Ah great chapter! Poor Kaitlin...that George is a disgrace to the name George! He should be burnt alive for not respecting his name and being amazing like the real George- George Weasley. Oh my god 'How much more will you take James for I have nothing left to give'! That is the most emotional, sad, amazing line ever. I just can't express in words how much that made me want to cry it's just so... ugh I can't even explain it and I'm sure if I'd tried I'd start rambling and getting all mushy so I'm just going to hope you understand what I'm trying to say! This chapter was brilliant...James was so obviously jealous! He needs to start realising how perfect Kaitlin is for him! (and yes I know if you did that the story would be over but this is frustrating you know! All I want is for Kaitlin to get the fairytale ending she deserves) Anyways I don't want to stay here and go on and on about how great this chapter was for too long because I want to keep reading so see you at the end of the next chapter! Excellent chapter! Really good work! Jenna :)Author's Response: Ha I know, I obviously picked the wrong name for that character, how could I badmouth the name George! :O it's a scandel.
You know, I think I actually said that line myself once, I think it's a good line as well.
Ofc James is jealous, he's an idiot :)
Glad you enjoyed the chapter
~Zyii Report Review
Brilliant chapter as usual! Hmm still not sure about this Berry character...do you not like me? Why is Berry an evil little witch (or a word that rhymes with witch if you know what I'm saying.) Aw Fred and George are hilarious the way they talk to each other you can really feel how close they are in this chapter which is really nice! I have to say I seriously respect Hermione now! I mean she hasn't gone mad, crazy jealous which would just be annoying but she's got a hold on her man and she's not messing around at all. This chapter was great and it's proved to only make me love the story more. Amazing story, you know I love it by now but hey why not remind you, right? I love the story! Keep up the excellent work! I cannot wait to read on! Pretty, pretty please update soon! Jenna :)
ps. Please check out the latest chapters of A Building Love if you ever have some spare time!Author's Response: haha Jenna thank you again for the most appreciated comment and no i have nothing against Berry or you in fact Berry is very important she may not be nice right now but you must remember Fred and George were like Draco to Hermione only less cruel they picked on her and years of that plus heart break has made her try and take control of her life. and im glad you liked this chapter i wasnt to sure of it at first i was kinda in a rush but i will make it up in the next chapter and i loved you story btw! really good
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Ok firstly I hate you- please don't be offended or get me wrong I loved this but I do hate you- HOW CAN FRED BE DEAD?! It's not fair! I know J.K did it first but come on Fred is one of the best characters ever it's not fair that in all these stories he dies or is dead! *Throws child like tantrum* Ok sorry I'm back and ready to give a proper review...here we go...
This was brilliant! I have to tell you that I NEVER (and I mean never as in not ever) read stories where Fred is dead because it makes me too sad and I have convinced myself Fred never died and Percy did instead so I'd generally avoid fanfictions like this one. But since you were kind enough to leave a review on my story (thank you for that by the way) I thought I would at least give this a shot and let me tell you now I am more than glad I did! This, despite the sadness, was cute, sweet, romantic and it flowed really well! Clearly you're a practiced writer and you've obviously got a lot of talent which shows in the story! I love that you haven't taken the typical route and acted like everything is okay just because you have a girlfriend or boyfriend but you've shown the importance of other characters and you've brought it into the story to make it even better! This was amazing and I've really enjoyed it even though Fred is dead which is proof in itself that this must've been excellent! Fantastic work with this story and I can't wait to look into some more of your work! Well done! Jenna :)
ps. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing my story and I hope you continue to read and enjoy it!Author's Response: Thanks Jenna :) I'm glad you enjoyed it. I actually wrote it for a competition on a page on facebook. I loved it so much that I put it on here.
I have to tell you that I am in love with your story (although I'm kind of hating Ginny right now). I can't wait to read more. It's really amazing :)
I hope you'll check out my other story and you'll let me know what you think.
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Yes this chapter most definitely does work! As did the six before that! I have to finish an essay but I swear I will leave you a better review tomorrow! Loving this so far please keep writing!
Jenna :) xAuthor's Response: Oh gosh, any review is a good one. Unless it's flaming D; then it makes me sad lol. Oh good. I always wondered what would become of this story because its out of my comfort range for usual pairings. It's a challenge. I'm glad it works tho
~Zyii x Report Review
Ahh! I love it! I love it! I LOVE IT! I love it too much! It is so not healthy for me to be this in love with words on my computer screen but yet here we are! May I marry this story? It's just great! What can I say? Okay let's start with...that was amazing! 17 chapters in counting and I'm still hooked and completely in love which you probably guessed from the beginning of this review! Hermione and Fred are the sweetest couple ever and this was the sweetest chapter ever! I can't even put into words how much I loved this! I literally 'aw'ed all the way through! This made me laugh so much so let's have an overview... funny+ cute+ Fremione= an extremely happy Jenna who cannot wait to read on and will offer you cookies and cake in exchange for a super quick update so I can have a new chapter to read! Brilliant work with the story so far! Please update soon! I can't wait to read more! Keep up the excellent work! Jenna :)
ps. in case you didn't gather it from the rest of my review I'll tell you one last time...I LOVE THIS STORY!Author's Response: haha im really glad you liked it but if you must i give you my blessings if you want to marry it that badly. i hope to update soon and hope this was to your approval but be prepared this isnt the end yet.
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Oh my J.K Rowling! *Gasps* *Sighs* *Cries* *Smiles* In the words of Ron Weasley THAT WAS BLOODY BRILLIANT! Hermione and Fred kissed lalala! Now I can be happy for the rest of my life :)! This chapter, much like the rest of the story, is amazing! After all of that he choses now to find the key? Really? Oh well! At least they kissed so they can be together now, right? Please say yes! I loved how this chapter flowed! He kisses her forehead, she kisses his cheek and then they kiss! It's just so cute and sweet! This was excellent! I can't wait to read more so your computer better start cooperating otherwise he's going to have to answer to me! Amazing chapter! Keep up the fantastic work! Jenna :)
ps. If you ever has some spare time I'd really appreciate you reading the more recent chapters of A Building Love!Author's Response: Haha I'm glad you liked it Jenna! But be prepared theres more to come!.*Mysteriously fades into the dark*
p.s. of course ill read it! Report Review
Wow...that was...interesting? Surprising? Unexpected? TOTALLY AMAZING!!! I could really feel the awkwardness in the beginning of the chapter whilst they were with Malfoy and then I could really feel Hermione's pain and desperation towards the end of it! This was really well witten and in this chapter especially your talent when it comes to writing was very clear and obvious! You always have a new twist or piece of information to introduce in every chapter and I really am captured by this story and where you're taking it! I love the drama in this story and you make it interesting without following the clichéd route and none of it is the predictable type of story which are taking over the world of fanfiction! I can't wait to see how Fred comforts and supports Hermione! I'm so in love with this story and cannot wait to read more! Brilliant work so far! Keep it up! Jenna :)
ps. If you ever get a chance I've posted some more chapters of A Building Love and it would be great to hear from you! Thanks!Author's Response: thanks so much Jenna! im really glad you liked it i was really worried cause it was such a quick chapter and i only had a few minutes before i had to leave to finish up the chapt so i was worried it wasnt gonna be as good but im glad to hear you liked it. i will most definetly read you amazing chapters of A Building Love!
Mischievieously yours ,
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Um, hello?! What the hell is going on between Hermione and Malfoy?! Please say nothing! Let's just say they're surprised to see each other. That's it, right? Please don't tell me they have a history! Not when we're so close to Fremione!
Have you and your computer fallen out? If you have tell him to stop being so mean and that your dedicated and not-so-healthily obsessed reader, Jenna cannot wait this long without reading more of this amazing story! Alright you already know I love this so there's not much of a point in me telling you again but just incase you've forgotten...I LOVE this story and your writing! As always you've got me eagerly awaiting the next chapter and by the way you're lucky I haven't sent you death threats! I'm addicted to this, it's like my drug you can't take it away from me! Anyways this was brilliant as usual and I can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the excellent work! Jenna :)Author's Response: Haha Jenna you amuse me as always but dont worry Hermione and Draco have no history im just playing around with things from the movie. and yes me and my computer are still very much in disagreement with each other we are even on the verge of divorce but ill keep writing i promise haha its just been a lot i guess he doesnt like my affair with the school work and charity haha. but my computer will get over it anyway thanks so much for reading and keep doing so!
Mischieviously yours forever,
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Aw thanks for the shout out Lyss! Great chapter! I thought, just from the first chapter, that this story has a lot of potential and now just two chapters in I can confirm that it's true! You're clearly very skilled with your writing and it shows! I love how Harry and Ron are so protective of Hermione but they also know that George likes her! Really well done so far with the story! Keep up the brilliant work! I already love this! Please update soon because I can't wait to read on! Jenna :)Author's Response: heyy thanks 4 being there 4 all the chapters and i promise that the next chapter will be out soon enough.
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Yes you should at least make it a short story! This was truly amazing! I loved it! Hermione/Fred or George is my favourite non-canon pairing so naturally I've read tons of fanfictions about them but this is honestly one of the best! I just can't express in words how good this was! It's such a unique, interesting plot and you've got the characters perfect! Why can't I have a Fred or George Weasley? Life is so unfair...lol! Anyways brilliant chapter and I really hope you do continue because I'm desperate to read on and find out what happens next! You're a very talented author clearly and I'm seriously impressed by the skill and confidence you write with! You should be so proud. Just between us...WHAT'S YOUR SECRET?! This is the most creative and simply excellent start to a story! Fantastic work so far and I hope you add a new chapter soon! Keep it up! Jenna :)
ps. I know you've read some of my story 'A Building Love' but please if you ever get the chance I'm still writing it so there might be some more recent chapters you haven't read yet! Anyways really well done for this!Author's Response: Yes, I have read some and I loved it. I will check it out again!! I don't think I have a secret. Like you said, it's the confidence to write. I try to hink of every feeling and emotion and try to keep an element of mystery in every fic mostly. I am so happy that you love the story and I will definitely make it a short story now. Just need to figure out which of the twins it is . Report Review
This was great! The bloody hell part where his dad warns him about his language was so funny and it totally reminds me of myself from when I was younger...I'm still trying to convince my dad that 'bloody hell' isn't a really rude phrase! lol! I think the plot clearly holds a lot of potential and it's also an original idea so very well done for that! I know from experience that the first chapter is the hardest but you seem very confident in your writing and it shows! You've already managed to set yourself some really high standards but I'm sure you'll continue to exceed expectations as the story develops! It seems you've perfected this and you've got everything down! Interesting characters, an unique plot and an overall fantastic start to the story! I'm looking forward to reading more of this in the future and am curious as to where you'll take this! Excellent work so far! Keep it up! Update soon! Jenna :)
ps. Thanks for reading and reviewing my story! Hope you continue to enjoy it! Report Review
Great start to what I'm sure will be a great story! I can already see a lot of potential in this story and it's obvious that you've got a lot of talent when it comes to writing! I really hope you're proud of this because I know from experience that the first chapter is the hardest but you really have perfected it. I absolutely love the pairing which you can probably tell since you read my story! This chapter was brilliant: The characters, the plot and everything else has really pulled together and on a whole it worked and flowed really well! Fantastic work so far and I'm really looking forward to reading more of this story in the near future! This is the first chapter and you've already set yourself some really high standards and I hope you can stick to them because I'm already hooked on this story! Update soon! Great job on this! Jenna :)
ps. Thanks for the review on my story! I really am touched that I'm what inspired you to write this!Author's Response: Dear Jenna,
i know it has taken me forever to reply but i am now, so ,thanks for the review and it was greatly appreciated. Report Review
This was quite simply HILARIOUS! George's insinuations were the funniest! Then the way he's all casual and he just slips in dinner with Berry! That was very funny! I can't wait to read about dinner! Fred is so sweet, the way he cares for Hermione is so cute and it's really nice that the story really lets you in on his feelings because in a lot of stories it seems the girls are the only ones with real emotions so this is really refreshing! As you know by now I love the story! It's funny and sweet and I honestly can't get enough! You're actually distracting me from my studies which may be a bad thing but what can I say...? I'm hooked on this! You are a seriously talented author and I hope you're proud of your work! Please update soon because I'm not a really patient person (seriously I'm seeking professional help for it) ;)! Keep up the excellent work! Jenna :)
ps. please check out the new chapter on my story if you ever have some spare time!Author's Response: as always jenna you are just as refreshing haha you are seriously my favorite reader and i will definetly see the next chapter of your story im so glad you liked this chapter i was afraid some might not like it because of how simple it was but im afraid im sick right now and my heads just not in the game but i will update asap thank you as always
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Oh my Godric Gryffindor...everytime I think I might know what's going on in the story you add yet another amazing, unbelievable twist and I am left desperately awaiting an update! In other words you did exactly what you should do if you're looking to write a brilliant fanfiction! Lucy you never disappoint and chapter after chapter always lives up to expectations which is quite incredible because from chapter one you set some seriously high standards! I loved this chapter and even though I know it's not Hermione's fault I feel so bad for George...he must've felt horrible! :(! I hope he hasn't run off and done something stupid though! Even worse poor Hermione! She can't give birth yet! But I mean I know that no matter what you'll come up with something excellent! Alright so 10/10 for this chapter and 11/10 for the fantastic writer! Really well done Lucy! Keep up the great work! Jenna :) x
ps. Next few chapters of 'A Building Love' are up if you don't mind checking it out because you know I always love to hear from you! Thanks! :)Author's Response: Thank you Jenna! Your reviews always inspire me to carry on and it means a lot to me that you say that!
Poor everybody! It's hopefully going to get better for everybody soon ;) :) Thank you once again Jenna! :) Lucy x
P.S. Of course I'll check them out! I would have sooner but my computer isn't working well at the moment with the internet and stuff so I couldn't get on but it's sorted now! I can't wait to read it. :) Report Review
Aw poor Georgie...I feel so bad for him. :(...'After all these years does fate find this funny?' That is like the best line I've ever read in a fanfiction! He's so sweet...does he still love her? Or does he still love me, should I say? *Light bulb above head switches on* Do Berry (or I) and George end up together? *Hopeful sigh*...But hey you're the genius and I trust you've got another amazing twist to come in the story! Anyways I just got totally sidetracked so this chapter...
Another brilliantly amazing chapter which once more has me desperate to read on! I love the Fremione moments in this chapter! They are just such a sweet couple and this is one of the few stories to make me 'aw' since I'm not usually a 'that's really cute' sort of girl! Usually I'd say it's just a soft spot for the pairing which whilst true to be honest I think the pairing combined with your writing has proved to be the perfect recipe for a fantastic fanfiction! You are such a talented writer and I'm so in love with the story! I cannot wait to read on! Keep up the great work! Jenna :)Author's Response: Thank yo soo much Jenna im really truly happy you think so highly of my book it makes me feel very giddy and proud haha! i am so glad i didnt disappoint you! please do keep reading on and i promise i will make this story the greatest it can be.
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Aww...that was the strangest and sweetest moment ever!!! *Sing-song voice* Fred loves Hermione la la la...*Clears throat* Sorry about that and on with the review...Amazing chapter and I'm desperate to read on so I'm going to beg of you please, Please, PLEASE update soon! I love this story! Fred got very jealous, very quickly...poor George! And I love loopy Hermione she says everything sane Hermione should but doesn't! This really was excellent and I don't think you quite understand how brilliant this was so seriously very well done! Keep up the fantastic work and I will be not-so-patiently awaiting the next chapter! Jenna :)Author's Response: aww flattered realy i am Jenna haha! your too sweet to me i hope you really did love this chapter cause i felt it wasnt as good as it could have been but we were nearly 12 chapters in and accidents have occurred but their feelings seem to be delaid ya know!? anyway keep reading!
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Brilliant chapter! But um...Why am I Berry?! I thought you liked me...? :( No I'm just joking I'm sure I become less horrible as the story goes on! Oh my Godric Gryffindor that's completelty mental! I know it's the wrong twin but aww I actually really liked the kiss between George and Hermione! I thought it was really funny and I can't wait for Fred's reaction! Great chapter! Funny, cute, clever and VERY surprising! Keep up the excellent work! You are an amazing writer and as always there's nothing to suggest or improve! Jenna :)
ps. If you ever have some spare time please read the latest chapter of my story because I really enjoy hearing from you! Thanks! :)Author's Response: Jenna you never fail to bring a smile to my face thank you and i would love to read the latest chapter i absolutley love your writing thank you also for enjoying mine!! ^^
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Oh I'm so with Hermione! Fred and George were my first crushes too! But sorry this isn't about me. I think this chapter was really cute, sweet, funny and it was quite simply perfect. You're doing really well with the characters and your writing flows really well so there's clearly a lot of talent there! Excellent work so far with the story! Keep it up! Jenna :) xAuthor's Response: OMG Thank you!!! All of these reviews mean so much, and I cannot say thanks enough!!! I'm with you on the Fred and George crush - they're just so adorable! Kirsty xx Report Review
Wow! Another amazing chapter, I still don't understand how you do it: you just make every chapter so perfect that it's unbelievable. Sorry to hear your computer is suicidal...:( I don't see why he would be when he gets to have such great stories typed up on him!!! I suddenly feel a strong hatred for Berry she better not get in the way of Fremione because regardless of her being a fictional character I will hunt her down and kill her. ;)! In this chapter I think it was really nice that you got to see more of Hermione and Fred's feelings towards each other and you can see something developing there so really well done for being able to write it but make it...discrete...? (is that the right word?)...because it shows that they are going through the stages of falling for each other. I loved this chapter, I love the story and I love your writing style! Excellent work! Keep it up! Jenna :)Author's Response: ill be honest with you the character Berry is gonna be you so i couldnt help but laugh when you said you were gonna hunt her down haha i'd give you more details but i think you will like the story the more it developes you seem to prefere seeing for yourself then hearing how it ends so i hope you wont hate me so much and you keep enjoying the story ^^ and thanks!!!
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Use me in your story...? Hmm...now I'm extremely curious! Of course you can use me in the story! I'm actually flattered by that! Thanks a million! Jenna :)
ps. Amazing story!!!Author's Response: YAY thanks so much!
of course yours,
Another amazing chapter Lucy! I honestly don't know how you do it- it's just constant brilliance! I loved this chapter even without the usual drama it was just really nice for them to be a couple! You know already that I love this story and your writing style but I do always feel a need to remind you because we wouldn't want you to doubt your own talent! The story is just getting beter and better and as usual I will be waiting for an update! Enjoy your holiday and if you're already on holiday I hope you're having fun! Amazing chapter and an amazing author! Jenna :) x
ps. Next few chapters of A Building Love are up if you could check them out when you get a chance.Author's Response: Thank you Jenna! :) I'm back now and I had a great time. :3 All your reviews mean so much to me so thank you so much! :3 And I'll check it out in a few moments, I can't wait to read the next chapters! :D Lucy :) x Report Review
This is looking really good so far. I cannot wait to read more! Your writing is perfect and so are the characters! Well done! You're doing great so far! Keep up the excellent work! Jenna :)Author's Response: Thank you! x Report Review
Oh my J.K Rowling! Another amazing chapter! Is it even possible to just have chapter after chapter of pure brilliance? Well clearly it is because you seem to be managing it just fine! As usual you have created a cute, funny chapter that I simply can't help but love! This is one of my favourite stories and I'm completely hooked on it, I love this more than I should love words on my computer screen! lol! You're writing has progressed over the chapters- not that it had anything to prove on but I can still see the different aspects of your work strengthening. You're very talented which is obvious in your work and how you can draw the reader into the story. Excellent work! This isn't really the last chapter right? Because if it is I will have a freak attack!!! Anyways you have maintained the incredibly high standards you set with the first chapter and have even managed to beat them! You should be really proud and happy with your work! Fantastic story and a even more fantastic author! Keep it up! Jenna :)Author's Response: oh Jenna you amuse me haha your so funny and cute thank you for the comment and im glad you enjoy my story you always bring a smile to my face thank you so much!!! and i must say im very flattered by your compliments thank you i will definetly try my best to make each chapter bloom to its great potential thank you ^^
Great chapter! The story is sounding really good so far and holds a lot of potential. Your writing is perfect and there is nothing for me to suggest or improve so it's obvious you're very talented when it comes to writing! You have the characters down and I can't wait to read on! I have to admit I'm quite excited and curious to see where you take the story and what you have planned for it! Fantastic work so far! Keep it up! Jenna :)
ps. If you ever have a chance could you perhaps check out my story? It's called 'A Building Love' and it's a George/Hermione. Thanks!Author's Response: Wow - Thanks!!! I've got the entire story planned out in my head - I hope I can continue to write well! I'll definitely check out your story - anything with the twins and Hermione is a winner in my book!!! Kirsty xx Report Review
Great chapter! I can't wait to read more! I love how this sort of sets up the rest of the story and introduces the characters and it's made me very eager to read on. It's only the first chapter and I think I'm hooked on the story so I will be waiting for an update! Fantastic job with the chapter: it's well written and I have nothing to suggest or improve! I love Neville as a character and he doesn't really get much limelight in a lot of fanfictions so I like that you've made him a bigger part of the story! Also if you wouldn't mind checking out my story which I'm currently writing on the site? It's called A Building Love and it's a George/Hermione and I'd really appreciate your opinion! Anyways like I said excellent work so far and I'm looking forward to future chapters! This story shows a lot of potential and you're clearly a very talented writer! Keep up the great work! Jenna :)
ps. I love Fremione too. ;) Report Review
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