Hello! I heard about this from the from Story Seekers Podcast, and with everyone on the panel positively gushing over it I had to check it out. And it lived up to my expectations, it's beautiful!
As a writer I think you've done a fabulous job with Henri - I myself am sort of in that kind of situation, an artist wishing she was a writer, and everything you've said really just hits the nail right on the head. And and as for his relationship with Apolline, I love that too, and I'm excited to read on!Author's Response: Sorry it's taken me so long to reply to this! Especially as it's such a lovely review - I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
I'm glad you like Henri - seeing as I'm not an artist, not French and not male, I sometimes think I'm a bit daft to even attempt writing him, but I rather enjoy it all the same. Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
I first heard this story listening to HPPC, and I have to say, even when I was half concentrating on something else, your story was gorgeous and captured me straight away. I particularly love the beginning, this quote in particular: ' It belongs in a Shakespearean romance, or a Jacobean tragedy, or lurking between the pages of a Gothic thriller'.
You have such rhythm, and every word feels fitting. And I love Safe and Sound, so there's an added bonus. I just love it!Author's Response: Hey, I'm glad you liked it! And enough to come read it, thanks a lot :D
Safe and Sound is an amazing song :)
Thanks very much for both your reviews (on HPPC and here) they are very much appreciated and loved! :D Report Review
NEVILLE. Aww I just love this. It really feels like I'm inside Neville's head, and it really is him, not some empty uncharacteristic version of him. Like I got the whole cake, not just the icing. I just love the 'FOR HARRY!!' bit, and that ending sentence was just perfect. It's all very canonical, and just so hjsadhfjsdhfjks good.
I really envy anyone who can describe feelings well, so ... I envy you. Really, this was just gorgeous, I demand you stop writing so good, k?
Sincerely, some ninja. Report Review
Oh wow. This was really amazing. Truly.
First of all, this is the first story I've sat down and read in it's entirety without skipping through for about ... I don't know .. at least awhile now. I have been incredibly jittery lately, but amazingly, this story has been the one to glue me to the screen of my little laptop.
I really loved the way you've twisted the entire world of Harry Potter and entwined it so cleverly into the world of Wonderland. The way you've used words is just so wonderful. And that ending - unexpected on my part, but such an amazing end to a great story.
Really wonderful job! 11/10. ;)Author's Response: I'm majorly blushing back here behind the virtual wall.
Really, thank you so much. I'm also a jittery reader who prefers to skim rather than actually read, so I can totally identify with what you said. And I'm incredibly happy this story kept you reading!
Thank you so much! I'm thrilled you liked it! :D Report Review
Hey! I like what you've got so far quite alot. :) There are quite a few social-reject kind of stories around, but I feel like this one has lots of potential to become something special. (; Your wording is fantastic too!
Only suggestion would be to refrain from using one sentence paragraphs so much like you have done quite a bit in this chapter - stick to around four or five within a chapter, maybe? I hope your future chapters are a bit longer too. ;)
Great job!! :DAuthor's Response: The one thing people never tell you, is how hard it is to write from a shy persons POV! I started with this story, all happy and excited, loving Delilah, but now I don't knwo what to do with her! I'm working on it though, so I promise at least SOMETHING will up soon.
About the one sentence paragraphs, I do know I use them alot, but thats my (undeniably strange) style of writing. Is it too much? If it really is bad, tell me, I'll try to fix it (: Report Review
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