Lovely! Really well done on the ending here. I quite enjoyed this story and look forward to a possible sequel.Author's Response: Thanks, Carl. I'm glad you finally finished it. =P Report Review
Wonderful! This comment could be repeated multiple times for both chapters. You've done a lovely job of creating the right atmosphere and mood for this kind of piece, which touches on themes very important for BIll and Remus right now. The characters are expertly written and the writing is engaging. Bravo! Report Review
*Cue dramatic music.... That was a very nicely put together chapter. Tonk's method of interrogating Irene was brilliant, luring her into a "gossip mode," but the interrogation of Mr. Brown was... brief, to say the least. It makes me think that maybe he had more to say. Excellent chapter, I look forward to more!Author's Response: *looks devious* Maybe Terence did have more to say, maybe he did not (did you know that Terence was a popular butler's name in mystery stories?). One can never tell in these stories.... Thanks for the review, Carl. What will happen next....? Report Review
The game's afoot indeed... hopefully it will stay that way through a couple updates in the near future ;). Very nice chapter, I'm looking forward to more.Author's Response: Ha! It may not be a pipe, but the hat will have to do for now. ;-) It will be updated soon, you have my word on it. Report Review
A wide eyed girl who won't say a thing, a mysterious boy who knows something about another mysterious boy, and a group of self-centered slytherins.... Looks like all the pieces are in place, or are they...?Author's Response: How many suspects can one have in a story? Right now, I'm going for the max. Thanks again, Carl! Report Review
Hm... a reference to Professor Moriarty, I presume? The plot certainly thickens this chapter, as does my interest. I'm just waiting for Tonks to break out a pipe and magnifying glass.Author's Response: That name cracks me up whenever I read it now. Actually, all the OC names are from mystery novels or TV shows. Maybe making a list would amuse readers.... Anyways, thank for the review. It's so wonderful that you're interested in it. The pipe will come soon, I promice. ;-) Report Review
Very nice first chapter. I never thought much about what Tonks was like at Hogwarts, but your portayal of her seems to fit very nicely.Author's Response: Thank you very much, Carl. It's great that you're joining me on this. The Golden trio nor the Marauders seemed like detective material, while Tonks fit the bill perfectly. Report Review
Wonderful chapter, can't wait for more. Report Review
I've been a fan of your writing since the first time I had the good fortune to stumble across it. You've done a wonderful job with it. Congratulations, and I can't wait to see what you write next.
Cheers, CarlAuthor's Response: You've been in my corner through thick and thin. I can't believe I forgot to say something about that! I'll remember to do so in the epilogue. Thanks for all your help with this and am glad such a gramarnazi got past all my bad grammar. Report Review
Wonderful chapter. I have been busy in my own projects (check out the Phoenix Feather on the main page), so I haven't reviewed much lately. Just wanted to let you know that you're still doing right. Onward! Report Review
Good to see you haven't given up on the story. I look forward to the next update> Report Review
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RavenGryffendor is a wonderful author, and the fact that you are so anxious to read the next chapter means that you must admire her just as much as the rest of us, so please show her some respect. Besides, I hear that her last next chapter is going to be well worth the wait, so I'd be willing to wait a little bit longer if it will make her happier with it. Report Review
Very nice. For a while there, I felt like things completely dropped off, and I meant to leave you a note about it. The writing was still excellent, but I personally thought the story was starting to stray a bit far. Now that we've returned to England, things are far more comfortable for me, and I'm enjoying it more. Great story. Keep it up! Report Review
Wonderful story! The ending made me grumble a little bit, but I suppose I'll get over that. Great work. Report Review
LogicalRaven, please ignore these other people's comments. We're all dying to find out what happens next, but I know I'd rather read a chapter that you were happy with. Your fan, Eng986 Report Review
Good Game! Another excellent chapter. I'm surprised they haven't made you a trusted author yet, but I suppose we'll just have to wait for them to validate your stories. Looking forward to the next chapter.Author's Response: Thanks, I appreciate it. Report Review
Hm, Luna has some form of seer blood in her. It'll be interesting to see what kind of impact that has on the story line. Again, a solid chapter. Oh, and if you're interested, I put up a new fic. It's a humor entry of mine from the Duel. Well, looking forward to more.Author's Response: Sorta, yeah...Thanks, I'll check it out. Report Review
I'll be honest. I didn't like this one as much as the others, but it was probably wading through all the waffle at the beginning that did it. Touching at first, but it got a little tiresome, going through the story again. Still a good chapter, thouth. Can't wait for more.Author's Response: To be perfectly honest, I share some of your thoughts myself. Orginally I was going to use this chapter as a one shot, then I ended up putting it back in as I thought there was too many spoliers left in. Oh well, it's there.
Well done... again. The fight and subsequent make-up was well done (hilarious too... Snape's office...). Keep up the good work.Author's Response: Thanks...the thing about H/HR fights in this universe is that you have to have them make up relativly quickly. Unlike Ron/Harry or Ron/Hermione where they can go on for months. IE the "pet wars" (term taken from some other fan fic) or the GOF fight.
Again, spot-on with this chapter. You really weren't kidding when you said, "a cliffhanger is a writer‚Äôs best friend." Nicely done on another chapter. *Sigh*, I guess I'll have to wait until the fifth to see where this goes... Report Review
This is a very well written fiction. The ball scene did creep me out just a little bit because it took me back to reading Madame Bovary, but I really think that you've created the beginning of a wonderful story. Definately continue on with this.Author's Response: Thank you so much!Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
Great chapter. Lots happened, and we finally found out the traitor in the Order. Well done! Looking forward to more.Author's Response: I uppped 31 tonight btw Report Review
Halfway? Wow, this is shaping up to be a good long story, not that I'm complaining, mind you. Once again, you've delivered a great chapter, full of excitement and action. I particulartly like how you staged the attack on Harry's mind. Very nice.Author's Response: Actaully its a touch less than halfway... Report Review
Brilliant work here. Once again, you've delivered an incredibly emotionally charged fiction. You really had me right in there feeling Lupin's pain. Report Review
Brilliant. What more can I say? This is a wonderful story, and I'm sorry that it's taken me so long to leave it a review. Incredible work so far; I'm looking forward to the next update. Report Review
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