I would really just like to say how amazing this first chapter is. Honestly, this is great and very well done. It was clear and flowed very nicely. You have great start so please continue with this story... it can be GREAT! Seriously, this story has potential to be incredible. Keep in mind though that the first few chapters are always the hardest to get through because people tend to like reading stories with more chapters. I see though that you already have a few people have already made your story a favorite and I would like to say congrats! I am really looking forward to reading the next chapter!

Lots of love,

LoveForever

Author's Response: aww, thank you so much! i'm really glad you liked this chapter. i have the next chapter waiting in the wings. this is going to have three chapters. incredible? wow. well, i hope that i can try to write something you'll like. and thanks for the advice! i hope that you like what else i'm going to put up!

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That was so good! It was really well done. I love Lily and James, and I love how you had James talk about being a better person and how he's trying to make up for it and how he admitted that he made mistakes. I really enjoyed reading it. I don't want to wait for the next chapter! I want to read it now! So please, please, please update soon! I'm adding this story to my favorites!

xoxo LoveForever

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