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Review #1, by krazyboutharryginnyHourglass: morning

21st May 2015:
Hey there! I'm here to leave my first review for our swap! :)

Well, I was a bit - apprehensive, maybe? - going into this, because this really isn't something I normally read (OC fics and next-gen fics), but now I'm really glad we got paired because I'm so intrigued! Honestly, the biggest thing that got me hooked was Scorpius. I want to know what's up with him. Al's thoughts about their almost-friendship and knowing something about Scorpius that broke Lily's heart... that really piqued my curiosity.

Al is a little different here than I've seen him done before, even in looks. I always see him written looking just like Harry (I can't remember if that's how it is in the books?). He also doesn't seem to be as close to Rose as I usually see him written, but I may just be misreading that. Anyway, I totally don't mind those differences. In a way they just made me more curious.

I'm really excited to continue reading this and see what's happening with Scorpius and Albus. I know that you're setting up the Albus/OC and the overall subject matter here, but that didn't grab me as much. That doesn't bother me though, it's also good to be gradually drawn into things.

I'll probably read and review the next chapter tomorrow! I'm pumped!


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Review #2, by krazyboutharryginnyDriving Lessons : Driving Lessons

20th May 2015:
Heya Deeds! Here from the Red vs Gold Review Battle! #TeamGOLD!!

This is really funny! I chuckled all the way through it and even laughed out loud at some parts. Some lines were just so RON and were totally hilarious. My favourite part was when Ron was saying he was sure he'd end up with seven children because he's irresistible and great in bed. That part cracked me up the most!

I do have some small criticisms. There were some spots where I felt the voice was a little bit off. For example, I can't imagine Ron saying that he "perused" something. Maybe "skimmed"? I don't know, it's all stuff like that that isn't really a big deal. It's up to you!

I also like the relationship you've set up between Ron and Hermione here. It's cute that he wants to learn to drive to, like, connect with her Muggle culture, and it's nice that she's supporting him in his attempts to learn. I do have to admit that I think she'd be a tad nervous/skeptical, but that isn't really a big deal honestly. It didn't change my enjoyment of the story that she wasn't.

Dean was a really amusing character in this too. I liked all the details about his car and then the reveal that it's like that because of Seamus.

Nice job on this!


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Review #3, by krazyboutharryginnyWhimsy: Rain Rain Go Away

20th May 2015:
Hey Kaitlin! Here for the red vs gold review battle! #TeamGOLD!!

So, I know you weren't sure about how to go about writing this, since you PMed me for help. I'm so glad you decided to take it in this direction. I think this story has such a charming and moving quality to it and just a really lovely atmosphere. Pandora was describing everything in such vivid detail and that really brought it to life for me as a reader as well. I could absolutely picture the whole scene.

I actually welled up a bit at the end because of what we discussed over PM about how Luna believes in this things so firmly as a way to hold on to the memory of her mother. I don't know if you ended up writing this with that intention, but I teared up anyway!

One teeny tiny bit of CC: I think this would get off to a better start if you tweaked the first sentence a little bit. "Luna Lovegood sat at the kitchen table, her chin resting on its wooden surface" just reads better to me. However, that's largely stylistic and totally up to you!

So yeah, I really love what you did with this challenge and I think you made the right choice going in this direction with it!


P.S. thanks for the very sweet shoutout :D

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Review #4, by krazyboutharryginnybad blood: two; a dispute of quidditch

17th May 2015:
Hi Jess! Sorry it took me so long to get here. Real life is kicking my butt recently. I really enjoyed chapter 1 of this, though, and I thought it was such a cool concept, so here I finally am to continue reading.

I really love what you've done with Lily's character! I can actually relate to her a lot, especially at the part at the end about her marks. I have a lot of the same beliefs as her and... yeah! I can just really relate to her, and that really enhanced my enjoyment of this chapter.

Normally the Potter-Weasley clan is written as such a tight-knit bunch, so I was surprised to see that you didn't seem to quite be taking this in that direction. Lily didn't seem particularly fond of Hugo - although that may just have been her frustration with him talking? Then again, if I were in a situation like this, where I felt like such an outsider from my family, I might be more distant from them too. (And I also might just be misreading, lol)

I have one tiny little criticism, which is a really technical thing - isn't zero-to-sixty a pretty standard, if not slow, acceleration speed for a state-of-the-art racing broom? Harry's Firebolt did 0-to-150 in ten seconds (I went and looked it up, I didn't just know that off the top of my head omg). You might want to consider changing it?

Anyways, loved this chapter! I'm excited for more!


Author's Response: hi! it's great to see you back :D

aw thank you! I feel that lily's beliefs are very key to the kind of person she is. she's probably one of the strongest characters I've ever written. I'm glad you could relate! I see elements of myself in her too, but maybe super-sized. she's a little bit more of the type of girl I would WANT to be ;) (though not completely. she of course she still has her faults).

hmm the weasley clan and their relationships with lily are going to be rather funny in this if I'm honest. you definitely haven't misread the tension between lily and hugo -- they actually do get on okay, it was just the time and situation and lily's frustration. hugo is kind of a clueless type of guy and that can be infuriating for a girl like lily. you'll see over the coming chapters that she is exceptionally close with rose and teddy (as well as her other brothers).

OH MY GOSH KAYLA YOU ARE A LIFE-SAVER. I didn't even think about the nought-to-sixty bit being funny for a broom. I think I must've just been thinking of cars omg hahahah this is hilarious. "check out how slow my new broom is!!1!" hahahha I will 210% get that changed asap!! thank you so much

again, thank you for reading and reviewing it's awesome and means a lot ♥

- jess, xo

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Review #5, by krazyboutharryginnyIsabella: Thirteen Candles

16th May 2015:
Hey Kaitlin! Here from the Red Vs Gold Review Battle in the CR! #TeamGOLD!

Wow! I think it's super cool that you've chosen to write a fic set in Mexico. I've seen fics set in mostly Britain, some in other areas of Europe, and some set in the U.S.A., but I've definitely never seen one set in Mexico. Is that how you've chosen to fulfill the requirements of the Diversity Challenge, or will there be more? I'm interested to see! :D

There's a lot of really beautiful and vivid description in here, especially towards the beginning. The way you described her surroundings particularly stood out to me, as did the part where her skirt blew up.

I'm definitely going to be coming back to this! I'm so excited to see where it goes, because I really have no idea. I did have one thought - the old lady breaking down the door reminded me of Hagrid when he delivered Harry's Hogwarts letter! Maybe she's here to tell the MC that she's magic?

Anyway, I think you did a really amazing job on this. It was descriptive, it pulled me into a culture that I don't know anything about and made it feel very natural, and it ends on cliffhanger that makes me want to keep reading. Excellent work!


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Review #6, by krazyboutharryginnyAn Inconvenient Repercussion: Chapter 1

4th May 2015:
Hey! Here from the Red vs Gold review battle! #TeamGOLD!

Wow, Kaitlin. I think you did a really great job on this fic. I know that you're nervous about it, but I really think it's one of your best works yet! I was sort of conflicted about how I was feeling as I read, but then the ending really cleared everything up for me. Blaise was describing all these horrific things that happened to him, but in such a cold and detached way. I was thinking "This is a bit strange". But then, at the end, when it's revealed that this is him telling the story to Aurors after having killed his mother, it all started to make more sense. I feel like it would be reasonable for him to be sort of numb and emotionless. In a weird way, killing his mother seems like something that would be quite traumatic? Like he just completely lost control after years of abuse? Ugh, I'm wording this really really badly! I'm just trying to say that I think you've done something really cool here with the tone of this story.
Great job! Good luck on the challenge!

Author's Response: Hey Kayla!

Thanks so much for the review! That means a lot that you think this is one of the best yet. I really honestly struggled to write this. I kept going back and re-writing. It definitely wasn't an easy one.

I'm glad that Blaise came across cold and detached. I wanted him to be at a point where he basically has given up. He definitely is completely numb at this point.

I think killing his mother would be traumatic, but I also think it might be some sort of weird relief, just to know that he never has to deal with her again.

Thank you so much for such lovely compliments! And for the luck!


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Review #7, by krazyboutharryginnyMyrtle: Myrtle

2nd May 2015:
Hey Adi! Here from the Red Vs Gold review battle in the CR. #TeamGold

I can't believe this is your first attempt at angst! It's absolutely heartwrenching. You gave Myrtle so much depth that she wasn't afforded in the books. In the books she was just kind of weird and annoying. I really, really like that you gave her more than that. The Myrtle that you've created here is vivid and believable.

You really have such a way with words, Adi. I'm in awe every time I read your stories. One line that really stood out to me in this was "Come and take my empire of dust, and I'll take your breaking heart and your tears." Just... wow!

I like how the passage of time is kind of vague in this. It adds to the atmosphere that you have going on of Myrtle being sort of stuck in time. It makes a lot of sense that that should be the feeling; obviously some ghosts (like Nearly Headless Nick) don't experience this, but Myrtle was just a teenager when she died, and it was unexpected, and obviously hasn't been able to come to terms with it.

So yeah, this is beautiful, Adi! Amazing job on this!


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Review #8, by krazyboutharryginnyBurned by Ice: Frostbite

25th April 2015:
Hey! I'm here from the review tag thread on the forums!

This story is really cool. To be honest with you, it isn't quite "creepy", but it was definitely a bit disturbing and kinda haunting.
Helena Ravenclaw is a character that I've never thought to explore much. From the books, I always kind of thought she was a bit of a brat. But here you gave us some really interesting insight into her motivations and her character.

The idea of Helena lying there dying and thinking of the riddle from the doorknob is one that I think will really stick with me. It's very interesting that she considered her answer to the riddle her greatest failure - and it's a detail that gives us so much insight into her psyche. I also like how you included details that really made it clear how much she was focusing in on thinking about this - like the number of syllables and words in the riddle.

So yeah, this is a really great little story that has me lying here thinking about mortality and stuff :P It's made me want to look into reading more about this character. Great job!


Author's Response: Heya!

Haha, yeah this was my first attempt at anything close to resembling creepy. It didn't quite feel creepy to me, but I'm pleased that it was a little disturbing and haunting.

She came off as a bit of brat to me as well, so it was fun to write her being bratty to the very last - but like a brat with depth.

Helena Ravenclaw struck me as a person whose priorities aren't quite straight. I also chose for her to fixate on the riddle to illustrate the way her mind has begun to wander in her final moments. Things that wouldn't be worth half a moment of time when she was alive take on a new weight in this place between life and death.

I'm pleased that it got you thinking! Thanks so much for the lovely review :)

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Review #9, by krazyboutharryginnyHarry Potter and the First Mission: Life Still Goes On

25th April 2015:
Hiya Kenny! I'm here from the Review The Person Above You thread in the CR!
I've already read this chapter, of course, since I beta'd it. However, I wanted to read it again for fun. When beta reading, it's hard to focus on the overall story because you're fixing the small details.
This is a really enjoyable first chapter. You've got a lot going on here, but it doesn't feel awkward or rushed. It makes sense to me that things would be very busy but also very emotional the day after the Battle, so the fact that there are many emotional scenes in amongst more practical scenes really worked for me.
I LOVE Harry and Ginny's interactions. My favourite part of their talk was Ginny's "There was always the silver lining" line. What a great and touching way to connect this to the books!
I think you've characterized McGonagall really well here. The fact that despite her exhaustion she still spoke in a crisp voice was a great detail to include.
The idea of having Bill help seal Dumbledore's tomb is such a cool one! It's not something I would have thought of myself, but it totally makes sense.
Awesome job on this first chapter, Kenny! You've really laid out the groundwork for this novel here and made me interested to see where the stories goes. I can't wait to beta the next chapter!

Author's Response: Wow, Captain herself left review! What a surprise! I'm really lucky that I got you as a beta. You're really awesome! At the same time I can't stop admiring my fellow gryffies. All you guys are brilliant.

The plot of this story, as I said in the forums, I simply wanted to read good Auror stories after the book of 7 by J.K.Rowling. I think she set Cormoran Strike Crime Novel for us, but my hunger for the sequel after the book 7 is still exists. Perhaps I imagined that there should be Auror story strongly when I read the book 5 that indicated Harry might be an Auror in the future.

Yeah, I'll do PM you about our next chapter!

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Review #10, by krazyboutharryginnyDark Energy: Dark Energy

22nd April 2015:
This is so beautiful! It's descriptive and poetic and everything that I can't get enough of. Yeah, it's 90% metaphor, but unlike some stories that are like that, I understood what was going on - who was who, what the setting was, and all that. I think you've done a really impressive job on this.
This is so sad, though. Most Parvati/Lavender fics I've read had happy endings, even if they were angsty stories. But this story really made me feel like the two of them couldn't work out :( Then again, maybe Lavender can heal and move past the stage she's at right now, and let Parvati in? Hey, you know what would be cool?! This same story from Parvati's POV! You could honestly make this into a really awesome one-shot collection.
Great work on this fic!

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Review #11, by krazyboutharryginnyDevlin Potter: Riddle and Rescue: The Informant

18th April 2015:
Hello! I'm here for our review swap!
There's a lot of stuff I really, really like about this first chapter. My favourite thing is that Sirius is still alive. I think you've done an awesome job of showing what Sirius and Harry's relationship would have been like if it had been allowed to develop further.
I also love the changes you've shown in Harry's personality since the loss of his son. The line "Harry Potter was no longer so Golden" totally captured my interest. The fact that he himself if aware of the ways in which he's changed is great. It's almost scarier, in a way? When characters are unaware of the ways in which they are changing and becoming more vicious, you get a sense that they're just out of control. When they're aware of it, like Harry is, it's more frightening because they're obviously still in control, but their minds have gone somewhere dark.
That scene with the lilies was so beautiful and touching. It's hard to get a sense of Devlin from the opening scene aside from the fact that he's very brave. That scene showed that he was a sweet and thoughtful little boy.
I'm interested to know who this Death Eater is, and whether he's really unimportant, as Harry thinks he is, or whether he's something more. I think I'm going to come back and continue reading this when I have time.
Awesome first chapter!

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Review #12, by krazyboutharryginnyA white, white world.: A gurgle of clarity.

15th April 2015:
Hey Kiana! I'm here for our review swap! Sorry, I know you said you'd prefer one of the first 3, but this fic really caught my interest, so I hope a review on this instead is okay.

This is obviously super sad, given the subject material. There are some bittersweet moments, too, mixed in with the ones that are just plain ol' sad. The ending with Neville had me almost in tears, honestly. Another example is how Frank makes Alice smile, even though she can't remember who he is.

I actually don't think I've ever read a story about this subject from the point of view of Alice. I never really questioned this, because that point of view seemed difficult to pull off, for obvious reasons. But you've REALLY pulled it off here. Your use of repetition to illustrate Alice's mental state was super effective. I also loved the way you brought colours into it, and the way that colours = Alice's entire world - because, really, that would be how it felt, I think. Hospitals are so drab and colourless, and I think I would start to feel so trapped after staying in one for even a day. I can't even imagine having to live in one for the rest of my life. It seems so believable that the presence of new colours would be really meaningful and a big deal.

I think you did a really fantastic job on this story, Kiana. I'll have to R&R some of your other work when I have a chance!


Author's Response: Hey Kayla! It's fine, as this review is really lovely and I'm glad that it caught your interest :)

Haha, yes, I had such a strange mix of emotions going through me whilst I was writing this because at once I was almost crying because Alice's life is so sad, but then she can still have happy moments too, so I felt very, very conflicted :P

Aw, thank you so much! I've only ever read one other story from this point of view before and it really was excellent so I wanted to give it a go myself as Alice has always intrigued me. Aw, thanks, I think colours are the most vibrant parts of life and are the things which make you remember everything so I thought it made sense it would be the one thing she could cling to.

Aw, thank you so much for this lovely review, it really made me smile! ♥


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Review #13, by krazyboutharryginnyJumble: HodgePodge

14th April 2015:
Hiya Kaitlin! I'm here from the Red Vs Gold review battle in the CR! #TeamGOLD!

I have really mixed emotions about this. Not about the quality of your writing, of course - it's excellent, as always! Just about some of the stuff you described in the story.

It was this line: "For the first time in ages, Harry felt like The Boy Who Was Alive, not just the shell of him that was left after the war." It made me so sad! Like, James Sirius had already been born and he'd gotten married to the love of his life and he still felt like a shell of himself... that's horrible. Not unrealistic, just very sad. But I'm happy that he's starting to feel better through flying again :)

This story actually aligns very well with a headcanon of mine that I hold particularly strongly. I do think that Harry would have become an Auror immediately after the war - but not out of any sort of remaining desire to work in that field. He would be driven by the same sense of obligation that we seem him feeling throughout the books - the feeling that he is responsible for everyone's safety. I think working as an Auror would be horrible for his mental health, because he'd have PTSD from the war, and he'd drive himself to the brink of a breakdown before Ginny manages to convince him to quit. I'd never really considered what he might do afterwards, and now it seems so obvious - Quidditch.

Whoops, sorry for the long tangent /blushes. The point is, this story is bittersweet, but I find it totally realistic and really enjoyed it! Excellent work, as usual!


Author's Response: Hey Kayla,

I'm so glad you picked up on the current of bittersweet feelings underneath the descriptions of flying. Harry is absolutely conflicted. While I think he loves Ginny and his son, I think here are definitely some demons he's battling still. Hopefully, Quidditch can help fight some of those demons away!

I'm so excited about your headcannon! Ours seem to be perfectly inline. I pretty much imagine Harry exactly as you've described him.

Thank you for stopping to leave me this lovely review!


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Review #14, by krazyboutharryginnyStarving Artists: New Horizon

14th April 2015:
Hiya Kevin! I decided to leave reviews for all the members of my CTF team, and then I decided that you deserved one too! You put so much effort into organizing and refereeing. You are truly awesome.

I love this! Second person is a hard thing to pull off even passably. Here, you've done more than that. You woven it together with first person almost flawlessly. I could picture everything, even if it was only a vague image (before I figured out that "you" was Dean) - a smile (halfway), hair whipping behind while riding a broom... etc.

Oh, speaking of riding a broom! I LOVE the way you wrote all the Quidditch stuff! I could never make sports sound that poetic!

Poetic stories are my favourite kind to read, and my favourite kind to attempt to write. But I don't think I've ever pulled it off as well as you have here (at least, not in a Harry Potter story... other fandoms, maybe!). The language you've used is so descriptive and beatiful. It's honestly captivating.

Oh, also: the idea of a Victory Day being established is an interesting one. I think that it would be an important piece of helping the Wizarding community move on from Voldemort's destruction, but I can also see it being taken too far and being harmful (aaahhh now I'm getting plunnies!! Make them go away, I don't want to steal your idea! And I don't have time to write more fics yet, anyway! :P)

So yeah, I loved this! It's beautiful! Amazing job, Kevin!


Author's Response: Howdy Kayla! Thank you so much for this review and for your enthusiastic participation in the game! Not so long ago the whole concept was a pipe dream that I was never really sure would work and I'm glad that despite some hiccups it mostly has!

Now on to the meat! This was a really interesting story for me to write because it started with me wanting to write something cool for Sian that fed on her love for minor characters. Since I wanted to write more about Rionach (the female) already, I took that route and paired her with Dean, which gave me the art element that I bound over to sport as an art form to for the overall feel and the title.

Victory Day, for its part, is just part of my headcanon - owing I guess to the aftermath of WWII and V-E and V-J day and so many other veteran celebrations around the world. I'd written it once before from Harry's POV as a place where I tried to plant a red herring about the killer's identity in a story before and I thought it would be neat to get a lighter, less jaded take on it as part of this (plus added drama to Dean/Rionach first hitting it off).

I'm REALLY glad to hear you enjoyed it and I thank you enormously for the praise. I don't know if I could quite recapture something like this, but perhaps I'll try one of these days.

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Review #15, by krazyboutharryginnyBirthday Gift: Birthday Gift

14th April 2015:
Hello Molly! I'm leaving reviews for all the members of the Accio Attackers, as a thank you present for being so awesome! I bet you can guess why I wanted to review this story of yours ;)

I'm not sure why, but I actually don't think I've EVER read a story depicting this scene from Ginny's point of view! This is a really fantastic interpretation of how she must have been feeling. I'm impressed, and so happy that I decided to read this!

"I understand, but it doesn’t make it any more bearable." Sigh... sadly, I feel like this is something that everyone experiences to an extent. You've really done a great job of capturing how this sad reality is playing out in this specific situation - which is a more extreme one than most people face, probably.

"I’m not giving me to him. I’m taking him, because I need him." I absolutely LOVE this line!

GAH!! I actually completely believe now that this is what Ginny intended to happen with Harry in her bedroom, and I'm SO upset that it got interrupted. Then again... imagine how much harder it might have been to have to leave each other and be separated. :/

I really loved this, Molly. Awesome job!

-Kayla, aka Oliver

Author's Response: Thank you Oliver! ;-) You really made my day with this review! I love that you like the line about not giving herself to him, but taking him from her own will. She's a strong person, and he knows what she wants.


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Review #16, by krazyboutharryginnyAn Eye For An Eye: Vengeance

14th April 2015:
Hello Grace! I'm leaving reviews for everyone on the Accio Attackers, as a thank you present for being so awesome!!

So, Sirius Black is my favourite character, and the events of Halloween 1981 are ones that I think about a lot. I always think about how things could have been so different if only Hagrid hadn't taken Harry, you know?

I really like what you've done here. I was super duper happy (while also super duper sad) when Sirius thought of James as his brother ("Harry was the last living trace of his brother and the woman he loved") - their close and brotherly relationship is one that I feel really strongly about.

Also, I enjoy your characterization of Wormtail here. A lot of people make him sort of snivelling and pathetic, and say he just joined the Death Eaters out of fear, etc. You showed us a different Pettigrew here, and one that I find a lot more believable. So, kudos to that!

I also adored the way that Sirius interacted with Harry. It broke my heart though... if only Hagrid hadn't taken Harry! Harry would have grown up loved and Sirius wouldn't have gone to Azkaban! *sniffles*

Anyways... great fic, Grace! It made me sad, but I enjoyed it nonetheless!

-Kayla, aka Oliver

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Review #17, by krazyboutharryginnyBlackwater Side: Blackwater Side

14th April 2015:
Hello Kenny! I decided to leave reviews for everyone on the Accio Attackers as a thank you present. I chose to read this story - I bet you can guess why? (spoiler alert: I love Harry/Ginny.)

So, there are some grammar and spelling mistakes in this, but I'm not sure if you already have a beta. So I'm just going to comment on the fic itself and ignore the technical stuff. If you don't have a beta, I'd be happy to go over this with you. You could PM me on the forums if you'd like.

An Auror Quidditch Team! That's such a cool idea! I definitely want to read Harry Potter and the Broomstick Makers now.

I love all the thoughts that Harry was having about Ginny while listening to the song. You managed to capture so much of what I love about Harry and Ginny's relationship - for example, their shared love of Quidditch, and her understanding of his anger (and ability to deal with it and calm him down).

I think you've done especially well with Harry's character here. Putting two pounds in that girl's guitar case strikes me as something he would do without hesitation. Another very "Harry" moment was when he didn't want to organize his messy desk.

Awesome work! I love this!

-Kayla, AKA Oliver

Author's Response: Thanks,captain :D ,Kayla. Your comments mean a lot for me.

When I took a step in this site at the first time, I was a little at loss how many Dramione shippers existed. I don't hate the story itself but I was just overwhelmed by the numbers of authors, you cannnot miss the banner with Hermione and Draco when you click the recently added stories. They are as many as the stories about next generation.

So my story is one of things to raise a question how the HPFF stories should be like.

I've guessed you also love Harry/Ginny ship from your name, so I'm very honored with your wonderful comments, thank you very much! I'll do PM later.

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Review #18, by krazyboutharryginnyThe Precise Hour: Eggs and Owls

14th April 2015:
Hiya Nadia! I decided to leave reviews for everyone on the Accio Attackers as a way to say thanks for being awesome!
I really, really like this fic. The details in it totally brought the setting and your characters to life. For example, Abdullah really came to life for me - I could picture him in my head as I read, acting out what I was reading.
I would like to know a little bit more about Sahar, though. Is she, in fact, magical? Or did she just have an owl fly through her window and go "Okay, I guess I'll roll with this"? You know what I mean? Then again, I suppose there is supposed to be somewhat of an air of intrigue and mystery around her.
One tiny little issue I had here was with the formatting. I think the readability would be much improved if you made a clearer distinction between different chunks of text where a lot of time has passed, just by adding an extra space. For example, between "Hassan Mostafa had fallen in love" and "He knew he wasn't supposed to go near her", you could add another line break to signify that time has passed.
Formatting aside, I definitely enjoyed this fic! Very nicely done!
-Kayla aka Oliver

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Review #19, by krazyboutharryginnyThrough the Half-Moon Spectacles: Preparing for What is to Come

13th April 2015:
Hey Alishya! I'm leaving reviews for all the members of the Accio Attackers as a thanks for being so awesome during CTF. Even though you decided to withdraw, you still were such a huge help, and I felt that you deserved a review too. So here I am!
This is such a super interesting concept! I've read stories ABOUT the Hogwarts portraits, but I've definitely never read one from the point of view of a portrait. I'd always thought that they would have the same sense of time and everything else as a living person was, but honestly, it makes so much more sense that they wouldn't. They're just enchanted paint on canvas, after all. I'd also DEFINITELY never considered the idea of them being to communicate with each other like that, without speaking. That's a really interesting idea! And it would certainly come in very handy in a situation like this, with the school under the control of the Death Eaters.
I'd like to continue reading this, and I hope you upload the second part at some point.

Author's Response: Hi Kayla! :D

Ahhh! So sweet! Thank you so much! *hugs*

I had a lot of fun working with you guys, and I'm sorry that I left you guys. :(

I'm happy that you've found the concepts of how portraits work to be interesting! It's fun isn't it - coming across something you never thought of, but becomes somewhat a part of your head canon (if not all).

Once I decide the time to rewrite the first chapter and then continue the story, I'll surely let you know when I do - because I do want to continue this as well, and would like to find out where I take it.

Thank you, thank you for reading and reviewing this! *hugs you tighter this time*


- Asphodel

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Review #20, by krazyboutharryginnythe earth and the sky: the earth and the sky

13th April 2015:
Hello! I'm reviewing all the members of our CTF team as a way to say thanks for being awesome!

Adi... this is a really, really beautiful piece of writing. Just absolutely stunning. I'm going to try my hardest to leave a 1000 character review (my new goal for all reviews :P) but I am honestly lost for words.

I don't even like Draco Malfoy. But here, you showed me Draco Malfoy changing, and becoming a better person, and I ended up really liking him. (Wow, that like... totally doesn't even come close to describing what a whirlwind of emotions I was going through. I can be too concise for my own good.)

Seriously though, Adi. There were several points where I just had to step away from my computer and breathe (heh). Not even because I was sad (although that happened SEVERAL times) but because I was just having so many EMOTIONS and I felt like my chest was going to burst open. I started crying at a few points - though, granted, that can happen quite easily with me.

I just cannot emphasize enough how absolutely beautifully done this is. I could feel all the pain, suffering and loss so intensely, and same with the love and the growth and the healing. You managed to completely draw me into this story. Draco and Astoria's relationship felt so real - especially with the details you included, such as how Draco never thought Astoria's voice was particularly nice, but he missed it so much after he lost his hearing.

OH THAT'S ANOTHER THING. (I'm so sorry I just have so many FEELINGS and I keep losing track of myself!!!) The explosion!! I know there was a TW for it at the beginning, but by the time it happened I was HOPING and PRAYING that nothing bad was going to happen, that it was just a warning for some kind of flashback to the Battle of Hogwarts. I was DEVASTATED when I was wrong.

I feel like I'm starting to get sort of rambly and incoherent. To sum up: Amazing. Beautiful. This is intense and poetic and made me feel every emotion under the sun.

Is this the one-shot that won the Golden Paw Award? Because it deserves it a million times over.


P.S. This is officially the longest review I've ever written at over 2000 characters. Feels appropriate that I'm leaving it for you.

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Review #21, by krazyboutharryginnyA Friend's Gift: Prompt 3

13th April 2015:
*waves* Hello Jess! I'm leaving reviews for everyone on the Accio Attackers, as a thanks for being AWESOME!
This is absolutely adorable! I used to ship Neville and Luna, but recently I've been thinking that I like them more platonically... Either way, though, I truly think this story is fantastic! The fondness Neville has for Luna comes through beautifully. I'm not quite sure how to put this, but... it's like you're seeing Luna through Neville's eyes, and the way you experience her character in this story is coloured by the love he feels for her? Aaahhh I'm sorry that made absolutely no sense :$
Anyways, I also love the details you've included to highlight how close they are, like them both thinking Hannah would like the same ring. It's also so adorable that Luna wore her lucky wedding colours in hopes that it would help Neville choose a ring. That's just SO Luna.
Poor Tom though! That's so sad :( Is that included in your other stories? I need to know if there's somewhere I can look to find out what happened to the Leaky Cauldron!
Anyways, super adorable fic, Jess! I love it!
-Kayla aka Oliver

Author's Response: aw, thank you so much kayla you're always so thoughtful!! ♥

this is definitely not my favourite piece of work, though I really did enjoy writing it for the HC. and I've always been a platonic shipper of the two ♥ greatest friends, but not lovers.

no you totally made sense!! thank you! he adores her and every quirky thing she does, which is what I wanted to put across

no though unfortunately this oneshot doesn't fit into anything else I've written :( maybe one day!!

thanks for the review x

- jess, xo

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Review #22, by krazyboutharryginnyLegacy: Legacy

13th April 2015:
Hello! I'm here from the Red vs Gold Review Battle in the CR! #TeamGOLD!
So I've never read a Founder's Era story before, and this was a really new and cool experience for me. This fic is so good! I absolutely love your characterization of Helga - how she is not afraid of death, and just wants to protect the legacy of the school. I also loved the relationship between her and her husband, Owain - so loving and understanding. Of course, I suppose that's sort of inevitable, after 50 years of marriage!
One thing I found really interesting about this is that, since Helga is the last surviving Founder, we sort of heard about the other Founders through the descriptions of their children? If that makes sense? You could really feel her sadness about the path Salazar had gone down, and her fondness for Godric came through when she was thinking of how his children shared some of his traits.
I do have one small criticism (although I hardly feel qualified to give it). I was a bit surprised that there was no mention of the Sorting Hat at all.It seems like something that should get a nod, even in passing, you know? Because it was created to help preserve the legacy of the Founders. Obviously, that legacy couldn't be preserved by JUST the Sorting Hat, but I think mentioning it would add a bit of... realism, I guess? And connection to canon? *scurries and hides* sorry!
I really loved this! Amazing job.

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Review #23, by krazyboutharryginnyBruises: Terror

11th April 2015:
Whoa! Kaitlin! This is admittedly really hard to read (emotionally, I mean, not in terms of your writing), but it's super good.
While reading this, I had no idea what was going on. In terms of this fic, that's a REALLY good thing. I was just as confused as Caroline, and that combined with the creepy setting had me super nervous.
Obviously, the truth of the situation is completely horrifying. It's good that you kind of slowly revealed what was going on. I got more and more anxious to know the truth of the situation, and more and more suspicious of her parents.
(Sorry if none of this makes any sense - I'm super tired :P But I really did enjoy reading this, and I think it's very well done. Thanks for linking me!)

Author's Response: Hey Kayla,

Thank you so much for stopping by to read this! I was so excited to get a review on it!

Oddly enough, I'm glad to hear that the confusion built for you as it did for Caroline. I was hoping that the disoriented feeling would come across to the reader.

The truth of the situation is definitely horrifying. I initially came up with a rough version of the ending and then kind of worked backwards leaving little breadcrumbs to it.

Thank you again for checking this out! I hope you got some rest!


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Review #24, by krazyboutharryginnyLady Mondegreen: Conversations with a Portrait

11th April 2015:
Hey Lizzie! I'm here from the "review the person above you" thread in the CR :)

I'm actually pumped to read a Lia-centric fic! I was reviewing your other fics for CTF and I really, really enjoyed her character. I love the way you've written her here - I think you've done an awesome job of making it ABSOLUTELY CLEAR how angry she is. The detail that she ended up getting lost was a good one to add, as it definitely enhances her character - she's prone to getting lost at the best of times, and was so angry that she walked into a wall.

"“Lady Mondegreen.” She said, rolling her eyes. “But you can call me Lady M.”
Lia was taken aback. “How did you know my name?”" Mm... I think you missed something here. I went back and reread the previous few paragraphs a few times, and I'm still lost, so...

If I can be completely honest with you, I think your summary could use some work. I was very taken aback by it, but in a way that made me sort of hesitant to read it. When I got to the line "We're portraits. What else is there to do?", my immediate thought was that that would make a much better summary - in fact, when I clicked on the story and saw it as the chapter summary, I went "Ohhh, this story's about a PORTRAIT?! That's awesome! I wanna read this!". I think it would be a much better "hook", if that makes sense. Maybe you could put the line that you currently have as the Story Summary, and make it the chapter summary? Just switch them around?

Oh man! Lia sure does have a quick temper! I feel a bit sorry for Lady M! :P

Speaking of... I love the character you've created here in Lady M. You've done such a great job of describing Lia's feelings about her, as well as her actual appearance. I can picture her vividly, and REALLY like her. And the fact that she's a real person! I was genuinely taken by surprise, and eagerly kept reading.

"Lady M had made the same realizations as time wore on, and she’d discovered that trivializing a teenager’s struggles did nothing to help. If it was important to them, and they were willing to share it with her, then she’d find a way to make it important to her too." What a FANTASTIC couple of lines! This is a sentiment I agree with strongly, and I actually grinned at reading it here, especially when it's put so brilliantly!

It's awesome that Lady M managed to get Lia to reconsider her conversation with James, just by having awful hearing! XD

This is a really funny little story. I truly enjoyed it. I think it would be super cool if you could find a way to have Lady M make an appearance in How I Met Your Father!


Author's Response: KAYLA!!

Your review literally made me jump around for joy!!! Thank you so so so SO much for all of your wonderful comments and REALLY good advice!

I guess I didn't think about how that line could come across as a story summary. And you're completely right! The line you suggested is definitely a better hook *forehead slap*. Sometimes I get so excited I don't think everything through.

Also, thank you for pointing out that you're confused by how Lady M knows her name. I went and reread it and I guess I didn't clarify that very well! I'm definitely going to edit that a bit.

I love Lia, personally, she's my favorite character. I've got so much fun stuff planned for her. And not to worry, Lady M will make an appearance in HIMYF, but in some really subtle ways ;)

That part about Lady M making a teenagers problems important...that is 100% my mother. I don't know how many times I heard that growing up...and for some reason, it just seemed perfect for Lady M to say it...since she's seen so many teenagers in her "lifetime".

Once again, thank you for your wonderful review and CC!! I'm going to continue my happy dance in a moment...

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Review #25, by krazyboutharryginnyThe Unexpected Guest: The Unexpected Guest

10th April 2015:
(Hi Lauren! I typed this out for CTF, but Molly ended up attacking this story before me... But I figured I may as well leave my review anyway! So...)
*clears throat* Okay. First of all, I absolutely love that George wouldn't allow his mother to talk him into a traditional funeral. Honestly, because of who Fred was as a person, it feels like a traditional dark and somber funeral wouldn't have helped anybody grieve properly, if that makes sense.
I absolutely adore the idea of Lily having all this pent-up doting and just fussing over Fred. (I also like to think that when Fred got to heaven, he totally geeked out over getting to meet THE Mr Prongs! lol)
You've really captured the absolute tragedy and the unfairness of Fred's death. George's emotions are handled really, really well here. They're believable, and they're DEVASTATING. It was cute and all when Fred and George were talking, but also just completely heartbreaking - the way they instantly slipped back into their old flow, for the last time.
You have some really great lines in here, too. My favourite was definitely "Well, grease my hair and call me Snape", and I loved the ear puns. They added a little bit of lighthearted humour to a very sad fic - which is perfect, considering who it's about!

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