i thought i'd be your 100th reviewer (:
i just wanted to say that i think this story seems to have a lot of filler chapters and doesn't really show the struggle that alli goes through being an almost teenage mother. however, good work, and keep writing !

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pumba

Author's Response: Yeah it's a pretty bad story. I tried to make it better but, I just never can as hard as I try. Thanks for the review :)

~SxR

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its me again :)
sorry i havent been on hpff lately, i've noticed an Object of Intrest has now been completed ! congratulations !
i will get on to finishing that as soon as i can.
but onto this story, it's deifintely one of your best. i love how you compared your story to fairytales, it gives it a more magical and incredible effect.
sorry i havent been reviewing, i just grew out of hpff but now i'm back ! and hopefully staying for a long time :D
i've finished my last chapter of Whole Again that is yet to be posted and i'm writing a new story called 'lake's avenue !'
i see that you have posted more stories and i will read/review them soon :)

im glad your writing hasnt faltered, actually it's still amazing.

saffy
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Author's Response: OHMIGOD! Saffy! Your'e back! :D
I've missed you! (well, that didn't sound creepy at all :P Sorry about that)
Yesh, it took a long time, but finally I have completed it, now I kinda miss writing it :/ But that's kinda the point, isn't it?
I'm glad that you like this; I am turning it in to a Novella, I have ten chapters at the moment - maybe eleven and I am planning to write another before I go to sleep, we'll see how that goes (aka, probably not going to happen!)
I can't wait to read the last chapter! Don't wait too long after the queue re-opens to post it! :P
I am waiting for the new story eagerly too. :)
You always know how to make me smile, thanks Saffy. :D

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SO SORRY THAT I HAVENT BEEN REVIEWING YOUR CHAPTERS LATELY ! EVERYTHING IS JUST SO HECTIC AND I HAVENT HAD ENOUGH TIME TO REVIEW OR READ YOUR STORIES WHICH IS REALLY ANNOYING AND IM VERY VERY VERY VERY SORRY !

gosh, imagine me screaming that apology out ten times louder than you will realise how sorry i am and how much i wish you'll forgive me because i like to review your chapters :D

anyway, i found it SO cute how james gave G that necklace back in the day and she's wearing it and there's icicles and its just so romantic :D
hahahah ! anyway.
is Damon going to kill G and take the whole Potter family down? because that would be really horrible.
OR
is Damon going to steal G away from James and then James will be left all alone while G and Damon are frolicking in the flower beds together?!
cause that would be even more horrible !
im just joking.
you wouldn't do that :D
sorry but i must say this one more time, i am SO sorry abotu not reviewing and i will review the other chapters ASAP !
wonderful chapter! and i don't appreciate the cliff hanger at the end, just saying...

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saffy

Author's Response: Hey! It's fine about the review thing. You don't have to be sorry! I'm just glad that things have calmed down for you a little :P it's horrid when things are hectic.
My eardrums are now burst from the screaming apology :D

No, D is not going to kill them :P As usual, you receive the best imagination award.
You'll have to read and find out what's going on with them all. But I do like the sound of the flower bed idea. :D You never know, I may have a change of heart.
I hope that you enjoy the rest!

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Okay, this chapter had so many good bits in them i can't explan. hm. i have no idea where to start ! panic attack ! ahaha ! jokes. i shall keep calm :)

I think I shall start with Albus.
Firstly it is so cute how desperate he was to get with G. with the early chrsitmas present and how he wants a kiss ! NOT A CHANCE ALBUS! SHE'S WITH JAMES !!! gr!
and secondly how he was all drunk at the end of the chapter ! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D all i could think was oh albus...'

James is the hottest guy ever. how he's all sweet, protective and gentle with charisma, whoops i mean G (sorry, just re-reading a chapter of wolfsbane) and he just makes me shudder in happiness. he's amazing.

now onto molly. will G tell everyone about her life in france in the next chapter? she better because i really think she shouldn't be keeping hrse secrets from her good friends because they have all grown really close and stuff :( hopefully they all won't hate her now :D

question. how did you update so quickly?! like wolfsbane and an object of interest were validated at the same time! i was like wowza ! :0

update right about now. ;D

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Author's Response: Hey, Saffy! I'm glad that you liked this chapter! Your reviews never fail to amaze me (it's a good thing! trust...)

Albus, he was rather shocking actually, now that I think about it. But there is always one black sheep in every family :P It's got to be Al, I love bad-boy-Albus.

I'm glad that you love James, I love to write him, so I guess that works out!

On to Molly (the great sarcasm-queen? :D) It's not the next chapter, but the chapter after. I'm sure that you'll understand why (well, maybe not personally) she didn't tell her friends soon, she says it as well. I wanted to make everything clear; I have a tenancy to confuse my dearest readers to Timbuktu and back!

How do I update so quickly?! Well, I have them all pre-written, and it's just a matter of when I can get to the computer to update them. :P
I have had Wolfsbane done for about seven months, wow, that seems long. I am nearly done with the sequel as well. Is that bad? :P
I will update soon!

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ah ! the chapter is up ! (does the moonwalk... i my head because i don't know how to do it in real life..) this chapter almost made me pee in my pants in laughter. you heard me ! PEE IN MY PANTS ! ah ! hahahahahahahahahaha ! with freddy and charisma all jealous about james and dixie's relationship. HILARIOUS !

plus, are freddy and dixie going to have sex? if they do i will scream. ah ! the talk about virginity and how charisma got angry at freddy for telling her that was so funny. though i was shocked ! i was definitely not expecting that to happen. is charimsa a daredevil now? jumping off brooms like a mad woman! what's wrong with her.

please let everyone know that james and charisma are together in the next chapter. that would make me very very happy ! yeah it would ! :):):) with blaize and scorpius seeing james and charisma snog was so funny :D i thought they were going to tell everyone then and there. but luckily they didn't XD

now going to read An Object of Intrest !

saffy
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Author's Response: SAFFY!!! Yes, I updated. I think that this one was a little quicker. If you peed your pants, I hope that you cleaned it up. Although I totally stand for 'Free the pee', it is a little awkward. :P
Charisma and Dixie have been friends since the beginning of Hogwarts. She trusts Dixie, but is quite jealous. But isn't she always?!

Fred and Dixie?! You'll have to wait for the sequel to find out, I guess.

Charisma isn't a daredevel, no more than before. She loves Quidditch, and will always take risks in that game. But she didn't end up in the Hospital wing!! No medical assistance for her this game!!

They made out in the Enterance Way to the school, I'm sure that people will know by the next chapter :P if not, then they will tell them.

I hope that you enjoy the rest. Thanks for the review!

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Ah! you putn up another chapter ! yayayayaya ! i have been waiting for months for this ! i can't wait for you to put some more up ! please hurry and validate ! this was amazing, the love between hermione and draco is still obvious and hopefully they'll be together soon :D

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Author's Response: I'm so sorry that it's been months again! I will try and try to be quicker next time!
I hope you enjoy the next chapter hopefully it will be validated in the next couple of days!
Thank you for reviewing :)

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I love polaroid photos. thye seem so much more prettier than the digital ones or the printed ones. i love them, and now i love them even more because sunday used it :) ahaha ! anywaysss these chapters just keep getting more intresting and lovable. plus i am your 100th reviewer ! well not the 100th but i am currently posting your 100th review ! i'm am so honoured :):):) thank you all ! hahahaha ! this is an amazing chapter and the plot just keeps thickening, i am so glad i helped you think of this. you know you wouldn't have started the story without me, and look at you now. all the reviews and amazing chapters ! i am so proud of you ^^

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Author's Response: yes, i owe all my success to you.
AHAHA YAYAYAYAYAYAY 100~ WOOO!
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I love this chapter. One of my favourties, for sure. :) Remus is such a dork, in the best way possible of course :) and sunday continues to surprise me with her strange habits and weird remarks. i love it. but another thing i love is the name Kathleen . it's really unique, calming and peacefuly. to sum it all up its just damn amazing ! ^^ hahahaha ! jokes :D that's my name :):):):) thanks for putting me in your story. love you XD

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Author's Response: ahahahahahahaha.
i love you, saffy/kathleen.
whoever you are...
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i have no idea where to start ! so i've decided just to write the first thing that comes to my mind, if you don't mind i will do it in capitals as it has a more dramatic effect to it :)

OH MY GOODNESS GRACIOUS ME THEY KISSED ! ARE THEY TOGETHER FOREVER NOW! HA! CHARISMA SAYS THAT KISSING JAMES HAS BEEN IN HER FANTASTIES FOR MONTHS! THEY'VE BEEN IN MINE THANK YOU VERY MUCH! I WAS WORRIED THAT JAMES AND CHRIS WEREN'T GOING TO GET TOGETHER! KISSING IN THE RAIN IS THE MOST ROMANTIC THING EVER! I LOVE IT! I COULD REALLY PICTURE HER GORGEOUS FACE SITTING IN THE RAIN, A FROWN ON HER FACE WITH INVISIBLE TEARS FALLING DOWN HER CHEEKS. NO JOKE YOU HAVE MADE MY YEAR... MORE LIKE YOU HAVE MADE MY EXISTANCE.

okay, i will calm down now as the thought just occurred to me that shouting for too long might not be the healthiest thing ever. Lois is the best, she was there for Charisma when she needed it most. you better make charisma and james' relationship flourish! otherwise i will hunt you down ! hahaha ! jokes. i think i am the first review for this amazing chapter ! :):);) no joke, this was the best chapter i have read in ages. i am sorry but it beat the Object of Intrest chapter when Georgie and James kissed. it was still perfect... but kissing in the rain is no match ^^

i love this story so much it hurts :( :D update soon !

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Author's Response: I'm glad that you reviewed Saffy, thank you :P Capitalise away, when I read capitals I shout in my head!
I love rain so much, I knew from the beginning that when they kissed (if they kissed) it would be in the rain.

Made your existence!! Wow, that is some heavy shoes to fill for my successor!! :P

I'm glad that you like Lois, I think that she's brilliant :P She was origionally only going to be mentioned once or twice, like Dan, but I liked their characters too much.

Please don't hunt me down!! Just for you, I will make them 'flourish'. I really did beat the Object of Interest chapter, didn't it :P I guess it's because the anticipation for this has been A LOT longer waited for!! :P

I will update soon!!! (ps, don't hurt yourself :P)

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Okay first of all i can't think of anything more important than reading your stories. i think my brain does this some strange dance (not the happy one, this one is much more powerful) everytime i see that you have another chapter up. i know that it was random to suddenly blurt that out, but it's the truth. and sometimes the truth is retarded. anyways.

I have to say, James and Georgie are PERFECT together. like i think they are more perfect then Sally and James. And they're in MY story! god, im a bit of a loser. hahaha ! i have decided to review each of your stories, i think i've said that before but then exams came up and pop quizzes and bla. so now i am going to do it. if i am correct you have 5 stories up??? hm? i have no idea how you do it. i have 2 (almost 3) and i am ALREADy struggling. grr.

I think Russell is pretty cool. i don't know why but i've just liked him from the very beginning. he just makes me laugh :) well. i have to cut this review short because i have to go to the orthodontist. :(:( help me. hahahha ! jokes.

saffy
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Author's Response: No!! Not the orthodontist, all of my friends have braces and they always complain about the orthodontist (although the one in our area has this special cupboard.never mind. he's just a bit weird). I will come and rescue you!! I will wear a cape and all!!

I like your dances, and the truth - both funny. :P

Sally and James are so perfectly sweet, they're cuter than James and Georgie. Although, I hadn't expected people to actually like them when I wrote them together, but they seem to have gone down well!

Exams should be burned, I have had three heavy weeks of them, then the updates should start coming back quicker, but I have my last one on Thursday, I took a hard one today. I hope that you did amazingly!! :O :D
The fact that you want to review my stories is amazing! Thank you!! I should be beginning to write a new one soon, but I will write it all before posting. I love the plot to it and I am so excited!

I'm glad that you like Russell, he is actually my favourite in this story. He is a funny one :P
I will update soon!

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oh my goodness gracious me. i just have to say something first. like James is disappointed in myself. i can't believe that i didn't leave you a review earlier. it's been 39 reviews and i haven't left a comment behind ! not one ! i feel like running over to where ever you are and apologising on my knees then crying. no joke.

the only things that is really making me feel better is that you updated and that you have a new banner ! i liked your old one as well but this one is amazing ! it's just breath taking :):):) i have to say this. i love Dixie, she's just so sweet and funny. she can lighten the mood really well especially at the end :D

i love the Quidditch game at the beginning, i've always found it very cool when people write about Quidditch. Well, especially when you do because it just flows so much better when you've written it. okay... i just sounded like a half stalker and a half suck up. so i'll just shut up now. i almost forgot about Evie... until this chapter, then all the bad memories started to flood in when James and her were dating (vomit in my mouth) it was just wrong. just wrong.

hahaha, anyway so sorry about the VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY late review. i can't believe myself. i just can't believe it... :(

saffy
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Author's Response: Yay! You review, I actually look forward to this each time I write a chapter! Thank you so much. There is no need to apologise, it's a bust time of year!I know that I am only just about scraping through.

A new banner! it's by the same lovely person who did the old one, but she got promoted a while ago and I loved this new style that she had taken on, so I decided that it may be time for a new one, especially consider I had changed the plan of the story . . a lot.

I'm glad that you like Dixie, she's so fun to write :P

Ahhh, the Quidditch scene, it's the hardest thing I think, to write. How could you forget about Evie?! She's unforgettable! :P I have nightmares about the girl!

I will update soon!

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Right now the only thing I can think of is... OHMYGOD. replaying over and over in my head, i still can't believe that they're together, it's just out of this world ! gosh :) anyways i was like 'aw' ing out loud when Georgie said 'the only thing i have wanted since i arrived at Hogwarts was you.' i was seriously lik dead on the floor, it was just too cute and sweet for me to handle.

:D

i really hope that James and G don't get caught for breaking the window, it wasn't even their fault. it was the darn SLYTHERINS it tell you! i would be extremely outraged if they got into trouble, but the only thing that calms me down is that James and Georgie kissed. It's like a million of your readers dreams coming true ! AH!

Question. Are you writing more stories? As in novella's or novel's? Because I'm writing three more ( :D ) and I really like your style of writing so i need some more stories from you, please. Don't worry about the ones you have up now, i have decided to read and review each of them before the month ends, giving me plently of time and you plently more reviews :) i can't believe that Whole Again has 102 reviews now! i was in so much shock i couldn't even do the happy dance, i just played it in my head.

i know how you feel about the exams, mine are coming up soon too. my history one is next week, i think and there's so much to learn ! grr ! :) i'll be okay though... if you update Wolfsabe... XD

saffy
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Author's Response: :P Thanks for the review. I'm so glad that you liked this chapter, Saffy. I promise that I will update as soon as I can.

James and Georgie won't get caught for breaking the window; he's James Potter, he's more sneaky than that :P
Oui, oui. James and Georgie kissed - they may like each other a little, I guess it could be phrased that way.

As for the stories question, I have a few up my sleeve, I have three or four planned, but whether or not I will get around to writing them is a different story. Under the Bridge will be posted maybe in about September is I can get it finished (and find my notes :S) But the sequel to Wolfsbane will be posted soon, which in it's own little way will be quite sad because it will mean that Wolfsbane will be over.
You want to review the lot?! That's amazing, did you know that you're an angel :P

Whole again is doing brilliantly, it's an amazing story.
Good luck for your exam. Thanks for the review. :D

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Mr Smith's "What indeed?" didn't really make sense. Is he like mental or something, so he can't speak right? anyway i think you should've described Remus' sorrow more deeply. it was a little brushed. other then that good job! :)

saffy
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Author's Response: oh saffy.
get over it.
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I think... no i KNOW that this is the best chapter you've written... so far. firstly i love Hogsmede so there's one tick for you. *tick*

secondly the Marauders are the bomb and i love it when they're all out together having a good time. *tick*

and lastly the ending was so perfect. i can't even explain it. i can just picture it so easily. as if im there. *ticks again, this one happens to be so big and agressive it tears the page in half.* XD

post soon!

saffy
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Author's Response: who doesn't love hogsmeade ?
who doesn't love the marauders ?
thanks for my torn, ticked, page.
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Poor, poor rem. thats my new nick name for him. i have no idea how i thought of that... but i did:) he's just so confused. i can't believe in the speech he said he was a 'friend' of Sunday's. they kissed! you don't kiss your friend! they kissed! ...


kissed!


anyway, gosh i get so side tracked. I really wish that i was in this story, though it would be too dramatic. sunday's dead. NO SHE'S NOT! im just talking to myself so anyway. im onto the next chapter! ur a fantastic writer? did ya know what?

saffy
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ps

they kissed!

Author's Response: rem ?
i like it. :) AHAHA
thanks for the review.
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Sunday is possibly the cutest character i have ever read about. she's so innocent yet confident, i know it took you a long time to think of the plot, characters, names and settings but trust me, it's all worth it.

this has been another amazing chapter by you, vikki. your chatpers still amaze me, they just keep getting better. i feel for remus, he's totally head over heels in love with Sunday but she doesn't realise it. *sigh* but she does in the end. :)

saffy
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Author's Response: thanks so much for the review
saffy/sienna/kathleen.
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I love love LOVE the beginning. i can really see how distressed and upset remus was. i love the style of yor writing. it brings everything to life. no joke. :(

:)

I can't believe. well. i WON'T believe that Sunday is dead so i shall continue this review like nothing is wrong. i love Sunday, she's my favourite out of all of them. i really hope she's in the next few chapters, because she's the bomb!

saffy

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Author's Response: hahahahahaha
yes, she will still be in the story.
and yes, it is heartbreaking that she died.
why do they always make the best prople die ?
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OH MY GOD JAMES AND GEORGIE KISSED! I CAN'T BELIEVE IT! I HAVE BEEN WAITING DAYS! EVEN MONTHS! GOSH TOOK YOU LONG ENOUGH! JOKES! I LOVE YOUR WRITING. IT DRIVES ME CRAZY... AS YOU CAN SEE!! XD

---10 minutes later

my sister came in my room and saw i was doing this new and improved happy dance and gave me some calming pills, so im ok now. OH MY GOS THEY KISSED! WHAT ARE MY FEET DOING!? THEY'RE MOVING IN A STRANGE AND UNIQUE WAY! IS IT? YES IT IS! IT'S A NEW HAPPY DANCE!

---20 minutes later

i have taken an overdose of the calming pills so i am 100% fine now. but that doesn't mean i'm not over the moon that georgie and james. because i am. for sure. not kissing. wait. did i just type not kissing instead of not kidding? i think i did, but who cares because james and georgie kissed! WOOT! i don't think that any pills can tame me! (points to herself with her tumb jabbing into her chest) wow i am so overreactional.

i really should be doing maths work but i hate it so i decided to log onto hpff and BAM! do you know what it said? well, i'll tell you what it said. IT SAID THAT AN OBJECT OF INTREST HAD ANOTHER CHAPPIE UP! yeah! it did! :) ok, onto more formal things. i have decided to turn this review to maths, so i'll sorta be doing my work at the same time.

love+perfect= james and georgie.

wonderful+dreams= An object of intrest (and wolfsbane)

*remember brackets first!*

it+(keep)+up= keep it up!

saffy
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Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Saffy. I love your overreactional tendencies.

I hope that your maths homework is going ok. I don't like maths either. It's a mean subject. (PS, with those skills, you're getting an A*)

I hope you didn't take too many of those pills, they can be dangerous you know!! :P Yes, James and Georgie kissed, and I plan for them to be doing a lot more of this so-called kissing. :D

You never fail to make me smile. Thanks again. I will update soon.

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AH ! another chapter ! AH ! another chapter ! AH ! another chapter ! hahaha ! i havw no idea why i just said that three times, but i did. I guess it's because i LOVED this chapter because i adore it when scorpius and Chris talk together. I don't know why but i really like the friendship between them.

I am appaulled that people think that scorpius and wolfy have a thing ! and rose believes the rumours! that just makes it ten times more worse. they're rumours, you're not supposed to believe them. please dont make them break up ! or i think i will cry ! jokes. but i will suffer from what i cal l'something bad hapenned in my favourite story Wolfsbane so i can't live on' disease. and it's not a pretty sight to see. im just saying.

thanks for letting me use the image from your banner on my new story but i decided not to use it as i felt to bad for copying you. but i do have another image to use so dont fret. even though i doubt that was what you were doing in the first place. hahaha ! update this or wolfsbane soon! otherwise i will hunt you down ! JOKES! XD

saffy
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Author's Response: To say it three times is fine. In fact it makes it seem more special. I'm glad that you enjoyed this chapter, and the whole Scorpius and Charisma chat. I love them together as friends and I thought that I hadn't had them together in a while.

Rose is very gullible, but she might come around, you never know. :P You always find a way to make me laugh Saffy. I bet that it is a pretty sight to see, really!

You weren't copying me, you can use it if you want to, but if you prefer the new image then that's cool too. I will update soon! Thanks for the review.

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hahaha ! this is amazing! i absolutely love this story and it's so well written. sometimes its unfair :( ^^ i love it how Sunday has this thing over Remus, she's so untouchable it's crazy. :)

Author's Response: thanks saffy. :)
you make me blush.
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WOOP! you have posted another chapter of an object of intrest! if you haven't noticed... :P I swear to you woman, your chapters just keep getting better, keep getting mroe addictive and more... amazing. i can't explain the feeling when i see that Wolfsbane or An object of Intrest has another chapter up. I get extremely happy. So happy, that not eve one of my happy dances can fill it out... unfortunately. ^^

I can't believe you have more than 150 reviews as well! it seems like yesterday when you only had 80. (which is still heaps! I am so jealous! XD) The friday the 13th idea is so original, i've never read another fanfic with that idea before. i am really worried about james and the other boys. they weren't in this chapter and they haven't seen them. And hot josh is acting strange as well. i never expected him to do that to Nox. Especially with him being a prefect and all. A little sus if you ask me... :)

hahaha ~ i love molly so much, she cracks me up every time i read a chapter of this story. usually the girl characters are more calm, especially if you're around G but she's the exact opposite. i love it! hollie is awesome too, don't worry. i haven't forgotten about her. i love all your characters, i feel like i'm there. watching all the drama happen around them. i actually feels like i'm one of the characters... a mix between molly and hollie. i am quite jumpy and loud as wel.. ^^
keep up the great work! and update ASAP!

saffy
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Author's Response: Saffy, Saffy, Saffy. I actually really look forward to your reviews. I can't wait to see what you come up with next. :D

I'm glad that you think the chapters keep getting better, it's brilliant to hear.
The happy dances have to fill it out, they just have to!

you have loads of review too! But thank you very much, it all seems to have gone so fast actually. I can remember sitting with Wolfsbane and only getting 2 reviews on the first chapter. I was so happy, now to think that I am getting 20 or 30, it's unreal.
150 reviews on this story makes me feel so happy, so thank you for contributing to that.

You never know what may happen with these boys, they're very spontaneous.

Dearest Molly, I love to write her; she is such a witty character.

You can be in the story is you wish, just think really, really hard. :P

I will update soon. Thanks for the review. XD

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oh god. she is crazy! she's a dude! dear god! ah! dorry im in shock right now, that's so funny though! i love the plot of this story, simple yet you can make so many hilarious things happen in it. are you really japanese? or did you just decide to write about one. sorry if i sound weird, but i was just wondering. great chapter by the way! keep it up!

saffy
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Author's Response: Hahaha! Poor Kana being a turned into a boy :D No I'm not Japanese, but I did study it for over six months and plan to go there someday I have an extreme interest for the culture and then language and I decided it would be a neat idea to have the main character Japanese :D Glad you enjoyed the first chappie Saffy!

XOXO WildFlower!

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this is an excellent start, i love it. i know you might not know me but i've heard of you (wow that sounds so freaky, like i'm a stalker! that isn't true, i'm just a little high school girl ^^) but my sister is vikki222 and you reviewed it's all coming back to me now and my sister really appreciated your reviews. :)

sorry, i just HAD to include that in my review. but the reason i left this message is to tell you this is really amazingly written and it just makes you want to read more. so... good on you! reading the next chapter now... :)
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saffy

Author's Response: Thank you Saffy! Hahaha! No worries, I know exactly who vikki222 is :D her story was brilliant and it was my plessure to review I loved it.

Thank you so much for reviewing! I love seeing Oh, boy! Still getting reviews even after it's long completed! I hope you enjoy the next chapters!

XOXO WildFlower!

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HAHAHA! this is just the first chapter and it already had me laughing my pants off. i love the hello kitty bra part. such a guy thing to do, get all weirded out by girl things... gosh. :)
this is a great start, don't mean to make this a mean review but there are a few grammer mistakes, not too big thought. just proof read the chapter a little more because this story is hilarious and has AMAZING potential!

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saffy

Author's Response: Hehe... I know, that bra thing just popped into my head. I am currently looking for a beta, so I guess I will edit the chapter as soon as possible with correct grammar

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oh! this wasd actually a really good one-shot. this is probably the best slash fanfic i've ever read. it's funny in a way. keep up the good work!

saffy
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