That's really cute and sweet. I like the voices for each of them, George still sounds mischievous when he's depressed. It's just much more muted. I like how Angelina and Fred had actually talked about what would happen if he didn't make it--it seems real and like something he would possibly do.
The way that you incorporated the quotes from the songs and books worked nicely as well.
Thank you so much for asking me to read this! I'm flattered beyond belief that you care about my opinion so much. Keep writing!
hqwwAuthor's Response: thanks sooo much for reviewing :) after I read your beautiful story, I was like, this author's the one to go to for a review :)
I got really lucky on the quotes :) I loved the challenges so much, and they all seemed to fit together, I couldn't help combining them :) I'm also really happy you liked their characters :) I tried to keep it as true as possible and still put my own ideas in it, I'd like to say I succeeded :)
I'll definitely keep writing, I'll be going for that as a bachelors degree :)
thanks so much!
p.s I love your penname :) Report Review
fun and witty, I love the fact that Malfoy is ending up as a good guy in a very natural flow! Report Review
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