Annie! I loved this so much!
I love how you showed a different side to Sirius than what is normally portrayed. I have always believed that it is there, but most people just show him as a lady's man and nothing else. People also make it out that he doesn't get hurt by what his mother said, but it's so obvious that he did because it's pretty much impossible not to, no matter what your view on the situation is. So great job with the characterization.
I also like the way you showed his feelings for Violet. They were caring and normal thoughts, rather than the typical thoughts given to him. He liked her for who she was, not just for her body.
Again, I loved this! (h)Author's Response: (h) THAAANKS AMEZ!
Your reviews always make me so happy and thank you for being a lovely wifey. (h) I'm glad you liked the new side to him - I always thought he wasn't quite the character normally portrayed in stories, even if I'm a real sucker for some ladies-man!Sirius. :P Report Review
Chris!! Thank you for entering my challenge and I'm so sorry it has taken me so long to review! You know what RL can be like sometimes.
I really liked this! You used your prompt well and I'll just pretend that this school has barely any rules ;) I like that you went AU and had Harry and Hermione (I assume) as teachers and that you changed the house names. I'm not sure how you pronounce the first house name though!
I did get rather confused over who all the characters were as they just seemed to be appearing out of nowhere, but I like that you had house unity which did need that number of characters.
I loved the sassy innocence at the end between the students and professors. I can't believe they got away with it and got the points. When I was in school, I would never have been able to do that, but you made their relationship with the professors so that it was possible and you showed that well.
I like the prank that you chose to pull and it would have been highly amusing if it had happened in the books/films. It sounds like something that would have put every student on edge which would have been hilarious to watch, so good job with that!
Overall, I really liked this! Keep an eye out for a blog (hopefully soon) with the results in it!Author's Response: YAY!!! The review I've been waiting for.
Yes indeed, RL can be a total drag. But it can also help, infact a lot of what I wrote last year was developed on the hour long drives to work each morning.
I'm glad it worked satisfactorily (sorry about the lack of rule breaking, but in fairness I did write it fairly quickly, I may expand it further on down the line). I always work AU, especially in the next gen because I vehemently disagree with the epilogue, but that's another story. I love the idea of Harry and Hermione as teachers. I think that they'd be so good. And yes, different house names because its a completely different school :D Acheron [ak-uh-ron] was one of the rivers of the underworld, but I just liked how it looks and sounds ;P
Sorry about the confusion, they are the main characters of my AU next-gen set in another school in another country, so most of them are OC's. That story is already very well developed in my mind so it just flowed out like that once I got going and I didn't really think about how people who haven't read Life at the Academy would view it. I may also go back and try to fix that one day too. I glad you liked how they interacted though. They're kind of a combination of the Marauders and the Golden Trio.
It's how I see the Hogwarts students relationships with the teachers would have been were there no overarching war and fear of death. Not all the teachers are like that, but they are kind of Harry and Hermione's fav students so there is often interactions of that nature between them. I'm happy it came off well rather than odd though. And that it came through properly despite the lack of backstory and history in the piece.
I would love to have seen the Twins turn the Great Hall into a massive swamp. It would have made such a great scene in the movies. I think the students would have found it more amusing than been put on edge, btu maybe I'm just too close to things to see it for what it is.
I shall be keeping a weather eye on the horizon for that blog post. Though I'm pretty sure mine didn't come out as well as I'd hoped, so it sure won't be number one. Thanks for setting such an awesome challenge, I really enjoyed making my entry.
~TyrannicFeenix~ Report Review
I told you this when I first read this, but I love it so much! You really showed how Hermione ended up the way she did, but you just made me want to cry. The way Hermione had tried to integrate herself back into her parent's lives was so believable and it must have caused her so much pain. She knew so much about them and had so many memories of them, but at the same time she knew that they had no idea who she was and she just had to keep going.
I like how you showed Hermione's thoughts about conversations over Christmas dinner. It's one of the few times a whole family gets together, but you always find that they tell the most boring of stories sometimes. I can really see Hermione getting bored and wanting to get away, especially considering everything else that would have been on her mind. I can also see how she would hate the way that things we happening. Despite how much she loved them, she was so different from the Weasley's because of the way she was brought up. She was used to how things had been with her parents. Everyone's Christmas is different and adjusting to another after such a long time isn't easy.
I only have two tiny things that I picked up on. 'Thankfully, her rainbow-dyed hair did keep her talking about mildly interesting charms every now and the.' I think the final 'the' should be 'then'. The second thing is that I did get slightly confused by the last paragraph. My interpretation was that she was half dreaming, but I'm still not sure what actually happened in it.
Again, I loved this! Great job with it!! (h) Report Review
Hey! This was a really great entry in my challenge! I loved it and the way you incorporated the meme quote into the story, it really worked well.
I adore the way you portrayed Amycus! I have never really thought of his character very much as we never really see much of him, but this really brought out his twisted side that we assume from the little we do see. You made me pity those in the class more than I already did and also showed a Slytherin as a nice person who didn't agree with everything that was happening. That isn't done often and it made a nice change to see it more realistically.
The way you wrote Neville was so well done. You didn't show him as the shy and reclusive boy we used to know, but more as they brave boy who stood up for what he believes in. Some people do forget that on occasion.
This had a really nice flow and it all seemed to go at a very good pace that didn't overload you with information whilst not boring you! I didn't find any mistakes in it at all which was nice, so well done on that!
Overall, I really loved this story! Sorry for taking so long with the review! RL kind of sucked a lot for a while and got really busy, but keep an eye on the blogs on the forums and I'll announce the results as soon as I can!!
-caomoylAuthor's Response: Hello!
I loved this challenge, I had SO much fun writing it! :D
I thought of Amycus because I felt the character needed to teach someone else on this, so the only two evil people I could think of was Amycus and Alecto. :p
I've always seen Theodore Nott as a kind of nice person. And I know all Slytherin's aren't mean and evil, so I felt I should try and chuck that in there. :p
Neville is boss, so he couldn't just be shy. And he got so many bruises because he stood up to Amycus/Alecto so I knew in DH he wasn't a shy, bumbling boy any more.
Wow, no mistakes?! That's gotta be a first! ;D
It's okay about the review, I understand that RL can be frustrating! I'm excited for these results!
Thanks for creating this challenge and thank you for the review! :D Report Review
Can I go give Sirius a hug now? I try to never think about this because I don't like to think that parents could do this to a child, even though I know it does happen. Pushing him out and always having Regulus always seem better is something I hate, but you did it so well! I never really thought that Sirius started pulling pranks because of his parents, but you made it seem so believable that it just seems to true and canon now!
Seeing everything you wrote about all the sacrifices Sirius had to make because of being considered a traitor made me want to cry and run and hug him forever. Everything we know and love him for was all because they hated him and cast him out.
I loved this so much, despite hating what it was about! Great job!!Author's Response: Go give Sirius a hug Amy :D It seems sad but thats just how I imaging Sirius being pushed aside for Regulus.
Don't think its canon because canon is so much better! I just want to give him a huge hug too! Report Review
I loved this too! You had me in so much suspense all the way through! I never tend to look at who stories are about before I read them, so I was so convinced all the way through that this was Ginny and Harry! And then when I reached the end and found that it was Molly and Arthur I just sat there in shock! When Molly was saying that he had left her before, that's when my mind switched to Ginny because of Harry leaving her before he went horcrux hunting! The similarities you showed between the two (whether intentional or not) give the story that extra bit of confusion.
All the way through I also wanted to know what she had done. I was literally fighting with myself not to read past where I was so that I could find out. I wasn't expecting her to be pregnant though! I thought she had done something wrong or quit her job or something. The way she thought about it and thought he would hate her; I just couldn't imagine anyone doing what she was expecting when given the news. But when I think about it now, people do over think things and she could easily have thought the worst, especially if he had done it before!
Again, I loved this! Amazing job!!!Author's Response: More Amy reviews :D
I'm glad you liked it and if you havent guessed I like suspense and angst!
It's not Ginny and Harry, I kind of edged towards them a little bit before deciding Molly and Arthur would be more interesting.
She hadn't done anything, she was only pregnant but she was still young and naieve. She did overthink it a lot but hey it worked!
I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
I loved this!! You managed to draw me in with the first line! It had so much impact! It felt like the end of the story at the beginning and gets you wondering how the story is going to end. You knew exactly who it was about, but never did I expect it to end the way it did.
The way you described how things happen when they died is completely knew; nothing I had ever thought of before. But I really liked it! It seems so..true, but at the same time you feel it impossible, despite you wanting it to happen to you.
Tonks' feeling about being ripped away from Remus really made me want to cry. You wrote it so beautifully and believable! I'm so glad they got to be together in the end; to live forever together whilst both being dead. It was a nice way to end it and to keep me happy ;)
The end of the last line, '... yeah right.' gave a nice little bit of Tonks humour to it which I really loved! At the beginning, I wouldn't have thought having that on it would have worked, but it really did. Like when someone dies and that one person puts a little smile on your face and makes everything feel okay again, even for just a short while. That's how it felt when I read that!
I loved this (if you couldn't already tell)! Great job with it!Author's Response: Yay Amy! I love reviews off AMY THEY MAKE ME SMILE!
I'm glad you didn't expect it to end that way, that was sort of what I was going for as I hoped to mirror Tonk's unpredictability in this. I'm glad it was new as I like people to see how I interpreted the story. I know it feels impossible but it might happen.
I didn't want Tonks to be ripped away but I really liked the way it seemed to flow so I wanted to make it sad but the reunion at the end helped it.
I love the last line too... Its Tonks everything is meant to be great. Report Review
Oh Jenny, I loved this too!! How do you write such amazing things? Again, I couldn't take my eyes off it! I was on the verge of tears the whole way though! You had me from the first sentence!
I was drawn to read this just by the summary! I don't know why, but I just love reading about George after Fred's death, it's just so full of emotion and sadness, and it kind of helps with my mourning of Fred since I really loved him as a character!
I love how you have the bits of writing in italics showing that he is talking to Fred! It made the story have even more of an impact!
I also love how you have George visiting all the places he's been with Fred, thinking about all the amazing memories and things they did together. It adds that essence of sadness that brings stories like this to life!
The part about Hogwarts having its heart bombed out..I just..want to cry. The centre of hope, of love, of pure awesome getting taken away because of one man. I .. it's not fair! I'd never thought that could happen, but you have made it seem like it could, like Hogwarts could just die at any point. Sure, it will come back to life slowly, but so many people were effected by what happened that it would make it so much harder!
Back to the beginning of this, that first section really showed how broken George was, how he could never be the same again! And that kills me inside! When you think of George, you place Fred with him, but not any more. George is alone..it's not fair! I loved the jigsaw analogy! It just made so much sense, but gave me a new wave of sadness at the same time!
Again, I'm making no sense! I'm just trying to convey all my feelings about this and failing! It was just so amazing! I loved it so much!!Author's Response: Hello again :)
Aww, I'm sad I nearly made you cry, but happy too. I'm glad you liked it! The bits where George was talking to Fred was hard to write, and thinking of meaningful places, but I'm glad you liked it, as well as the imagery in the Great Hall.
Thanks for a fantastic review x Report Review
I absolutely LOVED this! I had to take my headphones off to get rid of the Skype beeping because I wouldn't take my eyes off the words for a second to read what was being said! You had be entranced from the very beginning in a way that made me want to keep reading forever. It was like I wanted it to scroll for me because I didn't want to ruin the moment by making a noise.
Your characterizations were so unlike anything I have ever thought or read, but it just worked so perfectly!
At the beginning, when there were no people, just beautiful words, I kind of forgot what I was reading for a second, like it didn't matter to me if it was about HP or not, I just had to keep reading it! It was like being half-snatched from a dream when I started reading names!
In my head, when I read, I usually do it quite fast, but with this I just had to take my time, whilst eager to read more and more. It was like I had no option but to read it how it would be thought! I honestly can't wait to listen to this as a podcast because they usually bring out even more emotion and amazingness!
I always knew the Malfoys hated having Voldemort in their house, but this..this ..I don't even know how to explain it. It just gave it all a whole new side in such little space! The last line..I just..I wanted to cry! I wanted to just run and hug her and make everything bad disappear so that she could be with Lucius forever like she deserves!
Gah, I'm probably not making any sense right now, that messed with my head so much!
You did an amazing job and I loved it so much!!Author's Response: AMY!
I'm so so so so happy you liked this :) I wanted to put a new spin on why Lucius and Narcissa let Voldemort into their lives, and I'm glad that as a hardcore Gryffie, you sympathised with them!
You make perfect sense- but maybe that's because we're so similar. And also *shooes towards HPPC* yes! Podcast :)
Thank you so much for such a wonderful review xx Report Review
My first thoughts as I started reading this were 'There was another Black brother?' because I had never thought of Regulus and Sirius being friends like that, nor for Sirius to seem like he was following the pureblood ways. I guess, in a way, I had always imagined him as a pureblood-ways hater for as long as he was able to make his own decisions. But then again, he could have just been pretending.. *reads on*
To think that it was Sirius' impression on Regulus' life that gave him the bravery and strength to defy Voldemort is something I would never have thought about. Regulus being the one to hide all this away makes me want to hug him. I really never did imagine him as someone who would want to be like Sirius, but lacking the courage to do so. But it all makes so much sense! It's like you're piecing together the missing parts of his story, and you have done it perfectly! *reads on* Now...to think that it was Sirius walking out that caused Regulus to join the death eaters..wow..I just..never thought of that before. I can see how it would, even if it wasn't the whole reason. The one person he relied on and was in awe of leaving will have made him upset, and you do stupid things when you're upset..even though it took him another year, he would have still been bitter. *reads* And now I want to hug him again! Thinking again that the only person who really cared for him was Sirius, and now he didn't have him, so he craved the attention of another. But his only choice was the wrong one, but he took it anyway. That really does show his Slytherin side; thinking of his own wants and needs rather than the right thing to do.
I had never managed to work out why Regulus had a change of heart, but the way you wrote it, with him overhearing things makes sense, especially with his previous want to not be a part of this! Having Kreacher actually seem to care for Regulus is a side we have been told about, but I never really thought it true until I saw it written down!
The last two paragraphs..they...they really made me see why he did it. His hero, Sirius, he had told him that he could do something great, though I doubt Regulus believed him, but he was ready to die because of the care Sirius gave him and that alone makes me think that maybe he wasn't all Slytherin.
I LOVED this so so so so much! It was amazingly written and I have a totally different perspective on the whole situation; something I thought would never happen!
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I have never felt bad for Narcissa before, but right now I want to go and give her a big hug! After reading it, I can totally understand how she would feel so left out and how she could be easily forgotten!
Everyone always thinks of Andromeda as the Black who meant nothing to the family since Narcissa followed their ways. But being the middle child kind of means that you follow your older sister so I guess she never really had much of a choice, but she didn't get much acknowledgement for it anyway. The youngest is always left out which allowed Andromeda to be separate. Aww, I really do want to hug Narcissa so much and that is really saying something since I don't really care for as a character in general!
I LOVED it!!! Awesome job!Author's Response: MASTER!
I'm sorry it took me so long to get back to you! Anyway, I'm very glad that you liked how I wrote Narcissa. I think she definitely gets forgotten or just overlooked, it's very sad!
Thank you so much Master!!!
Love you muchly,
Ely xxx Report Review
That has to be the most awkward thing I have ever read ... but I LOVED IT! After reading the first paragraph I had a few ideas of who it could be, but I was never expecting Filch! It was just so terribly ... awesome!! *shudders*Author's Response: Hehe, I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was fun to write, because it was just so horribly ridiculous. Filch is a very attractive man, you know. Totally underrated with the Harry Potter world. There ought to be more stories about his beauty. Report Review
LEVANA! *hugs* HI! *waves madly*
I love this! I love how you wrote Ginny, so realistic, feeling alone and like she is living in the shadows of her brothers. I had thought before about why she would trust the diary, but the way you wrote it makes complete sense! 'Ah, so you are like me? Starting at Hogwarts poor, with second-hand supplies and robes?' Of course she would trust someone who she thought was just like her!
I did think that her choice to suddenly start writing in the diary could have been drawn out slightly since it seemed to just happen, as though you were missing some thought process. Maybe just a line like 'Since nobody has used this, maybe I could.'
I don't know why, but the line 'When she looked back down she watched slightly horrified and fascinated as Dear Diary disappeared and was replaced by: Diary? That's not my name.' made me laugh :P It sounds just like something I would say, though, coming from Tom Riddle, it sounds like he is wondering who would be writing in it and he is trying to soften them up with a little joke.
I also like how you used 'She remembered her father saying that she shouldn't trust something if she couldn't see where it's brain was.' It shows that you have either read the book too many times and remember it, or you did your research, which is good :D
Whilst only being a small chapter, it still managed to be long enough to keep me hooked and I can't wait for the next chapter! The last line, 'He made small, kind and polite comments, hoping to gain Ginny's trust and confidence; and he did.' made me want to know more, made me want to know how he had done that, what was going to happen next, even though I already know how it is meant to end!
Awesome chapter! I can't wait for the next one!
-Amy :DAuthor's Response: AMY!! *hugs* HEY! *waves madly back*
I'm so glad you love it! I really relieved that the way I wrote Ginny is realistic. I'm really trying to keep this as realistic and cannon as possible. I really want this to be the story that you can't judge by the title and pairing. Though I'm sure most of the people here will pass by it because of the pairing. That makes perfect sense to you? Yes! *pumps fist* That is exactly what I was hoping for. Hmm yes, now that you point that out I will fix that. Thanks :)
Oh! I love that line too. I wanted to add some dry humor into the story. Now that you mention it, that does sound like something you would say :p Yeah, I've read the book more than once; it's one of my favorites.
I hope you enjoy the rest as much as you enjoyed this chapter!
~Levana :D Report Review
Wow! Another amazing chapter! I loved it so much!! I loved the emotion and the biterness in the first half!! And Ron's continuing hatred towards the Malfoys while Hermione has learnt to accept them for her daughter! That is so in-character!
I really want to know what Nate did to Rose! The suspense is killing me!!! I would have loved it if Hermione hit Draco again! =P
I can't wait to read the next chapter! *tries to focus on it* I CAN DO IT!! =PAuthor's Response: AMY!! Thank you so much for your review! I think Ron would definitely have a difficult time ever forgiving the malfoys but I think that Hermione definitely would be able to! Thank you so much for reviewing! Report Review
She got sent back to 1926!?! Now I am really curious! '...it still made him cringe. Like when a professor sent her nails down a chalkboard for attention...' Is it bad that I had shivers down my spine when I read that? =P I was surprised when I saw that it was Lucius!! I wasn't quite sure who it was, and I don't know why I didn't think of him, but I actually thought it was Regulus for some reason, but that is probably because he was a Black. Also, you had me thinking if Narcissa had a brother or not =P Another amazing chapter! So much suspence! Amazingly written! I can't wait for the next chapter =DAuthor's Response: Did she? Snap! *squish* Thanks Amez! Report Review
Wow, absolutely amazing!! So much suspence, so many things I want to know!! I can't wait to read chapter two! You write so beautifully!! I loved it! Even though it was pretty short, you said all that needed to be said! Awesome job!Author's Response: AMEZ! You're amazing :D Report Review
Wow, I wasn't expecting Draco and Astoria to love Rose. I had always assumed that they would hate her, but I guess, seeing as Draco changed towards the end of the war, that the feelings between Draco, Ron and Hermione must not be so bad.
I like how you showed that Scorpius had tried to get rid of his father's image by trying to make himself less like him. It's somthing that I can imagine him doing. (Did that start in this chapter or the last one? I forget)
I thought that the house elf was believeable, not wanting to go free. In fact, I'm surprised that any house elf was ok with being free =P
Another great chapter, well done =DAuthor's Response: I think it's really fun to write the opposite maybe of what you would expect. I think that the war and the aftermath changed draco a bit, broke him down if you will. And i think that if they really loved their son they wouldn't mind having Rose, and come to love her as their own.
Thanks Amy! Report Review
An amazing start to the story!! I loved it, and I can't wait to read the rest =D The characterization was perfect and believable!!
If I had to pick one line that has made me want to keep reading, it is definatly this one: "No you didn't, Rose. You didn't kill him. He's alive." I can't wait to find out what happened!!!
*runs off to read the next chapter*Author's Response: YAY AMY! I'm glad that you liked it! I really enjoyed wriiting it and you are AWESOME! Report Review
OMG Wow! That is so amazing!! You nearly had me crying, and that is impressive!!! I think this is the first time that I have wanted to give Draco a hug. He was written so beautifully. And I was not expecting Connor to be his son. I had never thought of Hermione as a one night stand sort of woman, but in the circumstances it was in it totally made sense!!
It is probably the only Dramione I have ever enjoyed reading (not that I have read many) It wasn't over the top and lovey dubby. It was nicely done.
CaoAuthor's Response: Yay!! I'm glad you liked it! I know, That twist is kinda weird, isn't it? I clearly wrote this before DH was written, so it kinda isn't canon anymore, haha. If I were to re-write to make it canon, I don't know that Hermione and Draco would have had a son, but I like my idea before DH :)
I'm glad you enjoyed reading it! Thanks so much for reviewing! Report Review
ANNIE! Wow..I started the last review like that..Anyways, I loved this chapter too!! I was really expecting Jo to tell Professor Waskruski about Fenrir..but then she didn't =O *runs off to Gmail*Author's Response: Muahaha! You never can know (actually, I don't even know!) what Jo is going to do, do you? :) Thanks dear and have a super week! :D Report Review
ANNIE! Amy loves this so far!! And you know I suck at reviews so having your wifey love it should be enough ;P =D But I is going to read the rest now because I'm not going back to school until 1 (YAY) and I really can't wait =DAuthor's Response: A review from my wifey is the best thing of all! :D And YAY for getting to read more! I might be gone, so just leave me comments. :) Thanks for the review dear! :D Report Review
I have one word for you Annie.HAHAHHAHHAHAHAHAHA...You do make me laugh..it was definalty worth not having maths now..I thought I was going to be bored...but this has made my day =D I absolutely love the names...one question though..Where did you get the bits of the names from? =P It was so terribly written that it was amazing!!! And well done on not putting Fenrir in it! I am so proud of you! And I think I am going to ask you about the JamJellyJell-o thing just to annoy you...so I expect and explanation! *pokes tongue out* You really do love Mike and Ikes, don't you? =P
Anyways (yes, I said anyways..even if it is an American thing!) I am going to finish the review here or it will be long enough to be a fic =P Byee!! I really do love this!! *squish*
Amy =DAuthor's Response: Thanks Amez! :D Muahahaha, I trump maths! SCORE! :P The names? They just sort of came when I was writing the story. This is a first draft, just meant to be insane. :P YAY! It's was amazing! Ish... but still amazing! :D *dances* HAHAHAHA! About Fenrir... well, just look at the chapter title! :P Jam = A fruit preserve. Jelly = Jam minus the bits of fruit/jiggily yicky stuff if you are not from the U.S. Jell-o = trademarked by kraft and expensive jiggily yicky stuff that you put water into, refridgerate it, and VOILA! You have a nice batch of Jell-o! :P Oh yes, I do! I do! I do!!! :D (You guys don't say "anyways"!?!? o.O) Bye and thanks dearie! :D *squish*
-Annie Report Review
I absolutely love it!!! It is so cute =D
And, I have to say, you have a very awesome beta ;DAuthor's Response: Aww, thanks Ams! :D
Hahahaha, and modesty is your middle name, right? :P
But anyway, thank you so much for betaing this for me, dear! :)
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I loved it! =D You nearly had me crying! It was so beautifully written!
10/10 =DAuthor's Response: *squish*
Thank you so much Amez and I am so glad you liked it! It's one of the few Marauders Era fics I will be attempting to write, so I am glad it lived up to the expectaions ME has! :D
-Annie Report Review
Oooh...I loved it! =D =D Aww..look at them falling in love =P
10/10 =DAuthor's Response: hehe :) thanks for the review hun! :) glad you like it! Report Review
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