Hi! Auguste Vyne/Alek Rykov here from Magic's Finest. I'm Carmen, if you hadn't picked up from the board. Anyway, present tense, yum. I like. :D I forgot where I heard, but some say that present tense makes stories more interesting or something. But a lot of people write in past tense, so ehhh. Nice to see a change, I guess.
What a fascinating backstory. Seriously, though. Hmmm. Tom and Stacy. The baby's going to be Charlotte?Author's Response: Thanks so much for the resopnse! You'll have to wait and see, i have the first real chapter still in the makings. it will probably be a week or so. Report Review
:O I had no clue that was Travis! Hehe, well, go him!
Haha, the twins are just great. Just great. All those inventions you made were fabulous also. Bill with a huge, runny nose. What sight!
I love what they did with Michael, the poor guy. Well, I didn't especially care for him since he was just introduced and all. Oh well. Unless it was the Michael from the books, and he was only a minor character.
Wait...was there even a Michael in the series?Author's Response: Um, now that I think of it, I think there may have been a Michael Conner or something like that. But that wasn't the same guy. -Chii Report Review
Hey! Carmen here, from MF. Or Alek Rykov, seeing as I'm most active with him. You'd probably remember me because I was asking about fics and stuff on the board.
Anyway, I like the way you write it. This is probably the first or second time I've encountered a story written this way. I can't exactly explain it, but there's this way you write it, and it's quite different from other stories I read. Don't worry, it's not a bad thing. :P
Looking forward to see what these two'll go through. :D Report Review
Nooo, it DOES have a point. It's just the ramblings of Bianca and I in Binns' class. Yay. Our personalities seem pretty right to me. Nothing way off. :D I'll get Bianca to read and review later. I'm not sure how soon that'll be, because she's studying for finals and whatnot.
And you're right on target when you had both of us deny the crushes and stuff. That sounds just like us, haha. Not to mention the part about Bianca falling asleep in class..Author's Response: Haha, thats good! I wasn't sure... and the story is for you so... you know... Report Review
Huh. I can't imagine Draco being nice to Ron. Even a tad bit. But hey, that's what fanfiction's all about! :PAuthor's Response: well, i think if you had that happen to you, you might be nice tou your enimies. he was in to much pain to care. Report Review
Hmmm...well, the plotting is pretty good. But I think you need more detail and such. I don't know if you said you were continuing this...but yeah. Just a few pointers.Author's Response: thanks. i'm continuing it. sometime... Report Review
OH, THE HORROR! BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO LUCIUS.Author's Response: BOOOOOOOOOOO LUCIUS! Report Review
Pretty nice. But spacing would be better because the cluttered-ness makes it hard on the eyes, and also harder to read. Don't know if someone said that already. But otherwise, nice little one-shot.
-Carmen from MF Report Review
WristyArithmancer did a prettttty good job. Only a few spelling errors, but that's a-okay! I don't think spell-check would've picked it up, either. It's just one of those "I'm a human so I'm better an spelling and grammar than you, puny computer!" thing. If that made any sense.
Love your writing throughout. GO GEORGE! [Hehe, my hotmail email is georgebeforefred.]
-Carmen [from MF]Author's Response: Not everything is perfect. And WristyArithmancer is Travis. :P You know, Xanthus on MF. Hehe, I think he deserves a pat on the back! And I know! Go George! I love him! He is sooo much better than Fred. Thanks for reviewing Carmen, I'm sooo glad you liked it. -Melanie Report Review
Wait, never mind. I can see it noooooooow! YAYYYYYYYY! Report Review
Amos Diggory! Wooooooooo, canon. [Don't know why I did that...] Nicely written! I love the intro paragraph. Good flow. Flow. Flooooooooooowwwwwwww. Errrmm, excuse me. A bit sugarhigh on Skittles. :P Nice chapter picture! GO MSW!
Also, I can't see your banner.Author's Response: Lol! ll-Merry :P Report Review
Great one-shot songfic! Lyrics fit nicely. This is Carmen from MF, by the way.Author's Response: Thanks! I love that song... Report Review
I liked this a lot. Hysterical, heartbroken Hermione: for some reason, it strikes me as very fascinating. Gah, I must be insane. Report Review
What a wonderful speech. I absolutely adored this. I liked the Leaky Cauldron scene. And the ending couldn't have been more perfect. Kudos! Report Review
Gah, that was awesome! I love how you portrayed Hermione. The song fits nicely, also. I LOVED the starting paragraph. Report Review
:D I decided to start with the one-shots then move on to the stories. Very well written. But of course, that was to be expected. Nice title, by the way. Oh, and if you didn't know, this is Carmen. Report Review
Wow. The End. I love the ending line. Hmmm...I liked all of them, don't really have a favorite.
Oh, and I'd give you a big plate of spinach. Yum, yum. :PAuthor's Response: Dude! hehe... yeah the ending line came out of nowhere! Im glad you enjoyed this journey with the boys and my mates. SPINACH?!?! DUDE what do you take me for? Im NOT popeye. But i could be *sly glance* thanks for taking the time to comment!!! love kei Report Review
"‘You’re one lucky girl. That boy is mighty fine,’ Angelina winked."
Sounds like her, hehe.Author's Response: hehe... yes. she's one of my favourite female characters. we need more female quidditch captains (though im not complaining about Roger, Harry, Oli and Cedric!) Report Review
WOOOOOOOOOOOOO GEORGE. Yum, Nosebleed Nougats.Author's Response: ehehe... is there something you arent telling me? like-- a crush on a certain redhead? and yes, nosebleed nougats. Report Review
Psh, George is way cooler than Fred. :PAuthor's Response: hmm... i dont know about that. but my loyalty is split. i think they're both gorgeous. Report Review
Mmmm nothing to say here. Go Seamus and Mary-Anne! Haha..Author's Response: Ahah... whoa? that bad huh? lol. Report Review
If they two have kids, they'd have [what's white+red? of course!] PINK HAIR! Hahahaha, what a riot. It'll be strange to have naturally pink-haired kiddies running around though.Author's Response: whoa man. pink hair. something to tease my friend about! and i know that tonks doesnt naturally have pink hair-- but what about if she was a love child of a Weasley and a Veela? No? Maybe not. lol Report Review
Hm, I think it was pretty good. As one of the more minor characters of the series, Roger Davies is a pretty...mysterious, I guess, character. Good job portraying him. His Quidditch-ness took after Oliver Wood's, to me it seems. The "BOO YOU SUCK GO HIT SOME BLUDGERS!" side of him. Erm..them? Author's Response: ehehe... yeah, Roger-- he didnt look bad in the movies either did he? ehehe--- yeah, needed to get them right near to Oli so as to support Peeves motivation for getting him! Report Review
Oooh, this one is pretty cool. Peeves is such a weirdo. Author's Response: hehe yes peeves is. im glad you liked this one-- yeah, my friends seem to think peeves is a pervert for being in the girls dorms (but then again... malfoy was too. lol) Report Review
Oooh, I like your chapters. It's nice for a bit of fluffy, light reading. :DAuthor's Response: hehe... thanks. yeah, i didnt want it to be intense. i suppose thats why it was so easy to write-- didnt have to concentrate much on deeper feelings. Report Review
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