Great concept, but the grammar was a little confusing. Easily fixable, anyways, great story. :)Author's Response: Well thank you, and yes I always try to find the grammar mistakes but my eyes never seem to point them out, but I always try my hardest. I hope you can understand my words though, and I'll try to edit it whenever is possible. It's just there's such a high demand all the time, and I need to get the chapters finished, but thank you. Report Review
I just found this story and I have to say that I love it. It's so different from most of the stories out there, and Willow and her actions seem so realistic. I loved how she decided to agree to their terms, yet still keep up some sort of walls. Or at least tries to.
On the other hand, I know she mentioned playing quidditch as a chaser in her original outburst, and that James needs a chaser. I'm guessing that's not a coincidence and I'm wondering if James will convince her to join the team when she has to spend a week with him.
I have to say that I love how you craft each character and their actions and reactions. Such as Lily's reaction to what Willow is telling them, and her regret thereafter. I also love how she connects with Remus and Sirius in different ways. Such as how Remus can sympathize with her walls, and how Sirius understands the restrictions her nickname gave her.
Again, I love the story and I can't wait for your next update. :)Author's Response: I have NO idea why I'm only responding to this now. I think I convinced myself that I had, when clearly I hadn't!
I'm really glad you like it! And thank you so much for saying it's different, I get a little paranoid sometimes that I'm just trotting out cliche after cliche!
You have it exactly right regards Remus and Sirius. Both of them have seperate reasons to identify with her meaning different ideas about how to draw her out.
I have a chapter in the queue right now! Fingers crossed it will be up in a few days and thanks for reviewing! :)
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Great start, makes me want to know more. There were some grammatical errors that confused me a bit, but other than that it was great. Can't wait for more! :)Author's Response: there's plenty more coming! :D Report Review
I love your style, it keeps the story interesting and the readers guessing. :) Your writing is great grammatically and stylistically as well, and I love finding a story like yours, because besides the basic points of correct grammar and an actual plot, you have a distinct style. Your characters are realistic and very well portrayed, and the progression of their relationships with other is very realistic as well. All in all, I love your story and can't wait for your next chapter. Report Review
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