I wonder what happened between Louis and his parents, I mean to kick him out of the house...
But I love how the plot is progressing! How he found connections so quickly sort of reminds of Sherlock except Louis seems to be much kinder XD I glad you can't stop writing this story because this means *drumroll* more updates :P
But really I'm curious to see why this criminal is using muggle weapons, and of course I would love to know who he/she is :PAuthor's Response: Thank you. :)
Chapter three is about half written by now, so it'll probably be up in a few days. Report Review
I can't wait to see her flying lesson with Ollie :P Though poor Marian I do hope se gets an apology.
And I just wonder what Heather has to say about all this :)
Again another wonderful chapter and I love your portrayal of Oliver, it's spot on.Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for reviewing and reading this chapter! :)
Yeah, I know, she was only trying to help after all! Ollie just needs to get his sensitive manliness out now... err, righhhtt ;)
Sorry if I sound loopy! I probably shouldn't be responding to this on 3 hours of sleep but I decided to anyway! So yeah, there's an excuse! ;)
You'll see Heather's reaction in the beginning of chapter seven, don't worry! :) Thanks so much for this lovely review!
~VioletBlade Report Review
Yay! Thank you for sending me the link!
Great introductory chapter though I wish we could've learn more about his relationship with his parents but that'll probably come up later on.
I love this Louis and I can't wait to see what happens later on. It's odd how I can sort of relate to him in the fact that I can't stand crowded rooms.
Plus can I say you have a great summary, it pulls you in.
Ps will fave.Author's Response: Thank you. :)
Louis's relationship with his parents comes in more in... chapter three I think.
Thanks. Seriously this plot has me going. It's wormed it's way into my head. :) Report Review
This was soo sweet! I loved how you gave us information on Katie. Her feelings for Fred are realistic and sweet (especially since she can't tell who's who from afar.)
I was a bit nervous there when she was asking him out, I've never been in that position myself but I can only imagine how embarrassing it must be. Also I loved how you had Angelina and George in the background. :) (I'm happy you liked the title)Author's Response: I loved the title and have an idea on how i can tie the title into the actual story! so I was super excited about that and that was the deciding factor in picking that as my title! I'm really glad you like the story and my katie and fred I was really nervous since i've never attempted either! Thank you for reading and reviewing!
~Slytherinchica08~ Report Review
Wow... it's the sweetest Snily I've read. I loved the imagery throughout the story, I mean I wish I could write with such detail! This was amazing and when you referred to James and Sirius I just thought that the friends I didn't get the slash hint until the end :P
And I'm still aww-ing at the last line. (If I keep reading stories like this one I'll become a Snily lover)
(Ps: I loved the title)Author's Response: It's so sappy my teeth hurt from how sweet it is. ;) I didn't want the imagery to be too over-bearing, so it's great to hear that it was well-done. I definitely tend to write in different styles depending on what I write, so this was a bit of an exercise in getting back to my older style where it was a tad bit more flowery and poetic.
I love that last line! I just imagine Snape and Lily walking hand-in-hand to go home for the rest of eternity.
I'm totally not a Snily lover, but this was certainly really interesting to write and I can sort of see the appeal.
Thanks! The title came from a couple of lines of T.S. Eliot's poem, and I thought they went so well together.
Thank you for the review! Report Review
I imagined classes to be that way, poor Ginny this chapter gets you thinking about all she had to go through. I mean with all those ridiculous rules and what not.
(It's funny because I never know how long my stories are going to be...)Author's Response: Thank you! My main purpose of this chapter was to portray the effect Voldemort was having at Hogwarts, and I'm glad you found it accurate! Again, thanks for the review! :)
~Rosie Report Review
I loved this chapter though I had to read it by bits because it's so long. This must have been a challenge though (you mentioned you were used to fluff), I mean I wouldn't dare write a story about Ginny because I wouldn't be able to keep her in character XD(especially during the war.)
But you did and I'm curious to read the second chapter which I will go do now.Author's Response: What a lovely review! Thanks! You're absolutely right, this was a challenge for me. Yes I'm quite used to fluff and humor XD. But now that I've started writing stories like this, I'm getting used to a new writing style :D. Just goes to show, it doesn't hurt to try new things! You're right, Ginny is quite a complex character. I imagine her as a cool and collected tough girl, so I try to stick to that. :)
Again, thank you so much for the review, you just made my day! :D
~Rosie Report Review
It's a good introduction :) NOOO I like it in first person, first person can be limiting at times but that just me.
Awww the name Poppy is soo cute, but I wonder is it short for something? Oh and I love how Dudley lied about the dementors XD secret language Dudders? lol The only thing I disliked about this chapter was how short it was (but that'll change for the next chapter right?)Author's Response: It's not short for anything, just a pretty flower name. I figured it would be a nod to the fact that she's the granddaughter of Petunia. I do promise that the next chapter will be longer! Thanks for the review! Report Review
Don't worry there are people who are still reading (me being one :D) This story is one of the few first person POV stories I've read and liked. Laura is a fantastic narrator, she's likable, and despite being at death's door she's not overly angsty or anything of the sort.
My favorite part was when she started praying for Heather's brother.
Now I'm off to the next chapter.Author's Response: Oh I am so glad to see there are some people left!!! :) That's interesting that you don't like those kinds of stories normally! I'm glad you like this one though ;)
I am really glad you see that about Laura, because that's exactly what I've wanted to portray about her!
That was sweet, wasn't it? :)
Thanks so much for the lovely review and for keeping with the story even though it's been forever since there's been an update! :)
~VioletBlade Report Review
Caradoc Dearborn, I had almost forgotten about him :P But seriously I'm happy I stumbled upon this clever one-shot.
I loved it, I mean I could feel the suspense through out it all. But I think the best part was when he was remembering Dorcas's words, and the end.
Also the small portion of the Daily Prophet add a nice touch. It kept us wondering and had you not included it the story would've had an abrupt ending.Author's Response: Thank you so much for this! You actually have no idea how worried I was about this one-shot, so to get feedback like this is amazing. ^_^
I was so worried the suspense wouldn't work, (I suck at writing stuff like that) and i'm really glad you liked the part with Dorcas. I wrote this with another story of mine in mind (Canis Major) where the same character feature. (Although this is way further in the future than than CM is currently up to..)
I also wrote this for the 'leave the ending up to the readers imagination' challenge but didn't get it written in time, but that's why it ends the way it does. ^_^
Thanks again for this review. It means a lot.
- A. Report Review
I could've sworn I had reviewed this chapter already, but it seems I haven't so here we go :)
I like your opening paragraph it's intriguing and it pulls you right. I also like your take on Abraxas, the few times I've seen him he's more like Lucius but here it's like he's his own person. And finally a guy who doesn't respond to a girl's advances! Usually when that kind of scene is written the guy is unable to react and just accepts it, but I liked to see Abraxas disgusted at Jade's advances.
Now if you'll excuse me I'll review the chapters I missed *pulls up sleeves*Author's Response: Aww, Abraxas!
He's one of my favorites! I think he's much, much nastier than Lucius! He was one of Tom's original death eaters, and Lucius had to learn it from somewhere!
... Although I do think Abraxas is much more into himself than Lucius was. A bit like Draco, actually.
Thanks for the review! :)
xoxo Alicia Report Review
So after ages of not reviewing guess who is back? ME! :3 Hello just so you know I have been following this story :D
Anyway I love how the plot developing slowly we not only have found out what going on, her father's reaction and hers very realistic. I love your characters and your writing it's detailed and it flows well and I can't wait to see what happens next (if I have anything more I wanna say I will pm me you :) )
Plus can I just say Lee that's not how you woo a woman *shakes head*Author's Response: Hi :) Sorry for spamming your profile feed xD I'm really glad you're still liking it! I totally agree with the Lee thing. Oh deary dear, Mr. Jordan xD Thank you for reviewing! Report Review
Finally someone writes about Marcus! I'm soo happy I stumbled onto this :) You pulled the angry death eater off. Though we didn't see much in this chapter, like I wish there would've been a flashback or something similiar to show what was it exactly that got him into prison.
But all in all I loved it.Author's Response: A flashback might be written- that or Marcus will end up discusing it with Katie in a later chapter. Most likely the latter.
Thank you so much. :) Report Review
I liked how in this one chapter you provide with so much information without making it heavy and uninteresting. I want to read more!
ANd your description of Leanne's feelings God they're so accurate! (I know what it's like to like someone and have them be completely oblivious.) I hope you update soon :)
(I'm your first review!)Author's Response: Hiya! Thank you so much :D I'm so flattered that you chose my story to review. One thing that I was worried about was the infodump, so I'm glad you didn't think it heavy or uninteresting.
I haven't personally been in Leanne's situation and I don't know people who have, but I do sympathise for those who have feelings for their best friends, regardless of their gender.
This story is complete (only three chapters) so as soon as the next one is betaed, I'll be posting it :D Thank you so much for the review, and I hope you like the next two chapters.
~Soraya~ Report Review
I'd never read anything like it. I loved the last paragraph, even though we know how much it hurt Harry to see Sirius die.
I like how this one shot could perfectly fit into canon. I mean it would make sense for Sirius not to talk about Winfred. The wedding scene was lovely too.
Sorry if it sounds like I'm rambling on but I don't know what to say besides that it the most bittersweet one-shot I've read.Author's Response: Thank you! I like to think that it did fit within canon. I'm sort of like "missing moments" type of writer. It satisfies me for some reason. And rambling is OK, since you were saying nice things! :) Report Review
English is not your native language! I am shocked because it certainly doesn't look like it. (What is your native language now I'm curious)
I loved this chapter especially all the betting :) It was entertaining and you did a good job of establishing Gwen and James's friendship.Author's Response: Haha, thanks! I'm from Finland (:
Glad you liked the chapter, it was really fun to write! And thanks again for the swap (: Report Review
It's the first time I read Draco/Luna. (It's an odd pairing) But I liked it, and I understand Draco, darn Legos! I hate stepping on those little things.
It's nice and cute to see a sweeter side of Draco and I loved Luna :)Author's Response: It is a bit of an odd pairing, but I like it :)
Legos are the worst :p I don't get how something so small could be so evil!
Thanks so much for reading, and leaving a review :) Report Review
This was a nice angsty one-shot. I liked how your portrayed Lucius and Draco.
I wish though you had included more emotion, because while it angsty it doesn't pull at my heart strings yet (with a bit more description I would probably be in tears) Plus in one of the flashbacks you switch to first person and that confused me for a second there.
But besides all that I'm happy to see you tackled Narcissa's death, it's something I don't see often in ff (and like I said before your Lucius feels like Lucius)
I'm off to read something else that interested me in your page :)Author's Response: awesome(: thank you so much!
I know,I know *sigh* Ive never written in anything but third person,so...:P Next one will be cry worthy,I promise!
I know,and I wanted to read one,so I took matters into my own hands and wrote one(:
Thanks for the review(:
Ever Report Review
I had read this before but hadn't reviewed for some reason (bad me!) Anyway I loved it. Especially how you go back and forth showing us the different aspects of Hollis's life. I loved her and this chapter was my favorite so far especially when she mentioned Mountage that had me laughing for five minutes. (I still giggle at the thought)Author's Response: A fellow Weasley twin writer! I'm very flattered that you stopped by. Thank you so much for reading; I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) Report Review
All I can say is wow. I've never read anything this powerful about Bellatrix, I loved it from start to end. Especially when you talk about her feelings about her son.
I'm so happy I chose to read this.Author's Response: Thank you! I'm flattered by your words! :) Report Review
This was a powerful one-shot. I loved the imagery and how you tell Talen's story.
It reminded of Ariana Dumbledore in a way, still to the lengths people will go to hide something they consider to be a family shame, instead of accepting Talen they hide him.
I especially loved the last line, it was a really good closing line :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review!
Talen was a character in which I was given the name for and then had to create a story around him which at first I found difficult to do although I did rise to the challenge.
Ariana Dumbledore did cross my mind whilst writing this and you can hopefully see that with the idea of Talen being locked away.
The last line was designed to be thought provoking and quite powerful so I'm glad that you thought it was
Thanks again for the review! Report Review
I enjoyed this first chapter though I felt that Hermione was a bit out of character. And it was sort of odd when you called Mrs. Weasley 'Mrs.W.' (I also would have liked to see a little more action in this chapter.)
But besides all that I love Hermione/Fred or George stories :)Author's Response: This was the first thing I ever wrote, so if you thought it was perfect, I'd be amazed. The Mrs.W was actually an accident. I don't have a word processor on my computer, and when I spellcheck in an email, it sometimes cuts off half the word. I dunno why, I'm planning on going through and editing once this is done.
I love them too :) thanks for reading Report Review
I enjoyed this chapter and I wish it would've been a little longer. Though I did noticed that most sentences didn't start with capital letters and there were some commas missing (but that can be fixed by giving it another look :) )Author's Response: Thank you for your review, It would have been longer if I knew what to write, but at the moment I seem to be having a bit of writers block with the next chapter which I can hopefully fix soon *fingers crossed* I shall make sure I go back and edit the mistakes, so thank you for pointing them out to me :-D capital letters are my biggest problem, I rely too much on word correcting everything for me hehe. Thank you for reading and reviewing x Report Review
I like this chapter it's long enough to satisfy a reader and it entertaining. I would love to see Hannah moral struggle later on. Because even though she and Rose aren't friends I take but her reaction to Scorp's kiss she think it's wrong.
And nice twist on the school tournament, I would love to see how that turns out (though it would be interesting to have McGonagall explain why this tournament is being held)
I loved this chapter (sorry I took so long but I read Chap. One first.)Author's Response: She will have that 'struggle'. I couldn't write something this sensitive without giving her some sort of bad feelings for it. I normally don't like cliffhangers for that reason, but I couldn't resist with this one.
I'm excited for writing the tournament. That's a good point, with the explination, I didn't think of that, so thanks :)
Thanks for reading, and the reivew :) Report Review
I'm curious to see what going to happen next. I love the way you write Remus, again it's the best I've seen :D
Also I'm curious to see Tonks's reaction to the tale of Misery...Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much for your kind compliments :) I'm glad you like my Remus, i enjoy writing him so much. stay tuned if you want to see how it unfolds... Report Review
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