Just one small thing to point out, when you used 'Said' a couple of times after dialogue it should have been lower case, i.e. 'said'. This is always the case even if the dialogue ends with a question mark. But nit-picking aside, I thought this was a nice start and the characterization seemed spot on. Keep it up.Author's Response: Thanks! I always get confused whether or not to use upper case! I'll deffinately keep writing. :D Report Review
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