Aaah that is really nice and 'cute'. Not as in bad cute but a good cute. The story is a nice idea just one typo near the start you put 'But I still I hoped.' instead of 'But I still hoped' correct me if I am wrong ;) I also like your portrayal of the characters and the way you deal with miscarriage and a desire for love. This would also be nice as a 'full-length' story but I really like it as a one-shot too! I really like this story. Well done!
scorpiusandrose :)Author's Response: I've been thinking about expanding on this one for a while, I still haven't decided though. Thanks for the encouragement. :) Report Review
Aaahhh!! There aren't anymore chapters! I WANT TO READ ON! Oh well, I'll just have to wait. As always an excellent written chapter, I like how Pansy has been introduced into the mix and she is a lesbian- nice idea!
I love the tea room. I have a perfect picture in my head where my mother and I used to go when I was little. The descriptions are stunning! One little thing, near the beginning I think there is a typo: you have written 'stuff' instead of 'stiff'.
Amazing! Please update soon!
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for another happy review! I'm really glad you enjoyed Pansy's showing up. I was really excited to bring her into the mix, she's a great opposite to Draco, they're a lot of fun on the page. I'll let you know when I update. Thanks for reading!
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Excellent as always! Interesting twist to the plot, I can't wait to read on! There was a small spelling mistake near the beginning, you put 'site' instead of 'sight'! But that is only a small mistake!
As always, beautiful emotions and an excellent development of plot and characters. The relationships are shown well. All previous comments apply!
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: Thanks! I worried about this chapter, and actually rewrote it. I wanted to make sure that it definitely moved the plot forward, but that it did some solid characterization for Astoria. I'm really happy you liked it. Thanks!
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Oh, the descriptions in this chapter are beautiful! The emotions are brilliantly written and the story so far is very moving. The relationships are shown extremely well and I can't wait to read on! Which is why this is so quick!
I love how Goyle is in this story and he is so in-character! I have to say again that your descriptions are beautiful and so vivid! The dialogue brings all the emotions to light! The development of the story and characters is well-paced! Can't wait to read more!
Amazing chapter! Truly outstanding!
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: Hehe, you make me feel like such a rock-star! Thanks for all your compliments. I'm really thrilled that you're enjoying this piece. I love dialogue and description, obviously, and really wanted to capture a different kind of feel for this fic. I'm super excited to have another happy reader. Thanks!
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Really good! I love the humour of this chapter especially in the dialogue! Sarcasm and irony are used perfectly! I just love the dialogue!
The relationships between the characters are portrayed well especially within the Malfoy family which we get to see more of. I just love the way the relationships are shown! The differences between the older generation and the younger are shown very well and this factor of the story is very interestingly explored.
The characters are well written and the element of pride is portrayed well. The coldness of the Malfoy home and family is in-keeping with the books and explored well. I love how Draco seems to be breaking away from the Malfoy tradition and really becoming his own self not controlled by his father.
The concept of arranged marriages for convenience is developing well and I especially 'love' the way that it is mentioned that maybe Astoria and Draco should not marry after what has happened. The plot is developing nicely and I am particularly interested in the fact that Lucius knows about the death of Astoria's father. How does he? Plus, I love the cliffhanger at the end.
In summary, I love this chapter and can't wait to read on! Nothing glaring ;).
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: I'm so glad you loved this chapter! I did too. I knew that because I was dealing with all this 'heavy' stuff that a bit of humor would help the reader not get too bogged down. I really wanted to get into the strange elite world of the Malfoy's, so an arranged marriage seemed the right way to go :)
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Hello! I can honestly say that there is nothing 'glaring'!
This chapter is very well-written, the descriptions give you a great vision of the place. The character of Draco is well-thought out and his thoughts are portrayed well. Astoria and her family are introduced well and her character is shown well throughout the chapter.
There were a few things that caught my eye though. Firstly, the word 'sconce', I don't particularly feel that this is a word that is commonly used and therefore it could 'annoying' for readers to look it up. However, it might just be my naivety and sensitivity;)!! Secondly, I feel that Draco and Astoria's relationship is confusing as you don't quite know what 'stage' they are at. However, this again might just me and my brain!
:)I can't wait to read on!
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: Hi! Thanks for reviewing! I do know that I use some rather 'dated' language but it falls naturally into the story and I have to admit, that's probably not gonna change. I think there are some really antique elements to the world Draco lives in, and the best way to capture that is language. It is something to keep in mind, cause I don't want to loose my readers over it, hehe. Thanks for pointing it out.
I appreciate you checking out this first chapter. Thanks so much!
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I think it is really good but it is also very sad. It is funny though, and well written. Also, a very clever idea!
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
That was beautiful!
“Because I love you, you big, stupid jerk!”
Hilarious! Report Review
I officially love this story! I makes me cry with laughter! There are a few grammatical errors somewhere but they're not a big deal! Characters=perfect, plot=perfect, style=perfect
story = perfect
Please, update this soon! Pretty please ( hopeful look/puppy dog eyes!)
scorpiusandrose(forum name, it shows where my allegiance lies!)Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad!
Yeah, I'm pretty bad with spell checking and proof readign and stuff so I really do apologise for that! Lol. :)
THANK YOU so much. That's such a lovely thing to hear.
I'm SO hoping I will! I've just been uber busy recently! But I'm still loyal to this story so there will be an update. :)
Thank you so much for writing a review, it really motivates me as a writer.
Again, thank you! :) x Report Review
I love Teddy!!! I really like this story! I love how you portray the characters especially!!!Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) It's nice to hear who you particularly like, too. :)
Thanks for taking the time to review. :) x Report Review
The long-awaited return of Lee Jordan to the commentary!!! I found that part hilarious! I really like the way we see Rose and Hermione's relationship in this chapter. I am really enjoying this story and cannot wait to read on... Report Review
Please update this story! It is hilarious! Report Review
AMAZING! This is one of my favourite stories!!! Report Review
Update this please! Soon... I can't wait to read on. The plot is really good as well as the characterization. The story flows well and there are no grammar mistakes! It is just perfect!Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it. Hopefully I will update at some point, but I can't promise when. It may take some time. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
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I like it! It is nice to have a good Rose/Scorp romance to read! Report Review
Now there is a good twist! I am sorry it is the end, I want to know what happens next!
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: A Sequel is being written as we speak! Report Review
Ah! Romance! Finally, a bit of slush! I loved the action/adventure parts but as I almost always read romance it was nice to come back to a familiar fluffy comforting genre. Excellent flow,plot and characterization as always!
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: Yeah, yeah, I knew it was time. I knew I would put them back together. You knew I would. I just had to make sure I got everything sorted. Report Review
Hm. I am not quite sure what to think about Kingsley after this! But I love this story! Excellent writing!
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: Yeah, he needed to rip them a new one. The trio had gone a bit off the deep end this time. There are consequences. Report Review
Amazing! I love the plot and your style!
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: THanks for the great review! I loved this chapter! Report Review
Really good, I can't wait to read on!Author's Response: THanks for reading! Report Review
Excellent! The mystery is beginning to unravel! Love it!Author's Response: Yes, it is. I can't wait for you to see what happens. Report Review
Excellent! One thing you have put 'Hermione loved be a part of this family' instead of 'Hermione loved being'. Also, I thought that Harry gave up the Elder Wand. Otherwise, very good. I love the plot.
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: Thanks for pointing out the mistake, I will get it corrected ASAP! Harry never gave up the elder wand, he just said he didn't want the wand itself. He still is its master, even if he doesn't use the wand itself. He said he was happier with the Phoenix wand. Although the physical wand itself lies in Dumbledore's tomb, Harry is still its master. Well, until Ron. Report Review
Excellent! Now reading on...
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Excellent though I think there are a few grammatical/spelling errors somewhere. But lovely and emotional and I can't wait to read on! I almost forgot that I needed to write a review I was so eager to read more!
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: I will take a look during the final edit to see what I can find. This chapter was very emotional to write, its hard for me to go back and read it. Report Review
An action packed chapter! Exciting as always. No grammatical errors that I noticed. I love your style of writing and this story flows really well. The characters ring true and I can't wait to read on...
scorpiusandroseAuthor's Response: I loved writing this chapter, thank you for taking the time to review! Report Review
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