I seriously read through of all of this tonight. It was so well written it was kind of addicting. It frustrates me to no end how oblivious Violet is to EVERYTHING and how much people(James included) care about her and want to support her.
I love James's characterization, he's being brave about it but at the same time, his reaction is completely justified. It will certainly be interesting to see how the rest of this story goes.
Little interesting fact, in my James fanfic, he has a daughter(not when he's 17 though), and her name is Violet. So while reading it I kept having to remind myself, "Violet's the love interest in this one!"
Anyways, love the fic!Author's Response: Wow honestly I can't believe anyone would bother reading through this entire story in one night, good for you! Thank you for the compliments, the truly mean so much to me :) Haha well Violet's a lovely name, it's no wonder we both picked it. Thanks for reviewing! x Report Review
Beautiful as always! While reading this I had the horibble idea that Scorpius is the traitor since we've been so drawn into the idea that he's Rose's confidant. It makes sense since we can't see into his mind. But seriously, that would be horrible, I'd probably cry myself to sleep if you did. Anyways, I was so glad to see another chapter up. Suspenseful, as always :)) Report Review
BTW, love your A/N is was kind of adorable lol. It's like every chapter I'm just waiting for Tori to show up again, and it kind of scares me lol.
Imagine what her mom would've thought if she'd told him James was her boyfriend...MORE embarassing lol. Anyways, another cute chapter, and I seriously feel soo bad for Al whenever you write about him. Poor confused love sick bloke.Author's Response: Haha, thanks so much for the review! I'm really glad you liked the chapter, it means a lot.
Courtney:) Report Review
Tbh sometimes I get Max and Jacob and Jasper confused, but I can definitely tell which one's Noah.
I also feel kind of bad for Celine, I mean yeah she did all that stuff, but it's all in her past too. I don't blame Allie for being like that, but it sucks that Celine has to live up to the crap she dealt out at Hogwarts.
To the juicy stuff though...oh my friggen goodness I can only imagine what must be going through James's head right now. For all he knows his ex-gf, still wearing Al's clothes and not looking very presentable is at his little brother's house. I'm sure he's assuming something's going on...who wouldn't, and I mean she probably looks so too. This is gonna be friggen fun to read next chapter.
So I'm thinking there will either be some big argument or super awkwardness(I'm guessing the latter) and Allie claiming nothing happened but also just wanting to stay quiet because she doesn't really feel that he needs to know in the first place. Anyways, that's just the vibe I'm getting.Author's Response: Noah's the most important one right now. Jasper, Jacob and Max will have bigger parts in the story further along :)
I kind of feel bed for Celine too! After all she was also only seventeen when everything happened. There'll be more of her as the story moves along, I promise.
Haha I'll guess you'll just have to wait and see :) The chapter is waiting for validation so it'll hopefully be up soon. Report Review
I think this chapter alone just exemplifies all of the characters SOOO WELL. I completely understood, even before you stated it, that Rose was treating Scorpius so that she could avoid the fact that Albus might be seriously hurt. You could tell she was trying to sidestep the fact by blaming Scorpius for being stupid. And poor poor Scorpius always being blamed and being called useless. But we have to have one of those characters to exemplify the amazingness of the other characters right?
Btw, I adore the way you wrote Scorpius's character in this novel. He's not some good guy because he's different from his dad or doesn't believe in blood purity. He's a good guy because he's a good guy...it has nothing to do with how different he is from his father, it's the fact that he's willing to sacrafice his own safety and time because he ultimately wants everything back to normalcy. And of course you can attribute his wanting to go back to normalcy as the root of his attempts to get things solved, but deep down I think he really wants to feel a sense of accomplishment and that he's done something that helps other people just because. It does kind of go along with the main summary I think.
I love reading about the antics in this novel, everything just seems so based in reality...I mean these characters are clearly not perfect. Their flaws make them...enjoyable to read about though.Author's Response: Thank you! I never reflected so deeply on this chapter myself, but with you pointing it out, you're right, everyone gets a good shot at showing what they're all about. Except for Scorpius getting called useless, which no, he really doesn't deserve! And some day, perhaps, people will recognise his worth, or at least ALLOW themselves to recognise his worth (as in Rose's case). You're rather on the nose with your assessment of him; he IS different to his father but it's less in ideology and more, as we will continue to explore, in his human essentials. There's a lot to come on Scorpius, Draco, their relationship, and the ways in which they're different.
I'm glad you've enjoyed this chapter and the story. I do worry sometimes when I have characters showing their flaws in full throttle that it'll put people off; Rose, for instance, has been showing her worse side more than Albus or Scorpius and I'd be sad if she were judged just on that, so this chapter counts as both a 'calling out' on her more unpleasant traits AND a chance to see things from her perspective.
Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
They're so friggen cute. I love how Rose tries so hard not to look all put together lol, well...she definitely got the response she wanted. I love how she wanted him to say something and then when he did she's all flushed. Typical girl.
I love Eddie too, he's friggen adorable. I could tell she just wanted him for sex too, I think their relationship is very unique but it definitely works for Rose. Eddie will sure be dissapointed when Sco/Rose happens since that means no more Rose for him(even if that did only entail making out).
I'm ready for some snogging between the two of them. Especially since Malfoy is just acting like a regular guy then a jerk now, that's definitely making it hard for Rose to hate him. You're story is so cute.honestly it's one of my faves right now!Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I know, I like Eddie as well, I do want to keep them friends, even once Scorpius and Rose get together. Thanks for your wonderful review xx Report Review
First off, this novel is super cute already. Always am I a fan of awkward characters. She's charming :). Can't say too much right now since it's all intro's and stuff, but I'm liking it right now. I didn't see any gramattical errors, and as my friend so tactfully calls me I'm a grammar *ahem old timey word for prostitute* ANYYYWAAYYYS if that is Asher Monroe on your banner I will seriously love you like...for ever and keep reading this if it sucks(though I highly doubt that). If it's not Asher Monroe then I'm sorry for being random lol.Author's Response: Wow, this is so sweet! Clara is probably the definition of awkward :P There's one more chapter of introductions (gotta intro the boys) and then it's on to a steadier plot.
Yes! No grammatical errors! I'm basically the worst with typos, and I always miss something.
Who's Asher Mun-JUST JOKING IT IS ASHER MUNROE AJSDKFJASLKDJF! He's so perfect and his singing voice omg (activate full fangirl mode)!
Thanks for the review and I'll bribe you to continue reading with the promise of Asher Munroe in an upcoming chapter image!
XX HogwartsKid Report Review
I love Scorpius's character, I do. I had a suspicion that they'd be the only people left, and why don't they ask the houselves to leave the castle...or would that spread the magical illness too?? I'm at a loss as to what's going on and I like it :), this novels really good :))Author's Response: Scorpius thanks you for your adoration. Yep, it was rather inevitable it'd be those six left behind! As for the house elves, they COULD ask them to leave, but they don't know much yet about the illness or how it spreads. Perhaps, when they learn more, they will - but in the meantime it's a risk they don't want to take. Glad you're enjoying the twists and turns! Thanks for reviewing. Report Review
GAHAAH!!! That's my word for you.
I realize you have a plot in there somewhere, but it's absolute TORTURE trying to figure it out. I still think it's Lupin but whatever, and I still don't think it's Lily or Hugo.
BUT SERIOUSLY?! Are you like trying to give me an aneurism? This is why I never read mysteries :)) they make me all antsy!
On a more positive note, I love this novel :D Report Review
I feel like Dom and Chaise are never going to get back together, even though they are like...seriously perfect for each other. It just seems like one of those doomed relationships.
Secondly, I feel reeeaaallly bad for Fred, and I always kind of have. He just...well he doesn't care about Corinne, and I can't really judge him for that.
JAMEEESSS, can I marry him if Corinne doesn't? He's such a sweetheart and I forget how much he HAS given up for her and well, he's just super sweet.
Why do I feel like this kiss won't have anything to do with their future relationship? Like it was just something to do? Hmmm.but still, I'm very sad this novel's almost over :((Author's Response: Dom and Chaise are a pretty tricky subject, but I will have to say that you never know what those two will do. They may end up surprising you.
I'm so happy you feel bad for Fred! I've been trying to hard this whole story to make him likable and not just this big bad guy with no redeeming qualities.
Haha I'm not quite sure how Corinne would take it if you married James, but sure be my guest. I'm glad you like him and think he's sweet though, because it's definitely taken a lot for me to get him here.
You will find out what the kiss has to do with the story in the next chapter ;)
Thank you so much for reviewing and I'm glad you like the story!
-Rebecca Report Review
I'm REALLY CONFUSED. Which I'm hoping is a good thing and I literally don't know what to do with myself after I read this. How do you come up with this stuff, seriously? I can't write mysteries to save my life(please if I write a novel summary I'm afraid I'm going to give away too much). Seriously, you deserve all the love you're getting for this novel :))Author's Response: I cheat on summaries by using cryptic quotes [see my author page *headdesk*]
I'm so so happy you like this story, and I hope the confusedness is a good thing too :P
Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
This story is so adorable :)) I love incredibly awkward nerdy characters(they make me feel better about myself). And it's not totally horribly written...which is more of a statement than a compliment I guess, which is a long way of saying that I usually have to go through like 10 novels to find one that I like, and I'm enjoying this so far. You have piqued my interest, and you can write well, which I appreciate. Count me as a fan :))Author's Response: Thank you so much!! Report Review
OH MY GOOLLYGEE!!! This chapter was so friggin beautiful you don't even know. It was more deep than usual, but in a good way, like James finally started to understand life. I love that he's so thoughtful in this chapter, and you know he really starts to THINK.
The little bit about how love is dysfunctional now(and the whole dysfunctional quote was beautiful as well) and illegal things are nothing to us, and we feel the need to be 30 and mar the child-like image of love we should still contain, was absolutely BEAUTIFUL! Like quite literally changed my life for a second there. His so called "revalations" were so heartfelt and written beautifully and I'm just like breathless because the words were so friggen awesome.
AND OH MY AH!!! I'm freaking out, I'm just as confused as James sometimes. Like I legitelly think sometimes he's just attracted to her, or cares for her to a certain extent, but then sometimes I'm like HE HAS TO BE IN LOVE WITH HER! And now that she's saying that, I'm like...conflicted. I still don't think he loves her, but deep down I think he wants to love her. And he hates that he can't be her perfect guy, but at the same time isn't going to change himself to become the perfect guy either.
And to boot, I've always been confused with Vicky's feelings. Like I think her hate sort of overpowers her infatuation, but then she has moments where she's completely in her own mind and I'm not sure whether her feelings of disgust(which is sometimes clearly not true as they're having a completely sane convo) or the fact that James is falling for her so the feelings not as strong.
BUT NOOO MY JAMIE IS LOSING VICTORIA!! I love James's character, he's so friggin complicated, I don't even think he knows how he's going to react to the next situation he just...kind of goes wherever his heart leads him. Report Review
This chapter was just so darn cute. I mean Al was already super adorable before, but darn cocky Al isss sooo adorable. He acts so much like his brother when he acts all confident and stuff(which I got to tell you Al being all cocky is bizzare for a few moments until you get used to it).
So this is really wierd, but when I picture Al and Ariadne having conversations I always picture Al with the voice of a little boy(or at least a young teen), especially when they were talking behind the tapestry Al's little boy voice came out. Idk it's like even with Al's suuuppper flirtyness he still seems really naive and reserved and quiet(which he always is in like all the novels I read but I'm so not complaining. I love the Al/James characterizations as is...their personalties compliment each other). And Al is just this like pure soul that's still a little kid at heart, definitely not quidditch Nazi a-hole yet completely lovable(like most people make his older brother out to be). Al is lovable in a completely different way and ahhh he's such a little kid to me(in his heart) which is kind of cucoo since if Al was real and directly in front of me I'd act exactly like Aridane would(crush and all).
And oh yeah, THERE GOING ON A DATE! :D Report Review
OHMIGOD HOW DID I KNOW?!?! When you said a couple chapters back "Oh I need to post a pic of Blondie" I was like if only it could be Hunter Parrish, but nahh, it can't be him, like I don't even think she was describing him in the first place, and then the first thing I see in this chapter BAM! HUNTER PARRISH!! You don't know how much I love you right now lol. Hunter is so darn handsome in Weeds, I like fell in love with him because he was so handsome lol. So I don't actually love him but he is hot. And he's such a sweetie I love Blondie double now :)) Report Review
So I'm biased a little bit my favorite character of all time(in general and as far as fanfics go) has always been James Potter, maybe that's why I can't find it in my heart to hate his guts.
I know like a million and seven of your readers just HATE James but I...I can't do it. As so called "caricature-y" these characters are, I absolutely love your story AS IS. I grew up in church, and I generally don't surround myself with people that embrace "James and Tyler's lifestyles" not to say that perhaps I'm not aware that perhaps I'm around such people or I willingly chose not to hang out with guys like that, but you know it just kind of worked out that way.
But yeah maybe James and Tyler are a-hole's like 90% of the time, but I still can't bring myself to hate James. These characters you have written they are so real to me, and you know at this rate, if you dig deep enough you can find this at any highschool(perhaps it is more personified in college aged kids though).
But I don't think that your readers understand. These kids spend MONTHS with, for the most part, nobody but each other and when things hit the fan they ERUPT, drama like this is bound to happen because these kids are in a bubble. They only have each other to depend on and when things go sour, those people might not always be there.
James is just a horny little kid. He's a KID, who still feels like he shouldn't have to deal with the consequences of things because he's been sheltered by Hogwarts. I will not judge him because he just wants to live his life, he just doesn't realize that all his actions effect someone, and he might actually hurt someone's feelings. He wants everything to be hunky dory in his world and he's slowly starting to realize he's messing with grown up problems and grown up emotions and he just doesn't want to deal with them.
That's my two cents.Author's Response: that's exactly what i wanted to go for! reality is the key, and i try my best to make these characters as real as possible.
to me, james was always that character who acted like the biggest jerk in the world, but readers can't help but sympathize and relate, so they can't hate him even if they tried. and it should be understood that no matter how badly james may treat victoria, her feelings for him isn't something that can be controlled, and there ARE moments when victoria is in a rut and her feelings for james simmer down to hatred, but then james pulls some sweet move (somewhat) and those feelings are flared up again. that's the rockiness of teenage puppy love/relationships. it's irrational, and you can't really understand it.
i enjoyed hearing your insight :)
thanks for reviewing!
gryffindorgirl Report Review
I am pleasantly surprised. When I first began reading this I assumed it was going to be just another Sco/Rose story, however, this has a considerable amount more depth than most stories on here. I find myself enjoying it, and the fact that it doesn't completely revolve around Sco/Rose. So far, my interest is piqued.Author's Response: While I'm not seeking to reinvent the wheel in regards to ScoRose, I am trying to avoid falling into many of the pit traps which the pairing often has to contend with. But yes, it is more of a story in which Scorpius and Rose (and Albus, and others) are the main characters in the plot, and the romance is just Something Which (eventually) Happens. It shouldn't be teenaged drama day-in, day-out.
I'm glad you enjoyed, and thanks for reviewing! Report Review
This story is simply amazing. I do admit that at times it was heavy reading, and truthfully I could only read a chapter a day because well...you know it was heavy. But I'm so glad I continued to read it even when it felt I was forcing myself to(I can't explain it really, like I loved the story and it wasn't dragging at all...I guess it was just a lot to take in).
But truthfully this is the quintessential Founders story. Rarely on this site do I find stories that inspire me and become almost the staple I base my opinions of the characterizations of the same character of other novels(if that makes sense, I hope it does. Basically, I will always see Salazar the way you have written him and any other attempt would be false. I know it's odd really). This story is on a very small list of just these epic stories. And as I did with a Marauder novel I read on here, nothing will ever compare to the caliber of this story. It is inspirational and will forever be something I base other stories on.
Your story telling was amazing and never cliche and I simply cannot put into words how amazing this story is. And honestly I am very nit-picky, as a reader and writer and self-proclaimed critic, I know good writing, and this is up there with my ultimate favorites.
I hope this has flattered you, as it was my intention, and I urge you to never stop writing. If you ever get published, I am telling you simply that you can count my name as one who would willingly purchase all that you write.
Thank you for taking me on the adventure that was this story.Author's Response: Thank you so much for this absolutely wonderful review. I felt I wanted to write this great big epic story with as many sub plots and characters that I could cope with! I'm so glad you felt this worked, as I found there were very few founders stories that took this approach!
I totally understand what you mean about judging the characters based on another fic. After reading the amazing "The Founders Four" by Klw and the amazing "Helena, Grey" by UnderRugSwept13 I couldn't visualise the Founders and Helena in any other way, so it took a long time to make them my own.
I am glad you liked Salazar, I think him, (along with Andromeda in my "The Chained Lady") are the most realistic characters I have written, and I'm glad you see him as the perfect way that you would see Salazar.
I actually can't express how amazing this review is, and I'm so glad this is one of your ultimate favourites! I hope you keep following my writing!
Thank you so much for this wonderful review! Report Review
I was maybe like 3 paragraphs into Guillaume's POV when I realized "OMG Baron...Guillaume...love Helena.OMG GUILLAME'S THE BLOODY BARON! How did I not see this coming?!"
So yeah, didn't see it coming but it makes so much sense.Author's Response: Hahaha! I'm glad it was a surprise! When I first thought of this character he just turned up at the end to fall in love with Helena, but then he evolved into so much more!
I'm so glad you feel this worked! Please keep reading and reviewing! Report Review
GAHHH THIS IS SO DEPRESSING!! (I hope you should know I don't usually write entire sentences in CAPS). I think it's uber sweet that Draco hugged Rose, like he is finally accepting some sort of connection between their two families. I want to cry about Scorpius's death, but I saw it coming and truthfully...I'm not much of a crier.Author's Response: I know it's depressing, I try not to be, but I've found I have a knack for writing depressing stuff! Please keep reading :) Report Review
OH MY GOD THIS IS SO MUCH LIKE ROMEO AND JULIET IT'S RIDICULOUS! Well sort of...if it revolved around the Next Generation but seriously this is like the perfect mix between Romeo and Juliet and Harry Potter. I mean it sort of all fits in perfectly. I mean James is even "Juliet's" cousin. I mean making Mercutio "Mercutio" was a bit obvious but ehhh I aint complaining. I do like that you did mix it up at bit with the whole rise of "The Heir" but I can only wait sadly for Scorpius's untimely demise.
*Sob* James dies. I actually still don't hate him as a character, perhaps because he's not as rude as the original Tybalt...but it may just be the fact that I love James's character(albeit he is very rash and obnoxious in other novels as well) in general. Maybe other novels have made me biased lol.Author's Response: Hahaha, thanks so much! I wanted to give you all a warning of what was going to happen, so I retained Mercutio's name. I thought the story fitted so perfectly to Romeo and Juliet that I had to do it!
The rise of the heir, I thought was a way to jazz up the story, and it also tied off what I saw as a lose end for I thought the most unmentioned deatheater of them all.
And I didn't dislike James either, he was just an arrogant teenage boy! If you like this stories, please try my other's! I have a Tom/Merope, a Andromeda/Ted and a Founders story that I feel are my best work! Report Review
Ummm.how are they going to find out about the marriage agreement...gahh, I need to know these things lol.Author's Response: Hahaha, keep reading and I'm sure you'll find out! Report Review
OHMYGOD! Mercutio is Lestrange huh?!?!?!?!!?!?!?!?!
And I'm guessing The Heir is Bellatrix's husband?? It makes sense, but I really don't know.
Oh my golly gee your story is so eloquent and I absolutely LOVED the little tidbit hinting at "Legendary" which is equally as amazing(maybe more) although I have yet to comment on it since I'm just too excited to read through it. And partially what can I say to you, it's that good, I can't really summarize it.Author's Response: Thank you so much! When I came to writing Legendary (which I wrote after this), I decided to include all the Cadmus letters which I had wrote before. It was a challenge as I had to modify my intended story a bit, but it worked well I thought! Thank you so much for this review, I hope you keep reading! Report Review
This story is sooo darn cute. I don't know, I feel soo bad for James's situations and I seriously just want to wrap him up and take him home with me. The funny part about it though?? I have no idea why I love James's character so much.
I do like the interactions between characters and how everything is just so complicated, it's not one-layered you know??
I just thought you should know I enjoy your story :)Author's Response: Thank you! & You're right, James definitely seems like a lost puppy at times that you just want to nurture. And I don't know why I like him either (other than the fact that he's my character).
And yes, everything is very complicated, which I liked when I first started writing the story but let me tell you it's a nightmare to wrap up. But I am hopefully going to find a way to merge all these layers together.
Thank you so much for a lovely review!
-Rebecca Report Review
Oh my God that convo in potions waasss so funny. James got kind of brave there, and as a third party reader you have to find it even funnier that Autumn knows what's going on completely. James asked her out and called her hot...aside from being all cocky and saying "ill show her a real date" right in front of Dom. And well Dom, really has no idea lol. I've never literally lol'd but that was pretty close. You do conversations(in general...some people make it seem really cliche or forced...but the conversations here are all so natural) well, so...I approve!
Oh and I just love his character around her, so genuine :)Author's Response: Aha, god old James, right? I'm really glad you like my dialogue as that's one of my favourite things to write, along with all the other bits actually (hell with it, I just love writing). Thanks for reviewing and so glad you're enjoying it! :) Report Review
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