It's lovely :) great work xAuthor's Response: Thank you :D Report Review
'It cannot be beautiful with you standing here, Roz. The sky is turning green with envy at your perfection, the stars weep every night because they cannot compete with your sparkling eyes' - WOW I LOVE THAT LINE
AND OH MY DAYS. big cliff hanger,
i can't wait to see what happens..
UPDATE SOON:)Author's Response: Thanks! I was really worried that it'd be cheesy, but I figured that cheesy was okay in that sense. :) Many thanksys for the brilliant review!
Lucky Report Review
at first i was like hmmm. then i was like :o wowzaaa benousa.
oh my golly goddness days. i lurvveee the story.
if i was Selene i'd just be so depressed like i'd cry all day all night. ahahah but i love her character.
but i want her and sirius to be the same age or get together or somethin somethin :(
but why is she still a teenager?
like why hasnt she aged at all, you still age in a coma...?
ima lovin it;)
xAuthor's Response: Haha, because Dumbledore kept her young so she could complete her education :P Report Review
oh i like it:)
very enthralling story line and great start.
I can not wait to read about the 'midnight ball'
xAuthor's Response: thank you. hopefully you will like all of my other stories as well Report Review
i love it, so funny:)
can't wait to see where the story goes.
i loved it when she attacked sirius with the hairbrush
update soon :D
xAuthor's Response: Glad you liked it :)
~LB Report Review
awhh i'm loving the story so far.
and i adore Avery, she's such a doll.
but Lily, oh my goshhh so mean.
but i really really really can't wait for your next update
i want to see how Avery will act with a hangover;) - if you include that.
keep up the fab work
xAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! You'll have to wait and see for the next update :)
~LB Report Review
I la-la-la-la-la -love it:)
great first chapter
9/10Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm sorry to say that an update may not be coming anytime soon, though. I have millions of L/J one-shots in the works now, and hopefully you'll la-la-la-la-la -love them as much as you did this one!
-AssortedButtons Report Review
I love it:)
10/10Author's Response: thanks a million(:
chloe Report Review
Oh my days I love this story. You have made it sort of interweave and work together, every chapter is stupendously written.
But, I can not decide if I like Cassie or hate her. I do not like it how she kidnaps people and is constantly manipulating them but then I like how brave, clever and sometimes fragile she is; she's really got me thinking :) (btw that is a complement for creating such a complex character.) ALSO dude. if I was Lily Evans I would personally be furious, no livid. And wouldnt James be mad too...? I mean Cassie drugged his 'one true love.'
But I found it sad how in the previous chapters, Reamus, Sirius and Cassie did that to Regulas it sort of distorted them. It was a wee bit to evil for me but it provoked such a reaction that when looking back on it, I view it as a superb way to look into who the characters really are, and how every one is partially mean inside; but I wanted to give Regulas a big hug; especially as it must hurt so much to have your sibling betray you... for a girl, even if they were not on talking grounds. It made my heart pang.
You've mixed it up creating a unique edge which I love; like how you've projected the Marauders as far from innocent and perfect. I also adore how you've been bring Peter in; unlike some other stories and actually including him in the main story line.
But I love the twist of her being 476 years old. But how did she get the different memories of her childhood? And who was the woman who was now her caretaker? And who arranged her whole life? - wait I am confusing myself :p Also in the section set back in the olden days:) she seems older than 11? idk just what I got, because we first met her at the age of 11...
Oh god. I am sorry if that was rude, but I adore your story. at first I was like hmm, then I was like wow, then I was like gobsmacked (I was going to say speechless but then I realised how much I had written. Ahaha)
sorry for such a long winded review.
Pretty please, with a cherry and everything eles you can imagine update soon:) i'm hooked. oh god i feel so bad. i wrote like an essay :o
threebillionsquelliontrillon/10 ;)Author's Response: ...Wow. This review is made of awesome. No...it's made of amazing. I am struggling for a coherent response.*rereads review* Okay so first of all, thank you so much for writing this. I LOVE long reviews. They make me happy.
Second, your take on Cassie is EXACTLY what I wanted people to get from her, which makes me verrryyy happy.
Third, I know that a lot of things don't make sense right now, and a lot of things are unanswered, but I swear, it shall all come together (not that I'm guaranteeing a happy ending).
Fourth, I've been dying to point out through a story that the marauders were arrogant, awesome, and complex. They weren't just goofballs. They joined the Order of the Pheonix and I'm sure they had to do some...morally gray things in order to fight Voldemort.
So thanks for catching that!
On Peter: I always try to remember that Peter's friends trusted him. so, logically, he had to act...trustworthy when they were younger. :) Luckily, I was able to look past my grudge.
...*looks up* and now I've written you a novel in return. :)
Thanks for the great review. You rock! Report Review
awhh James and Lily are so cute :')
cant wait for another one.
R xAuthor's Response: I know right? And dont worry, the next chapter is up for validation now =)! Report Review
I love it, it gives such a unique edge to the typical Lily & James story. You know you could turn it into a long story. it would be such a great start, and i'd love to see how they reacted to one another when they next saw each other.
10/10 & added to favourites
R xAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! I started writing a second chapter, but it might be a tad boring because it is mostly just Lily, but James should eventually come in. Everyone left reviews and it made me happy so now I just want to write another chapter!!! I'm really excited now!!! Thanks for the review! Report Review
awh it was so lovely to see the dynamics of the Marauders:')
oh my days
:o poor poor poor Hayley.
I hope she managed to kill
the bloomin 'wanna-be-death-eaters-Slytherines'
hold up a second:) when you said 'On the way, we saw about a dozen men standing outside the hospital wing.'
is that because they knew that Hayley was missing and if so
why didn't Dumbledore tell James :o?
I can not wait for the next chapter to see how James and Sirius now treat Hayley, and what happens to the Deatheater-slime balls.
ANYWAY. 10/10 ;) and like a squelliontrillionmegabillion/ 10 overall for the whole story (Y)
R xAuthor's Response: thank you :)
i really liked the marauder piece at the beginning - it was a cutesweetfluff bit which i haven't done in awhile..
im glad the ending stunned you :)
- yep they knew hayley was missing..
okay why dumbledore didn't tell james (i'm just going to tell you now cause i don't explain in later on)
1. Dumbledore has held secrets before.. e.g. harry and the prophecy - he thought it was the for the best..
2. .. how would James react? how would sirius react? How would the MARAUDERS react? they wouldn't just sit back and wait right? they'd go looking for her.. and it would be very stupid of Dumbledore to send them into a death trap righttt???
3. i needed him to do that or else plot would have to go in another direction
the men outside hospital wing were supposed to be aurors i guess i didn't explain that brilliantly.. haha w/e you got my point.. :)
next chapter may be a bit of a wait!
but i promise it'll be worth it! im putting a lot of hard work into it.. cos it's yeah.. you'll see
thank you for reviewing :)
i love your reviews
they are squelliontrillionmegabillion/10
xo 2envy Report Review
I love it.
It is intensely enthralling. I thoroughly enjoyed reading the story and I could not stop grinning when Reamus asked her out;)
But I wonder what piece of bad news is heading her way...
one thing. SIRIUS CUT HIS HAIR:O whyyy? whyy? jkkk jk. it makes a nice change. I love how you've mixed things up with
this story, it makes an interesting read and gives the story a
anyway, i absolutely can not wait for the next chapter.
R xAuthor's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying reading the story and that you liked remus' attempt at romance.
I know I made Sirius cut his hair, why? Because I have the power to do so Muahahahahaha! =]
I'm just waiting for the next chapter to be back from my BETA's an then it'll be up.
Thank you for reviewing =]
Liz. Report Review
*raises hand with mouth hanging open*
oh golly gosh..
flippidy flippin heck...
i really hope you can update soon.
Bit silly of McGonagall:o
but awh poor Hayley, she's in a wee bit of trouble isnt she.
BUT I WANTED TO SLAP JAMES. what a twat. well i know he was just trying to look out for her. but honestly. he needs to get over it;) ahhaha
wow this was a speedy update:)
hope for another one?
10/10Author's Response: hey hey :)
im glad you were shocked yay!
i've submitted but queue is 3 days :(
okay okay so
Mcgonagall: c'mon it's not like she would have thought if i leave hayley alone someone will come in and kill her right?
haha slap james.. no you can't, his one of my favs :)
yes! hope that the next update is fast!
but cross your fingers for end of this week!
thanks muchly for the review :)
i love reading your reaction :)
xo Report Review
aah love it.
great first chapter:)
its a really good insight to the whole
dynamic of Sirius, Lily, and James.
by the way is the mousy haired boy Peter? Just wondering:)
I love the fight between Lily and James too, made me laugh.
update soon? this looks like it could really go somewhere.
added to favourites.
R xAuthor's Response: Thanks for that. Yeah, I have the next chapter ready so it will hopefully be up soon! The mousy boy is Peter, but for some reason I'm holding off on giving away his name. I'm not quite sure yet. But in the next chapter a few more characters will be introduced=) Thanks for the review and I hope you keep reading! Report Review
oh my goodness me.
Kate, ohhh dearrry. this should create a mess.
can't wait to see how James reacts
but I was so happy when she finally told someone
I was actually grinning.
But, now that James knows is he like going to look for proof
and discover them, because in the summary (which is really good btws) it's like him catching them?:)
and to be honest.
I think that after learning that your friend is being blackmailed/ beaten up by deatheaters you should at least push aside the jealousy especially if you have been friends for eons. Silly silly silly kate :)
anyways. update soon? I am really enjoying this story:)
R xAuthor's Response: i know i was thinking, a lot of people are going to be happy about this - remember to tell ur intial reaction when she tells the next person
cos i really wanna know and then ur final reaction at the end of chapter
but dont worry it's all good .. muahahaha
no im stupid.
i can't tell you the context of the summary!! just read and you'll find out soon enough ;)
kate is self involved... remember like chap. 6/7/8/9 or something and kate is sirius' rebound?? see all these links.. ooo
lol i didn't really do it on purpose..
but my whole plot changed when regulus kissed hayley.. see the chapters are a surprise for me too!
update should be very soon. im not going to tell you when cos i tried to explain in some other reviews and it got confusing cos i tried to explain in all different timzones
but soon! (depends where you live - actually dont worry it''ll be soon!)
thank you! i absolutely (haha i forgot how to spell that for a secon) love your reviews.
gives me the review high
anyway, i think im weirded you out enough for one review
xo clara Report Review
so akward for Lucinda. i cant make up my mind if i hate her. or feel bad for her.
but i love James' parents.
R xAuthor's Response: yehh same actually, and i know right? they're so awesome. Err I'm actually just half way through my next chapter, dont know how long it'll take, hopefully not long (yn)
thanks for the review, again =) Report Review
i've been reading your story, for im not sure how long,
i lost track of time. & i love it to a bloomin intense
but you really must update soon.
i'll be waiting with bated breath
i wanna find out what she blackmails him over
and i love Nellie.
i don't think i've laughed quite so much in an age.
it really cheered me up (Y)
10/10 & added to favourites.
R xAuthor's Response: Heya :D I'm so glad you love it. Means a hell of a lot.
I'm gonna tryyy :D
2600 words so far :)
I'm going to try and work on it next week.
don't worry, you will ;)
I'm so glad i made you laugh, that makes me happy!
Thank you so much for your review, you've cheered me up quite a bit, i've been struggling to write this story a little and you've really helped.
x Report Review
oh my days.
amazing and beautifully written.
added to favourites.
Its and incredibly powerful one shot.
R :) xAuthor's Response: thank you :) your reviews make my day :)
but beautiful written.
gosh I feel so bad for Diana, and for Harry & for Ginny.
btw I disagree with reviewer Owltrainer17.
I think that its good how you've changed the typical story with harry totaly, amazingly in love with Ginny.
and used your imagination to create a story
probably no one else would have thought of:)
added to favourites
R xAuthor's Response: Aweee, thanks you!!!
this is my first fic and i'm so happy that you liked it!
I know, Ginny/Harry got tiring after some time, even though they are good together!
thank you again!!
xoxoxo Report Review
great story so far:)
i cant wait to read about the meeting
with Petunia, looks like its going somewhere good.
added to favourites;)
R xAuthor's Response: Thank you so much, you have no idea what this means to me :) Report Review
god, i love Sirius.
this is such a moving/ emotional story.
so incredibly sad
10/10 & added to favourties.
R xAuthor's Response: Hahaha. I kind of love Sirius, too, which was one reason I jumped at the idea to put his perspective in this collection.
Thanks for saying it was moving, too. It was something I was aiming for but it's always hard to tell whether you've succeeded in that sort of thing or not so it's lovely to have reviewers like you leaving such great compliments. Really does make my day. :)
-odyssey Report Review
i love it;)
another excellent story.
i always felt so bad for Petunia,
so it's great to finally read a good story
about her feelings and emotions.
10/10 & added to favorites
R xAuthor's Response: oh thank you :)
haha i forgot i uploaded this story.. had to go back and read what it was about :P Report Review
btw just to answer your last response,
not Regulas, because I adore him as a character;)
AND, I would give you constructive criticism. Except. It is so flaming good I have nothing bad to say about it.
but arghh my goodness gracious, I just want to shake Hayley, tell JAMES OR DUMBLDORE OR SIRIUS. I am sure they could take on a few Slytherines. but it was so cute when she was saying sorry to Sirius...
and I think Rosier should be hung upside down and hit repetitively with... a piece of wood:)
and oh my god.
the last bit.
my breath caught.
I think if stopped breathing for a second or two or maybe three.
worst bloomin timing EVER!
Honestly, I cannot wait for your next update;)
Waiting on the edge of my seat for it.
like threetrillionbillionsquellion/ 10Author's Response: Damn, now I feel bad about what I'm about to do to Regulus's character! Can you take that back? Your making me feel super guilty haha
I'm super glad you you like the story so far, I'm afraid in the next few chapters you hate me. :( But I'll let you know, it had to be done!
I know, Hayley is a bit na√É¬≠ve not telling anyone... hmmm maybe I should make her tell and then Rosier will swoop in and just kill her off?? haha nahhh I'm already doing something terrible with Regulus, I can't make you hate me that much! haha
And that hitting Rosier idea, nicee.. but maybe with a piece of metal?
hahha.. I'm glad you liked this chapter so much and didn't think it was corny cos whilst writing this I was like 'omg, im going to get so many reviews saying - dude you're so corny'
hopefully - hopefully there will be an update by the end of this week - HOPEFULLY!
i'm loving your reviews :) can't wait for the next one :) Report Review
i think snevelly is rather creepy too:)
oh my days, i love this story
and i hate lucinda but i sorta feel bad for her too
and now you've got me all curious. History repeating itself?
i will litraly be waiting with bated breath for your next chapter.
make it come soon? ;)
you should get a banner for the story:)
that way more people will read
and you will get so many more reviews:)
because this story is Ace.
R xAuthor's Response: I kinda feel bad aswell, but life goes on. ohh dont worry the next chapter will be coming soon =D
I tried getting a banner but the post isnt eing filled =( I'll try again, thanks again, you're an awesome reviewer! Report Review
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