspectives. I think Molly is a good choice, and I really look forward to seeing how she views the battle, especially since she loses a child and almost loses another. So I think itís a really creative idea, and Iím looking forward to reading the story :)

I love the first paragraph. It really sets the scene, and Iím a sucker for description in the beginning of a chapter. You know, Anja, as someone thatís read a lot of your work, I have to say I can actually see youíve developed a lot as a writer. That first paragraph alone shows just how much. You instantly capture my attention, and I can really just imagine it all in my head. Itís just a really good beginning, and it makes me want to read more of it. So good job! :)

You know I rarely cry because of stories on HPFF. I can say I do sometimes, but usually that just means that I was moved - I didnít actually cry. I guess itís because itís on a computer, and I find it hard for stories to hit me the same way when I donít have a book in my hand. But this time I honestly can say - hand on my heart - that you made me cry. Maybe it was partly because of the timing. Next week is actually the anniversary of my grandpaís death, so itís a bit of sensitive time for my family right now. But I think itís mostly cause you capture Molly and her feelings so well. Sheís so believable, and my heart just bleeds for her. I can just imagine that sorrow she must feel after losing one her children, and you have so much description that I almost feel like I lost my child with her (and you know Iím not a mother, so itís impressive that you made me feel that). And I love her interactions with Bella, and her view of the whole situation with Fred and Ginny and everything else in the war.

And I love the ending. It breaks my heart. I never even thought about it that way, the similarities between the two mothers. Theyíve both lost their children; one of them because their child died, the other because she died. And itís just heartbreaking to think of how unfair life is, how unfairly itís treated these women. And I just feel itís so believable that Molly would turn to Lily, another mother, and ask if she could take care of her son like Mollyís taken care of Harry.

I can say without a doubt that this is your best story ever. Iím still crying a little right now, because you just show the exact thing I remember the most from back when my grandpa died. Itís when someone dies that you see just how great love is, but also how vulnerable it is. Iím justÖ this just killed me. I really hope you continue writing truly sad stories like this, because youíre obviously good at it.

So I guessing from this that Sophieís part is from Lilyís POV. Iím prepared to be even more broken, but Iíll enjoy every second of it. Thanks for participating in the challenge, and thank you for breaking my heart so much that Iím still teary right now (ten minutes after I finished it). Also, I hope you have a very merry Christmas and a happy new year!

Lots of Love

Lotte

PS: The results should be up this weekend. Look out for a blog post :)

Author's Response: Hello Lotte,

As much as I know what kept you, and I understandd it (and I'm so glad you're better now and your life has calmed down a little bit), I have to admit that I have been waiting for this review excitedly.

Let me just say thank you before I reply fully. I can't believe this is the first challenge I win. This is the story that means so much more to me than any other story I wrote so far, and the challenge result honours my efforts and makes me feel like it's okay to be proud of my story. So thank you so much for making me incredibly happy. I know Sophie feels the same way, we were really overwhelmed that you loved our stories so much.

wow, thank you so much for saying that my writing has developed. I think the credit for that goes to all of you guys - everyone who ever left me a review, who ever gave me constcrit. you guys have taught me a lot.

I'm (kind of) sorry for having made you cry. I've started to really love description and I like writing scenes in a way that lets people really feel it, picture it, imagine it. I like setting a scene so that everyone can see it exactly the way I picture it in my head.

I've also read the review you left sophie and I'm so glad that you like the way our stories work together. It took a lot of effort to get them to that point.

I am so happy about this review! Thank you so, so much for this. I'm actually working on another really sad story about Molly.

♥ Anja


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Review #8, by LadyL8Stories Untold: Chapter 1

18th December 2015:
Hello Erin and Joey.

Iím sorry for taking so long to leave your next review. Iíve had the worst three months of my life. My exam was moved forward, I got sick, my father was hospitalized and had to go through three operations and now Iím sick again. But better late than never, right?

Okay, so Iíll be reviewing this story after the categories from my judging point system. Iíve added a couple new ones, but the point is for me to show what I think about the different parts of the story. If this review should get too long, Iíll PM you the rest in a group message. I doubt it will come to that, cause none of the other challenge reviews have been that long, but Iím just telling you know in case I find a lot to comment on or just end up rambling too much.

So first of all, Iíll comment on creativity/the idea. I really like the idea. I was hoping someone would do the marauders, because they are after all one of the more famous friendships in the series. Not to mention the fact that their friendship suffers more blow than most friendships does, and Iím really looking forward to seeing how you solve that. I love the marauders, so for me this is just my type of story. And it definitely fits with the idea of the challenge, which was to show the importance of other bonds than romantic ones. I love that you choose a canon friendship. It makes you stand out a lot, cause most of the other entries have one of several OC characters. Thereís nothing wrong with that of course, but itís refreshing to see something else as well. So I really like the idea! :)

The first paragraph is amazing. It really sets a scene, and at the same time introduces us - or more like re-introduces us, because we already know him - to Sirius. You get a sense of his personality right away, and you easily understand at what time in their lives this story takes place. You have some really good description there, and you just capture my attention right away. This is just the perfect way to start a story. It really makes me want to continue reading to find out how itíll all turn out.

I think youíve done the characters justice. They are so believable, and I think thatís really difficult when it comes to the marauders. Theyíre just very hard to get right, but youíve done them so well. I like that you can practically feel the tension between them, especially between Sirius and Remus. And itís just to believable that Sirius is refusing to give up on earning their/his forgiveness. Everything is just done in such an amazing way, and I really loved how you so subtly showed the different personalities and their role in the group (thereís always role, whether one likes it or not). So definitely a high score there.

I donít have anything to say about the genre, dialogue or grammar, but that doesnít surprise me because I know youíre both amazing writers. So itíll all come down to my opinion of the story as a whole, and I can tell you I definitely like it. I think youíre characterisation is a strong point in the story. It makes the dialogue better, as well as the making the whole story seem very believable. I could probably point out that the chapter is a bit dialogue-heavy, but I don't think it's necissarily a bad thing. And the ending does what itís suppose to do; it makes us feel as disappointed and sad as Sirius and the rest of the guys. Theyíre finally appearing to be moving past this stupid (and dangerous) prank that Sirius pulled, but then Remus destroys the hope altogether. And it really makes me want to read more, because it just feels wrong that theyíre not as close as theyíre suppose to be.

So I really liked this story. Thank you for participating in the challenge, and thank you for writing this story. I hope you continue to write it, even though the challenge is now over. Also, I hope you have a very merry Christmas and happy new year!

Lots of Love

Lotte

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Review #9, by LadyL8Waltzing Matilda: Chapter One

18th December 2015:
Hello again Elisabeth and Emily.

Iím sorry for taking so long to leave your next review. Iíve had the worst three months of my life. My exam was moved forward, I got sick, my father was hospitalized and had to go through three operations and now Iím sick again. But better late than never, right?

Okay, so since Iíve already left a review that followed the categories in my judging point system, I donít see the point in doing it again. The results are probably going to be very similar anyway, so instead Iíll just voice my thoughts and probably ramble on like crazy. Again, if my review should be too long, Iíll PM you the rest in a group message. I doubt it will come to that though, cause Iíve managed to restrain myself in all my other challenge reviews, but I figured I should let you know in case it should happen.

I mentioned this in my last review, but Iíll say it again. What you guys have a talent for - the both of you - is dialogue and humour. I admire that so much cause I sometimes struggle with my dialogue and making it sound realistic, but it seems like to come almost naturally for you two. I love that everything is just so believable, and you had me laughing many times. Humour is definitely a genre for the two of you :)

So I think I said in the last review that your chapter was a bit dialogue-heavy, and I suppose I was right in saying that. You could probably say it about this chapter as well, but I donít really see whatís so wrong with that. I feel like I was bit too strict on you, cause while the chapters might be dialogue-heavy, it works well for you guys. You get the point across, you make me want to continue reading it and it never feels like Iím just reading a he said/she said-type of story. So Iím going to say that I was very harsh on you before, and reading it again I actually take it back. I think youíve solved it amazingly, and I donít think I know many people that do dialogue and humour quite as well as you guys do. And Iím really envious of it, and so happy you really show it in this story.

Whatís really good in this story, other than the dialogue, humour and the fact that this is a really creative idea, is that you have a very different but really good characterisation. I donít feel like I said much about that in the last review, and itís a shame cause itís really one of the best things about this story. I love Rose and the fact that she doesnít know anymore about the muggle world than Scorpius and Albus seem to do. People to tend to make Rose mini-Hermione - she knows everything about everything - but here she canít help them at the airport cause she doesnít know either. And it leads to the most hilarious situations, and I couldnít stop laughing at how awkward the three of them are.

I love the ending. I have this really strange obsession with kangaroos (donít ask), and I can just imagine how totally shocked and happy Iíd be if I saw 500 kangaroos in front me. I wonder if they have like a Kangaroo farm at Captain Cookís... Anyway, Iíve really enjoyed reading the story. I hope you continue it, cause Iíd love to know what happens next. I know very little about Australia, so for me this is a story that can potentially teach me a lot as well. And I think the idea is just great. Youíre scored high on creativity, that I can tell you right now.

Thank you so much for participating in the challenge, and thank you so much for writing this story. I hope you guys have a very merry Christmas and happy new year! And I wish you best of luck in the challenge!

Lots of Love

Lotte

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Review #10, by LadyL8Me Without You: Chapter 1: Fred, Age 11

17th December 2015:
Hello Ellie and Sam.

Iím sorry for taking so long to get here. Iíve had the worst three months of my life. My exam was moved forward, I got sick, my father was hospitalized and had to go through three operations and now Iím sick again. But better late than never, right?

Anyway, I will be using the categories from the judging point system I posted awhile back. I wonít say what your score in each category is, because that would give away the winner before Iíve posted the results, but Iíll tell you my thoughts within each category and stuff like that. Iíll just start by leaving you guys a warning. This review will probably be really, REALLY long, but I hope you can still manage to read it. If I should have more to say than what I can make into this review, Iíll send you the rest in a group PM.

Iíll start with my first impression of the story, cause thatís one of the new categories Iíve added to judging point system. Itís basically what I think just from looking at the story; itís whether or not the title, summary and/or banner makes me want to read it, because I feel like that is a very important part of writing a story; you really have to make your readers want to read it.

Your story is just one of those really good-looking ones. I love the title. ďMe without youĒ actually reminds me of this song I used to love as a kid, and it was basically about a girl who felt like without the other person sheíd be lost; it was really just a song about how much this person meant to her. I believe it was written about her mother, but it couldíve easily been about a sister, brother, friend or boyfriend/husband. So it immediately makes me think this is about a strong bond, probably a family bond. And then looking at the banner, I obviously see that itís the Weasley Twins, which makes me think itís about their relationship. I feel like those two elements together have a really strong effect, because we know that Fred ultimately dies, leaving George ďwithoutĒ him. So itís a really just something so simple that so effectively manages to leave an impact on the reader. And I like that you guys kept the summary short. I feel like less is more when itís all about effecting the reader, and you manage to touch our hearts in just a few sentence. We canít help but feel sad for these twins who got separated by death. So to sum up, my first impression is good. The title, banner and summary really made me sympathise with the twins, and I am extremely excited to get to read the story. :)

Okay, so starting with actual story. I just have to say that I love that you guys write in first personís perspective. So far most of the entries Iíve read have been in third personís perspective, and I love that too, but itís just great to get to see a story from a characterís own eyes. And it makes you guys stand out a little, which is always great when youíre in a challenge. So Iím choosing to applaud you for it, cause it was just really refreshing to see something done a little bit differently.

I will move on the dialogue, grammar, writing style and genre categories, which is basically my opinion of your writing. I feel like you have a really great beginning of the story. You set a scene, and immediately makes us feel like we know Fred, which we do but itís still impressive that you make us recognize him so quickly. I love that refer to George as ďyouĒ, because it really makes us feel like weíre in on their bond, that weíre a part of it and that we can feel it. And I believe doing that will make it extremely hard for us, the readers, when/if you guys reach the death scene, cause weíll feel like weíve lost a part of ourselves as well. So itís a smart move, and it really has a powerful effect. I donít have anything to say about the dialogue or grammar, because you guys are good at that. So all in all, youíre scoring high in these categories.

I really like the characterisation as well. It was interesting to see you focus on their emotions, like how nervous they are and how they find comfort in knowing theyíre two in feeling that, rather than just make them joke around like people tend to do. I feel like they would be really nervous on their first day, anyone would be really, so to me it was just really believable and I really liked it. Also, you create this really good bond between them, show us early on that these two twin brothers are very, VERY close.

That final line is just downright cruel, cause we all know how it ends for the two of them. Itís a clever line though, and it really has a powerful effects because we know what happens to them. So Iím really impressed with what youíve done with this story, and I hope you continue to write it cause Iíd love to know what happens next :)

Anyway, thanks for sharing the story, and thanks for participating in the challenge. I hope you have a merry Christmas and a happy new year!
Lots of Love

Lotte

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Review #11, by LadyL8Shattered: Chapter 3

17th December 2015:
Hello Erin and Kaitlin.

Sorry for taking so extremely long time to get back here again. Iíve had the worst three months of my life. My exam was moved forward, I got sick, my father was hospitalized and had to go through three operations and now Iím sick again. But better late than never, right?

Anyway, I'm happy to finally be back, and since this is the third and final review, I will focus on saying what I think about the story as a whole. I wonít use the categories like Iíve done in the last two reviews. Iíll just say my thoughts and probably ramble on like crazy, cause I always do that. Just so you guys know, I re-read the last two chapters before I read this one, just so I was sure I remembered everything and really got the feeling of the story :)

What I love about this story is that it really shows how talented you guys are. This is just what the two of you are best at; to make readers connect to the characters. The Barty we know in the books are not the kind of character youíd want to feel sympathetic towards, and it seems like almost an impossible job to change our opinion of him, especially considering his horrible actions later in life. Youíd be almost crazy to attempt to sway us from our belief that he is just evil, but you guys dared to do it and Iím glad you did, cause you managed to do what seemed impossible - you made me, and probably all of your other readers, sympathise with him.

In this chapter, youíre particularly cruel. You give us this sense of hope for Barty. You make us believe that once he comes to Hogwarts, things will get better for him. Heíll be away from his father, heíd get friends and have a better life. Heíd be happy, something youíd already made us feel he really deserved to be. Heís nervous and excited all at once, and we canít help but feel the same. Itís just start of a better life for himÖ or so we think.

But then from the second his boards the train, you pretty much destroy all hope we have. First he canít find an empty compartment, and ends up sitting with who Iím guessing is Snape. We think itís horrible to see him sitting there alone, cause obviously we know from HP that the ride to Hogwarts is where you make close friendship and stuff like that. He, however, has been left out. Heís an outsider before heís even arrived, and my heart bleeds for him, because I think pretty much everyone can relate to that feeling of being left out of something.

But still we hope things will get better once he arrives, but then you destroy that hope once again. Thereís moment, I believe itís when heís on his own in the dormitory, that I actually find myself thinking ďhow does he even survive it?Ē. It just feels like the whole world is against him, nothing goes his way. And it hits me how strong Barty really is, cause many people wouldíve broken down had they experience that what seemed to be their last hope for a better life, was a total letdown.

I feel like what you guys do in this story, is something that I personally feel strongly about. I believe that bad people have mostly themselves to blame for their own actions, but I also think we need to see that sometimes we - as a society - are partly to blame as well. There so many kids (and grown-ups) that are suffering every day, and we donít see them, we donít help them like we should do. And that makes them turn to bad actions. Maybe because people like that are easy to trick into making bad choices - give the promises of friendships, family or just happiness and theyíll do it, cause theyíve never had any of those things and really want it - or maybe because thatís the only escape they see.

I canít say I think Barty is a good person, but thatís not something youíre trying to do either. What I can say is that youíre story does something really important - it brings depth to a very minor character, and it makes us understand him and his actions a little bit better. I think it will change my view of Barty Crouch Jr. forever, really, cause Iíve never ever thought of him this way, but now itís like I canít un-see him like this. And you take up really important themes, and I just feel like this story is something that HPFF needs. Iím so happy you wrote it, and Iím so happy you two teamed up because youíre amazing when you write on your own, but just brilliant when you write together.

So thank you for participating in my challenge. Iím honored to have two amazing authors like yourself write for it, and Iím so glad you guys wrote this truly amazing and important story. You really teared me up, because I feel really strongly about these themes, and I hope you guys continue to write it, cause Iíd love to know - even though itíll probably break my heart - what happens next.

Thank you for sharing the story. Hope you have a merry Christmas and a happy new year!

Lots of love

Lotte

PS: The results should be up this weekend, so look out for a blog post from me :)

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Review #12, by LadyL8Taming the Dragon Tamer: [one]

11th November 2015:
Hi Anja.

So I've seen how hard you've worked with NaNo, and I'm a very proud mum. Yo'ure word count has gotten really high, and I figured it was about time you got something from me to futher motivate you to keep writing. I have five reviews like this one, and I'll post one every now and then when I feel like you've worked really hard :)

Okay, so I'm just going to copy and paste the review. The first paragraph will probably make you understand when I actually wrote this :P Anyway, here we go:

Hi Anja. So I read this story a while ago, but I never got around to reviewing it. And since Iíve literarily paid for it to get advertised (well, technically I paid for the site to stay on, but you get what I mean), I figured it was about time I finally did so. So here comes 6 reviews in a row, where I pretty much just tell you how much I love the story. Itís just warm fuzzy reviews really, and Iíll probably be rambling a lot. But you know all about that from Letters, so Iím not going to waste more time talking about it.

OMG. I am so much in love with story itís not even funny. At this point I think I might even like it more than Letters and thatís saying something cause you how much I love that story. Charlie has always been someone I can sympathise with. Iím the odd one in our family as well, not at all like the rest of my siblings or my parents. I donít even look like them, and everyone pretty much likes to remind me off that. So I totally feel like I can relate to Charlie, because he too is someone that does his own thing, and heís the ďodd oneĒ too, the one that is so different from everyone else in the family.

I love Christopher. We hardly saw him in the chapter, but I definitely feel I like I know him already. At least a little bit. You see, he reminds me of my middle school teacher, because he too sat in a wheelchair (he had an accident years ago, and havenít been able to use his legs ever since. And he met so much hate at my middle school, cause it was a very terrible (I wouldíve used a stronger word, but the reviews are suppose to be 12+) school. But he just took it calmly, and he was seriously the best teacher Iíve ever had. Really, really good teacher.

We donít see many stories on HPFF where a character is in a wheelchair, so Iím just so happy you have one. I actually had a project in high school, where I sat in a wheelchair for two weeks (every day, everywhere) and we filmed it, and the point was to show how hard it is to sit in a wheelchair. And basically say what we, as a society need to do to make things better for these people. And a scene that always makes me cry in the final project is when I took the bus while sitting in the wheelchair, cause pretty much everyone was staring at me the entire ride. And it was so uncomfortable, and I honestly felt like yelling at everyone. And it makes me so sad to think about what people that actually sits in wheelchairs must go through everyday. What Charlie says in the end is just the beginning of it. Thereís so much ignorance, prejudism and just downright bad behaviour from so many people. And I just hate that.

But this back to your story again. Anyway, I like that idea here. I can see Charlie being gay, and I like that he immediately likes Christopher. And I already like the Christopher, and I can see the two of them being together. And I canít wait for it to happen. So yeah, Iím so excited to read the next chapter of my favourite story by my favourite author. And I so hope this story will get lot of new readers through the advertisement, cause you really deserve it.

Oh, and did I mention I love the story? Cause I do. So much. Itís my favourite, you know. And it totally deserves to be given a dobby rec. cause youíre so good, Anja. Hope you a wonderful day.

Lots of Love From Your Biggest Fan

Lotte

Author's Response: Lotte, I don't think I have thanked you enough times for giving me your advertising rights! You are the most amazing person ever, do you know that?
I'm so happy to hear that you like this. really, it means so much coming from you!

I'm sorry about your middle school experience. Mine wasn't all that great either, so I understand how that must have been for you. (I think most of us on this site had one thing or other happen to them in their childhood...)


Your project sounds so amazing! exhausting, and hard, and like it would be a lot of work. but really, really awesome. It must have been so uncomfortable to be stared at so much. I have only ever been in a wheelchair for a couple of days after an injury, so I hardly know anything about it, that made it a little harder to write chris but i daresay he worked out allright.

The advertisement has been running for a while now, and the story's reads have gone up, so thank you so, so much!

Thank you so much for your massive support and for everything you've been doing for me. You're the most amazing person ever.

♥ Anja


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Review #13, by LadyL8The Lark and the Nightingale: Epilogue Ė The opening night

30th October 2015:
Hi Chiara.

I'm here with your October review. Sorry it took me a while to get here. I completely forgot about it, but I'm so glad I finally got here, cause I've been wanting to read this story for so long. And I will have to get back here later, cause you deserve a review on every chapter. Cause you know I was really suppose to read the first chapter and review that one, but I got addicted to the story and couldn't stop reading until I reached the end. It's just a really good story, and it's gonna get a favourite from me.

What I love is that you use your own language in it (and your name :P). You have sentences in Italian and the story is sort of your own spin on Romeo and Juliet, a famous story set in Italy. I've been in Italy three times myself, never in Verona though, and I got reminded of my trips there when reading this story. It's just really amazing to see how you incorporated so much from your own country, but also made it feel like it belonged in the HP universe. I really believed it, believed that Chiara existed and that she was friends with the marauders and Lily and all the other characters from the era. She felt like she belonged there, and I really felt like I knew her as a character - that I could relate to her and her struggles. So good job on creating a good and realistic main character.

The story is very unique. I liked how you put a twist on the Romeo and Juliet story we know, and then also created your own version with HP characters we know. It's interesting to see them playing in Romeo and Juliet, but at the same time they're in their own version of the tale. The curse seemed so realistic, and it really reminded me of The Swan Princess, you know the princess that's cursed to be a swan every day and then turns back to a human every night, maybe cause I loved that movie when I was a kid. Oh, and I loved that even as a bird you can see Chiara's personality. There's just so much interesting stuff in this story, but what I have to say is that the plot is very unique. I've never seen anything quite like in on HPFF, and that made is so good to read. It was just completely new for me, and I loved it.

Thank you for sharing it with us. It's really a good story. I loved it a lot. 10/10 and good job, Chiara! :D

Lots of Love

Lotte

Author's Response: Oh, wow, Lotte!
Thank you so much!

The fact that you read it all in one go makes me so happy and excited! I'm so, so glad you enjoyed the story, because it's one I'm very proud of and affectionate to!!! :)

So thank you, also for favouring!!! It really means a lot!!!

I did put a lot of myself in many parts and characters in this story! Chiara is actually quite different from me, she is much stronger and more volitive. But I thought it was cute to name her after me (also, I have a tiny, not so secret, crush on Remus...) The Italian bits were something I really enjoyed to insert (even if it scared me a little, especially in the prologue with Romeo and Juliet, where all the dialogue was Italian) But I'm so very happy that you enjoyed it!!! :)

Verona is a really cute city! I've been two or three times and, even if it's not as big and full of things to see like other Italian cities (Rome for instance) it's totally worth a visit (in case you'll happen to come back here...) I've never been to Norway, instead. One day...

I'm so happy Chiara felt realistic and that you could sympathize with her. And that you liked the parallels with Romeo and Juliet. And the curse too. I took inspiration more from Lady Hawk, actually. Especially in the way it was broken. But I think it has a lot in common with The Swan Princess as well!

Thank you so much again! Really! I'm so incredibly thrilled that you enjoyed the story so much!!! And I'm so happy we were paired, cause I really loved the incipit of your story as well!!!

All my love, hugs and kisses!
Chiara


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Review #14, by LadyL8Children of Stardust: Children of Stardust

18th October 2015:
Hi Kat.

I'm sorry it's taken me a while to get here with your review. I got sick and then my dad came to visit me this weekend. But better late than never, right? I'm so excited to finally get to read this story. I rarely read Luna-stories, and this will be the first one I've read in years, I think. So I really look forward to see your take on her, and I'm sure it'll be amazing, cause every other story of yours I've read have just been so good. So my expectations are high, but you'll definitely not disappoint me.

Yeah, you didn't. This was good. I really liked this idea. Luna's always been a bit different; she has her own view of the world, so for me it was not strange that she wouldn't be sad or even find a reason to be sad at all. She's just a very optimistic and positive girl, and I admire her for her way of seeing life. And I think you captured it so well just through her thoughts on sadness and death. It was really good.

And I have to say this, cause it's just a really fun coincident. When I was younger, my mother used to say that when people died, they became stars in the nightsky. I was very young when my grandfather died, my little sister was even younger (I don't think she was even 3 years old at the time), and mother told us that we didn't need to be sad cause our grandfather would always look over us as the brighest star in the nightsky. And ever since then I've always said that to my little sister. And she still believes that when people die they become stars in the sky, and I just love that. It was something I could see Luna believe as well, and it's really a beautiful way of thinking.

Anyway, I just really loved the story. I enjoyed reading it, and it felt believable. It was just a really good read. Good job! And thanks for sharing!

Have a wonderful week!

Lots of Love

Lotte
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Review #15, by LadyL8A Sister's Love: Molly: Big Sister

18th October 2015:
Hi Freda (or Georgina if she's the one reading this)

I'm sorry it's taken so long to get here and leave your review. I got sick and then my dad visited me this weekend. But better late than never, right? I'm so excited to actually review this story. I'm sure I've read it before, but apparantely I didn't leave a review back then. So I guess it's about time I do, cause this story was just so cute.

I love that you wrote this as a gift to Georgina. I'm guessing you're the oldest one, and Georgina is younger. Knowing you two are sisters just makes this story even cuter and even more believable. It's was great to see the sisterly love between Molly and Lucy from the first moment they met. It was just really cute and I enjoyed reading it. It brough a smile to my face, and that's the point of short, sweet stories like this.

I'm actually an older sister myself (and younger). I was older when my sister was born, though. I think I was around 10 years old, and I still remember how exciting it was that night my mum went to the hospital. I don't think I slept at all, and I just really looked forward to getting a little sister. And as an older sister I could relate to so much in this story. I adore my sister, and I would pretty much anything to keep her safe. She's my best friend, even though she's a lot younger than me. And that feeling was so well-captured in this story, probably because you're sisters yourself and know what it feels like. It was so believable and it made me miss my three sisters a lot, especially the younger one. So this was really good. Well done! And thanks for sharing it.

I really enjoyed reading it.

Have a wonderful weekend!

Lots of Love

Lotte
(I'll send you a PM soon)

Author's Response: Frankly, we forgot we were receiving one from you, so this is quite welcome! :)

This is Freda, and I am three years older than Georgina, although no one guesses that. :P (people always think I'm a couple years younger than I really am.) But anyways, Molly and Lucy are the same age gap too. Their personalities aren't supposed to match ours, but their love for each other does.

I don't remember a time before Georgina, nor when she was born/an infant, but I expect my reaction was similar. Parents confirmed I was a good big sister. I am definitely very close with Georgina, more so than our younger sister Ginny but I actually almost had a brother instead of Georgina (miscarriage shortly before she was born) and I couldn't imagine . . .

Glad you liked the story! Especially since it was written in pieces in secret. (It wasn't easy to hide it from her when we use the same computer!) now that I'm thinking of it, I think this is our third "meeting the new baby (sister)" story. The others are Dylan's chapter in Life in the Boot Family, and the prologue aka first chapter of Between the Cracks. Both from oldest sibling perspective. (Well I guess it's hard to tell from the youngest's view!)

Thanks for the review!

--Freda


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Review #16, by LadyL8Once Upon a Hippogriff: Once Upon a Hippogriff

18th October 2015:
Hi LJ.

Sorry it's taken me a while to get here with your review. I got sick and then my dad visited me this weekend. But better late than never, right? I'm so excited to read this story. I love the Short and Sweet challenge, cause short stories almost always angst or horror. It's really hard to write a happy and/or sweet story in few words, but that's why it's called a challenge, isn't it? And I've enjoyed the other entries I've read, so I'm so excited to read this one and probably enjoy it as well. And I haven't actually read anything of yours before (I think), so this will be a first for me. But I'm sure you're a really good writer, so I know I'll enjoy reading it.

I really like the idea here. I've read many stories about young Teddy, but they usually focus on his relationship with Harry rather than his relationship with Ginny. And I think both are equally important. Teddy might've had a closer relationship with Harry, but I do think Ginny would almost be like a stepmother for him. Almost all of the times Teddy's with Harry, he'd also be with Ginny. I feel like Ginny is also the sort of woman who'd take care of every child, whether it's hers or not. And I feel like she'd be close to Teddy as well, but maybe a little bit differently from his relationship with Harry. But she would mean a lot to him, for sure, so I liked that you explore their relationship rather than Harry and Teddy's.

This was such a cute idea. I liked the hippogriff, and I'd certainly be shocked if I found one in my house. But Ginny handles everything well. She keeps calm and does what's needed. She just has this maturity over her that we don't see in the books, and it's good cause she's obviously older her than she is in the books. I like how much she cares for Teddy; he's like a son to her, even if he isn't biologically hers. It was a really cute relationship. I just really liked it.

But the ending was funny. It shows that Ginny still can have fun, and that's important in any relationship, no matter the age, if you ask me. You have to be able to have fun with each other, and their marriage, even if we only see it shortly, seems so stable and healthy. I fell in love with them.

So I just really loved this story. The characterisation was good, I liked the idea and it was executed wonderfully. You keep a light tone, and the story as a whole just brought the biggest smile to my face. And that's the point of the story, so well done! It was really good. Thanks for sharing.

Have a wonderful week!

Lots of Love

Lotte

(I'll send you a PM really soon)

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Review #17, by LadyL8Farewell: Farewell

18th October 2015:
Hi Vicki.

I'm sorry it's taken me so long to leave your review. I got sick and then my dad visited me this weekend. But better late than never, right? And I can't wait to read this story, cause it just looks so good. And I'm not much of Dumbledore fan, but the summary and the banner just makes me crazy excited to read this. And it's been a while since I last read something of yours, so it was about time I got back to your author's page again.

Anyway, let's get to the actual review. I have to start by saying that I think you're crazy brave for daring to write Dumbledore. He is probably the hardest character to write, because he's so wise and he speaks in riddles a lot. And I've never dared to write from his POV myself, but I've been told it's hard. And I have to admire you for taking him on, for writing from his POV, because I really think he's an interesting character that there should be more stories about. I know there are some young-Dumbledore, but stories from Harry Potter's time at Hogwarts are really lacking. So I'm excited to read one now, and I know it will be good, because I remember how good your writing is.

I remember the Shakespeare challenge, cause I was a maybe for it. I thought it was really challenging, and I was wow-ed by everyone that managed to submit an entry. And I really like your interpretation of the quote. It's so obviously inspired by it, but at the same time it's a very believable story. I really liked that you took an actual missing moment in the books, and put your spin on it. It was a clever idea, and it really worked for me.

Dumbledore was just really well-characterised. Like I said earlier, he is said to be difficult to get right, but I actually think you did better than anyone else whose written stories about Dumbledore that I've read. I really liked how reflective he is, and there's this sense of wisdom and life-experience over him. He's just Dumbledore, but at the same time he's not. Cause this Dumbledore, while appearing to be just like the one in the books, is a little bit darker, but in a good way. The description of Gellert and Ariana's death was just chilling. I got goosebumps, cause I could really feel Dumbledore's guilt over everything that happened. I felt like he was describing his biggest mistake in life; a time when he was a very different Albus than the one we see in the books. It was so believable and so well-written. I really felt like I could relate more to Dumbledore than I feel I could in the books, because that feeling of having made many poor choices in the past, but in hindsight you realise everything bad you did and you would've done something different could you go back. You've become wiser with age. And I just loved it!

I also loved hearing Albus' thoughts and feeling about these different situations in his life, especially when it comes to the duel with Gellert. He battles to win because it's the right thing to do, but at the same time it's obviously painful for him to actually win, because Gellert had and probably in some way always will, mean a lot to him. I really liked it, and it could almost see how conflicted he was.

I also love his relationship with Harry. I've always felt like Dumbledore is somewhat a father-figure for Harry, cause he's never had anyone care about him the way Dumbledore did. For me, that made the discoveries in Deathly Hallows more horrible, and I'm not sure I can quite forgive Dumbledore for everything he did, but I do feel his relationship with Harry was sincere. He really thinks of him as a son, and only wants the best for him. And planning his own death can't have been easy, especially when you have Harry who's about to battle for his life, and he can't be there to see it or help him. And you really show that well, and I just really liked seeing that relationship because in the other Dumbledore stories I've read, the authors haven't really showed that. And for me that's an important part of the books, and it should not be overlooked.

While it has been a while since I last read something of yours, I do think this is actually my favourite story of yours. Your writing has just improved a lot, this story is the prime example of that. This is really good, the best Dumbledore story from this era that I've ever read. I loved it, in fact I've even favourited it, cause it's that good. Thank you sharing. I really enjoyed reading it. So good job!

Have a wonderful week!

Lots of Love

Lotte

Author's Response: Lotte!! I love seeing your reviews, they're always so amazing! I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond! And honestly, don't worry about it and I know it was a while ago but I hope everything is okay now!

I was scared to write Dumbledore, like literally terrified but I thought I would give it a go because he worked so well for the quote. I don't think i'll ever write him again because I did struggle but I did enjoy it in the end and I was quite pleased with the story!

It was a difficult challenge, I must admit and I wasn't sure I would get anything out but then the idea of using Dumbledore came to mind and I knew I had to give it a go.

Thank you so much! That honestly means a lot. This took me so long to write because I was conscious of getting his character right, which was difficult because he is such a wise character. It took a lot of research to get everything just right and to try and make his reflectiveness and guilt believable so i'm glad you liked it all! You're the sweetest Lotte!

I had to explore his relationship with Gellert because I feel as though it's such a big part of him and who is he today. I just couldn't over look it. I wanted to get his conflicted-ness across because although Gellert meant a lot to him, Dumbledore's morality, especially as he got older and realised that he couldn't hold onto the old Gellert he used to know.

Thank you! I have always felt that he loved Harry unconditionally and that what we found out in DH was something that was planned before Dumbledore really got to know him as a boy and began to deeply care for him and by then, Harry's fate was already mapped out and all Dumbledore could do was try to help him and care for him in a way no one else had. I definitely feel as though Dumbledore would have felt deeply guilty and reluctant to leave Harry to fight on his own but obviously, he had no choice. Thank you!

Lotte, you're making me blush. This is the sweetest review and I'm glad you think i've improved because i've been trying! Awww, thank you! You're the best Lotte!

-Vicki


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Review #18, by LadyL8Old Habits Die Hard: Old Habits Die Hard

11th October 2015:
Hi Katie *waves*

Sorry for taking so long to get here. I lost my internet connection yesterday, but it's back again now. And I'm so happy for that, cause this story just looks amazing. It's partly due to the breathtaking banner by katharos@TDA, but I also really love the summary and title. It doesn't give away much, which makes me really interested to read it. And I happen to love Regulus Black, I've even written from his POV once, so I already know that this story is just my type of story. And I'm so excited.

I fell in love the proverb challenge, but it really is challenging. You got "old habits die hard", and you can see how well it fits the story from the very first line. I really like how you've incorporated it into the story, somehow, and the first line is just amazing. It just had me immidiately, and it was literarly painful to had to look away from the story to write this part of the review. I just want to continue reading it, and I will do so now.

You know what, I really like Regulus here. He's a very habit-based person, and I am like that myself. I live after habits, though I can occasionally walk away from them if it something better comes along. And I've always thought that habits is a way of being in control. You live after habits to get some of control of your life. And that thought makes it really interesting here, cause Regulus has so little control of his actual life, so maybe he lives after habits as a way of feeling like he can have some control of his life. And that makes it even more interesting cause it is a habit, Mary McDonald, that makes him take more control of his actual life as well. I really liked the characterisation of Regulus, and I really liked the interesting side of habits and how they tie to control, which he, in the beginning, doesn't actually have.

Regulus is very intense and self-destructive. I feel like he is similar to Sirius in that aspect, but that he is maybe even more this than his brother is. And I don't think the habits are any good for him, not even the one for Mary in a way, cause he shouldn't change his life for anyone other than himself. And he doesn't even know Mary that well, which makes me wonder what he would've done if he had found out she wasn't like he wanted her to be. Or if he approached and she had rejected him. It's hard to say, but I definitely feel like he can't fully be in control of his life before he lets go of all habits, including Mary.

Mary is almost a little Mary Sue-ish, but it actually works because we see it from Regulus POV, and he finds her to be almost perfect, an angel. And I really like the contrast between her, for the lack of a better word, freedom and Regulus' controlled life. To me it feels like Regulus first and foremost is attracted to that, cause to me Mary just seems like a really care-free and happy girl. Her approach to life is very different from how he lives his life, controlled by so many different forces around him, and I feel like maybe that is what he likes about her.

I love the small glimpses we see of the Regulus/Sirius relationship. Despite their arguments and fights, at the end of the day Regulus still loves his brother. And it's interesting cause it actually made me think about the relationship between Lily and Petunia, cause I feel like that applies to Petunia as well. Both of them seemingly hate their sibling, but I don't think they actually hate them as much as they appear to. And in this story Regulus really show clear signs of actually caring a lot about his brother, even defending him, which breaks my heart, especially since Sirius never found out what his brother had done for him.

So I've rambled on for long enough, I think. I really enjoyed reading this story. It's was amazing. Thanks for sharing it, and have a wonderful weekend.

Lots of Love

Lotte

Author's Response: Hey Lotte! :)

Sorry it took me so long to respond, it's been hard to find any time lately :')

Regulus is the best! And I'm glad you liked the banner, its beautiful isn't it?!

Hahahaa :') I'm so glad you liked the first line! I really wanted it to capture peoples attention like it did! :) When I got that Proverb, it instantly clicked that this was the story I have to write! :D

That exactly what I was trying to communicate! :D I'm so glad you got that! I live through habits a lot myself, I think it makes him quite a relatable character that he does the same.

My vision of Regulus is that he is actually just like Sirius and that's why they clash. His habits are definitely not good for him at all, and even Mary could be argued to be bad, you're right. I'd like to think that even if he knew Mary before, he would still have the same feelings for her, but I think the dramatic way in which he first saw her intensified his feelings.

Mary definitely has the air about her, and the freedom things is a massive thing of what attracts regulus to her!

Regulus never stopped loving Sirius in my eyes, he just didn't have the courage to leave like he did, but he admired his bravery. That's an interesting parole I hadn't thought of before! Maybe that is something that Sirius and Lily would have ended over? :)

Thank you so much for such a lovely review! :D

Katie :)


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Review #19, by LadyL8Truth, Dare or Drink!: Truth, Dare or Drink!

10th October 2015:
Hello Alexis *waves*

I'm finally here with your review. I decided to do this story because I noticed it didn't have any reviews, and it looked interesting so I figured this could be the first one. And I'm glad I chose it, cause I really liked it. It was just so different from most one-shots with the same lenght. Instead of being angst or horror, it's more playful and happy in an unhappy setting (if that makes sense). It was really a joy to read it.

I rarely read stories that are not canon-compliant, but this kind of made me regret not reading more of them. It was refreshing to see a story that takes the characters in a new direction. Seeing Hermione more bitter than she actually is in the last book, was different but still believable. I feel like being left out like she is, must be painful. And especially since they clearly need her to find the horcruxes, and she knows that too. She is angry, that much is clear, and it makes us see a very different side of her than the one in the book. I just loved that.

Fred and George are a great contrast to Hermione both canon-wise and in this story. While they are more relaxed and humorous, Hermione is more serious. But it was great to see a more playful side to her, to see a more relax and fun Hermione. I really loved that she is almost a little flirtatious, and that she is the one that suggest the game in the first place. You'd think that, that is very Un-Hermione, but I actually found it really believable. There's so many layers to Hermione I feel like we never get to see, and you explore some of them in this story. So I loved your Hermione, and it actually made me want to write a Hermione-centric story myself... I won't, though. I don't have time for that.

But anyway, it was really good. I don't know why it doesn't have more reviews cause it really deserves more. It was amazing, and I enjoyed reading it. The contrast between the really dark place they are in - they are after all in the middle of a war - and the fun and happy Hermione is great, and it's almost almost a little poetic in a way; finding yourself when the world is at it's darkest. It's just beautiful and I really liked it.

Thanks for sharing this story. I really liked it. Good job!

Lots of Love

Lotte

Author's Response: Hello Lotte,

Sorry it's taken a while to get to your lovely review. First, thank you for being the first to leave some thoughts on this tale. The idea for it was based on a challenge to write something fluffy, pairing Hermione with one of the Weasley boys other than Ron or Percy. I struggled with it for a while. Fluffy isn't my cup of tea - normally my writing tends to wander down darker paths. Then I made the mistake of procrastinating until the last minute and came down with a wicked cold. Somewhere between the fever and the Nyquil was where Hermione's flirtatious jaunt with the twins was born.

I'll have you know that Fred and George took full advantage of my cold. They kept whispering things to me like 'Hermione needs to loosen up', 'she needs some fun', and 'did you know about our specialty line of products?' But it was Hermione that initiated with the idea of the game while confessing she's always been attracted to both of the Weasley twins.

I agree there is a lot more to Hermione that what we see in the books. Of the Golden Trio, she's the one I relate to the most. She's more than just a sidekick - she has fears, ambitions, desires and I suspect a wicked sense of humor. So in the end, it was great fun writing how she might seek some release from the overwhelming darkness that's hanging over everyone - a moment of lightness for her to cherish later.

Anyways, thanks again for stopping by. It's been great to chat with you!

~Alexis


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Review #20, by LadyL8This Treasure: You Make Me Smile

16th September 2015:
Hi Sian.

Iím trying to read and review as many of the dobby noms as I possibly can before the voting round starts. And Iím now doing all the Best One-shot stories, and I realised I never read or reviewed this story. So thatís why Iím here, and it sure was about time for me to get here. This just looks so amazing, and thatís crazy for me to say since Iím not even much of a Ron/Hermione fan (I like them together, but I rarely read stories about the two of them) and this is a story about them. But I just have the highest expectations, because I always love your stories. Youíre seriously one of my favourite authors on HPFF, and everything you write always ends up on my reading list (and favourite list, though that one hasnít been updated in a while).

I really like how your structured this story (I have a point system for each Dobby category to help me decide which nominee to vote for, and one of the things Iím giving points for in the category Best One-shot is actually the structure). Time-jumps can easily be very confusing for the readers, especially when the story jumps between lots of different years, but it really works here. And you effectively use the structure to your advantage, to really the state of grief Ron must be in, in that moment he enters the hospital and realises what condition Hermione is in.

Itís really interesting to see the contrast between the happy couple back then, who certainly had their bad times as well but always got through everything together, and the tragic couple in the present, Hermione fighting for her life and Ron fighting to keep himself together - to stay strong. You use that contrast so well, it not only seems like Ron (or maybe even Hermione on her deathbed) is thinking about the significance the other person has had on their life (by reflecting on the past, showing that Ron and Hermione was just meant to be together forever, and Ron never had a reason to think it wouldnít happen), but also as a way of showing just how much this couple has meant to each other, and just how much Ron is hurting in the present (if this does not make sense, I apologize. Iím still ill, so Iím not sure how understandable everything I write is).

Everything in this story is flawless. I wish I had anything good to say, but I really donít. I just loved it, really. Itís just amazing. Ron is amazing. Hermione is amazing. Them together is amazing. Your writing is amazing. This is just amazing.

Thanks for sharing this story. I loved it, and I definitely see why it was nominated. It really deserved to be. Congratulations on your nomination and good luck in the voting round! And have a wonderful week, Sian! :)

Lots of Love ♥

Lotte

Author's Response: Hi Lotte! ♥ Thank you so much for stopping by and for taking the time to read all of these stories!

To be honest, I don't read many Ron/Hermione stories either, but to hear all those lovely things about my writing is really incredible! You're seriously one of the sweetest people ever ♥

This story was actually intended to be a challenge entry in the non-linear challenge, but I didn't make it in time, but I'm so pleased that you liked the structure! I thought it did work here with the way that it jumped between different years to develop the life that Ron and Hermione had together and then the present day.

I'm so glad that you liked the contrast between the memories that I wrote about and then the present day scenes in the hospital. I really wanted to show that, in spite of all the terrible grief and pain that Ron and his family are going through, him and Hermione did still have a very happy life together and that there are still cherished memories that he will keep with him, no matter what happens. I'm so glad that you thought the different scenes helped to illustrate how much the two of them meant to each other and the sort of pain and emotion that Ron is feeling.

Thank you so, so much for your lovely review and for taking the time to leave such sweet and thoughtful comments for me!


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Review #21, by LadyL8broken, broken: before the Departure.

11th September 2015:
Hi There, Emily.

Iím in the process of reviewing all (or at least as many as I can) dobby noms, and I decided to start with the category ďBest AngstĒ. Iíve read most of the noms, and I vaguely remembered having read the first chapter of this one back in April/May for my anon review spree. But I left so many reviews around then that I didnít actually get to fully read and enjoy the stories, so I had to re-read it now. I might end up saying a little bit of what I said back then, but itís only because I can now read it properly.

Okay, so starting with something Iím sure I mustíve said last time, but it can never be repeated too many times: I love the idea. I can just imagine how painful it must be after the war, knowing that all you did was just to keep you and your family safe, but no one else really sees it that way. Theyíre hurting too, but no one notices. And I definitely feel like itís believable. People tend to forget that there are always two sides to every story, and we only see Harryís. He doesnít like the Slytherins, and his opinion of them are really reflected in the way they are described, but that doesnít mean itís necessarily the objective truth. I always say the same thing about Slytherins as I say about Sansa Stark in Game of Thrones. Theyíre both survivors, they do what they need to do stay alive. Sure theyíre not heroes like Harry, but then again very few people in real life are. The truth is that in the given situation, most of us wouldíve acted like them; most concerned with keeping ourselves and the ones we care about alive, no matter what it involves (some exceptions to this of course).

I think your portrayal of PTSD is really realistic. The nightmares, the panic attacks (Iíve had many of those myself because of social anxiety, so I definitely sympathised with them), mood swings and even self-harm, it was just really painful to see what an impact the war had on their lives. I really sympathised with them, and that is quite a feat considering the books doesnít really paint a nice picture of them, but they just seemed so human, so fragile and lost. And I almost hated the rest of the wizarding world for not realising the pain they were in, that they too are suffering from the war.

I really like Daphne. She seems so strong on the outside, but you can really see how vulnerable she is on the inside. I imagine she feels like she needs to stay strong for the rest of them; she feels like she needs to keep it together because someone has to. But sheís hurting too, just as much as the rest of them.

Iíve added the story to my reading list, because I really want to know what happens next and whether or not Daphne goes to France. I hope sheíll change her mind, because I think she and the others really need her to stay, especially Pansy.

This really is a good story, and my heart is really breaking for these lost teens that are dealing with the aftermath of a war they never wanted to be a part of in the first place.

I wish I could give you a much longer review to show just how much this affected me, but there are so many dobby noms. So Iíll have to try to keep the reviews a little bit shorter than they usually are. I do hope you understand how much I Ė and my friend, Lila Stangard, too Ė like this.

Congrats on your dobby nom, and good luck in the voting round.

And I almost forgot: Have a wonderful weekend!

Lots of Love

Lotte

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Review #22, by LadyL8Schrodinger's Cat: Anhedonia

10th September 2015:
Hi there, Kevin

Iím trying to read and review as many of the dobby noms. as possible, and decided to start with the category ďBest AngstĒ. And Iíve read and reviewed most of the stories in the category, but for some reason I never actually reviewed yours (Iíve read it, typed out a review, but I guess I mustíve been too tired to post it). So Iím leaving you one now, just so you know how much I love this story.

I really like the idea. One of my best friends likes science and dreams of someday being a scientist, so Iím very familiar with the concept of Schrodingerís Cat (random thing I just have to throw in here, because I thought about it as soon as I saw the title: my friend actually dressed up as Schrodingerís Cat at my Halloween party last year. She was a cat in an actual box. It was really clever). I donít understand it completely, but I find the concept to be very fascinating.

And it was really interesting to see a relationship end so fast. Itís just a simple question, no drama, and itís all it takes for him to realise that he loves her and doesnít love her at the same time. And thereís something so truthful in it, so realistic and honest. We often see dramatic ends to relationship in fiction, but the truth is most relationship ends without much drama. Itís just two people growing apart, two people that stopped loving each other somewhere along the way. And they hold on for a while, they try to convince themselves itíll work out, but in the end it doesnít.

I imagine (and it might be different from what you had in mind, but itís how I see it) Harry deep down knows he doesnít fully love Ginny anymore, but itís the safety of the relationship that makes him convince himself he does. But upon being asked directly about it, he realises that while he loves Ginny, he doesnít really love her (thatís sounds really strange, but hopefully you understand what I mean). He tries to avoid the problem, but when itís being said out loved he realises the truth.

I really like that Harry is describing/telling the story of their relationship to a therapist. We see it from his perspective, his attempts to save the one thing that canít be saved. Their moments become bittersweet, because you can see that in the moments that should be happy, Harry really isnít happy. And he feels always feels very distant, like heís there but not really there (I didnít even realise until right now that, that also fits with Schrodingerís Cat), and itís just the perfect way of describing what it must feel like to fight for a marriage that isnít working anymore.

I really love the style. I think Iíve said this in the other reviews Iíve left you, but Iíll repeat it again just so you still know it: I really like your writing. The best thing about it is really the emotions you convey. I always feel something after Iíve read anything of yours, sometimes itís heartache (like this one), sometimes I cry afterward, and most of the time I just feel like giving one or all of your characters a hug.

Anyway, I always try to come up with some CC, but Iím having a hard time finding anything to comment on. I just really like it the way it is right now, so I actually have no CC to give you. So instead Iím just going to say thanks for sharing the story, cause I really enjoyed reading it. Congratulations on your dobby nom, and good luck in the voting round!

Oh, and I almost forgot; have a very wonderful weekend!

- Lotte

Author's Response: Howdy Lotte! Sorry I'm so late but I finally made it!

That's especially true in your case because when I read this I felt almost universally: "she really 'gets it.' " First with the manner of the relationship ending - it was absolutely crucial to me and to the story that there be no outsized drama that has been unfortunately typical of fiction. That was crucial to me because I feel like it's more true-to-life in a lot of cases, which makes achieving closure and understanding so difficult. And obviously it was crucial to the story because that kind of ending, both sudden and difficult to comprehend, fueled the structure and analogy with Schrodinger's Cat.

Believe it or not you are the first person who seems to have actually picked up on Harry's distance and inability to be happy at every point he tries to salvage things (or at least the first who mentioned it in a review).

Thank you so much for the detailed review and the wonderful comments! I'm glad you enjoyed the story!


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Review #23, by LadyL8In Every Stitch: Eight

31st August 2015:
Hi Lizzie.

I've been trying to review all the dobby rec. one-shots, and I figured it was about time I reviewed this one since it's been on my list for a while now. And since the dobby rec. fun ends tonight, I had to sneak this one in as quickly as possible. So if the review is a little short, that's why.

I love this idea. We all know Molly knits sweaters and that some of the kids don't always like them, but we never really get to understand just why these sweaters mean so much to her - why does she make them over and over again? And I felt like you really put that simple action in a different perspective, and I loved the way you described what knitting these meant to her. And it's definitely believable.

I actually got goosebumps towards the end. Molly's sorrow over Harry not getting presents because his parents have passed away, turns into this worry/fear over what would've happened if she had been the one who was passed away. And her unconditional love for her family is so obvious and so beautiful, and I felt as if I could actually feel how much it pained her to here about Harry and how he had not gotten any christmas presents.

But most of all I feel as if I can feel her love for her family and Harry. They mean a lot to her, that much is clear. Every stitch is filled with motherly love, and it so reminds me of my home (only partly cause I'm crazy homesick right now).

My mother actually knits a lot, all the time actually, and when I moved away from home last year she actually knitted dolls of everyone in the family so I could have them with me to my new home in a new city (I live far from where I actually come from, so I don't see my family that often anymore). And I feel like she and Molly is very alike in the way that knitting means more to them than just putting something together - it's a way of showing how much they love their children. So you really got me to miss my mother, but that's okay cause I'm going home this Thursday so I'll see her soon.

What really makes this story one of my favourites (yes, I did favourite it), is the descriptions. It's just so beautifully written, but at the same time you really get across what Molly feels - her unconditional love for her children. And I just loved the idea and your writing as a whole. It's so beautiful and definitely my favourite story of yours. I definitely see why it was recommended, cause it's really good. Good job, Lizzie, and have a wonderful day!

Lots of Love

Lotte

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Review #24, by LadyL8Beautiful Mess: Beautiful Mess

31st August 2015:
H Frankie.

So I've been trying to finish the last of the reviews from the dobby rec. thread, because the fun's over tomorrow. And I thought it was about time I read this one, because I hadn't done so already, and I was so excited about it because it's been so long since I read something of yours. And I don't even remember the story I read, because it's been that long. But I do remember liking it, so my expectations were high.

And you more than lived up to them. This was such a cute story. As you probably know, short stories very often end up being really angsty, which is fine of course (I have one myself after all), but I just loved reading a short and sweet story. I really liked how you took Katie's challenge and wrote something so completely adorable. The story just brought the biggest smile to my face, and it reminded me so much of home (partly because I miss it like crazy right now).

I actually come from a big family, and it would not be surprising if what happened in this story had happened in our house. And mum would react exactly like Ginny does in this story, with a smile despite the mess, because she can't really be mad at any of us for very long. And I definitely found it to be believable that Ginny would be like that too.

I loved that this was just a story about family. There's so few stories that focus entirely on that, and I feel like that's a shame. It should be more, because family is such an important part of our lives. And I loved seeing the Potter family, and Ginny as a parent. And I'm glad you didn't make her just like her mother, because I don't think she would be. Some similarities, yes, but not completely like her.

And the scene in the bed is just so adorable. I just loved the whole thing really, which is why I'm struggling to come up with something to say right now. But I have to mention your descriptions. I liked how you used them to build up the story, like for example the footprints in the flour, and her following them and imagining what went on while she was away. And that it's so obvious the whole time that she sees the fun in it, she almost wishes she was there to see it herself, at least that's how I see it.

It's just a really good story, and I definitly understand why it's been recommended. I loved reading it, and it kind of made me miss home more, but that's okay. It just means you really captured the feeling of home and family. Good job, Frankie, and have a wonderful day!

Lots of Love

Lotte

Author's Response: Lotte,

This is the nicest, most thought out review I have ever gotten. It seriously warmed my heart! I am so sorry that it made you miss home but I am glad it pulled on your heart strings. I really like Ginny as a mom, I think she would have rocked it, and I think she is a bitter sweeter and more forgiving then people make her out to be.

This review really has made me all kinds of happy. I lam exteremely honored it was so thought out.

Frankie


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Review #25, by LadyL8Firewhiskey: Chapter 1

22nd August 2015:
Hello Kaitlin,

Iím trying to review all the dobby rec. fics and that led me right here to read yours. Iíve actually wanted to read it for a while, but I never got around to it cause Uniís been so stressful lately. But Iím excited to finally get to read it, cause it looks really good. And such an interesting couple as well, not at all two people you would think about putting together, so Iím excited to see how youíve done this/solved it.

Wow. This was so painful to read. Poor Charlie. Heís really struggling with the war, with everything he lost and everything he wishes he couldíve done differently. It was really painful to see how much it affected him, but so believable. Iíve been lucky enough to never be in a war myself, but I can only imagine how it affects a human being. I donít think thatís something you can really fully recover from, because youíve seen and maybe even done stuff that just changes you forever. And your portrayal of that feeling of loss, of regret and pain is so realistic if you ask me.

This was such was an original idea. I love that Poppy and Charlie bonded over his grief and her caring of him. Itís definitely believable that she would in my opinion. The whole thing is very awkward of course, because she is like god-knows-how-much older than him (but that doesnít necessarily means they couldnít be together though, cause thereís quite an age difference between my dad and his girlfriend as well). But more importantly because she was the school nurse/matron back when he was a student as well, which really makes it impossible not be awkward.

However, I think thereís something really beautiful there as well. I mean grief can change everything around, best friends becomes enemies and the other way around, familyís splits up, two people youíd never thought would bond can suddenly bond. Look at my auntís family for example. After her motherís death the entire family argued with each other about who was to blame for it, and since then no oneís really spoken to each other. And the way she looks after him, the way she understands him Ė itís really beautiful. I canít really see them as being a long-lasting thing, but I just love what they have.

This is really well written. Pairing two characters that never really interact much in the books is risky, because itís important that it doesnít come across as just two random people put together. You have to make it seem believable, to find a way they could possibly be involved. And you really did, Kaitlin. I love your style, your descriptions and characterisation. I definitely see why this story was recommended cause itís really good. Thanks for sharing.

Lots of Love

Lotte

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