huh... I wonder why the insistence of waiting until she's 17?
It's all pretty mysterious. I do love the way you've written Professor McGonnagal. Report Review
Poor Phoebe... but, now she has tons of relatives with the Weasley's.
I do have to say that sometimes you write things that don't really seem necessary. I think writing everything she's thinking about things kind of slows the pace down, but maybe that's just a preference.
I love Tonks, I think you got her character just right. I also thought it was a great idea to look in the newspapers archive.
The story Charlie told was interesting, but I don't know that it would have really been told that way from Mrs. Weasley. It served a purpose though and was entertaining.
overall, good job. Report Review
Aww this was sweet. I do think the subjects of the old boyfriends and the height were a little too close to the I love you's. Even if you had just said that he stopped her in front of the fountain, looked in her eyes and said...
you know, just a little more description of the moment. Otherwise, very cute chapter!
good job.Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I'll reread that part and see if I think anything needs to be added. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
lol. I liked the part they were smooching at the table :) my friends would probably act the same way. Thanks for updating so much, I wasn't expecting to find at least 2 more chapters since I was last here!
This was very cute, and I think we're figuring out a little bit more and more about him too. I do wonder what his family had gone through now though.
Great job!Author's Response: I loved writing that part! I hate PDA, so it was especially fun to write her friends. You'll find out more about Matt as the story continues. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Congrats finishing the story! I need someone to kick me to work on mine. I love the story, I've just been really busy... I haven't updated for about 6 months :( Anyway, the date was so cute :) It's pretty hard not to like fish and chips in England lol. I definitely understand her worrying about his reaction to asking him inside considering who she's dated :P I don't know if he'll make her wait too too long though. I'm glad Ashtyn and her caught up though, it's important. I got to catch up with a friend the other day, it'd been way too long since I really did that.
Great job :DAuthor's Response: Thanks! Good luck with your story! Fish and chips is amazing, although I've never had it in England since I've never been there. Catching up with friends is the best thing ever. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
ugh, I hate having to wait for a date, especially since I've been long distance all this time. This was good she met his sister, now it is more even like Rose said. I'm glad there was some movement with Bradley's case. That's interesting.
I still think there's something about Matt's past we don't know that people are hiding. hmmm. I have a speculation, but...hmmm. I guess I'll just have to see.
great job making things cute and mysterious!
okay, now I'll go to sleep.Author's Response: Aw, that must suck! The waiting is hard. Matt's sister will appear again, so keep an eye out, and Matt's secret will be revealed eventually. You'll have to let me know if you guessed right! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
That is a cool coincidence :)
This was adorable. Just for the record though, it definitely is possible to dump someone, completely get over them with the intention of being single, and then fall in love with someone a week later... I am living proof, 5 years later. We're only not married 'cause we don't have steady jobs.
So there Rose lol.
Anyway, very cute! one more and then sleep lol.Author's Response: It was indeed! Couldn't have worked out better. It is definitely possible to get over someone that fast and fall in love immediately, but for Lily, especially, it's rare. For her, it hasn't ever happened before. But that's awesome that it happened to you! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
jeez, what could have happened to him that everyone's being so weird about??
Sooo yes, I'm one of those who's doing a read through all at once, but like I said I haven't read in a while on here, and I don't have work until later tomorrow morning.
can't wait for the date :)Author's Response: I'm going to assume you haven't read my other novels. :P The reason everyone is being so weird is a significant plot point in many of my other stories, so if you want to know, read them. But if you want to figure it out through this story, don't read them. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
I was kinda wondering about the names of kids her cousins had. Sometimes you'd mention someone and I'd be like, what? I think that'll happen every once in a while though lol.
I loved James' announcement! Very unexpected and original.
I hope Al gets back soon, poor Lily.
Also, what the heck is with the case Bradley's working on??Author's Response: I hope it's vaguely less confusing now! There will still be the mention of an occasional cousin who wasn't on the tree, but I couldn't fit the entire thing in there.
I'm glad you liked James's announcement! I wanted to give him some direction for his life, especially now that he's in his 30s. Al will get back soon, and you'll find out about Bradley's case later on. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Now I love Lily. I make puns ALL the time lol. I'm glad she thought of Rose. I was wondering why she hadn't thought of Rose to stay with, but that wouldn't have really given us a plot :PAuthor's Response: I love puns! My youngest sister is the queen of puns. Haha, yeah, if she'd stayed with Rose from the beginning the plot wouldn't have gotten very far. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
awww he's so cute! Respecting the best friend boundary, though, it's Albus, and his character's supposed to be a bit more lenient about such things, but still, very cute of him. Still a couple of things that could be worded differently, but all these are too small to notice, at least at 11 at night lol. Great job :)
Oh, and I liked Ashtyn, and her job is pretty unique too :)Author's Response: He is! I love him. Albus is very lenient, but Matt is overly cautious and wants to be sure before he goes out with Lily.
I'm always trying to come up with unique jobs for the wizarding world, since so many people just go with the standard healer, Ministry worker, or Diagon Alley shopkeeper. I'm glad you like Ashtyn's job! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Very cute. I like Sir Thumbs lol. There are a few places that need some re-wording, but that's about it. It'll be fun seeing how she does with the kids, and dinner with Al's friend :)Author's Response: Sir Thumbs is so much fun to write about. I love kitties. Yeah, I'm sure if I read through it I'd find lots to reword, but I lack the time to do so right now. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
Ahh, that would explain it! (the family tree)
My name is Heather, so I like that you used it for Charlie's daughter :) I love charlie.
Anyway, I saw that you posted a new chapter from the forums and it looked cute from the title so here I am. I'm glad I have something new to read, the ones I've been reading haven't been updated in a long time.. :P
So far I really like it! The only problem I had was why she didn't just use aguamenti for at least her tea, but it'd be hard to do for a whole shower, and everything else. I'm also in an opposite position on weddings, I've only been to a few and I'll be a bridesmaid for the first time this may :) It's still a very fun story so far.. too bad about Sean being such an idiot, it'll be fun to see what happens later.
Oh! just saw Cedric on the names list for Percy's kids, great idea!
Happy 10th review :)Author's Response: Haha, yeah, I have my own Weasley cousins. Have to explain that for every novel I write. One of my sisters is named Heather, too, which is why I named Charlie's daughter Heather.
I'm really glad you're enjoying the story! I hate when stuff I'm reading doesn't get updated. This will be updated every week since I've already finished it.
Lily definitely could've used aguamenti for her tea, but she didn't think of it. She was so preoccupied with thinking about her shower, which would be difficult to do with aguamenti.
I'm the opposite of Lily and I love weddings! I've been to a bunch within the past few years and have been a bridesmaid once. I hope you have fun being one!
Yes, Cedric was named after Cedric Diggory! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
aww very cute. I think you did a pretty great job! There were only a few problems, just words that hadn't been spaced apart. Other than that I loved how you did the Weasley family part. How Ron kinda nudged him in even if he didn't really want to, it's different than how other people do it. Even me :P I'm doing a story like this too so I wanted to get more ideas how other people are. I really liked this. If you ever have time to r/r mine it'd be fun to get your opinion. I have 11 chapters already, but it's always fun to bounce ideas off each other. Anyway, Great Job! Report Review
Me too, I'm in such trouble for not updating, but at least yours wasn't as long of a drought than mine... I loved this, it's so funny that nearly the whole chapter was in the loo :D lol They're adorable.
Thanks for the update!
Wish me luck updating my own stuff.
Great job! Report Review
Ii know what he was wondering :D Well, it's great nothing happened, but What is going on with Hermione??? They should figure that out before she's able to go anywhere. Aaaaww Twins though!! I love it, I've always loved the idea of twins :) especially a boy and girl. Great job, I'm glad I actually waited a little while so I could read a couple chapters at a time, little less suspense that way lol. Report Review
oh my gosh, the dreams are REALLY REAL... EEEK! That is so freaky, the dagger she used on Hermione must be cursed or something... :/ Report Review
awww yay!! That's so funny, 'cause we just found out the gender of my friends' baby, and it's gonna be a boy, and my cousins' baby, who we didn't know the gender of, was born, and was a boy too :)
I do have to say though, at the beginning of the chapter you said "baby" one too many times, at least one could be cut and it'd be fine, other than that, great job! Report Review
This is adorable, I haven't read it in a while so I'm slightly confused about somethings, but it's still cute. Some things are coming back. The little box is a great idea, and gives more perspective of how close they really are/were. Great job! I wish I could get back to writing my story, but I keep thinking there's still other things for me to do... but I procrastinate on that too :P so maybe doing both will work. Anyway, great job! Report Review
This is lovely, I could really feel the emotions. The love, fear, pain, the cold, determination. There were a few spelling errors, like 'it' instead of 'is' and vice versa, and 'instent' instead of 'instant' small things easily fixed. Being in long distant relationships' suck, I know, but to have danger involved with it is way worse. I felt all of it through your writing. Great job, and happy 1st review!
Oh, and this is the first story I've read on here in a few months now... I can't believe it's been that long, but it was nice reading something so well done coming back :)Author's Response: Hey -- thank you so much for being the first to review this story for me! :) That really does mean a lot, that you were willing to do that. And I'm glad that you enjoyed the story, too! Emotions are something that I work hard to convey in writing (along, of course, with many other things), and to hear that I've managed at, at least to one person, is really gratifying.
Thank you for catching those spelling errors, too! I did catch one "it/is" mistake (and I'm always making that one), though I think you might have confused "insistent" with "instant." No worries, of course!
I'm very honored to have been your first homecoming review, as it were. :3 Again -- really. I'm so happy to have a review from you! Thank you again! ♥ Report Review
Aw, I really liked this. Very cute and fluffy, which I'm all about lol. One thing though, why exactly did she think he didn't feel the same? was it just that he never tried talking to her about it, and since she stopped going and never heard from him assume he didn't like her? and vice versa? It might be a good idea to make that a little clearer, we can guess, but it's nice to know a little back story, unless it was part of your novel in which case telling where people can find that out would be good, and shameless advertising lol.
Anyway, I thought you had both their characters pegged, same awkward sweet pair we know them to be :)
Oh, and just one typo:
“So, how's you?” She called through to the living room.
I think you must have meant 'how're you?' but that was it, so easy fix.
Happy first review!!Author's Response: Hey, thanks for the review! :)
I'm glad you liked it, cute stuff is the best. I'll have a look through and add in some extra detail/ check over for any errors.
Thanks again for reviewing! :) Report Review
aww, you know this is kinda funny 'cause since I read the last chapter I found out one of my best friends is having a baby with his girlfriend. I'm sure he had to have felt this was a tiny bit at first, actually I think his girlfriend thought that more since she's younger lol. But he's psyched, and everyone's all excited. My friend and I are still adjusting to the fact he'll be a father. It'll be fun to see everyone's reactions here, like their friends and family :D
Great job hun!Author's Response: aww! Congratulations to your friend! I wish them all the best! Thank you so much! Report Review
awww why did you have to stop it before his reaction?? :( oh well. It was cute seeing george all worked up though lol.Author's Response: aww, I'm sorry. cliffhangers are the worst sometimes. Thanks for reading! Report Review
awww that made me just smile like so huge! This new chapter was like a warm hug, something familiar to read and feel happy about. At least by the end. Delilah! She is such a. gr well Al shouldn't have to worry about having problems now that her and freddie are back to being friends. I love how he didn't just let her back like that. It makes sense. Lolol and Hannah, she's finally back to being herself too. She's a great character really. There are tons of people out there that go through challenging moral things. Do we condemn them all? not all the time. Especially when someone as manipulative as Malfoy is involved. I have the day off tomorrow, and got caught up with a bunch of homework, so I'll be writing WMM tomorrow! yay! I've been so busy! Thanks for such a great new chapter! Great job!Author's Response: :D yay I'm glad! This was a relief sort of chapter for me to write after all that sadness!
Oh, I know she is. I'm the one that wrote Delilah and I don't have any clue what was going on in her mind at that point :p
I think she made a bad choice, but then again so does everyone in the world; you don't really deserve the saddest life in the world because of that! :)
I can't wait to read more of wmm and Thank you so much for reviewing! I'll talk to you soon dear♥ Report Review
I really liked her cat :) I would have thought maybe McGonnagal would have loosened up a little more with her after getting a cat, since she can turn into one, but this worked too. I really wonder what year she'll end up being in, she seems like she could be a little older than Harry, but then you mentioned Gilderoy Lockheart. Lolol, that reminds me of my favorite line in this chapter :
"Gilderoy Lockhart…" Lea read out loud. "He seems important."
lolol. Great job, good luck with this, just remember to check for spelling and grammar and you'll be fine. For example you said "cloak" instead of Clock at the beginning of the chapter.
Good job :)Author's Response: She will loosen up a little bit in the next chapter, I promise. She just a little weary of Lea. Yes, Lea is born in the same year as Harry, but in december, which means she will still be in the year below Harry. Sadly. Ahaha, Gilderoy... poor bloke, there's going to be a lot of fun with him further in the story. I promise.
And I will go back and fix the mistakes I see. Thanks for pointing it out!! :)
And thanks for reviewing! You are wonderful!! Report Review
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