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Review #1, by chocolatelover314Crush: Crush

19th February 2010:
*waves* I'm here as requested!!!

Okay, first things first: I LOVE Ron/Hermione!! Even though back in the day I used to ship Harmoine? (Harry/Hermione) this one-shot was so cute! Except I was a bit confused with the time jump. You should focus on just one year or something, because it confused me!

Anyway, does Hermione confess her love to Ron or not? ACK ACK ACK! I really wanted to know! Even though I know they end up marrying. (Possible sequel??? Hmm??)

Good with grammar and spelling, and I love Hermione in this story!

9/10!

~Chocolatelover314 aka chocolateliz314~

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review!

I don't know. I think Ron realised that he loved Hermione before Hermione could do anything about it! (DH!)
Anyway,
The time jump shows Hermione's feelings throughout the series which we read from Harry's POV, so it would be different take. Oh well, I'll work on making stuff like that clearer! :)
Thanks again for reviewing!
Hugs,
Aakanksha


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Review #2, by chocolatelover314Missing Mummy: The Funeral

18th February 2010:
:( That's all I can say. But I can't stop reading it because it's SO GOOD!!

Author's Response: :) thanks, it's all you need to say. I am really happy that you like it, hope you like the rest of the chapters so much as these two!!
thanks for the two very nice reviews!!


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Review #3, by chocolatelover314Missing Mummy: I'm Your Daddy

18th February 2010:
AW!! :( That is so sad. Especially since that Harry WOULD think that, (At least that's what I think.) and I'm kind of confused. Is Harry happy that he has a daughter? Or sad that his wife died? or both?

Author's Response: Awe, thank you.
That what he's finding so hard, he is, of course happy that he has his daughter, but he's also sad and grieving over Ginny and he also starts to blame Lily for her death, even though she is his daughter. So his emotions are all confused right now.
thanks.


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Review #4, by chocolatelover314Chasing Waterfalls: Chasing Waterfalls

17th February 2010:
B-E-U-A-T-I-F-U-L! A real tear-jerker. Seriously, is it your goal in life to make people cry from your stories? I love Lily/James, but sometimes I think Lily/Remus would've worked. Good thing I was reading this while watching the Vancouver Olympics and that my favorite person won because my family thought I was crying from happiness. But no, it was from a ONE-SHOT.

ANYWAY!.

Beautiful description. Really. I never knew I could read such an amazing one-shot, and it DOESN'T get noticed at all! It was wonderful. I love all your details in it and it was really well descripted without it being over-board. And Lily seemed like a real human being, not perfect or anything.


James. Stupid James. Oh well, at least he realized finally in the end.

1,000/10!

Over and out,
Liz

Author's Response: hi there! first off, thank you so much for the review. I truly appreciate it :)

did I truly make you cry? wow...that's an accomplishment in itself! thank you...er, I guess? haha I'm glad you had that excuse, though!

I'm glad you think my description was good. I aimed to make it less-overwhelming in this oneshot because I have a tendancy to over do it, so I hope it turned out ok. and yes, I do agree that James can be a nutcase sometimes. but in the end, he always comes around :)

once again, thank you for the review!
~Emma


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Review #5, by chocolatelover314Just Ordinary: Laney Becks: World Class Pessimist

17th February 2010:
YAY! *Claps for Marauders Story* So, I'm here as requested!

I saw this story on the archives but just never really looked at it because it's Mature. (Even though I'm being a filfthy hypocrite because most of all my favorite stories are Mature!) But anyway, this was cute and funny and made me giggle at some parts, which made my poor brother look at me as if I'm insane.

I can't wait for further development. Elena actually sounds like a pretty unique character and someone I can definitley relate too, (Not the being send to a therapist part.) and she's really funny. I think I'm actually going to go read more of your story because it's hilarious!

Not bad for grammar and spelling for the most part. Though of course I'm a terrible speller and there could be a huge spelling mistake that I missed! Okay. I'll shut up now.

10/10!

Over and out,
Liz

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks for the wonderful review! :D

Haha, not a marauders story, but those are good! Really? You don't usually go for mature? That's really interesting. See, I've always been the opposite - I'm slightly prejudiced against the 12+ rating. Even though you can actually find some really good ones. Haha, your poor brother! I always laugh out loud when reading some stories, too. I'm so flattered you like it, though!

Thanks, thanks, thanks!

cheers, ash


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Review #6, by chocolatelover314A Bouquet of Lilies: A Bouquet of Lilies

16th February 2010:
Mmmkay! So, I'm here as requested!

The first thing is that this one-shot is really cute and fluffy. It's just how I imagine MY parents will act once I get married. But the thing is it just sort of described the wedding. They're wasn't any plot or anything, and when I got to the end I was just thinking, "Wow, that's it? It only took me two minutes to read!"


And the thing that's sort of annoying is the length and how short it is. Though of course most wedding one-shots are like this. I already have one for my novel that I plan to send into the quene one day, but not right now. I think I'm getting off topic so I'll shut up now.

Victorie is a character I find very diffucult to write since we know so little about her - just her siblings and parents! But I guess that's whats best about Next Gen - you can pretty much do whatever you want with it, the ships and personalities and there's nobody to tell you "Oh that's wrong!" But then again, that IS what fanfiction is for.

I love the narration of Victorie. Nice and typical, which I like! Teddy really wasn't mentioned much. The only thing I knew was that, "Hm. Okay. So they're getting married?"

8/10 overrall.

Over and out,
liz

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I apologize for taking so long to respond; my laptop died and so I'm sharing a computer with three other people!

I will take a look at the length again and see what I can do with expanding things; I appreciate your thoughts on what I can fix and I will take them all into consideration.

Thank you again :)
~LJ


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