I really like this chapter, and your whole story. Your writing style is really interesting and easy to read, it flows really well and you cant read it too fast, creating an enjoyable reading experience. Other than all the awesomeness currently going on in the writing (e.g. i love it when potter asked "distracted?" and began to flex, that made me lol) im having trouble seeing where this story is headed.Author's Response: I'M GLAD YOU LIKEE! i'm sorry about the confusion of where this is head though. it's sometimes hard for me to translate whats in my head into writing.. but i'm working on it!
THANK YOU. Report Review
id have to say dreadful, going on troll.Author's Response: Am really sorry to disappoint you Report Review
i dont like the remus/lyla mix going on here, i dont know why it's just realy getting on my nerves.Author's Response: i'm really sorry that it's annoying you, hopefully something will happen that'll make you change your mind. You can't please everyone no matter how hard you try =]
I hope you're still enjoying the rest of the story though.
Liz. Report Review
i love it how sirius thinks,
"i must be a bloody saint"
that line for me realy captivates the personality of my most loved marauder. I love how you writing flows, it's great. Im realy enjoying the story and hope there is a plot thickening away somewhere.Author's Response: =] I'm really glad you're enjoying reading my story, and that you like sirius, he's a diffucult character to write.
i'm in the process of writing the next chapter, i'm hoping to have it written by the end of the week.
Liz. Report Review
im kind of annoyed.
wasn't it proved in the deathly hallows that James invisibility cloak was a hallow. meaning it was special and couldn't be summoned by a spell like it was around halfway into the chapter.
this little flaw made the rest very uncomfortable to read.
other than that realy nice.Author's Response: Hi jelly sword!
Yes, I do remember that, you are absolutely right. Usually with mistakes I'd change it straight away, but I feel it's too late. I guess for later events, including the ending, it'll kinda make sense why some things strayed away from canon. I am usually very careful with things like this, but I'm only studying up to refresh things just a little, all else is my own plot. Thanks so much for pointing that out and thanks so much for reviewing! XD
XOXO WildFlower! Report Review
THIS IS MAD! written exceptionally well, im realy enjoying the story, your writing flows realy well and the best bit is; its so fun to read.
eagerly awaiting more. Report Review
anywase is supposed to be anyways and a dell?
must be a pretty old dell. Report Review
i love this story. plus my name is annie. heheheAuthor's Response: haha well thats enough reason to love it! hope you enjoy the rest! Report Review
just get to Lily
i love this chapter
"quack!" "quack!" "quack!"
"quack!" "quack!" "quack!"Author's Response: Thank you for reading :) Report Review
("HUHAHAHAHAHA!! THE POWER OF COPY AND PASTE IS MINE!!")Author's Response: LOL
awesome review, thanks for that.
I love reviews like this xD Report Review
i like where this is going
its nice and easy to read and i like the descriptions
"quack" "quack" "quack"
i like it!
*wink wink*Author's Response: Heehee. Thanks for the great review!! Report Review
i love it great job
cows wa here!
can you please use the word fluberdigalion in your next chapter Report Review
i must say Marissa is annoying the crap out of me i hate her!! Report Review
i think a daughter of aberforth. If harry had a half-sister voldemort and his death eaters would have killed her by now.
But if aberforth had a daughter well...put it this way she wouldnt be dead.
I love this chapter!!
Poor charlie, i must say the whole Lily/James thing is going a bit fast but its well written *claps*
Good on you!!
PLEASE WRITE CHARLIE/SIRIUS!!!(me and my friend have been waiting for so long, WERE DESPERATE!!!)
one last thing use the word fluberdigalion in your next chapter
and i love lord of the rings so thanks for the whole Bilbo BagginsAuthor's Response: Yeah Lord of the Rings fan here too.
I would use - fluberdigalion...if I knew what it meant lol
Thanks for the great review!! =D I really appreciate it =) Report Review
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