I vanished for two chapters I'm sorry! D: I was in a play and haven't gotten to the site again in ages, but good news is it's done and it's review time :D
NO I knew she would try and play it off!
Oh the twins, I love them
Maybe she'll realize she likes contact with Oli?
They know their friends far too well, it's close to the link between each other :)
LIES THEY SNOGGED! Oli and Mercy sitting in a tree..
Hah my thoughts exactly twins
Ew Nichol, I almost forgot him in my hooray for Oli parade
Would they stop fighting and aghh
Yes they are happy again...I think..yeah..they are :D
The culinary schools sound cool
After all Oliver can just apparate there
And the twins again, my favorite ginger
Okay to the next chapter and away! Report Review
You just had to go canon D:
Her going mental for real.
I think fanfiction has given me a permanent distaste for the canons.
I read this story all day btw, you are a brilliant evil genius and Artemis is one of the most lovable characters I've encountered.
Once again I think I'm dead writing as a ghost.
I half wish I could leave off with the death dates, then Remus and her magically get married and Tonks eventually marries one of the twins or some such thing.
Sh in my mind they are married, it's like when I watch Little Women and cut off right before she says no to Laurie, or when I turn off Titanic before Jack dies. They are now in my imaginary happy world of rainbows along with my other favorite fictional characters and I mean that in a really good way.
Okay it's 4am I should sleep, wait nope I'm dead pshh don't need sleep. (plus my eyes are puffy from crying I'd suffocate my eyes if I tried to now)
10/10Author's Response: Wow, for being dead, you certainly have a lot of thoughts left to share with those of us still among the living! :)
I like and support your idea of changing the ending in your mind. I would have liked to see Remus and Artemis married, but I didn't want to forget about Tonks either. (Maybe she married Fred instead?) I almost wish I could do that, but I enjoyed ruining their lives more. Thank you so much for your review! Report Review
YOU CAN'T LEAVE IT THERE? SO MANY LOOSE ENDS D:
LILY AND JAMES
REMUS AND HIS LOVER
SMASHING IN THE SLYTHERINS FACES
AWHHH I JUST FOUND THIS STORY :(
AND THEY JUST GOT TOGETHER!!!
On another note I loved it and woman you are my spirit animal :P
But now I am going to mope.
No, I'll be cool like Sirius and sulk :D
Too many smiles..they're like brackets they keep popping upAuthor's Response: ...sorry. I had hoped that there'd be just enough (not too too many) loose ends to give me a possibility of a sequel just in case, and that it could stand as an ending on its own. Its so so great to hear you liked it! Especially since I had so much fun writing it :)
Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing! I really love hearing any and all comments :D
ps - I think the smiles are infectious...may have overused them in my responses haha. Report Review
I meant to comment but I couldn't stop reading D: I like her voices, although sometimes you throw in non 70s things..
Sirius is scary like her and I think I've figure out it's a Sirius pairing lol :) I like voice 101! Oh and you have had me laughing through this whole thing, someone in my house is bound to wake up and decide I'm crazy for my random loud laughter :DAuthor's Response: yeeaaah, I have a bad habit of throwing in plenty of non-70s things (and not just in this fic haha). Usually because of something I'd have watched or read, or just felt like ranting about ;) But was there something in particular in this chapter? I can't remember really, aside from 101 Dalmations.but to be fair that came out in 1961 (I know my Disney :).
And yay for crazy random loud laughter in the middle of the night! Welcome to the dark side. (Don't even know how many times I've done that reading fics :)
Thanks! Love your reviews.
Cheers. Report Review
BWHAHAHAHA Oh dear, oh dear oh dear oh dear.
She simply kills me.
I tried to picture the drama queen
And then Truth potion?
:D Gahh onward I go!
Btw...is this a Sirius or a Remus pairing? I don't quite know yet...Author's Response: ^.^
Well I'm sure you know what the pairing is by now, but I do tend to involve Remus a lot and confuse my readers haha. Glad you're liking it!
Cheers. Report Review
The opening about them being her constant companion reminded me of Pride and Prejudice :D Now I will keep reading on and reviewing here and there, if it oddly stops I have finally passed out and will soon return.Oh and your character is very quirky in the not overused sense.Author's Response: very nice catch, my friend. I had, in fact, been watching Pride&Prejudice around the time I wrote the chapter hahah :)
And I'm glad you approve of my character. I tried to avoid making my OC a stereotype as much as possible (this time ;) so hopefully I succeeded.
Thanks for reading and reviewing! Cheers. Report Review
I AM NOT WORTHY!
Sorry, I'm dramatic :)
Okay so you've just received from what I hear is a good reviewer, I usually do reaction reviews and as you have so much witty dialogue expect a long reaction review on the next chapter. This story is very clever, not the usual make over thing you'd expect and the way it's written makes it even better :) The only thing I suggest is on author's notes check for mistakes like 'i' instead of 'I' you're writing is wonderful and grammatically correct (Unlike alot I've seen O_O) it's just the note thing. I look forward to reading the next chapter and giving a normal review! 10/10Author's Response: Oh, wow thanks! This is like...the longest review...ever! Thank you so much! Yeah, by the time I add in the author's notes I get a little lazy... :/ I will try to de-lazify (is that a word?) myself so that my entire story is grammatically correct. :) Report Review
Dang Lily and James! :D I love your story to little bits and pieces and can't wait to read more. I usually do reaction reviews so I'll do that next time :)Author's Response: So close, yet so very far. lulz. Thanks a lot for the review! Report Review
Bwhahahahahahaaha you had me rolling, all of this is suck a gpoy on Mary Sue's. I swear man I just love you for this story, male preggers almost killed me stone dead. Report Review
Your story is just aghh can't explain :D I hope you write more soon because it's got me reading continuoslyAuthor's Response: Hahah awe I will try to update quickly for you! I have another 2 stories to update before I start to work on this one :) feel free to read a one-shot or something while you wait ^_^ Report Review
:o Luna is perfect for George, never seen it done before though :D Love it! Report Review
Oh I love this story idea, I'll defnitly check back for updates now :DAuthor's Response: Thanks! There should be a new chapter soon XD Report Review
The water ball thing was such a cool idea :o Normally don't go for non-Maraurder era, but I'm a sucker for Seamus ;D The concept for this is really origional and I can't wait to read more and see what you do with itAuthor's Response: Yay Yay Yay!!! Thanks for the review! I'm glad that you like it so much...I felt kind of like this chapter was a little bit random... :| As for the water ball thing, I just came up with that literally out of nowhere. I had this random image of a little marble thingy majiggy, and I actually hadn't even figured out what it would actually do until I wrote the exact sentence where Cassie figured the thing out...heh, heh, guess the story likes to tell itself, eh? Btw, I love the Marauders too (haven't written anything yet...) but hey, who isn't a sucker for Seamus?? Thanks again for the great review!! Report Review
Poor Remus it's okay I love you still :D Report Review
Sorry I haven't gotten to read the new chapters til now but may I just say, awh :D I love your storyAuthor's Response: Hehe, I'm glad!(: I'm waiting for the next chapter to be validated... had some validation issues with formatting and stuff! But it should be up soon.(: (I think I also have the next two chapters written out... if you want to read it, they're on my fanfiction [dot] net account, "shelby95"!(:) Report Review
Oh dear, a bun? Really, a bun. My elementary school librabrian ran around with her hair in a bun D: Because I assume you mean the severe type not the pretty kind. Anyways aside from my mind rambling that as I read it I do like how you've started this out. I've seen the shy girl thing before but you've done it noticably better than them and the half sibling concept is fantastic. :DAuthor's Response: Hello again Dani_Saur, I see you've made it to my second story! I know, the quiet girl thing is quiet clichÃ©, but Elle is different (isn't that what they all say?) Elles hair is more of a plain-jane type bun so no one notices her.
I'm glad you like the Alecto/Amycus and half siblings concept and thanks for the review!
-Emily Report Review
Any of the above ideas for a sequel scare me O_O They all involve non-Ace/George lol Uhm so I just read all of that and I'm afraid I didn't review on the way because I was rushing to the next chapter. Normally I stay in the Maraurders era but this is absolutely brilliant! :D I think I'll go read your Sirius story after this. Are you doing a few more chapters for this year? After George leaves it doesn't really matter as much, though it would be cool to see how she handles time apart, but her fifth year would be interesting to read more about. Can't wait to read more! (Oh and you've had me laughing, except in the dark parts, through this whole story:)Author's Response: Hey Dani_Saur! I know, the sequels all sound scary. The future, the unknown, its all scary but that's something we're all going to have to get over.
I usually stay with Marauders too, because there's much more lee-way and you don't have to worry about messing it all up completely. Go read about Sirius! I hope you like it as much as this one.
Thanks for the review and I look forward to more review!!! :)
-Emily Report Review
Uhm I think the site deleted my review for this too because I had a few slips of language in reviews. (Really didn't mean to I have a bit of a loaded vocabulary when it comes to curses) Anyways I was a bit confused for a minute there but I caught up and can't wait to see it all explained. Do hope she realizes her and Sirius fancy the pants of one another as well but that will come in it's own time I'm sure :DAuthor's Response: Haha I'm sure we all do it *hurries to check reviews* haha don't worry.
As you say it will come in it's own time but Sirius will be around more often from now on :D
~Roonyskatoony~ Report Review
I think, though I don't know why, that the site has removed my previous review. No matter all it really said was it was a bit of a change but I'm still here reading :)Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you're still reading. Just remember to keep all language in your reviews 12+ :) Report Review
:O You can't just leave it at...oh geezus I can not wait to read more! Report Review
K don't like this Antony bloke...and I kind of miss Sirius :/ It's a lovely chapter though lots of detail and she finally get's to be a 'fairy princess' :DAuthor's Response: Awww give Antony a chance? xD
Sirius will be around more, promise :P There'll be a whole load more on the 'fairy princess' stuff later :P Report Review
Whoa O_o that was like a scene from Annie lol I love that she finally got adopted!Author's Response: Oh lord, Annie? Really? :O Hahahahaha
I like that she finally got adopted too ;P
Thanks for the review
~Roonyskatoony~ Report Review
Have I reviewed this yet? I can't seem to remember but I love it and Bellatrix needs to go fall in a hole :) Can't wait for more!Author's Response: Aha, I don't know but thanks for reviewing now! More should be up soon!
Lily :) Report Review
I have no clue what you mean about the beginning being boring I particularly love their fort and them carving into the bottoms of tables :D If you ever do a sequel to this Harry needs to find them because that was a brilliant idea. Poor Bryson! Geezus Potter is one nutter when it comes to his team. Can't wait as always to read more! ^-^Author's Response: Thanks for the review!
I'm glad you didn't think that it was boring - I know twelve thousand words can kind of drag, but it's good that this one didn't do that! I was briefly considering a sequel, but I think we'll have to wait and see how this story goes; see how it ends, you know? James has always been a nutter, and 'poor' always seems to accompany Bryson's name... I guess that's how it goes! Report Review
Okay so here goes another of my reviews :D
Mercy and Oli on a swing is amazing why can't she realize he's better than that Ryan bloke, and a quiet Fred and George would be scary.
Oh shoot! Are we going to learn the secret?!
Damn Olivers mum she almost told us what it was! I think you want to murder me with suspence woman :P
WAIT even his mum know? :o
Such lies Oliver, he always thinks she's decent, actually more than decent lol
That guy that wolf whistled is lucky he can still whistle, her friends are somewhat...protective
I think she may have just gotten him a spot on a team, and did Oliver get smacked?
Ha! So it was Perkins that smacked him, who would of thought :D ugh do neither of them realize they fancy the pants of one another behind that curtain?
Oliver is just as bad as his brother ^-^ he is pretty obvious about it all
Those are some uh interesting dance moves from Mercy I laughed trying to picture a kangaroo having a seizure :)
Oh and Kyle can go suck it
WHATTT? And watch them play that off later too aghh frustration because that was perfect
Sorry my review took awhile but ah well I have returned! It's no the best review by a long shot but I got a bit wrapped up in the story and didn't scroll down to write :] can't wait ot read more! (Especially after an ending like that!) Report Review
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