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Review #26, by katti4493Just Rose: Secrets

26th August 2012:
I'm really sorry that I haven't reviewed this story so far because it's amazing and I'm just reading it so quickly, but I had to with this chapter.

Oh. My. God.

The whole make-up of this story has just come crashing down with this news! I can't actually believe it! I thought Teddy was a genuinely nice guy! Rose is going to have a self esteem collapse after this, and be very conflicted.

I also want to say I love the way you write. You managed to make so many witticisms and write in an engrossing way. I love it!

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Review #27, by katti4493Dragon Whisperer: Chapter 2

13th August 2012:
Wow, you've changed it loads since I last read it! It's really good, and great how you've taken time to develop a character's background, particularly a new character like Nikki. It helps to make her have a strong character that makes her instantly recognisable and creates light and shade within her personality, and a clear reason for the actions she is going to take in this story. On that, you were brilliant!

The only thing I would say is that you introduced a lot of characters in this chapter without giving them any noticeable personality trait to distinguish them. If you introduce them through dialogue or appearance, it would be a lot easier for the reader to remember them all. Other than that, it was brilliant and I will definitely read the next chapter!

Author's Response: sorry for the way overdue response! i thought i replied to this earlier, and then i went MIA. thanks so much for the feedback- i'll be sure to incorporate it when i edit (which should be soon!). hope you're well and thanks so much for the review!

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Review #28, by katti4493Dragon Whisperer: Chapter 1

1st August 2012:
Really nice start! I like how you have already shown a contrast between their personalities, and I think you have the dialogue bang on. I'd love to see how you develop them, because you've created some firmly established characters with some great dialogue.

My only small criticism is if this is destined to be longer than a one shot, you could have moved the last section (the bit where Nikki goes to see Charlie at night) to another chapter, as it felt a little quick. Other than that it was a great start!

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm so glad you like it! You're right about the last part- I'm never sure where to transition between chapters. I'll go back over it though! Thanks again!

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Review #29, by katti4493Admirable Sentiments: Admirable Sentiments

12th July 2012:
As you've left such lovely reviews of my story, I thought I'd come over here and have a read of yours!

I have to say I LOVE your dialogue; its so romantic, but yet at the same time feels absolutely natural. It also succeeded in keeping with the characters, especially Lucius, who in some fics is turned into a bit of a drip, or turned into an evil snarling psycho! You treaded the line well, and allowed him to be romantic and sentimental with his wife, but also kept the edge to his character.

I also love how you portrayed Narcissa as Lucius' voice of reason, and by mentioning Dobby you really helped in keeping the threatening edge to his character!

The only thing I'd say is I would love some more description, but the description you do is amazing! Really good one shot, I really enjoyed it! I love Lucius/Narcissa!

Author's Response: Aww thank you so much, this means so much to me. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it. Yes, I tried my best to keep Lucius's character in tact while adding in the sentimental part of his disposition while he's with his wife. Thank you so much :)

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Review #30, by katti4493The Women of Black: It's Over

13th June 2012:
Amazing! I love the way you used darkness in this chapter, and your descriptions were sublime! I love stories about the Black Sisters, it allows you to branch out into stories that are rarely touched upon. I also love how you show Rodolphus in this chapter; he really is a neglected figure, and you drew his character in a few short sentences. Can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you!
Yes, I really loved writing about Rodolphus; he's an interesting character and I'm looking forward to developing him a bit more.
I am also excited about the next bit! Thank you for such a great review :)

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Review #31, by katti4493Divided We Fall: Endless Night

10th June 2012:
Yay! An update! I loved the Godric section in this chapter, I think it's really good how you've given him a strong motivation for what he is going to do. And Rowena seems really tough, if a little idealistic, at the moment, but I really like her character. I suspect that Rowena is the one person that Gemma predicted Godric is going to love, but I'm not too sure at the moment!

I can't wait to see more of Helga's feelings and motivations coming out in future chapters, and hopefully she will help Rowena's magic grow. But I am interested to see, as Godric and Rowena are presumably Muggleborns, how they will make friends with Salazar in the future.

And Salazar, he is the character I always really look forward to seeing because he obviously goes through the biggest transformation through the story. I will be interested to see how you tackle this.

I love the way you write, there's no repetitive language and you obviously check what you write so thoroughly. I'll be reading when the next chapter is up!!

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Review #32, by katti4493A Love Story Like No Other: Rowena

8th June 2012:
Good start to the story! Couple of spelling and grammatical errors, but everyone can do that! I liked how you showed Rowena's defiance and you wrote some really good dialogue. Maybe you could include some more description like in your first paragraph which was really good and showed a real attention to detail. I can't wait to see how you interpret the other characters!

Author's Response: I'll keep your suggestion in mind when editing the story and developing future chapters. Thanks for the review.

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Review #33, by katti4493Madam Minister: Adieu, Adieu

27th May 2012:
AH!!! I nearly fell off my seat when I saw this had been updated! I love this story so much, and I am so glad it is back! Really good chapter, I loved how much of it was just in Artemisia's thoughts. Can't wait for the next one!

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Review #34, by katti4493Operation Happy Ending: They Stumble That Run Fast

14th May 2012:
I think Evie is going to die. Because Sirius would stay with her until the day she dies, and clearly he is not with her later :( Still brilliant chapter and I can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: Oo well hang on there! I think I may be a little more unpredictable than you're giving me credit for ;) Til the day she dies may be just an expression ...or maybe not. You'll have to wait and see!

Thankyou! I can't wait to hear what you think of the next one!


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Review #35, by katti4493Operation Happy Ending: Not Single Sorrows, But Battalions

14th May 2012:
Well, we all knew that was coming, right from when Remington slammed the door when they revealed the plan to her right at the beginning. But it's a great story, keep reading!

Author's Response: Haha yes. I'm glad you kept reading!



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Review #36, by katti4493Operation Happy Ending: All That Glistens is Not Gold

14th May 2012:
It all seemed so happy and lovely...until that last bit. I love that you are adding a sinister edge, because obviously, at this point, the war was starting! I'm definitely going to keep reading!

Author's Response: Woohoo thankyou! Yes it is sinister and I'm not sure if you've gotten up to Chapter 13 but it's about to get a whole lot more sinister after that. Sigh. Happiness is never simple is it?

Thanks for your review!


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Review #37, by katti4493And Now A Word From Our Sponsors: Nine

12th May 2012:
Yay! I was right!!! But, seriously, another really good chapter! Sometimes I want your chapters to be longer they are so awesome! Can't wait for the next, and last one :(

Author's Response: You were right -- congratulations! :D Sometimes I think I'd like to WRITE longer chapters, but I'm slowly gaining more and more confidence in writing whatever the heck I feel like writing. :P I think it's really nice of you to say that, though!

Thank you for taking the time to tell me what you thought of the chapter, and I hope you check back on Thursday for the last one! ♥

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Review #38, by katti4493Shot of Light: Delivery Girl

8th May 2012:
Oh dear...things are not looking good for Hannah! I love this story because you are taking it along such an interesting route, filling the blanks in different ways to how I expected. I also love how you highlight the simple things as well, it heightens the tension in the rest of the story!

Definitely keep writing, because I'll keep reading!

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Review #39, by katti4493And Now A Word From Our Sponsors: Eight

4th May 2012:
Well Julian is never going to like her now! She really does get some silly ideas into her head! But it was still a really good chapter and I will definitely keep reading!

Author's Response: I'd definitely think she's destroyed things on the Julian front -- you're quite right there. ;) But I shouldn't give too much away, I suppose! Silly ideas are like her bread and butter. Of the brain. And that was a simile that sounded much better in my head. :)

Thanks so much for taking the time to tell me what you thought of this chapter! I seriously do appreciate it so much, and it means a lot to me that you did. Hope to see you back for chapter 9! ♥

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Review #40, by katti4493Something Like That: Sweet Merlin

30th April 2012:
It's a good start! And an interesting pairing as well. There are far too many Lily/James, Lily/Sirius, Lily/Remus stories in this world for my liking. With this story, you will be able to take a whole new look at this time period from a different angle, and put your own spin on it! It seems like a good start in this respect, well done!

I think you just need to make sure you are not switching between first person/third person because it can be a little jarring for the reader. You started in third person by calling her "Katherine" and then started saying "I did this" etc. You really need to decide what style you are going to write in and stick to it.

I thought Regulus' characterisation was really good. He seems cold and heartless at the moment, but there is definitely potential for him to open up as a character. I will be interested to see how you change the ending of the story (is he going to stay alive?). I just hope you consider that sometimes being kind to your characters is not being kind to your writing, and can sometimes dampen the emotional impact of the story. I also thought you could have made Sirius' opinion of his brother a little more nuanced instead of just "he's evil" seeing as they were brothers and we know that Regulus wasn't evil.

I hope I haven't been too harsh but I really do think this has a lot of potential and I will read some more chapters!

Author's Response: Don't worry you aren't being harsh! I really appreciate any and all feedback. I hope you like the next chapters and you continue to read the story! Thank you for reviewing (:

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Review #41, by katti4493And Now A Word From Our Sponsors: Seven

26th April 2012:
I think (this might be some wild crazy outlandish theory) that it was Hugo, totally because he brought up Julian and was about to say something - "Well I" - before Rose interrupted him. I reckon he was going to say "Well I told Julian" but I'm not entirely sure of his motive for that, so it will probably just stay in the realms of crazy theory!!! Brilliant story anyway, I've read it all at once and I really enjoyed it!

Author's Response: Nice theory! Ooh, I love all the speculation people are getting into -- did not anticipate this. ;) There's only one way to find out the truth, though, and that's to keep reading. I hope you do!

I love hearing that you've read it all in one go -- that just floors me, it really does. I'm so pleased you've enjoyed the story! Thanks so much for taking the time to leave me this review, and I hope to hear more from you in the future! :3

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Review #42, by katti4493Divided We Fall: The Fourth Horseman

20th April 2012:
Really good first chapter! I loved how you made parallels between Godric and Rowena and interchanged them through this chapter. In some founders stories (including my own!!) it can be very easy to become dragged down or sidetracked by one character, but you adeptly avoided that issue in this chapter. I also think it was really good that you clearly knew a little bit about the medieval period; this is often totally forgotten with founders stories but you stuck to your game plan really well.

I thought Godric's character was very interesting and showed a different side to him. You upturned the usual stereotypes of Prince or orphan and made him your own character. I also loved the dream at the beginning, it showed a great way to immediately jump into the story. While Rowena is almost always a Princess or a Queen, you made her story interesting by the interaction with her father who seemed a truly Machiavellian character. I also think it is really interesting that she is going to be married to Salazar; in most Founders stories Rowena ends up with either Godric or Salazar, so I can't decide whether you will make her fall head over heels for Salazar or do her duty with Salazar and fall in love with Godric on the side. Or you might continue in this vein of the truly independent woman and not have her with either! Brilliant start so far!

Only one tiny criticism! At one point you changed the spelling of the name Jacquelyn. It didn't bother me because I'm always doing things like that when I write!

I really hope you carry on with this as Founders stories are my absolute favourites and I think there are so few good long stories; most people just stick to one shots. I can't wait to read your next chapter!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so, so much for this review! I really appreciated it, because I think your founders story is the best!! I may become sidetracked by a few of the characters now and then, but I intend to split the story as a whole relatively evenly.

And I hope it did appear that I knew about the time period! I don't feel I know much compared to some people, but I am trying to make it... well, not completely absurd. I've done a bit of research. As for Rowena, I will say I'm a sucker for truly independent women... but I still have a a pairing in mind for her eventually. :)

Also thank you very much for pointing out the spelling change. My bad! I fixed it!

My next chapter is in the quenue. :)

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Review #43, by katti4493Never There: Scenes at a Graveyard

18th April 2012:
I'm crying, that was so wonderful, and so sad! Please keep going with this series, I love it! There was never anyone else for Reid other than Cecilia, but he death forced him to move on. That was brilliant, thank you for that!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I'm not sure if I'll write any more Unsinkable, but I never say never. :) Thanks so much for reviewing!

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Review #44, by katti4493Shot of Light: Lost

15th January 2012:
Ahhh!!! Suspense!!! I wonder what Hannah is going to do?

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Review #45, by katti4493Holes to Heaven: Holes to Heaven

14th January 2012:
You gave me inspiration reviewing my stories, so I thought I'd come and review yours! This really is so sweet and adorable, and it was nice to see a role reversal with Lily in control. In many James/Lily stories, Lily is slowly won over and feels like she is losing her mind. With James being the scared one, you turned the convention on its head. I also liked how you gradually built up the tension, and didn't just go for "I love you" right from the off which may have been tempting. I also love the simplicity of this - we don't need to know the backstory, how they got here, all we need to know is they are here now. I also liked how you made an ominous cloud hang over them; I always feel this is a vital requirement to a James/Lily story as we all know they are doomed to die so long. Others may rid the story of this element. You succeeded in capturing the mood perfectly. I can't wait to read more in the future!

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Review #46, by katti4493Haunted: the Life and Times of Regulus Arcturus Black: R.A.B.

1st January 2012:
Wonderful end to a wonderful story, and you left the end to JK's Kreacher telling Harry, Ron and Hermione in Book 7. It was a fitting conclusion finishing the story with the only concrete evidence we have for the life of Regulus, and the way you embellished his story was truly wonderful. Each character you made was realistic and every character had flaws which made them more human, Regulus became the tragic hero that he was expected to be but in such a unique and individual way. If anyone needs a guide on how to write brilliant anti heroes they have to read this story! Although it was clear how it was going to end you kept the story interesting and shocking throughout, with several plot twists including the deaths of Elizabeth and Topher and Regulus' baby keeping this story gripping in a way few others have on this site. You kept the balance between description and dialogue absolutely perfect, and were not ever tempting to skip atmosphere building to just write the big climaxes which is the mistake of many writers. This story has been truly wonderful and I thank you for sharing it. This is the bench mark on which all other fanfictions will now be measured! Thank you so much for this story, Katti, UK

Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I'm seriously having a blush right now. And one of those big goofy smiles. It took me so long to reply because I'm honestly so speechless. Your review (and previous reviews) is wonderful and it's things like this that are the cherry on top. :)
Thank you for all of your support throughout. --Jenna

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Review #47, by katti4493Haunted: the Life and Times of Regulus Arcturus Black: To the Dark Lord

27th December 2011:
Hi, another review! I love how Regulus' descent into insanity, if that's what you want to call it, was slow and drawn out. He didn't just suddenly snap and think "well I'm gonna get me a Horcrux". There were real reasons for what he did, and his internal torment and slow deliberation was almost Shakespearean. Thanks for this wonderful story, I cannot wait for the last chapter!

Author's Response: I think that's a pretty good way to define it. I had a good laugh at that. I can totally see him waking up and thinking "Should I have breakfast or destroy a Horcrux?" :P
I was kinda aiming for that Shakespearean effect. I'm not a complete fanatic but something about Lady Macbeth always linked with Regulus in my mind. I guess it's like an extra for those who like that stuff. :D

Thank you so much!! --Jenna

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Review #48, by katti4493Chance: Chapter Three:

13th December 2011:
Another good chapter, not so dramatic as the previous two, so it made a good contrast. It was also the best way to set up Helga's character and showing the difference from the humiliation of Godric and the revenge of Salazar to Helga's simplicity. Like I've said before I want more dialogue! But it's all a work in progress and this is shaping up to be a really interesting story! I can't wait to see what you do with Rowena, because to me she has always been one of the most enigmatic of the founders! I'll be reading when you next update!

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks for the reviews. I'm glad you like the stories, still working on Rowena's chapter which I did have but they won't approve it because of some issues so I have to re-work it a bit. Anyway, I know what you mean about the dialogue, but I'm not that good with dialogue to begin with. I always feel like I'm dragging it out a bit, but no worries there will be more in later chapters. I didn't put that much in the first few because it's a sort of introduction to the backgrounds of each of them, but as other characters are introduced and as they start to encounter each other there will be more conversation. Also on your note about earl vs. count I got it and will fix it at some point soon. I am not putting in all that much research into this because I really don't have the time so I'm making it up as I go along. There will probably be many similar mistakes and I do try to fix them if I or someone else catches them so thank you for that.

Have a nice holiday!

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Review #49, by katti4493Chance: Chapter Two:

13th December 2011:
Cool chapter, it was a good idea beginning with Salazar's father's death and then going back to why he had done it. It brought the reader in. Just a couple of issues, such as I wanted more dialogue! Your dialogue is so good I just feel like I want more! And in Western France they would not have used the title "Earl" as that came from the Scandinavian "Jarl". The continental Count would have been more appropriate, but still, amazing story! As long as you keep writing I will keep reading!

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Review #50, by katti4493Chance: Chapter One:

13th December 2011:
It's a really good start and a really interesting way of looking at Godric instead of the usual Prince/Orphan Boy split that seems to happen in stories about Godric! You had no spelling/grammar issues and the dialogue you used was very powerful and concise. Maybe use some shorter sentences on occasion to make the whole piece flow slightly better, but overall it was a wonderfully unique take on the Founders story!

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