i honestly cant get over how much i love this story and your writing :D Report Review
Hi! Review swapping!
This is the kind of plot that I look for when reading a ScoRose. The fact that it was a ScoRose just made me want to read it more. It is well detailed, as well as with a good introductory back story to help the reader figure out what is going on. If there were anything I would change, is maybe develop the characters a bit more, and it being a ScoRose try to avoid the cliches unless that is what you are going for. Anywho, great start of a story and I look forward to reading the rest. :DAuthor's Response: Hi! I'm glad that this is the plot you look for, as I think it hopefully brings a new perspective to their relationship! I'm glad that you found it detailed enough, and it had enough of a backstory. I will develop the characters more, it's just harder to do when you switch time periods:( Thanks for the great review, and I hope you enjoy chapter 2! Report Review
I like it so far. Holy wow that was a pretty intense introduction. IVery eloquent, it kinda sounds like something out of a published book, in a good way! :D Report Review
Good job! Victiore is getting a backbone! Good chapter! Report Review
So I wanna kick Gabrielle. Michael is kind of a downer. Victoire is way to much of a pushover, she needs some spine. And their confessions seem to come out to easily. But regardless I love this story and can't help but read it! Report Review
Meep! This is a very cute moment, and you've got a lot of potential I think. You've got all of the elements of a good one shot/story, it just seems like it could use a little pizzazz or heart. The descriptions are great, its just a bit more telling than showing. We don't need to know each and every guest, or every bit of the past; just anything that is essential to setting the wedding scene. I found no spelling errors, and nothing that stuck out on the grammar front, to which I must say 'bravo'! Anywho, I hope that didn't sound mean. Good job, and happy writings in the next weddings!
-briAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'm actually in the process of writing a 'Harry' piece with more about the actual wedding in it. I didn't really like it either (a little editing to be done, I think!) Thanks so much for reviewing and I'd love to take a look at some of your own work! x Report Review
Blerg! *flails about wildly* I don't know how to explain why and how much I like this chapter, just know that I do... a lot. Also, yay! Quidditch!Author's Response: Hey :) I'm so glad you like this chapter, I really liked writing this one as I finally got to introduce Cassie, who is one of my favourite characters that I've written so far. And yes! Quidditch! Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a great day! Xxx Report Review
Aaagh! Such love. *falls off chair* don't make it stop! I do so love this story! Report Review
Blerg! *flails arms wildly from inability to find right words to express the amount of like and stuff about this chapter*
OMYGOSH! This chapter was great, it has all of the drama, mixed with the funny, mixed with cute, and a smidge of romance-y stuff. Don't you dare abandon this story, it's too good! On to the next chapter! *trumpets sound* Report Review
You are very descriptive, I like it. This chapter was a little bit sad because of Narcissa, but I'm guessing it's supposed to be. Anyway good job!Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing.
I have been working hard on being more descriptive so I am glad that you pointed that out. I am still working on figuring out just how I write.
Yes, it is sad and as you said it's suppose to be. The other chapters are a bit sad a well, but they come with a good lesson on life in general.
Thanks again! =)
-SR17 Report Review
This is so adorable. Yet somehow foreboding at the same time, since as the reader I know that Lily and James are doomed. Which makes your depiction of their relationship, (the sentimental moments, tension and arguments) even better, for lack of a better word lol. Any way, I love this. Kudos on the awesome writing. :DAuthor's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I think it was really obvious that this was a Halloween fic but everyone who reads it tries to deny it haha. Dont' worry, I did it while I was writing it as well.
Jas Report Review
So weird, when I was reading this I totally started to feel what I'm sure Rose would have been feeling. I really like how you've set the situation so far. I hate it that when the ex of Rose or whoever, starts dating or gets married someone in the characters family the author usually lets everyone just be okay with it and no one seems to mind. I'm so glad that you haven't done that. It's right of Rose and the rest of her family to be mad with Scorpius and Lily especially for what they've done. Bravo! I really does seem that this is the great story I've been looking for. :DAuthor's Response: It's great to hear that you like how the story is coming along so far! I agree with you that the characters shouldn't be okay with Scorpius's behaviour - it would be really weird if all the Weasley-Potters were fine with the new marriage arrangements, and totally out of character. I can imagine that Rose had a hard enough time convincing everyone that she and Scorpius were a couple, but for him to change to another of the cousins, AND do so behind Rose's back... lots of problems there.
Anyway, thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I hope that you enjoy the rest of the story, too! :D Report Review
Wow, you are very good at showing and not telling. I salute you. It is sort of a slow beginning to the story but that's not a bad thing since it eases you in. Though it does sort of end kind of abruptly after Ron asks whether getting married is a good idea. Still its a good beginning and I love Ron/Hermione. :DAuthor's Response: Hey :) Thank you for the review.
I'm glad you think I did well at showing not telling and thank you for that! It sort of does end abruptly because of the not-proposal and that's how I really did want it :)
I'm glad you like this Ron and Hermione! I don't tend to write them very often Report Review
Awww! Now this is a cute story! I don't often think that I'll like stories about Percy, since they are about Percy. But then I actually read them and find out he isn't so bad a character after all (mostly because I am used to him from others POV). Especially when he is in his niche. I really like how the chair is what helped him find love. :DAuthor's Response: I'm glad you liked it so much, I'm a HUGE Percy Weasley fan and I love Percy/Audrey. Report Review
Oh gosh! This was so cute! I really liked Draco's narration, and commentary. Truly giggle worthy :D. Also. Mr. Cat lol, is he like where Draco puts all of his insecurities? And how Draco acted when he met Astoria and immediately decided that he was in love. Lol This was a great read!Author's Response: Yes, poor Mr.Cat, he is the one Draco puts all his insecurities on. :) I'm glad you liked it! I hope you like the sequel as well! :) Report Review
SO MUCH AWESOME! This was so great, I love these Voldy stories you've written. I liked the one with Vader, but dude, this is tops! Especially, with the Cedric coming back as a vampire. And that Harry is a famous author (also the phrase, 'swaggering like a boss' floored me)! The characters are great, and this is so hilarious! I love it!Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the review! Glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
This was a good beginning, maybe a little confusing due to the formating, but still good. Nothing bad grammar-wise. I would like to read on, to see that is actually driving Harry to have his hallucinations.Author's Response: Hi. Firstly thanks for stopping by.
I'm glad that you enjoyed the beginning of this story. I wanted to try something that would really be a continuation of the ending of the DH.
I really must get back to updating some of my earlier stories.
Thanks for the read and review.
This chapter was great! Pippa's hilarious commentary on everything is what I look for in good MC's. I absolutely love her interactions with her brother, and especially her cousin Scorpius. Its so great seeing him different and ridiculous( a good thing trust me), makes it not boring! And Rose, I've never read her like this and I love it, also Lollipop? LOL. This is a great story, and I'm glad we keep review swapping because I haven't been reading much lately. Love this! :D
-briAuthor's Response: Hey :) I'm so glad you liked this chapter! I'm so glad you liked what she said to say. Ah, her relationship with her brother, is an usual one and gets explored in later chapters. Thanks :) I always imagined that Scorpius would be really sheltered, loved and naive. Thanks, I like writing Rose like. Thank you so much, I'm so glad you like my story, it means a lot to me. Thanks so much for the review and I hope you have a wonderful day. xx Report Review
This is a very beginning, especially since its your first shot at fanfics! I doubt anyone can tell, because it's quite good. I can totally get how and why the Trio would be having those sorts of depressed, paranoid and even violent thoughts after the war it only makes sense. I liked this, good job! :DAuthor's Response: Hi,
thank you very much!!! I'm glad that you liked it! Sadly, I haven't updated this in over a year, because I'm sort of stuck with the plot, but maybe the bunnies will come back!
Miriel Report Review
Awww! The first part where James and Sirius were escaping was quite exciting, and the last half with Lily and the baby was really very heartwarming. This is a very cute one-shot, and I'm very glad you recommended it. In such a short story you were capable of doing justice to the characters. I love it, good job!Author's Response: Yay! Thanks so much for the review (hopefully you liked yours!) and i'm thrilled that as a James/Lily fan, you liked it.
Thanks again for the review swap ^_^ Report Review
Whoa... that's crazy good. A little bit depressing because of Ginny's mood, which means you are good at conveying emotions. I had never really thought of Ginny and Tom Riddle, but I can totally see that now that I think about it. While Ginny may have been infatuated with Harry first, after months and months of corresponding with Riddle it makes sense that she could/would fall in love with him.
This is a great one-shot, makes you think.
:D brithewriterAuthor's Response: Thank you very much! I was surprised to see a review for this story, but it's lovely to hear that it both made you think and feel - I always hope for that with each story, and it means a huge amount to hear it was successful. :D
The whole Ginny/Tom thing was a passing ship from before the series finished, but as it was never mentioned in HBP and DH, it was soon forgotten, but I still find it an interesting idea to play with. There's something fascinating about it, a lot of potential to be explored. ;) Thanks again! Report Review
Aww, very cute. A fluffy little take on young love(like?) that can actually make the reader understand and feel the emotions of the characters. I never really read much about the less popular Next Gen kids, but as I read more, your one-shot definitely included I am thinking more so that I should. I really like your Lucy, she is a very realistic teenager which makes it easier for the reader to feel her emotions.
brithewriter :DAuthor's Response: Really? Aww, thanks. I like reading about the less popular Next Gen too, and yes, you should definitely read more Next Gen, there are some really good ones out there! Yeah, I like Lucy too, she's one of my favourites to read and write. Thanks a bunch for the review, and it's been fun review-swapping with you!
Cavell :D Report Review
Aww, very cute and funny! It's so endearing to see boys especially Teddy have nerves when it comes to girls. And pumpkin pie! :)Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) Report Review
Blerg! SO. MUCH. LOVE! This is so great! Everything about it is just what I've been looking for in a ScoRose, maybe it's the anti-ScoRose-ness of it that I love. Not sure but this is great! I really liked the flashbacks as well. The way you write, the descriptions, well planned out thoughts, style, everything is enviable because it IS that great. :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! :D I'm really glad that you like the style of this first chapter - it almost stands alone as a one-shot, very much an "end of the affair" kind of story. Most of the story is pretty Scorose-ish, but my own annoyance with the popularity of that ship kept getting in the way. :P It's wonderful that you've enjoyed this first part, though, and I hope that you also enjoy the rest! Report Review
Despite this being a rather long one-shot, it is quite an easy read. You can really understand what Hermione is feeling her distraught and sad feelings after the war. Although it is a little odd that two people who've never held much concern for each other before, become so close so quick, I'm fairly sure weirder things have happened in fanfiction ;) There are quite a few spelling errors that you might want to take a quick read through to fix, other then that though this is a pretty good one-shot. Good job. :D
brithewriter (from the forums)Author's Response: I know what you mean about the length, this story was incredibly easy to write and it just kinda flowed from me. I didn't expect it to be that long in the beginning so I was rather surprised when I put it in for validation and saw the word count!! I have to say that I'm really glad you pointed out how quick things happened, in my opinion they wouldn't have in a different setting but because Hermione was so emotionally vulnerable to anybody that would really be there for her I think it works alright :) I was a little worried about how fast things went when I began writing it though! I will make sure to go back in and search out those errors! Thank you so much! :) Report Review
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