It's an interesting idea, however you need to tidy up your language and grammar a bit! Also, you should probably rethink some of the dialogue; your character Lestranga speaks for a long time uninterrupted, which is not altogether plausible considering what she's saying to Harry! You have the main thing though, which is the idea itself; you just need to make sure you have clarity of expression throughout :) In other words: an interesting start, but perhaps have a look into the spelling and grammar aspects! :)Author's Response: Thank-you!!! I'll look into it. Report Review
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