i really, throughly enjoyed this story! I'm glad to see this kind of twist on a Lily and James romance. I've always wanted to read a fic like this :) I'll admit, I wasn't entirely pleased with the ending (Please don't hate me :S) Mostly just because I thought it was a little "Deus ex machina"... Like all of a sudden "Hey, here's Dumbledore, and everything is going to be good again!" I feel like a witch just saying that though :S I did think the story as a whole was wonderfully written, and it's a great piece that I've been delighted to read! Just right at the climax, everything ended in a flash... I did like how everything wasn't completely perfect though... Discrimination still exists, even after all the trials. So i'm sorry for the kinda negative review... Forgive me!
Happy writing,
Hayleekins

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I've never read any Avenger comics either, so you don't have to worry about me coming at you with my machete :) But YAY! NEW CHAPTER! woohoo! Great one! I loved the Lord of the Rings reference about Clint bieng Legolas! I'm really enjoying this story so far! Lily seems to have a thing for Thor, uh oh! I really can't wait to read and find out what happens!! Anyways, hurry up and update a new chapter, I can't wait to read more! :D Great job,
Happy writing!
Hayleekins

Author's Response: Hayleekins,

OMG! Yay! You've read my new chapter! I was awaiting for your review, and was extremly happy when I saw it. Just came home from school see, so this really brightened my day!

And yes, the LOTR reference seemed perfect for Clint. I mean, they're both amazing with the bow, (but I think I like Legolas a tad better). And Lily THINKS she has a fling for Thor. But I think her hook up with James is coming sooner than I planned. I'm editing the future chapters as of now.

I'm glad you really like this, and I shall not let you down! Thanks for the feedback dearie!

PhoenixPulse

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Ooh! Study buddies! I can understand how you chose each pairing, though I do feel a little bad for Steve... Nothing against Peter per say (actually, a lot against the bloody traitor! -.- But, since this is the time BEFORE he became a hideous back stabber, I'll try not to be as prejudice as Sirius) but I can see how Peter and Coulson, but please stop bringing him up! I want to cry every time I think of that scene in the Avengers, after he died and Fury gives Steve the Captain America cards D': His death saddened me very much, and it made my heart break to see Steve's heart break after Fury gave him the cards...
ANYWAYS! I agree with all of the pairings, and I enjoyed your novel of an A/N (i read the whole thing! Very insightful ;D) which helped explain any confusion!
Ok, the line:
Snape frowned. "I actually have Alchemy, sir." Snape said slowly, drawing out the ends of every word, dramatically pausing after every other word. "But I really wouldn't mind, if it's that important."
REMINDS ME OF THE ADULT SNAPE SO MUCH! The first thing that comes to my mind is that scene in HP and the Deathly Hallows part 2, when Snape is standing in front of Hogwarts asking for anyone with knowledge of Harry to step forward, and warning the students in helping him... I just loved it a lot, makes him really feel like the Snape we all know :D
Anyways, like I said in my last review, it is getting late and I'm getting tired! So I shall cut my review off here- a bit longer than I had though haha- and bid you goodnight! You should really hurry up and redo/ post new chapter, because I shall be anxiously awaiting the next!
Keep up the FANTASTIC work! Happy writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: Hayleekins,

Dearie, thank you so much for the review! It makes me happy that even though you're tired, you still read the chapter and left such a long wonderful review. And I give you brownie points for actually reading my tremendously long A/N.

I'm sorry I brought up Coulson, I just had to though to make the pairings work. And I'm happy to know that you found it very insightful.

As for traitor Peter, I'm aiming to make him a softer sweeter boy in this story. Even though he may rub off as a bit twitch for now, he'll warm up to them and we'll see more admiring (?) qualities of his later.

And yes...SNAPE. That was exactly what I was aiming for. In fact, when I wrote that part, I had that exact scene playing in my head. I wanted to make readers feel a bit of the adult Snape we all know and love.

And as for the next chapter (chapter seven), my laptop decided to be cool and undergo major memory disk problems, so all my pre-written chapters up to twelve are most likely erased. I promise you though, chapter seven will be up and running at some point. I'm just taking advantage of using my free time to edit chapters 1-5.

Again, Thank you dear for you much support. I will NOT let you down!

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I do enjoy how they all had the same "dream" :D I ESPECIALLY liked how James and Sirius proceed with waking Thor their own way, even after being warned by Good Ol' Steve! Those boys, can never resist poking the sleeping bear now can they?! I have to agree with your A/N, it does seem that the ladies are having some hard times! I feel very bad for Natasha, I would NOT be a happy camper if I was put into Slytherin with Narcissa Black... It would be really hard for Natasha, since blood status is everything in Slytherin, and she's a muggle by Hogwarts classification. OH! I also loved the exchange between Sirius and Tony xD I think Tony could be another Marauder, even though I can't help thinking of him as Robert Downey Jr, and not some seventeen year old...
(Sorry, it's getting later, around midnight where I'm at, and I'm tired! So these reviews will probably be getting shorter... Doesn't reflect on your writing of course, just on my lack of ingenuity at this time!)
So, off to the next one! Great job, and I can't wait to see what Dumbledore has in store for these teens :)
Happy writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: Hayleekins,

Don't worry about your reviews getting shorter, I appreciate how detailed your reviews have been so far.

And yes, it felt very James and Sirius like if I made them Wake up the snoring god, despite Steve's warning. If Steve had been in Hogwarts long enough, I honestly do see him being either Head Boy or prefect.

And yes, I am giving Natasha a hard time, but things will lighten up throught the story for her. And yes, a muggle in Slytherin! Salazar's head might be spinning in his grave. But no one knows she's a muggle, so "sh". :)

PhoenixPulse

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Well! My predictions were pretty accurate!! Haha but Natasha in Slytherin?! Really threw me for a loop there!! Still, I could sort of see it, but she doesn't remind me of the other Slytherin types... She's like an Andromeda I suppose (a good Slytherin that is :P). And I thought Tony wouldn't be "Ravenclaw material" haha! I do like Tony's interpretation of Inferi though! I'm just gonna add, I love the way you write Thor! His is the only independent Avenger movie I've seen, but I can honestly picture him saying that.. He speaks very.. proper (?) and you've nailed that :D You did a great job with all of them honestly, I hear each of them in their own voices ^.^
And the bit about Regulus's flirting! XD I actually LOL'd (and it's rare when I write 'lol' and mean it!) I'm really curious though, because your A/N hinted that it was something different O.o and it also made me quite suspicious of Snape, but then again, I'm always suspicious of teenage Snape :P
Again, great chapter, and I'm off to read the next!
(oh, and by the way, I favorite'd this story already ^.^ I just love crossovers, and this one is done BRILLIANTLY so far!)
Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: Hayleekins,

Dearie, thank you for writing me such beautiful reviews. And yes, you were pretty accurate:)

As for Natasha, I honestly felt she was a Slytherin myself. She has that cunning edge to her and she doesn't let her gaurd down. But to his or her own, I suppose.

And yes, Thor's way of communicating is rather proper. I'm glad that you feel I did a great job with my characters. I was always a bit edgy, because I don't want them going OOC. And it makes me happy to know that I made you LOL at Regulus's flirting.

And thank you so much for favoriting! Your reviews have made my heart swell with happiness, and I feel as if I'm doing something right.

PhoenixPulse

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This is really cool, seeing the Marauders and the Avengers chatting! :D I am predicting:
Thor- Gryffindor (obviously xD)
Loki- Slythering (just as obvious)
Bruce- Ravenclaw (which seems like a no brainer, because he's brilliant enough to INVENT a time machine... thing)
Tony- Ravenclaw 9Again, could be a no brainer, but when I think about it, Tony Stark really isn't the typical "Ravenclaw" student.. He's slightly more... I dunno, more Tony I guess xD)
Natasha- hmm... She's hard to place (mostly because I don't know much about her honestly) but I guess I'd put her... Gryffindor maybe? Or Hufflepuff...
Clint- Same as Natasha really, best guess would be Gryffindor :)
Steve- I say Gryffindor, because he's a fighter all right! (I don't actually know his full story, but I know enough :P)
That seems like quite a lot in Gryffindor though, and I'm sure you're going to throw us a surprise or two :D Looking forward to the next chapter!!
Happy writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: Hayleekins,

Well, I don't want to spoil everything now, because that just won't be fair! But to be fair, you do have a number of them correct, so cyber cookies to you and a round of applause! :D

I'm sort of bitting my lip though, you did a good job of guessing. I hope my sortings do not dissapoint:)

PhoenixPulse

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OHMYGOSH FOOD FIGHT! I've never been brave enough to start a food fight, and my school cafeteria isn't that awesome :( Still, this was a great scene to read :D I have to agree with Sirius though, that IS a harsh punishment from Minnie! 400 points gone before the term even started! Still, I'm sure they'll manage to make up for it, with the Avengers helping and all, as I can assume they will ^.^ Great chapter, looking forward to the next!
Happy writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: Hayleekins,

Another wonderful review?! I'm glad you liked this chapter. I myself haven't been brave to start a food fight either, so don't feel alone.

And the whole docking off points is a bit harsh isn't it? Yet again, this is McGonagall, and this was the first ever food fight. But yes, actually they do make up for it later on, with Quidditch games and everything.

Hopefully you enjoy the next chapter!

PhoenixPulse

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Haha this is the second song-fic I've read for this song (not including my own!) and I found it very good! I'd be very interested in reading the additional story that comes with this one, its very interesting. Thats all I can think to say right now, so I bid you adeau!
Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: It's funny, I didn't realize there were so many for this song already until after I posted this one haha. I just read yours actually, though I'll review over there. I do plan to post more soon, though like I said I'm still deciding whether I want to make it a second chapter or just leave this as a one-shot.

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Hello! I liked the story, and I thought it was pretty well done! I'm not really in the mood to write a very long review, sorry, haha.. But I too am in love with Hunger Games, and I also wrote a songfic to this song! We have so much in common! hehe see yah!
Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: Heyy! thank you so much :) We do have alot in common, haha. Gale or Peeta? Thanks for reviewing
xx Beaux

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I really liked that :) It was a little short, but I think that, in this case, that factor did little to deteriorate the story on the whole :) Good job, and I encourage you to continue writing more!
Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

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Hm! I've never ever liked Lily-Sirius pairing (though I think that's only because I really really love James-Lily pairings) but this story is... something else! I really did enjoy this, and I think you did a great job. Because truthfully, you're right, even when you know you can be happy when you go down a certain path, it doesn't mean you really want to. The reason I didn't want to like this story is because i hate how true it was.. I had always imagined Lily being perfectly happy with James, and never wanting anything else (and I'll probably continue feeling this way honestly!). It was still really interesting, and you had some amazing lines throughout the whole story! It's sad, in a way, how Lily and Sirius won't ever be together, because in some ways I can see it working, and you just can't help but sympathize with Sirius!
Well, really great job! This is probably the first Lily-Sirius fic that I've read, so you are the lucky one to have such a title!! Congrats ;)
Happy writing,
Hayleekins

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Argh! You got wicked songs stuck in my head!! Gah! Other than that, it was pretty well done! I'm still a little confused as to whom this story is about... anyways, good job!
Happy writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad to hear that! And it was an original character, not any Death Eater we knew. :)

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Awe! Thats so cute! I haven't read or written much next gen stuff, but this was very good! Great job!

Author's Response: Oh thank you! I'm glad you liked it!

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WOW! This is such a neat story!!! It really explains why Percy was such a pompous git who blindly adored the Ministry. Very well written, and totally awesome :D
10/10!!
Keep it up; Happy Writing!
Hayleekins

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xD ahhh I love these type of stories where the characters read fanfiction about themselves!! It's sooo fun! hehe very nice, and the pairing bothers me as well : I never understood how people th0ought that THEY were gay... *I* didn't get that impression : anyways! Very nice :) Gave me a good laugh!
Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

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Oh WOW! That was so amazing!!! I can't even find wods to discrive this :O just amazing. And a little creepy, but in this case it's a compliment :D Good work, a very nice piece!!
Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: Yes it is a compliment, thank you :) I actually really enjoyed trying to get the creepy vibe for this one.

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Hullo dear! Before I forget: I think it would be interesting to hear something in either James' POV, or Sophie's perhaps, but that would depend on which direction your stroy is going (Revenge on the Untouchables perhaps? I dunno, just my thinkings :P)
I don't know where YOU are, but right now, its like quarter after 11 : I'm telling you this as an explaination as to why this review will be quite short, not unlike my last one!
So, I think this chapter is really good! I could see hardly and gramatical or spelling errors, and if I did, they must have been so minescule that I've forgotten it by now! So I am OFFICIALLY congradulating you! Cheers (Clinks butterbeers)!
... It could be the fact that I'm very tired, or the aformentioned improvements, but I really can't find anything to critique! So, another round of virual butterbeer for everyone- on me! Hehehe
Well, I bid you adeau, and Happy Writings dear.
Hayleekins

Author's Response: *clinks butterbeers* thanks!! well this chapter i edited it alot, chopping and changing because it just wasn't working out.. you know what i mean? wel anyways, im thinking of doing another Untouchables pov for the next chapter.. ((maybe lottie??)) Ive lately become obsessed with Sirius and OC so thats why... well i guess this is a good chapter then!! thanks :D
~Happy Writings to you too
Prongs_lover

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That is very good! I love the way you wrote Draco as such a happy, loving little boy, who accepted those he now feels inferior. The change is nicley done, and I love how it gives a bit of a background to why Draco is like that now. Very nicely done, I applaud you :) I'm surprised this hasn't gotten more reviews, honestyly : Well, Good work, and Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: Ohmygosh , thankyou soso much! Haha, yeah I always thought that Draco could've turned out fine if it wasn't for his family. I mean, he couldn't have been born cruel could he. Every little kid is a bundle of joy :D Thanks again! xx

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... This sounds like Voldemort is on a LOT of drugs! :D I wish my friends were as crazy and HP obsessed as yours are, I would love to make up ridiculous stories!! Haha but this was very funny, and very random... Good job :)
Hayleekins

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Haha that was very cute, and quite funny :) There were only some parts of the story that didn't make a whole lot of sense (After midnight her cart was a cauldron again, so she apparated home... but earlier it said she was a muggleborn so she couldn't... THEN AGAIN now I think about it, even if she was a muggleborn, she was still a witch, so she could have simply apparated in the first place? ... I DUNNO, just never mind)
It was a very entertaining story, and is assisting me with procrastinating, so I thank you :)
Nice work and Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

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Hello! I won't be able to leave an extremely lengthy review tonight, I am in the midst of finishing my Reader's Response for English that's due tomorrow :
Well! I've been checking almost daily to see when the story's updated, and FINALLY :) I understand what you're going through with the validation issues. they can be MEGA frustrating! I have failed to update one of my stories because the chapter is simply too gruesome for the validators.. They have their conserns though, and as much as it may frustrate us writers, we must respect their decision. So I forgive you for the delay :)
I like this chapter, I think that although it is filler, it can be kind of amusing for the reader, and it is something light and easy to follow. I think this chapter has few mistakes, besides the occasional spelling error (who am I to talk though, my spelling is horid! God bless spell check!!)
Good job, excited to read more :) Hope the validators aren't so rough on you next time! :)
Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: haha thanks!! i also have quite bad spelling, and sometimes spell check doesn't pick up on it (hence the mistakes) :S... im posting the next chapter asap, and i tried to update this one last week, but the site was down for two days for me and i couldnt post!! sometimes i think the validaters should just tell you all the mistakes in one instead of making you re-validate like five times, its seriously frustrating!

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First of all: this song, is AMAZING. I love it with my life, definately one of my top 5. It makes me very happy to see someone else appreciate such a great song! Secondly, the story goes very well with it :) I think you did a good job with the characters and their emotions. I think it is a really well done story, and I applaud you!
Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

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GAH I can't stand waiting!!! But for you, I shall be patient ;) I love this story to pieces, and I can only wish and hope to see a new chapter! I understand with your work though, so I'll forgive you :)
This chapter is definately a good one, leaving me with more and more questions! I can't wait to read more and find out, no matter how long it takes! I especially love your characterizations, they are always spot on, or close to that anyways :) I love it, and will wait in anxious anticipation for the next chappie :)
Thanks and Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

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Hey again! In response to your response on my review, I'd like to say that I know, it can be challanging to write someone older than yourself, simply because you aren't at that age yet and don't exactly know what a seventeen year old would think. I have the same problem sometimes (I'm fifteen), and its difficult because its something you can't change until you are that certain age. Don't worry too much about it, your chapters seem to be going very well :)
Now, onto this chapter: Your shout out made me smile so much! I just hope I was helpful enough to deserve such a big thanks!
Okay, now lets REALLY talk about your chapter :) It looks to be coming together very nicely. I'm excited to read the next chapter! Thats a very good thing to have: a want from the readers. If you have readers begging you to hurry up and update, you know that you are doing well in your writing. So I'll tell you now: Hurry up and update! hehe :) There is not much I can say advice wise about this chapter in particular, but I will definately review the next one and the one after that! You can rest assured that I'll be here :)
I may not be able to give much simply for this chapter, but all together my advice to you is just to keep going. I find that my biggest problem while writing is that I get stuck very easily. Whether I've submitted one chapter or five, I still find that when I go to write, there is nothing there. I wish and I hope that I have the inspiration to continue writing those, but once you quit a story, its hard to go back. So I advise you to keep going with the same story no matter how frustrated you get. I hope that you differ from me and don not have those problems at all, because its very troublesome.
Now, I really wish I could write a longer review, but I have Science, Careers, and English homework I need to finish :
Lots of Love and Happy Writing,
Hayleekins!
ps, do I get virtual chocolate?

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad not only me and my bestie like my story :D and yeah for awhile a did get writers block, but I've writen 7 chapters already but its just finding the timeto get the story from my laptop to my PC, although I try to do them asap :))

yes here you go: |_|_|
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~Prongs_lover

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Hello! I actually reviewed the second chapter before the first one, but I remembered something I didn't include in the other review:
If you are looking for a banner, which I would recommend, I would advise you to look at the-dark-arts dot net (I cant include links :$ ) you can either request a banner done by one of the artists, or you could navigate your way to the "Up For Grabs" section, which are already made banners that the artists are putting 'Up for Grabs' :) They can change the title for you, and soemtimes even add or take away a few things as well :) I know I have had many banners from TDA (check out my profile to see em ;D ) and I love it there!
Hope I was helpful :)
And if you're reading this first, please see the next review by me, Hayleekins, for actual feedback on your story :)
Thanks and Happy Writing,
Hayleekins

Author's Response: Thanks! I'll go check it out!

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