Well, although this whole "breaking into the office" thing sounds like quite an adventure and I'm really excited for it for some reason, my mind is screaming "NO, DON'T DO IT!"
I know Edie's upset about the whole situation, but it really seems like Rose letting her out of her "contract" is for the best. I mean, if Edie goes in there and puts HER article in the paper, then Rose is going to know it... and I can only imagine the backlash!!
And I'm also afraid for Dean and Seamus' jobs...
And I'm curious as to what Lisa does or doesn't know that's got her taking up for Oliver suddenly? I'm sure it could be hormones... but I guess we'll see! Another amazing chapter and I can't wait for more!! 10/10! Report Review
*Gasps* There are TWO chapters I haven't read?!? I don't know whether to squeal for joy or be upset at myself for not seeing the update sooner! Either way... YAY TWO CHAPTERS!! ♥
So I know there are a lot of other things I could talk about in this chapter, but I'll focus on the most obvious and shocking - Lisa!!! Oh my goodness, that certainly wasn't expected... no pun intended.. :P I wonder how she's going to handle that situation, and what Justin's reaction will be!
I'm also slightly concerned about what Justin was saying... about Edie getting into trouble over the whole "article" thing. I really think if ANYBODY should get in trouble, it's Rose... but I'm biased. :P
Anyway, another great chapter dear, and I can't wait to read the next one!! 10/10 Report Review
This story gives me so many feels that I don't know what to do with them!! :D
At first, I just thought it was going to be about Narcissa graduating, so I kind of had the whole "Congratulations" mood going on. But when Cygnus started bashing Dumbledore, I felt like it was going to take a different turn, and it did!!
I think you did an AMAZING job of portraying the characters' thoughts and emotions here. I LOVE Andromeda, but when you allowed me to see her through Narcissa and Cygnus' eyes, I was kind of angry at her!
Deep down, though, I know Andromeda was trying to help out her baby sister, and seeing Narcissa refuse like that was kind of painful. Buut after seeing the way she and Lucius act together, it seems like they kind of ARE in love... so it's kind of like Cygnus got what he wanted, but Andromeda got what she wanted, too... if that makes any sense.
I know Narcissa only got bold enough to go through with it because of what happened with Andromeda, but still..
Anyway, this is another amazing piece, dear! Absolutely perfectly written! 10/10!Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for this LOVELY review, and for making me smile even though I'm really too tired :D
I'm really happy that you thought that the characters thoughts and emotions were well portrayed! I love Andromeda too, and their whole situation is just so tragic. She wanted to help Narcissa, and yes, she did fall in love with Lucius and he with her, but I still think that she could have been saved from that dark life if she had gone with Andromeda. I agree, they both kind of did get what they wanted, but Andromeda also wanted to free her sister from their prejudices.
I am so, so happy to hear that you liked this! Thank you so much for leaving such a wonderful review and making my day :) Report Review
EEEKk! Another chapter!! I was bouncing up and down on the edge of my seat the whole time I was reading this!! THANK YOU for updating!!
I am slightly worried about "all of us" (whoever that is) coming to stay at Malfoy Manor! I really, really hope they don't find out Draco and Narcissa's secret!
And I'm wondering how Hermione's going to react to X's message (or lack thereof :P) I'm kind of afraid she's going to keep on assuming that Draco's trying to trick her, but I hope not!
Great chapter, and I can't wait for more! PLEASE update soon! (And thank you for the mention in the author's note!! ♥) Report Review
Oh wow. This is such a heart-wrenching piece. It's so full of emotion that I'm not sure if I want to smile that Dumbledore's going to be with his family soon, or cry because he only has one year to live. :/
This is one of the very few Dumbledore-centered fics I've ever read, and I have to say it's created a lasting impression! Your description here is amazing, the emotions you conveyed are amazing, and there were no spelling or grammar mistakes that I noticed... you are just one very talented author, and I'm definitely going to have to take a look at some of your other work, now!!
Amazingly good job, dear, 10/10!Author's Response: I'm so, so happy that you liked this, because I have such mixed feelings about it. It's sad that he's dying, but yeah, he'll finally get to see them again.
I'm so happy to hear that you liked the descriptions and emotions, and that I didn't seem to make any grammar mistakes. And thank you so, so much for giving me such wonderful compliments and being so encouraging, I appreciate it so much! :) You always leave such lovely reviews, and I don't know how to thank you enough!! Report Review
This is just SO sad, but also so cute! I loved seeing Dobby's perspective here, the way he kept checking to make sure Harry was okay... the way he watched to make sure Harry enjoyed his meal, it was all just too perfect and I can imagine Dobby really doing that in the series! I think the first part of the chapter really gave us some good insights into just how much Dobby was willing to do for Harry, whether it was making a simple meal or risking his life and loyally returning to a place he loathed to save Harry. Everything flowed really well and there were no spelling mistakes, it was truly a great read (although with a sad ending)! Great job dear, 10/10!! Report Review
Oh my goodness! This chapter is so full of feels! At the beginning I was really mad at Remus... well, actually I'm still pretty mad at Remus. :/ And I really feel bad for Tonks, all this has got to be really confusing for her. But moreso, it's got to be really confusing for Todd! Poor thing, loving a woman who he knows doesn't love him!
I kind of don't like the advice Jen gave Tonks. I mean, I feel like it's just going to complicate things. Hopefully Tonks will be able to figure it all out though! Great chapter, and great story dear! 10/10! Report Review
Oh wow. This is just painfully beautiful, dear! This is the first time I've read a piece from the point of view of a room, and I really am quite impressed and in love! And the fact that it just so happens to be the Hufflepuff Common room adds to that! ♥
Your description here is absolutely breathtaking. I could almost see Professor Sprout shaking out those dusty old quilts, could almost feel myself sitting in one of those dusty old yellow and black pieces of furniture. You did an amazing job of putting your reader into the room, and for that I applaud you!
There were no spelling or grammar mistakes, and I really loved your personification of the Badger's Den. A great job! 10/10! Report Review
Dun dun DUN!! This was a very interesting and suspenseful chapter, dear!! It started out just an "oh I hope they don't get into trouble" kind of suspense, but then when Lord Zajecfer appeared I was really getting terrified. What struck me the most about his disappearing was that he did it INSIDE Hogwarts, which is pretty much supposed to be impossible... I certainly hope he's not planning something much worse than what he did to poor Flitwick, but I have a bad feeling.
And can I just say that I ADORE that you named Filch's new cat Umbridge? I thought that was hilarious!! It certainly makes sense, Filch really loved that woman!
Everything flowed nicely here, and the description was amazing. Well done! 10/10!Author's Response: Thank you so much for dropping by!!
Thanks so much for complimenting my suspense! I really like making those scenes all scary and dramatic.
There are many different theories of what really happened. Akbus is actually going to discuss the different theroies- once I put it up, that is.
I had a tough time coming up with Filch's cat's new name, when Umbridge popped into my head.
Thank you so much for this generous review!
*Tears* This chapter is just TOO full of feels!! First I was sad over Tonks' letter about her dad going into hiding, then I was all excited and emotional over Teddy being born. And I was also upset at Remus for not wanting Teddy's middle name to be "John". And then with the battle, I was all sad again... it's like an ice-cream sandwich of feels!!
I mean that in a GOOD way, though! The fact that it was able to make me get those feels just shows how talented of a writer you are; you really help your readers to get in the story.
I think the description was great, the flow and pace were great... everything was great! Even the death scene that really made me want to by Molly Weasley in DH... :P 10/10 dear! Report Review
:o Have a nice day?!? Haha, Oh my goodness! Well that certainly wasn't the ending I expected!
When I read the story summary, I expected something similar to this (though admittedly not the ending), but when I read the first few lines, for some reason I thought it was going to be about Nick and the Bloody Baron getting back at Peeves. And then when the student showed up I remembered the summary... :P
Nick's story is absolutely terrible! (I mean that in a good way!) And I loved that you referred to Sirius as the only other person to have asked Nick about why he was (nearly) beheaded.
I'll admit, when Nick said that he was seen performing magic, I thought he was going to say that the muggles tried to behead him for being a wizard... you know, "Salem witch trials" type-thing. I'm rather pleased that it wasn't, though; this way it gives us more of a sense of just how long magic and the Ministry have been around.
Anyway, great story dear, with a shocking ending!
10/10 Report Review
Awww! This is really amazing... I'm upset at myself for not reading it before!
A lot of the Puff entries centered around Susan being a Dragon Keeper (mine included :P), so this is a nice and very surprising change!! And you included each of the prompts into the story itself so flawlessly that you really can't tell they're prompts.
For example, I thought it was just pure GENIUS when you talked about the dragon heartstring wand, and then you included the other details in the description by saying "the twelve inch, springy ash wand"... brilliant!!
This is a really well-written piece dear and I love it! 10/10 and going in my favorites! Report Review
Hahaha!! Oh my goodness, this is hilarious! When I read the first few lines, I thought it was going to go in a WHOLE different direction than what it did, but I was glad for that!
I really love how you inserted the fanfiction world into the story, and I adore how you countered pretty much every cliche that exists in fanfics in general, not just Dramiones.
And the spell, 'Canonius Maximus'?? Pure Genius!! This really is absolutely hilarious!
In reading your author's note, I'm just now realizing that Peeves really WAS forgotten... it's so sad! He was pretty much the "Fred and George" of ghosts in the books... I wonder why they didn't include him?!?
Anyway, this is absolutely hilarious, and it's going in my favorites! 10/10!! Report Review
Oh wow! I certainly wasn't expecting Narcissa to join the team! I wonder how that's all going to work out?!?
And I am SO mad with Snape right now... but I really, really hope he isn't the killer. And I also hope Lily and James make up soon!
Anyway, another great chapter dear, and I can't wait for another!
Update soon please!Author's Response: I wasn't expecting Narcissa to join the team either, but my hands were saying otherwise and BAM! Before I knew it, I'd included her :P Oh, well, you'll just have to read on and see, there's another Narcissa scene next chapter.
Snape's an evil git. End of story. He he, I'm not going to tell you if he is or isn't *waggles eyebrows* Lily and James will definitely make up soon though, I can tell you that, I'm not that horrible :D
Thanks so much, I'm almost done with Chapter 5 but I don't know when it'll be up...curse you exams! Report Review
I think Dumbledore picked the right people for the job, too! They've already found out one tidbit of information, and they've only just started! I can't wait to see where things go from here!
10/10!Author's Response: They're better than the Aurors! But they are no where near close to catching the killer, it's going to a long haul of collecting information and witness statements and the like :P
Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
I love this chapter, but for two separate reasons!
The first: I really love how you've given James a more sensitive side. He's always portrayed as a bit of a prat, so it's nice to see him grieving and, well... being mature!
Second reason: I LOVE James' "call to action" moment, if you get my meaning. He may not be done grieving, but he decides it's time to move on, to find Peach's killer. Brilliant!
And the hooded figure at the end is oh-so suspenseful and intriguing!
Well done dear!Author's Response: James is mature and sensitive, he just doesn't show it much being a teenage guy :P It takes something major like a murder to change someone and hopefully he'll grow into a man because of this.
Out comes Detective Potter! It's one of his ways of dealing with his shock and grief, he doesn't strike me as someone who would sit down and do nothing, just no.
Ah, I hope you don't collapse or something from the mystery :D I know I would, I normally do at cliffhangers!
Thanks again Jayde! Report Review
Wow. This is a very interesting and intriguing first chapter, dear! Right from the first line you've jumped right into the action and got the reader (in this case, ME) hooked!
The plot you've got going is awesome, and your description is amazing!
10/10 and off to the next chapter!
~JaydeAuthor's Response: Hello! I hate slow beginnings, I just hate them. I wanted very much to throw my lovely readers into a disoriented first chapter here they are immediately met with death and they have no clue what is going on :P
Thanks so much for the review Jayde :D Report Review
Tag!! (It's about time I read something of yours anyway!! :P)
This was a very interesting and well-written piece, dear! It just sort of jumped out at me when I saw the title because one of my favorite bands has a song called "Burning Bright", which I really love.
I've read a couple of pieces that deal with Regulus' thoughts, but none so far have been quite this in-depth (at least that I can remember). And of course I absolutely LOVE the star analogy!
As I started reading, I was overcome by wondering "What would have happened if Sirius and Regulus had spoken? Would they have apologized, made up? Fought together to bring Voldemort down?" And then as I read on and Regulus actually thought about contacting Sirius for help, it made those thoughts/feelings even stronger. That I can remember, no other Regulus story has caused me to wonder about those things, so HUGE kudos to you for being able to get me in that mindset; it just goes to show how talented you are!
The plot, flow, pace, everything is great, and I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors either. Great job dear, 10/10!!Author's Response: Ooh hello there!
I'm so glad that you found his thoughts to be in depth, as I really wanted to get into them as I always wondered what he must have thought in those last few days of his life. And I'm so glad that you loved the star analogy too!
Haha I'm glad that you were overcome by wondering about what they may have done, as I was too. I was almost tempted to go completely AU and make them BFFs :P I hope that Regulus wanted to make it up with Sirius, so I'm glad that you wondering the same too!
Yay for no spelling or grammar errors! Thank you for this lovley review:D
-Kiana! Report Review
This is just so cute and sweet and fluffy and wonderful and perfect and... a whole bunch of amazing and awesome things, all rolled up in to one! I was near tears before I even got halfway down the page!!
The plot of this is amazing, from the bit about babies not wanting to be born near Christmas to the "forgiveness" scene between Molly and Percy; truly amazing and brilliant! And I LOVE that you waited until the end for Percy to tell his Mom what they've named her, I can only imagine how emotional her reaction was!
The flow, pace and everything are just perfect, and there were no spelling or grammar mistakes. All in all this is just a beautiful, perfect one-shot and I adore it to pieces, which is why it's not going in my favorites!! ♥
Well done, dear! 10/10!
~JaydeAuthor's Response: Oh my, this review... I don't even know what to say that will make you understand how happy it makes me! Thank you, thank you, thank you!!!
Intentionally, I was only going to explain why Percy named his firstborn after his mother, but then those other things came naturally.. I'm so glad that you enjoyed them too :) Yeah, I wonder how long it took for Mrs Weasley to be able to stop crying after that announcement.. ;)
Thank you again for your wonderful praise! (I read your message, so I understand that it's *now* going in your favorites, and I'm really glad to hear it!) and thanks for encouraging me to want to write more stories like this one! :) Report Review
*Gasps* No he/she/they didn't!! (Rose and Oliver, I mean!) I've got this feeling that Edie is going to write that article now, just because she's so upset with Oliver. And a part of me wants her to, and a part of me doesn't... if that makes any sense.
I feel like Edie has every right to be upset and go kiss Jae and set up a date with him, and a part of me really hopes Oliver is there to witness it... But at the same time it really complicates things, I we certainly don't want poor, innocent Jae getting hurt!
I was surprised to see that Edie's not telling anybody what's going on, about her being sacked or losing her flat. I wonder what everyone's reactions will be when they find out!! And even though I know the situation's not ideal living with Lisa and Justin, at least Edie's got somewhere to stay (for now!)
Another amazing chapter, dear, and I can't wait for the next one!! 10/10!Author's Response: You just may be right about that article ;3 And the conflict with it does make sense. I feel the same way!
haha. I don't know why, but I just don't feel like Jae is so poor and innocent. I mean, (spoiler alert?) I don't have any plans for him to do anything horrible, but there's something a little off about him. He feels sneaky to me.
Yeah, Edie definitely has problems with talking about anything of substance. She can blabber on and on about Quidditch and beer, but that's it. Her passion for journalism and The Female Goblin Coalition is about as personal as she gets. You're right, though; I don't think it's going to go over well when everyone realizes she's been lying.
Thanks so much for this review. ♥ Report Review
This is just SO beautiful and heart-wrenching and just... perfect. It's bittersweet, but mostly sweet, and somehow I really feel like it's given me a peace over Remus' and Tonks' deaths, if that makes any sense.
It flows perfectly and I was honestly sad to see it ending so soon; this piece is wonderfully well-written. I love how it's sort of like a letter to Teddy, although I'm not sure it was intended to be since parts of it were "written" after Remus' death.
A truly amazing job, dear! 10/10! Report Review
I'm going to start this review off by saying that I'm normally not a very big fan of Dramione. (Not that there's anything wrong with Dramiones, by the way, they're just normally not my cup of tea). But I am a HUGE fan of romance; I just completely ADORE fluff! :)
I stumbled across this in the 'recently added' section the other night and the title and banner just sort of drew me in... (I know, I'm a hopeless romantic), and I read the whole thing in one sitting! I'm sorry I didn't review every chapter as I read because, quite frankly, I was in too much of a hurry to get to the next chapter!! :P
OMG I LOVE THIS! ♥ I never thought I would find myself saying that about a Dramione, but I adore it to pieces! Every part of it just makes me want to squeal with fangirl joy! And while I'm still not a big fan of Dramione as a ship, I LOVE how you've done it in this story! I love the characterizations and the plot, and just your writing overall... I just love it!
And I don't mean to keep going on about how I don't really like Dramione, I'm only saying that because it should show you how AMAZING your story is... you have completely hooked a non-Dramione person!! :P
And now for the helpless, crazy person begging: PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update soon; I need more!! ♥Author's Response: You. This review made my day, you have no freaking clue!! :D
I'm so glad that the banner was enticing enough to draw you in, I absolutely adore it and it was exactly what I wanted for this story. Hey, the fact that you left a review at all makes me extremely thrilled, so thank you! :)
Oh gosh. I'm so flattered I don't even know how to respond! I guess all I can say is thank you so much. :D It's an honor to read that my readers are enjoying this as much as I am, because I would write it regardless, but knowing that even one person out there is enjoying it makes it that much more worth it.
More shall be up within the week! It's been crazy lately, but I've finally got another chapter up and ready and I should be writing more often now. Sorry to have kept you waiting. :p
Again, thank you so much for the review! It really does mean a lot to me. :)
~Mischief_managed18 Report Review
Oh no; poor Edie!!
It's bad enough she's had her privacy invaded, and the whole business with Rose and the article and Oliver and her job and EVERYTHING, and now she's been evicted?!? I really, really hope things start looking up for her soon; I'm getting really worried!!
PLEASE update soon! ♥Author's Response: I was worried about the eviction just seeming unrealistic. Like, there's already been so much that's gone wrong with her. But at the same time it felt unrealistic that she could survive off such little money, and the next logical srep would be losing her flat.
Thanks so much! Reviews are hard to come by these days and I appreciate hearing your thoughts. ♥ Report Review
AAAh!! Another cliffie!! MUST. READ. MORE. NOW!
*Scurries off to next chapter*
(By the way, Seamus' line: "I'm an Auror!"? Hilarious!)Author's Response: Hello again! Glad you thought that was funny ;3 Thanks! Report Review
Hello there dear!!
First off, let me just say CONGRATULATIONS on winning the Writer's Duel! Well done!! And now, on to your review! :P
I really thought this was an awesome first chapter! You had my attention from the very beginning and maintained it throughout! I thought you PERFECTLY described a celebratory night at the bar with friends, and your description really allowed me to feel involved with the story... it's almost like I was there watching everything instead of reading... if that makes any sense!
I really, REALLY love Edie's characterization. She's the complete opposite of a Mary-Sue, which makes her very likable! And you weren't forceful or anything with trying to convey her personality, you did it by simply showing her reactions to the situations she was in, which was awesome.
Even though this is the first chapter, I feel like I already have all the background information I need. Without being boring or droning on and on, you've managed to catch me up on everything that's been happening, and THAT takes talent! I didn't see any spelling or grammar errors, and the flow is great!
Well done, dear! 10/10!Author's Response: Thanks so much! I was so excited about winning the duel xD
I'm glad that this didn't seem like too much of an information overload. I've been trying to work on that ever since a few (very helpful!) reviewers pointed it out. And of course I'm so glad that you like Edie. She likes you too. ♥
Once again, thank you so much! Report Review
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