It's no wonder that Lily's friendship with Severus fell apart. Lily was so overcome with jealousy that Narcissa was getting what she wanted that her friend's blood-status was ignored. It was her own carelessness that caused Lily to lose her friend.

The initiation that Severus and Narcissa went through in order to get into the Order of the Phoenix sounds rather interesting. Painful, but interesting.

I'm looking forward to the possibility of Lily and Severus meeting again, on opposite sides of the war. Would knowing that Severus is fighting for the light cause her to change her mind, not wanting Severus to be hurt?

Author's Response: Hey there!

Yeah, you've basically gotten at the heart of Lily. I'm a huge Snape fan, but I recognize that there are parts of him that are a little less romantic, like his obsessive craving for Lily. I sort of challenged myself to write in those parts for Lily's personality swap. Indeed, it was her own fault that he abandoned her.

As for the initiation, I tried to make it as serious as possible. Definitely not as painful as a Death Eater initiation, though!

You'll soon see what happens when Lily finds out that her path might cross with his :)

Thanks so much for continually reviewing, and for directly addressing the points I mention in my author's notes. Your feedback means a lot to me!

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It's too bad that Albus is not capable of throwing off the Imperius as easily as his father. If he was able to do that, it would throw Namken's plan even more out of whack than it already is. Speaking of which, what are they planning?

As much as I can understand Dominique's consideration for her sister's feelings, it might be wise for her to do something for herself; to be selfish a little bit.Victoire doesn't have to approve of it for Teddy and Dom to date.

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If Sirius was the only one nice to Lily, I think it's no wonder that she is starting on such a path. She has no one - but Sirius - she can turn to and whatever feelings she has for Severus have no hope of being returned with Narcissa in the way.

Speaking of Narcissa, I like the idea that she is a half-blood. It puts a new twist on her character, the person she becomes. She would make an interesting rival for Lily.

Severus, Frank, and the Prewett twins sound a lot like this story's version of the Marauders. I have to wonder if things will turn out for them the way it did in the books.

Author's Response: Hey there :)

Yeah, I wanted to draw a bit of a parallel with Severus's canon life with that part. The only people he had left to associate with were those affiliated with the Death Eaters, so it's little wonder that he ultimately chose to join them, despite his personal convictions. I think I read somewhere that he thought joining them and becoming more powerful would somehow impress Lily. Sad.

I'm glad you like what I did with Narcissa. Her blood status will become important soon.

Yeah, I guess they are a little like the Marauders. You won't see them playing pranks and actively picking on Lily past this point, really, but they definitely do have a strong bond. You'll have to wait and see what happens to them :)

Thanks for another kind review!

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It would make sense for Harry, Draco Nesmay to have the opportunity to name the Runespoors, especially after everything that Harry did for them.

As for how Harry addresses Sarai and how Nesmay addresses them both, I think they might need a little longer to start calling them Mum and Dad. It would probably be sooner for Harry than Nesmay.

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Now that Parker has learned that Dominique is alive, I have to wonder how much this has stalled the plan. Will they continue to try to kill her, or move forward with their plan?

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I feel kind of bad for Lily. She's trying so hard to prove that she's good enough, something similar to canon - though here it's for a different reason.

Author's Response: Hi there!

It's interesting of you to say that. I kind of wish you had elaborated more on your thoughts. I'm assuming you're making a reference to her being Muggle-born or trying to impress her family (because she's the first witch they've ever had). I'm glad you feel bad for her, though, because that was my intention!

Thanks so much for your review :)

academica

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How did Severus, Harry, and Draco all contract the disease? I want to say that it has to do with the carpet, but that wouldn't make sense.

Author's Response: No, it's not the carpet, but something else in that room. Remember the disease is passed by touch--so someone infected touched someone else who touched someone else ect . . .

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Hmm? Lily in Hufflepuff and Severus in Ravenclaw. I can see that working. Especially with Severus. There is a certain intellect about him that would place him in Ravenclaw. Without Tobias's horrible influence - the way he was wriiten in the books - Severus would have gone into the house of the wise easily. When it comes to Lily's sorting, I can see that a little less. Although, I can see her as the hard-working type.

I find it interesting that Sirius was placed in Slytherin. I'm rather curious as to how you're going to work that.

Author's Response: Hey there!

Yeah, I wanted to get away from the old Gryffindor-Slytherin rivalry and mix it up a bit. I agree that Severus might have fit easily into Ravenclaw without his father's influence. After all, being constantly exposed to abuse could definitely cause a strong sense of self-preservation and cunning to develop in you.

Sirius actually plays a pretty big role in this story; you'll be seeing more from him in the coming chapters. In fact, you could even say that you'll get an idea of what he might have been like had he followed the Black tradition of becoming a Slytherin.

I do hope you enjoy the next chapter! It will be posted quite soon. Thanks again :)

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Funny, but wrong indeed. This was too funny. Especially the end. I never expected that it would be Hagrid who convinced the first-years to torment Draco. Payback for what Draco caused Buckbeak to go through.

I think you captured Draco well, especially how he felt about Moody after the ferret incident. As for the incident itself - how it felt for Draco to be a ferret - it was described well. While I was reading that part, it felt as if I was a ferret myself.

Author's Response: Hey there!

I'm so glad you found it funny, and that you liked the ending. Poor Hagrid had such a terrible year with the Buckbeak incident, and I think he deserved the chance for a little payback! :)

So glad you liked my characterization of Draco. I tried to describe the ferreting-out as well as possible, and I'm pleased to see it worked for you. A little scary, isn't it? ;)

Thanks for your kind review!

academica

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I was fairly certain that Parker attacked James on purpose. He, like his father, doesn't care about anyone. That would erase Albus's memory of opening the Chamber of Secrets - so that Harry would never find out - is not all that surprising.

I am curious, of course, as to the reason Myrtle is nowhere to be found. I would have expected that she would be there.

Author's Response: Ahhh. Yes, you will see soon! Thank you so much for the review and for being so faithful! :)

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And it's already started. If Teddy wasn't still around to rescue Dominique from the water, I'm sure that she would already be dead. Namken's plan would have succeeded and Dom would be gone.

The fact that Norah was thinking about James while making out with Albus makes me think that whatever relationship she and Albus have is never going to last. No matter what she and James say, they are always going to have feelings for one another.

Author's Response: Yes, ma'am! It sure has! Thank you so much for the review and staying so faithful. It's wonderful and means so much to me.

Thank you!

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I find it strange that Lily would find a wand that suited her on her first try. It just doesn't seem all that plausible.

The brief meeting between Severus and Lily was rather sweet. No matter what the situation, Severus seems to be drawn to Lily. I wonder how their relationship will be during school.

Author's Response: Well, I doubt it would happen to everyone, but Lily is particularly gifted with charms, so I figure that if it were to happen to someone, she would be a good pick.

Yes, there is definitely a little spark there. I do hope you read on later and enjoy their first real meeting.

Thanks for the review!

academica

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Wow. The world has become rather twisted. Hermione a Slytherin. No Dumbledore, McGonagall, Hagrid, Dobby, Buckbeak, Sirius, or Viktor. I have to wonder what caused the world that Hermione, Seamus, Draco, and Blaise remember to disappear.

And Headmaster Riddle? Did he get the chance to start teaching at Hogwarts because there was no Dumbledore to stop him?

I find it rather interesting that the portraits of the founders are aware of the change. Did they know that this was going to happen?

Author's Response: Ohh, it's very twisted. I wonder why :O :/ Hey, who said they remember :O have you read my MTA :P
Headmaster Riddle, uhuh :) Who knows :P you must read too find out more ^.^ x

They might know a little, but I can't reveal too much ^.^

Thank you for your lovely review ♥ x

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I think the punishment that they received was fair. They should have known better that to go out like that. Especially Harry and Ron. The both of them were nearly expelled for what happened with the flying car. They should be glad that only one family saw them flying and that it was an easily fixable situation.

I'd love to see Sarai have twins, a boy and a girl. I think that would be the perfect addition to their family.

alias093001, Slytherin.

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I'm not even sure I'm surprised anymore. Pansy is Parker Namken's mother. That would make a whole lot of sense, even though I think there is more of his father in him.

Parker's antics during the match; a lot of that seemed very planned. Whether it was for the game, or part of the 'plan' I don't know.

All of a sidden, I am afraid for Dominique. James knows of Dom's fears in entering a relationship with her sister's ex. It could be a very good motive for suicide; working right into Namken's plan.

alias093001, Slytherin.

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I feel rather bad for Eloise. When Ron made a comment about her in Goblet of Fire, I couldn't help but wonder how she felt about that. There's just something so sad about her and the torment she must have gone through during her years at Hogwarts.

Based on the comment Ron made comment, I think you characterized her well, brought to light the insecurities she has about her looks. It fits well into canon and the little that is known of her.

alias093001, Slytherin.

Author's Response: Exactly. JKR just introduced her character for comic relief, and even i've always wondered what her life would have been like at Hogwarts. It definitely wouldn't have been much fun.

Glad you think so. :) I tried my best to bring her insecurities to the forefront in the prologue, so I'm glad you find the characterisation well.
Thank youuu :)

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Well, that was rather sweet of her. Henri kept second-guessing himself and it was never going to get done if he did not allow anyone to see it.

Robert's protective big brother act comes a little too late, I think. After all, he was the one to provide Apolline as a client. If he wanted to protect his brother, then he shouldn't have introduced them.

alias093001, Slytherin.

Author's Response: Haha she can be sweet sometimes :) And yes, Robert hasn't really been acting as sensibly as he might have... he wanted to make things better for Henri, and I suppose he hadn't thought Apolline would be his type (looks aside, of course). Robert considers himself to be very clever, sensible and sorted, but he still gets it wrong a lot of the time.

Thanks so much for all your reviews!

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After the spat with Apolline, I don't find it surprising that Jacqueline would attempt to win Henri back. To her, Henri is simply a prize to be won. And, the fact that she broke up with him and put him in such a devastating rut means she would only have done it again when she grew tired of him.

I think Apolline did the right thing by approaching Henri. Had she not, Jacqueline might have gotten him back. Now all Apolline must do is convince Henri to give her the painting.

alias093001, Slytherin.

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Henri is getting attached. That's the real problems. His attraction to her is coming out through the painting and he's afraid that he'll lose Apolline if he ever finishes the painting. That's why he's not willing to part with the paint, believing that it will never be finished.

I can understand Henri's concern, but Apolline has been trying to get to know him during the sessions. She doesn't want to let go either, though her efforts at concealing this are better than Henri's.

alias093001, Slytherin.

Author's Response: Indeed he is ;) Apolline and the painting are very interconnected in his mind - he's obsessed with both of them, he admires both of them, both of them frustrate him immensely etc. Importantly, he is very scared of losing both or either of them.

Haha, yes, Apolline has arguably been making a bit more of an effort to be friends than Henri has... He's not particularly good at social interaction, bless him.

Thanks again!

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I did not expect Apolline's breakdown over some guy. Being half-Veela, I would not have expected that guy would be the one to destroy the relationship.

Apolline's recent break-up does, however, explain why she's so insistent upon learning about Henri. She wants to feel close to someone again. Henri does not share that sentiment. He is too wrapped up in his work; though he does feel an attraction, enough to get over the break-up he's been working through.

It looks like Robert's plan to help his brother is working.

alias093001, Slytherin.

Author's Response: Apolline is, in her own way, rather insecure - she knows she's completely stunning, and also knows that half the time that's all people (especially guys, obviously xP) see about her. At the same time, though, she is used to using her looks to get what she wants and to make people like her, so her personality could use a lot of work (something Henri would definitely agree with). So Andre definitely didn't dump her because he found someone more attrative (probably not possible) but because he found someone who was much less work.

Oh, definitely - Henri's work is the most important thing to him, and though Apolline is starting to see them much more as friends, to him she's still (mainly) just a client with a difficult painting for him to do, albeit a client he fancies rather a lot xP

Glad you're still enjoying it!

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Poor Apolline. She's so impatient for her portrait to be done. She doesn't understand that art takes time to create. That's what makes it beautiful.

While Apolline seems interested in Henri, it does not appear as if he feels the same way, despite his attraction to her. I wonder what Apolline will try next to grab his attention.

alias093001, Slytherin.

Author's Response: She certainly is impatient - not something that exactly endears her to Henri who is determined to make his masterpiece perfect...

Haha well, she definitely has a few tricks up her sleeve, as the next couple of chapters certainly prove xD

Thanks again!

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Given Henri's immediate attraction to her because of the Veela allure, it makes me wonder if what Robert said before was true. Is Apolline really just a friend of a friend?

I get the feeling that Apolline did not expect just how demanding this would be when she asked to have her portrait done. Henri's dedication to his work seems to have taken her by surprise.

Both Henri and Apolline seem to be characterized well, for what little is known about them. I'm curious as to how their relationship will progress.

alias093001, Slytherin.

Author's Response: Is she indeed... you'll have to wait and see about that one ;)

I agree with you there - Apolline sort of just took the attitude of "oh, I've got a bit of spare cash, and I'm a pretty vain sort of person, so why don't I get a portrait done?" whereas for Henri, this is his livelihood and his passion. I'm glad you like their characterisations too.

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This sounds like an interesting story. Rarely have I ever seen Fleur's parents written about.

The idea of Monsieur Delacour - Henri - being an artist is an interesting twist. That would provide a realistic explanation as to how he and Apolline first met.

Robert sounds like the extremely protective sort of person. I can understand why he would want try to help, but it kind of seems like he's going about it the wrong way.

alias093001, Slytherin.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for all your reviews! I'm so sorry I've only just got around to replying to them - I've been on a bit of a break and have only just seen them.

I really think there should be more stories about Fleur's parents - there's so much you can do with them! Aww I think that's a good way to describe Robert, actually - I do rather like him, and he is usually just trying to help, but he does often do the wrong thing where Henri is concerned.

Thanks for the review! I'm really glad you enjoyed it :)

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Well, this was horribly depressing. Beautiful, but sad. I don't think I've ever read a story as moving as this. Severus and Lily were characterized well and the story seemed very believable.

The best part, I think, was Severus going to speak at Lily's grave. It was touching and sweet. Especially hearing him talk about Harry for that brief instance. I imagine Severus does this every Christmas

alias093001, Slytherin.

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This is twisted and dark, a nice insight into Barty's character.

I find the prediction in Barty's Divination exam rather interesting: a representation of the Godric's Hollow confrontation. I wonder, did Barty know before it happened? Was he aware of Voldemort's destruction before anyone else?

The duel between Barty and Moody was definitely the best part. Like an early look into how Alastor was taken down in August 1994.

alias093001, Slytherin.

Author's Response: I always sort of pictured Barty Jr. as a mad Hermione. He's brilliant, but very unhinged. Mad people are traditionally seers, so I liked the idea of him having some talent there that he didn't realize. Yes, it was definitely Voldy killing Harry's Parents at Godric's Hollow.

Glad you liked the duel. I wanted Barty to make a good showing, but not be able to overcome an Auror at his age.

I really appreciate the review and the nice words.

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