Oh wow! This story is utterly fascinating! Not only is the plot interesting, but also the main character, Artemisia (gosh, that's a hard name to spell!) is very unique - I have never heard of her before now, so I am surprised to hear that she was mentioned by JKR at all!
I also like Dick. Very gentlemanly and chivalrous, which is great because it was very much the time period decorum! Turn of the century pieces are always difficult to write because of their antiquity and difference in culture, but you are doing splendidly in regards to handling the variances in manner, and particularly speech!
All in all, beautiful job.
And this is definitely going into my favorites for its orginality, its marvelous characters and its great potential!
Nikki.Author's Response: Hi Nikki!
Thank you SO much! Your review really made me smile. I'm so glad your enjoying this fic so far.
Yes, Artemisia's name is quite hard to spell. If she were an OC, I would have definitely gone with something simpler, though I suppose JKR favors elaborate names ;)
And I'm thrilled to hear you liked Dick. He's a rather small character now, but he will become quite important later on.
Again, thank you for everything. I really appreciate your thoughtful feedback. ^_^ Have a great week and take care!
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God, this made me cry.
Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. The emotion, the portrayal of the characters, the dialogue. Everything was perfect!
Fantastic job!Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing and I'm so sorry that this response is so late.
In the oddest way, that is the great compliament that the story made you cry. As I said before, this was my first stab at something sad and I was really worried that the emotion wasn't there so I'm so pleased you liked it.
Thank you so much for your kind words! Report Review
I really like this story. It's cute. :)
Although, there are some grammatical errors that take away a little from the attention of the plot (don't worry about it...we all do it!). But, since you're editing, I can see you're fixing that problem.
Good job so far!
Can't wait for an update. :)Author's Response: Yes I know I need to do some major editing and even my editing needs editing but I will soon be on track. Exspect a brand new chapter in a few weeks!
Thank you so much for the review! I haven't been getting many as of late! Report Review
Well, I'll keep an eye on this!
Oliver and Cody are funny together. :P
Good job! :DAuthor's Response: Glad you like them, thanks! Report Review
All I can say is great job for this one!
No noticeable grammar...and the plot seems to be moving forward a bit.
A little conflict is always good. :)Author's Response: Gotta stir up trouble somehow, right? ;) Report Review
Perhaps he likes her? Or has a history with her? Hmm...a mystery! :D
I haven't noticed any grammar mistakes...so far so good!Author's Response: Hmm, indeed! We shall find out soon (hopefully) :) Report Review
Interesting take on Oliver! Like I said before, we know so little about him, so it's easy to interpret him any way you like. :D
I think I favor the nazi quidditch captain-persona.
It's too fun reading about him like this. :P
As for con-crit, I've not much to give, as I'm looking for a beta myself (not perfect at grammar). All I can say is that perhaps a little more plot development?
Other than that, the dialogue is great and I like the character development so far!:DAuthor's Response: Aha, it's the whole sports mentality - it's easy to get competitive about it :)
I'll keep that in mind, thanks :) Report Review
So, it looks as if Cody is quite good at sarcasm and is spirited! :D
I like this so far. :D
Great job!Author's Response: The power of sarcasm!
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Haha Cody is funny. And don't worry about Oliver...I think it's safe to say, since we don't know much about Wood's character, that you can invent some of his personality traits.
So far, Cody is a good character. I can't wait to learn more about her, since this is only two chapters into the story.
I'm not too sure about the plot just yet, but this is good. :DAuthor's Response: Good to hear you like Cody so far :) Report Review
Haha this is so cute! I like the cheeky dialogue between Cho and Cody!
Good job so far. :)Author's Response: Ah, yeah, Cho... that girl.
;) Thanks Report Review
This is SO funny! I love it...really, I do. It's hilarious, but so adorable...Tonks is adorable.
This is amazing.
And I hope it's updated soon.
Because I can't wait to read it! :D Report Review
This is adorable. Extremely adorable, and I hope to see an update from you (for this) very soon. :D Report Review
This made me cry.
It was so very beautiful. I hated the way J.K. Rowling just slashed through her beloved characters so easily. Fred, Tonks, Remus, Sirius...realistic, yes, but terribly tragic and sad. But this made tears well up in my eyes. Little heartstring-puller. This is definitely going into my favorites.
10/10.Author's Response: Thank you!! Yeah, I hated it too, and I didn't like that so many of them weren't dealt with at all past the actual deaths :( But I'm glad you liked this, thanks again for the lovely review :) Report Review
This was very interesting.
And I love how in-character Dumbledore was. Almost like reading straight out of the book!
Well done!Author's Response: Thank you!!! :-) I am glad you thought Dumbledore was in-character, because I would hate to get his character wrong!!! Anyway, thanks for the review and I am glad you liked my fic! Report Review
I like your OC. She's interesting.
As is this story. Good work!Author's Response: I like Emma, too. Thanks for the read and the review! Report Review
Absolutely beautiful. The emotions were so pure and raw and stark against the dark canvas of this story.
Simply loved it.Author's Response: Wow thank you so much! What a great review, this made my day :) Report Review
Wow. I actually...started crying. :(
Sad, but very lovely.Author's Response: *hands you a tissue* I'm glad you liked it, hun. Thank you so much for leaving a review! Report Review
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