My beautiful Eagle twin!
When do you get the time to write these amazing things? Honestly woman, you must tell me all your secrets :3 But honestly dearie, this chapter was lovely and it certainly brightened my day! I hope you had a lovely Christmas and I will see you soon!
x ElyAuthor's Response: It's a simple answer, Ely! I just work, and go to school, and write, and have almost no other life besides. :D In all seriousness, I cannot thank you enough for making another trip back here to read something of mine; each time you do, it just brings a smile to my face.
Hoping to talk to you soon, and thanks a million, Sugar Glider! ♥ Report Review
Is it selfish that I just want Regulus to forgive Barty? (I've become a massive shipper of them due to this story!) Though, if I were in his shoes then I totally wouldn't give Barty another chance. Anyway, very good chapter and can't wait for the next one.
Oh and, which of your other stories will you be updating after you finish this?
Thank you and 10/10!
x ElyAuthor's Response: Nope, not at all. If I could rewrite JK's ending I'd have Barty and Regulus rush off into the night and live happily ever after farming rice in Cambodia for the rest of their lives. T-T
Unfortunately, he doesn't really have time to forgive Barty. :(
Um, it'll be In Too Deep and The Lion and the Serpent. Then I plan on finally finishing Murder at the B&B, then it'll be my nano novel. :D Busy times...Lol.
Thank you so much!! --Jenna Report Review
This is a beautiful piece, so beautiful. I'm lost for words for what even to say. I read your other Tom piece- Only Power Remains, and I have to say that you are a flawless writer. I really enjoy your things! Looking forward to seeing some more, hopefully with some more Tom.
x ElyAuthor's Response: Aww! Thanks so much! You are so sweet. xx Report Review
I figured since I've known you for a couple of months now that it was about time I read something of yours and so, here we are. I actually started and finished this story last night (I stayed up until 1am for this :P) and I have to say that I adore it.
I haven't read much Astoria but I really love how you've characterised her. I also loved the comment you threw in from Louise a couple of chapters back.
So once again, amazing story and I hope to start reading more of your stuff now.
x ElyAuthor's Response: Hey Ely!!!
Ee, I was totally not expecting to find a review from you, and certainly not expecting that you stayed up til 1am reading this! That's insane!
Thank you so, so much. I too haven't read a lot of Astoria, I actually avoided it whilst writing this as I didn't want to cloud my version of her. I wanted to write an Astoria different to those that I have seen, mostly in Next Gen as an adult, usually cold and distant, a typical pure blood. So, I created a warm Astoria, as I believe she was the one that turned Draco around. In my mind, he tried so hard after the war to make a good name for himself, but it was Astoria who brought out the humanity and warmth in him again.
That's just my opinion of their relationship (and it's probably not conveyed here very well at all :P).
Yeah, I just couldn't resist throwing that quote in!
Thanks again! *hug* Report Review
Do you know what my goal is now? Do you? Do you? *points to your review count* Oh yeah ;) This is your 100th review sweetheart.
I just, I don't even know what to say but you honestly deserve every single read, review and favourite you ever recieve on this story. I think you are honestly an inspiration to me and I bet you are going to get so many readers who adore you (less than me of course :P) because you are just so amazing.
I hope you enjoyed my little review fest as much as I did and always remember that you are worth everything and that I'm always here for you.
I love you forever.
x ElyAuthor's Response: I for some reason didn't even connect that this was your goal. And it made me cry, to know what you did for me. :3 I'll never be able to thank you, never! ♥ Your support gives me so much confidence.
I love you, Ely! Report Review
By far, that canon scene is definitely one of my favourites and I love how you've changed it slightly to fit Beth in. I think it's probably the best adaption that I've ever read and I'm not just saying that because I love you. Sort of unrelated to you, I think this is a big turning point for James I know that I adored him so much more when he saved Snape's life (as much as I already loved James).
I think Beth is amazing and I've mentioned that before but I also kind of feel like she could have been a part of the series canon. Like she seems like someone J.K could have created and that just proves how amazing you are.
x ElyAuthor's Response: I love that scene, too -- it was one of the reasons I started the books in the last year of the Hogwarts years, rather than jumping ahead to the Order days. :D I knew I wanted to write it.
I am so honored to hear you think Beth could be canon. :) I know a fifth Marauder -- especially a girl -- is cliche, and so to hear you say it, it means a lot! ♥ Report Review
It's me.Back again because you are amazing as I've told you in pretty much every review I've left so far I believe but honestly, you are.
I do adore how you write James *brings out Team James forever shirt* He is such a sweetie to Beth and I think that would be the true him. Therefore, I will forever respect you. Like seriously...forever respect you.
I'm really bad at reviewing my friend's stuff because you're all so amazing *explodes from amazingness*. So thank you for being amazing and never ever stop. You mean so much to me :3
x ElyAuthor's Response: James! I love exploring the Marauders -- I've sort of, kind of, not really written them before, but they are a hoot and a half (excuse the really bad clichÃ© there, or whatever the term is for that literary device). I have so much fun getting them into mischief, and it's like, "DON'T LOSE FOCUS OF THE STORY." Because really, the plot's only going to get darker as the books go on... Ah, but I won't get ahead of myself!
You mean so much to me too, Ely. You really do. ♥ MUCH LOFF. Report Review
Because you're super amazing and intelligent you've probably already guessed why I'm going to review the next four chapters for you. Yes, one reason is because I love you *rolls eyes* Another is because you are made of 99.9% of awesome but you are missing the big reason Rach! *shakes head* Disappointing...
I'm hoping that this is making you somewhat laugh, in that lovely little country of America that you live in (in case you forgot). That sentence made no sense whatsoever but oh well! I love you and I love Beth and Severus (big step) and the Marauders and just everything. So thank you being made of 99.9% awesome.
I love you.
x ElyAuthor's Response: I actually did miss the big reason... until it became painfully apparent. :D I am useless at midnight, useless! It's amazing I ever get anything done.
I was laughing so hard as each new review rolled in, all the way over from Australia. I love you, Ely, and you'll never know what you've done for me tonight. :3 Report Review
More reviews for you to respond to. Yes, I'm a true Slytherin in the sense that I just laughed evily up there but you never saw that. *ninja music* But you are also cruel with that cliffhanger, even though I know what's going to happen now I remember reading this for the first time and wanting to stab my phone until you updated. Yes, I am mad Rach and I can also see you sitting there laughing at me. *hides*
I have told you before that I'm not a big read of Snape which is 100% the truth and honestly, In The Black is the only Snape/OC I can even go near let alone read. You should feel totally honoured :P As much as it totally goes against everything that my heart believes in (Team James FOREVER!) I actually kinda, possibly, maybe adore how you write Snape! *hides forever* 10/10
I love you.
x ElyAuthor's Response: These responses are going to get more and more senseless as they go -- I can feel it. ♥ I just -- I don't know, I sort of forget sometimes that I have silent readers. But knowing you're one of them, that means a lot to me. And it reminds me they ARE out there!
Pfft. SNAPE FOREVER. I am honored, though, that you've chosen to read ITB. I hope I can do it justice! -hides- Much love, Ely. ♥ I cannot express my appreciation. Report Review
Since my whole review everything you've ever written thing failed epically yesterday, I have come crawling back to review at least a couple more things for you. The probably is, my brain is not functionally well at the moment due to the fact it's like boiling (overheated laptop does not help).
So um...I LOVE YOU and YOU'RE AMAZING! And...*thinks* OTHER AMAZING COOL STUFF WITH BE INSERTED HERE!
But seriously, I love this story as I've mentioned to you previously and I can't wait to re-read it as I review for you. So I shall see you soon. I'm sorry my review wasn't as amazing and yours but I honestly love you forever.
xx ElyAuthor's Response: ELY. I CANNOT DO IT. Your reviews turn me to a mushy pile of affection and I can never hope to recover. -hugs-
I am so glad you like this story -- it means so much to me that my friends do, it's very gratifying. You are lovely, my dear, and I am so thankful you left me so many wonderful and sweet reviews. ♥ I love you! Report Review
Since it is roughly 3am for you, I decided that I would read and review as much as humanly possible before you wake up and check. So here we go...
I've already told you how much I love Beth but in case you missed it... I LOVE BETH! *insert millions of exclamations marks* And I just love every single piece of this story and you. I will see you in the next chapter!
I love you
xxx ElyAuthor's Response: This is THE sweetest thing ever done for me. Period. End of discussion. To know that someone so dear to me, one of my greatest friends, loves MY STORY...
There are no words. :3 There really aren't.
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I believe you deserve this review so that you can always remember how amazing you are. You are honestly one of my favourite people in all of this world and definitely, without a doubt my absolute favourite American. I'm so happy that we became rival twins with Lizzie and Shelby, otherwise I think my life would be very Rachless- and that is horrible. So please, Remember what I told you and continue to be as amazing and completely irreplacable for as long as you live.
Love you forever,
xx ElyAuthor's Response: Ely, I could respond to this review a million times, in a million different ways, and not a single one of those responses would be able to convey my appreciation for this review and my love for you. ♥ This means the world to me, and every time I look at it I tear up.
I'll only remain the way I am if people like YOU stay in my life -- so never leave. -hugs-
I LOVE YOUUU. ♥ x 1,000,000 Report Review
WOOO! FIRST REVIEW!
*this is what happens when you link me to things Steph*
This is so amazing Steph, I'm so proud of you *huggles* YOU'RE AMAZING! I love how you've written Regulus (favourite character ever Author's Response: And the cut off review... Now I can't remember the rest and I don't know where I put it. :S
Anyway I will work on what I have (which isn't much but meh).
Ok... I am so so so so so glad you liked it! I loved writing it and I am glad others really enjoy reading it. It just makes me so happy that the things I write are making others happy too :)
And yes Ely I do know Regulus is your favourite character, you can thank Lizzie for the inspiration :)
Anyway, thank you so much for the review! I am so glad again that you liked it! (would never have guessed I was happy :P)
- Steph -
That's last line there, blew my mind. At first when you mentioned the one leader I thought it was Snape for some reason, don't know why but my mind's been a bit boggled lately.
Anyway, I'm really enjoying this story so far and I think it's definitely unlike anything I've ever read before, in an extremely good way.
I loved your characterisation of the Founding Four, I thought they were all very believable though we never really got a chance to read them in the books. Hope this was helpful and I'm sorry for the shortness.
x ElyAuthor's Response: Hello again ^_^.
Master Riddle? :O I know right ^_^ I like twists :D x Nah not Snape, there is no Snape. :O Theres only a select few teachers, but they aren't really needed because Riddle keeps all his students in line, although porr Master Riddle is about to go through a life of hell :(
Different isn't it :P I hate writting out plot lines though :/ But at least this plot line is finished and there will be a lot of twists and turns.
Founders I like them as Portraits personally. I have them as Ghosts in another story but I like them better as portraits ^_^
Shortness is fine and your always helpfull thank you xox. Report Review
Hey There, I'm filling the review you requested from me :)
I think you did really well considering this was your first Founders story, the only thing I would suggest is to make their speech a little more period accurate. I know it's hard, but I would suggest getting a quick beta who could help you fix that up in a flash otherwise it was really well written :D I love Erik, and how you've written him. I hope this review was helpful in someway.
Thank you for requesting,
x ElyAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! I'm glad you think I did fairly well. I'll check out the style and see what I can improve. Thanks again!
--Emily Report Review
For starters, I think I should mention how you are steadily becoming one of my favourite authors here. Anyway, On to your review. Starting from what you've requested, you said you were unsure at the summary? I'd fix up the 'things are - slowly - improving' into something more like 'things are, slowly, improving' I think it gives it a little bit more a flow but you are the writer, this is only my opinion. And secondly to do with the summary, 'but the wounds will be hard to heal as one of them is dead' I would change it to 'but the wounds will be hard to heal with her eldest sister gone' or 'with Bellatrix gone' or something like that, again my opinion.
You then said you were worried about the characterisation of the young Blacks and their relationships- I think you were wonderful at writing them as young children and I actually believe that this was all a scene taken out of the books, if that makes sense? The last thing you wanted to know was about the starting of this chapter, I think that is was wonderful and it definitely sucked me in.
I hope this review was helpful and I can't wait for you to update.
Thank you for requesting.
x ElyAuthor's Response: Aww, really? Thanks! *hugs*
Yeah, I kinda wrote it in a hurry and it sort of stuck as I couldn't think of anything better. I'll definitely think about incorporating some of your ideas into it - they'd probably work better!
Thanks so much for your wonderful comments - they made my day!
Aph xx Report Review
Last review for now *cries and clings on to Steph's ankles* WRITE MORE!
But now, onto the serious stuff. One compliant, the switching of the point of views is a tad confusing, I know it's important for you to write it like that and all. That's just my opinon *hides*
Otherwise, I love this chapter. I love how you've characterised all three of the Marauders *hugs* You are an amazing writer and I love you forever!
x ElyAuthor's Response: Haha, ok ok... I will get there :P
I get that it is confusing and I swear it is only for this chapter... it just had to be done, and I didn't know how else to make it so you get both their experiences without making two chapters and I didn't have enough to make two chapters.
Haha, I am glad you still liked it even with the confusion :) And yes, the characterising... I think I personally like the names the best :D I plan to keep them forever as her little thing for them... Maybe not Remus's but we shall see :)
Thank you for the review *hugs*
- Steph - Report Review
And you say you're not a Slytherin, what was that little line about Matilda becoming a Death Eater before? *cough* Evil *cough* Matilda is insane, honestly she is- I actually could imagine you in a hyped up mood reading this to me like it was just your thoughts. Is that somewhat scary? I personally think it is, perhaps I've become to accustomed to your voice :P
Other than that, I'll be honest I found it a little hard to follow what was being said *hides* PLEASE DON'T KILL ME.
xx ElyAuthor's Response: I AM NOT A SLYTHERIN :P Ok so my character may somewhat have the attributes of a Slytherin...
Anyway, yes Matilda is slightly mental and eccentric but that's the whole fun of her, the fact that she is so unpredictable... well for now anyway.
And Ely, I think maybe you have... *hides* doesn't mean I think it's a bad thing! :D
Anyway, yes I do realize that it's a bit hard to follow, I have to fix that... when I have the time, and I won't... I'm not the Slytherin here.
Thank you for the review my lovely Ely :)
- Steph - Report Review
*huggles* This is a seriously awesome beginning chapter. I love the fact that Matilda's from Australia and VICTORIA! *dances* I'm sorry that this review is not helpful at all but I really adore this chapter. See you in the next chapter :)
x ElyAuthor's Response: Haha, I know, I HAD to make her from Victoria... just had too! And I am glad you liked the beginning Ely.
It's ok with the shot review I am just glad to hear that you liked it :)
- Steph - Report Review
Wonderful writing as always Cal, Why are you so good?
I'm sorry this reviews is so short but I honestly loved it your highness (:P) and I can't wait to read more. Try not to disappear again, please?
You manager Ely xxAuthor's Response: Aww, thanks Ely! Though I never quite disappear. I'm always here for those that need me ;) Report Review
Hey, It's ElysiumJayne from the forums for your review.
I admit, I wasn't so sure about this story when you posted it in my topic but now that I've read it, I have to say this is easily one of the best things I've read in a long time. I really love how you've characterised everyone, I think it's amazing in general. You asked if I could feel the adrenaline rush of the boys and I can and I think that's really amazing that you can do that, honestly- that is brilliant writing! I think the flow is wonderful as well, it all fits quite perfectly in my opinion. I hope this review was helpful for you and feel free to request more when your next chapter's are up :)
x ElyAuthor's Response: Hello ^.^ Thank you for stopping by,x
Nawww, I'm glad that you did take the time to read this even though you wasn't sure ^.^ Really? You liked it that much ^.^ That makes me sort of giddy *inserts that hearty thing here* I have charazterization? Wow, I didn't think I had much of that :P bleh, but i'm glad you think I do ^.^ You review was very helpfull and I plan on re-requesting when I get another chapter up ;) Thank you soo much
~Karni. xx Report Review
I'm really glad that you decided to keep going with this story, I love it so much! I really adore how you write Regulus and all your other characters. You are such an amazing writer and I really hope to see the next chapter soon!
x ElyAuthor's Response: Thank you. ^.^ I'm glad that you're enjoying it. --Jenna Report Review
BECAUSE YOU SAID YOU WERE STALKING YOUR REVIEWS, HERE YOU GO! *huggles*
So, you know how absolutely amazing I think this story is (and your writing in general) but in case you forgot.YOU ARE AMAZING AND BRILLIANT AND I LOVE YOU AND YOUR WRITING IS AMAZING AND BEAUTIFUL AND PLAGUE RAT-ISH!
*huggles* LOVE YOU FOREVER!
x ElyAuthor's Response: ELY, MY RATTIE, THIS REVIEW IS AMAZING AND AWESOME AND PLAGUE RAT-ISH AND HAS COMPLETELY MADE ME BLUSH!
Hehe naww I love you, thank you so much for leaving such a fantastic review - I LOVE YOU!
*squishes* SQUEAK! xx
-Lizzie :3 Report Review
Hello There- I'm ElysiumJayne.
I'd really thought I'd reviewed this for you especially since I placed you in second in the results. I couldn't actually find your forum name though so yes...You were awarded second place which means you win four reviews and a mention in my blog. Thank you for your entry!
x Ely Report Review
How does this chapter have no reviews? (I know you're reading this invisible readers and you are talking to a very angry Ely-beta, I will find you and force you to review, kidding- sort of) But anyway, Gemma! I did already have a review typed out that went into details of how amazing you were but the site crashed just as I posted it so it was lost :( I figure that you already know how much you mean to me and how much you joining HPFF has changed my life so thank you my wonderful little soulmate. I love you forever Padfoot.
x Ely/Moony Report Review
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