Ahhh I love this so far! It has the beginnings of a really good Lily/James fanfic. Finally an accurate one! please write another chapter. im dying here.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, I try to make them as close to the books as possible. Next chapter will be submitted by tomorrow! Report Review
This story is quite entertaining and the reader feels a certain empathy with the characters. However, your spelling and grammar are terrible and the plotline is weak. The thought sequences in the heads of your characters are funny but strange. Overall I would give this story a 4/10.Author's Response: Uhm thank you, I suppose. I know everything you said is true but in my defense I wrote this when I was in fifth grade :/. I promise though I really have improved since writing it! I went back and read it recently and can't believe I was ever that terrible. Report Review
heeehee that's a really good opening...
although i wd have ended it with the "And now, you do too". But it was really good and sounds like the rest will be fun to read...Author's Response: Aw thank you!! I'm glad you think so. Report Review
i love the way you added your own unique plotline to this story (the confessionals) which made it feel like a proper book, not just a romance between lily and her friends and the marauders... what's your next story called???Author's Response: aw thank you! I'd wanted to try writing a fic for a while but I didn't want it to be cliche. I'm glad you liked it! My next story is called "If Wishes Were Fishes" :) You should check it out! It's another Lily/James, but like this one, I added some twists to the plotline :) Report Review
Aw that was so good! You shd really write a sequel... what's the prank they're planning? I loved the way all of her friends had proper personalities and I really cared about them, not just lily. plus holly was an amazing character. i loved all your chapter images/confessions. how do you get chapter images/banners for a story??? cos im trying to write one...Author's Response: aw thank you! I do really love all the characters in this story (yes, even holly in her own twisted way. It's so satisfying to write a truly evil character haha).
And I actually make all my own images, but you can go to The Dark Arts site to request banners and chapter images. It's super easy to request one :)
Thanks so much for reading! Glad you liked it! Report Review
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