good. I just found 1 tiny mistake... what you had: “Oh hi Hermione,” she replied smiling. Correction: “Oh, hi Hermione,” she replied smiling. There needed to be a comma after "oh". Report Review
pretty good! good start to the story! Do you use FanFiction???Author's Response: sorry i'm not sure what you mean by do i use it? thanks for reading =) Report Review
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