I love how you're setting up the relationships here, it's very well done. Again, you have some typos, but nothing major. Though, when you said "my James" instead of "by James" I couldn't help but laugh. :D
I hope you're able to get another chapter up soon, this is definitely worth continuing to read. Report Review
I'm loving the friendly, yet dramatic atmosphere you're giving this story. Sirius is the perfect narrator for this. You did have a few typos though, but that was all. Report Review
I'm finding this to be rather intriguing, and your writing is very good, so, I do believe I'm convinced to move on to the next chapter :) Report Review
This is good, but I can definitely tell that it's one of your first pieces. Report Review
Didn't she give away who she is with this line?
So, I transfigured the paper clip into a lily since it is indeed my favorite flower, even if it is my name Report Review
I know this is one of your early works, but of all the stories you had it sounded the most interesting to me. Your writing is good in this, but your spelling and grammar is atrocious. I'm assuming that all of your recent stories are much better.
You're a good writer. :) Report Review
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