Woweee cute x a billion! Did her eyes turn out green? Was it a boy this time? Sorry for the rubbish review, I absolutely loved this story!Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Her eyes did turn out green, and no, the baby was another girl (Isobel Freya Potter, simply because I have all these details and I have no idea where I'm going to use them) but they do end up having a number of kids, including boys :) Thanks for all the reviews! Report Review
Again, lovely chapter. It's nice to see that she can carry on her life - can we have a snippit of her column?Author's Response: Ooh, that's a good idea - it might come out in a one-shot focused on them, or in the novella I'm planning with Emilia :) Report Review
Ah she's so cute! I think I forgot to say how much I loved the name too - it's the classics nerd in me! And good for James hanging in there. Brill chappie :)Author's Response: YAY FOR CLASSICS NERDS. -HIGH FIVE-
James is a pretty cool guy. Glad you like him :P Report Review
Great chapter, cute way of getting them together! I'm afraid reviews will be super short in the foreseeable as am travelling, but it's really nice to have your stories to read as I have no space for books!Author's Response: Thanks, glad you enjoyed it! That's quite all right, and I'm flattered that you think my writing's an acceptable substitute for books :) Have fun travelling! Report Review
I'm a fan of your "naive Nadias" and "Nosy Nigels!"
Hah, I just can't imagine Rose, with her ticking biological clock, shacked up with Scorpius and 2.1 kids. It would just be... weird.
I love your characterisation of Audrey - just the little things that say so much (calling someone petal? really?).
And happy birthday dear stor-e
Happy birthday to you!Author's Response: Thank you very much for the fabulous review :) My biology teacher always used to call me a "negative ninny" in class because I was so moan-y all the time haha, so I think I've used that one somewhere in the story and it's sort of caught on and become a habit.
Thanks so much! Report Review
The first bit is definitely how I'd feel, I think - really, really not wanting it to happen.
Cassia's such a believable character like that - or at least reacts (some of the time) like I would...
Glad to see some banter from the grown-ups, and sneaky mention of NZ there as well!
I enjoyed her list of what's going wrong in thw world too, which might not be the typical thing to enjoy in a chapter, but it made me laugh.
(These reviews have so little actual substance to them, but I just really like you stories, ok? They're fun, and don't really need me going, 'ah, well, perhaps you should vary your sentence length a bit more'. You don't btw, it was just the first thing that came into my head. So, yeah, sorry about that if you wanted constructive criticism. I'll just fangirl instead.)Author's Response: Yay for believable characters! *does happy dance*
You can't have Athena Rutherford and NOT have banter. She is way too awesomesauce for that. I love her. She rocks.
Hey, I enjoyed writing that bit too :P Especially the Galleon being really high against the Drachma - I love Cassia and her irrelevance.
Fangirling is fine. Fangirling is more than fine. Fangirling makes me super happy and makes the world full of sunshine and daisies and candy floss. (late nights and waiting for exam results are making me a bit loopy, it seems...) Please, continue to fangirl all you want :) Report Review
You'll be getting sick of my reviews in a bit. Such speedy updating!
Great chapter, nice to see everything progessing apace.
Your characters seem to go in for unplanned pregnancies, don't they - Artemis as well?!
Loved the last line as well :)Author's Response: I WILL NEVER GET SICK OF YOUR REVIEWS.
Trust me :P
Updates are pretty speedy at the moment, aren't they? :P I blame that on wanting to do anything to take my mind off my impending exam results, the mountains of snow outside, and the fact that I'm not writing the sequel for Southern Cross until this is done :P
Yeah...unplanned pregnancies tend to happen a lot to this particular family...at least Artemis was out of school/not at war...
Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the review! Report Review
What a good chapter. It was really nice seeing a couple of other of your characters pop up!
Poor Lucy, I hope she gets to see Hilarion again. Loved the Cyrano de Bergerac idea, and as for a completely different kettle of fish, also grinned at the Bridget Jones reference. Kudos for getting references to two such different things into the same chapter!Author's Response: Yes! I love more Weasleys. Always a positive thing. Adding more Weasley/Potter cousins to the mix never goes amiss.
Poor Lucy - but she'll hang in there. I had fun throwing in a Bridget Jones bit. Gotta love those books. And I've always loved Cyrano, so I'm really having fun with this idea. It won't go exactly as that play's plot does, of course, but it's definitely inspired by it! Thank you for reviewing! Report Review
Oh, look, another chapter...oh look, another chapter that makes me giggle and grin with fondness for Scorpius and Lucy and their relationship...
"It's already dirty enough" Brilliant line.
psychogeography - sounds far more interesting than either psychology or geography. I'd have far rather done that back in the mists of time than geography.
Oh, Maty-Sue and her fluttering eyelashes. Has she not realised yet that there is no place in one of your stories for someone with poise?Author's Response: Hee, thank you! Psychogeography is what happens when you study geography in a locked room for ten hours solid and then end up smashing a window out of frustration. Not that I've ever experienced that; I gave up geography way back in third year, although I did have a lot of fun with the dioramas. My lego shanty town was a masterpiece.
There is no place in these stories for poise full stop. These stories are grubby and awkward and slightly hipster. Poise is maaainstream, man.
Thanks for the review! :D ♥
Greta chapter - the plot thickens even further...
The cast of characters you have are great, I really like how you have developed the next gens.
Write more soon! Report Review
Wow. What a monster chapter - so many emotions!
I have to say that aggy has been a bit, ahem, self absorbed recently. If only for the sake of a good story, James needed to tell her off. But poor Aggy, all the same. I have a teeny suspicion that she's a bit upset... Report Review
I'm not sure there's anything I can say that you don't already know - or at least /should/ know. You have:
Interesting, believable characters
Great, witty dialogue
Little, snarky lines I love (Firenze's class statistics)
Some mystery as to where this is going (I was not expecting Lily!)
And just, overally (which is now a word. Or should be), fantastic writing!Author's Response: Oh lawdy, this review. -blush- I am super duper flattered and honored and happy to hear all of this, since they are all very good things and things I strive to achieve and am ecstatic to reach! So overally (I agree, this should be a word), thank you and I hope you continue to enjoy! Report Review
Gah I was not expecting it to finish in this chapter. There I was, merrily chugging along, laughing at Adelaide, when, wham, bam - done. I only found this story a few weeks ago, but I'm so pleased she got such a nice ending - although I will be on a look out for a sequel.
Henry's so cute. I want one.
And also - is she mental? Flying? I'v done it twice and I'm not a fan. Yeah I get the whole muggle thing...but still. She can still use magic to travel!Author's Response: I know, it was a bit abrupt...I feel like I should have given you more warning :P
The sequel should be out soonish...I'm tentatively saying early February, so keep a look out for it!
I kinda want a Henry too. Just sayin'.
Hey now, flying's fun! Well, airports are fun. Sitting on the plane for hours and hours isn't...But that's another author-is-overseas-and-is-really-looking-forward-to-landing-in-Auckland-Airport-when-she-comes-home-so-let's-make-Adelaide-do-that-too moments :P
Thanks for reading! Report Review
I really liked this chapter. I think it worked really well in the two halves, seeing how both of them were going about their own preparations etc.
I loved Sirius' reaction at the end - so in character! And I also like how the Marauders are not supermen - they have trouble with the level of spells involved too. Good mention of Peter being good at Occulmency!
I sense tension ahead for Lily and Petunia in a flat together in London...Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I can't even tell you how nice it is to hear that you liked the chapter. I was kind of petrified after updating, thinking that my worst fears were going to be confirmed, but--yay, you liked it!
I'm glad you appreciated the Marauders not being supermen, to use your words. I always try to keep their age in perspective--they're really only teenagers, after all, so it would be unrealistic to have them be good at everything right away. I thought having some skill at Occlumency only fit with the Peter I've written so far, and the Peter we all know is coming...
Thank you so, SO much for the review! It means a lot. Report Review
Throughout the first half of this, I was going "OH MY GOD NO LILY YOU IDIOT GIRL WHAT ARE YOU DOING" more or less on repeat.
Poor James - I would sympathise with him on this!
And Sirius had some wise words too - their characters and voices are all so well defined, I think you do that so well. I definitely wouldn't have enough self control not to scream!
Great chapter, thanks for the update!Author's Response: Heheh, I think its fair to say James has quite a valid point this time... but, ah, what can we do? Lily is just a bit of a fool. She can't help it.
Thank you so very much for this lovely review :D
-AC Report Review
I'm so pleased Rose's life is going well. I feel, however, that because it's going so well, something is going to go wrong, which worries me. I want her to have a happy ever after with Tom! Report Review
Lucky Adelaide - at least she's in a country that is obsessed by Rugby for the World Cup. RUGBY DOESN'T EXIST IN BRAZIL.
I saw not one single match, I was so upset.
Trying to explain it to Brazilians: "umm, it's like American Football, but for real men..."
You get the atmosphere exactly right, and their kiss was brilliant! Loved Henry's cheesy line too.
And another coincidence (I'm practically Addie over here) - I made a mango pavlova here the other day. Apart from double cream doesn't really exist either. But oh well, I liked it!Author's Response: Oh believe me, I was bemoaning my country's obsession with rugby all during the World Cup - until the final three games NZ played in, when I joined in with cheering and yelling as loud as anyone else in the country :P
"It's like American Football, but for real men." That is honestly the best comment I've ever heard in a review. Go you.
YOU HAD A PAV. I AM SO JELLY. I can't even remember the last time I had one. Le sigh...
Thanks for the review! Report Review
Oh, no, another homesicky chapter! At least it's not too homesicky. I love all the detail you've put in; it must have taken a long time to think up.
this bit in particular stood up: 'But towards the end of last year everyone in seventh year started to be civil to each other, if not friendly.'
I found that exactly the same, and I'm really glad Amethyst and Lily and making friends.
(Oh, and my New Year's resolution was to review every chapter I read, so that's why you'll get loads from me!)Author's Response: I actually wrote this chapter a while ago - it didn't occur to me that Lily's homesickness in this story coincided with Adelaide's in Southern Cross :P
I found exactly the same thing in my last year of school as well - you started talking to people you don't normally talk to and all that jazz, so that sort of opened the way for Lily and Amethyst's friendship. And yay for that New Years resolution! Go you (and I'm super pleased if that means more review for me :P) Thanks for the review and I'm glad you're enjoying it! Report Review
A Mary-Sue has arrived! And already, she's annoyingly perfect in every way - hmmm, tricky to decide whether she or Rose are worse. Maybe I should give her a chance...but then again, maybe not.
Nice sappy moment with Scorpius and being in love, made me go ah.
I love your puns and jokes; Cameraderie, and meeting the kids in a dark alley (I always say that but thankfully have not yet met a troupe of egrets in a small Scottish town at nightfall, in said dark alley. Only a matter of time though.)
Honestly, though, the inhabitants of New New Elgin are well weird, as one might say... I could just imagine them with their faces pressed to the glass!
Do I get a hint of personal experience: 'I'd probably have covered it up with a newspaper if I'd been on the train or something.'?? How many Quidditch smut novels have you read on the tube? Oh wait, you read HP fanfiction ;)
Oh, and poor innocent Lucy - writing /smut/! How can she stoop to that level?!Author's Response: If you think Rose and Mary Sue are bad, think of a combination of the two...the world might end. It'd be like typing google into google.
Puns are my lifeblood. I honestly spent a full half hour yesterday coming up with fish-related puns (I was with friends, don't worry, it's not like I sit curled up in a darkened room coming up with puns, although the latter does seem far more likely).
Haha! Oh yes. Never had a chance to read fanfic on the tube, but I better make that a life goal.
Poor wee Lucy indeed. Glad you liked it, and thanks for the review! ♥ Report Review
To start with, I was saying this to myself at this line:
"Yeah, yeah, and I'm the daughter of the girl who rejected him."
And then, what do I know, but she totally floored Scorpius - until he bounced back. Ahh well. I am intrigued by the mention of Bea's dad - yay for quick updating, long may it continue!
I just adored every bit of this chapter, but I'm in a rush so can't tell you all the bits I did...Author's Response: I was worried but also so so excited for everyone and their volatility this chapter 8D And I'm glad you caught those bits on her Dad. It doesn't really come up until later, but I wanted to slip some things in.
Thank you so much! ^__^ Report Review
Flitwick makes me giggle so much - how he's sharp in head, gasps in surprise at thing he already knows... love him so much!
You get Percy just right - the italics used on /in cahoots/ is just spot on!
And Cedric's speech - I can just imagine him reciting it - if it were me, I'd probably forget what I was supposed to say half way through or summat. Kudos to ghost Cedric!
oh, and Hugo calling Neville and Scorpius for company and because he can't have an adventure without them... baw so cute!
Once moe, a brill chapter!Author's Response: Hahah thank you! I love Flitwick, he's turned into more of his own character and less of my ideas as I've written him more. I'm admittedly making him an exaggeration of the potential for silliness we saw in the books, so I'm glad it's not bothersome. I think a lot of the characters in this story are a kind of exaggeration, so maybe that's why it works.
I love the phrase /in cahoots./ I can just imagine Percy saying it in disgust. Percy's so cute, he thinks he's this big shot and really he's just the nerdy prefect he's always been :))
I would also forget halfway through! I should have given him ghost note cards or something. But I don't know, maybe you get smarter as a ghost! It could happen, they've invented ghost /food/ after all ;)
I had to bring the trio back together and I've had this scene in mind since I started /planning/ this novel. Hugo is wholly dedicated to the integrity of his little rag-tag team :)
Thank you so much for the review, I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far!
- lily Report Review
This is so lovely :) Angelina is such a nice character, and you get the relationships between the girls perfectly. Poor George, he was always the quieter twin, wasn't he?
You write from Angelina's point of view in third person really really well, as the reader gets to know exactly what you want them to know, with dropped hints and all (that sentence doesn't make much sense but I hope you can understand it!)
My one nitpicking point that is so irritatingly painstaking that I shouldn't really bother to post it, is that, in common with most British schools, they don't have exams at the end of the winter term, usually.
I love Georgelina stories, so I'm so glad you are writing this one so beautifully, and I think the alternating characters and alternating time works really well.
Update soon please!Author's Response: Hello!
Thank you so much for your review. I love random unsolicited reviews, and am always pleasantly surprised to see them when you leave them. pahaha. I'm definitely not british, and so had no idea that there were no winter exams, but I think it's a small enough detail to keep from detracting from the story.
I'm thrilled you are a georgelina fan and hope that you continue reading along as their stories continue to unfold.
So cute! You do such a good job in all your stories of getting a child's voice across. I am in awe.
The only sentence I thought was a little off was 'But I think the rabbit might have a better home with you.' I don't know, it just sounds a tiny bit adult.
But that's me being really pendantic and annoying, so ignore me :)
I wonder who is next... are you going to do any characters outside of Hogwarts era, if you know what I mean? Or just ones we know quite well?
Either way, can't wait for more!Author's Response: Thank you so much -- I try very hard to write in a sort of childlike voice, but of course to still make sense, so I really appreciate the compliment! :3
This collection is purely for the Hogwarts-era characters, those around Harry's own age, roughly. I'm not sure who's next myself, but I hope I'll see you back for the third chapter! Thank you so much for reviewing! Report Review
My New Year's resolution is to review everything I read - so you will get a lot from me because I love your writing :)
My first thought on this was that they are so nearly actually starving artists, if the biscuits have run out!
Loved all the action references and Tarquin's melodramaticness, and Obscure Henry's militaryness and Lucy being a femme fatale - wow!
But it's reassuring to know that it was water based paint, and no one was seriously harmed in the making of this fic...Author's Response: Good resolution ;D I wish I could do that. I always read things and forget to review, then feel really guilty about it. My resolution was to keep on top of my reviews (as well as the annual 'save money') but...alas...here I am trying to clear a backlog of 100+. I suck at resolutions.
Really glad you liked it, and thank you so much for reviewing! ♥ Report Review
Great chapter :)
I particularly like 'Look, I'm a Malfoy - I'm used to a chilly atmosphere!'
Keep it us - will the confusions never end?! Report Review
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