Good plot. Please PLEASE Moony, work on stories when you can spell correctly! It would help this story very very much. But otherwise a great story. And also, try to put your sentences in paragraphs. I've noticed you're using just sentence.enter.sentence.enter-- it's gotta be a paragraph. Where you write from the left side of the page to the right side of the page completely. And also indent your paragraphs when you do that.
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THE THS BROTHER ALAGORN!
((Random burst done now.))Author's Response: Hey, I haven't updated this in YEARS because I moved it to fanfiction . net /s/3186/1/Truth
but I haven't updated it either, seeing as I have run out of idea's. but if you want to read it (its changed a lot) please do!
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