Wow. I honestly have never read anything like this on HPFF. I don't know much more about anorexia/bulimia than they teach us in school, but I think this was really well-written. I mean... 2000 calories is actually healthy so when Rose cut that in half, then into even smaller pieces? I grew scared for her, honestly.
I saw in one of your review responses that you were/are bulimic/anorexic, so reading this story kind of makes me feel like this is how someone legitimately thinks when they're like that, not to be insensitive or anything. It's a curious feeling, because I guess I almost understand how/why someone might think it's okay to starve themselves.
Even Hermione bragging on her daughter like that seems sort of realistic too, because in school Hermione wasn't really the attractive girl everyone wanted. She had large teeth and bushy hair and kept her nose in a book, or otherwise was huddled with Ron and Harry. So her daughter being thin and pretty might have even made her feel like, my daughter can have a better life than me because she looks this way. I'm not sure you did that on purpose though XD Report Review
Wow. This piece was really brilliant. I like that it's something portraying the Blacks as real people and not slimy bastards from the start, you know? We catch glimpses of it in DH and even HBP, but Lucius really does love his wife and his son, but at one point he must have forgotten all of that in favor of power. I really enjoyed the emotion you put into him, and even the innocence you gave Narcissa. It was a really sweet, fluffy piece ^_^Author's Response: Thank you so much. :D Report Review
I thought that I was going to get so mad because you used that exact dream a few chapter back to be the epilogue, but you didn't so I'm not. I'm not totally convinced that I would have been that upset if you did, actually. However, the bits that you did use tied into the dream in a really nice way. I liked that only the beginning and end were verbatim with Chapter Six.
Anyway, I have really enjoyed reading this story. It was really cute in places and a lot of fun in others. I got along great with the characters and feel a tad bit sad to say goodbye v.v Report Review
Oh, it would have been just too awesome had there been more Ginny/Draco/Ron bickering going on. With that couple double-teaming Ronald, it would have been only brilliant. As it was, this entire chapter had me grinning, from the point where Ginny considered how much time she'd need to get dressed to where Ginny announced to the parents -- so casually too -- that she was pregnant. Report Review
Oooh, I am definitely smacking Harry over the back of the head with... something. Maybe a shovel? Or perhaps that hideous statue Lucius cares so much about can like, fall onto Harry's foot? That sounds like a good idea.
I'm wondering if you know that the word you want is "admission" and not "admonition" ? An admonition is a sort of warning, I think.
The idea of a secret room is really sweet and symbolic. Draco revealing the room to Ginny is such a sweet gesture. These two do have a LOT of sex though. Like. Insane. Report Review
Oh, that is SO Molly, reprimanding the trio before crying and welcoming them home. Remember Chamber of Secrets? She yelled at them before making sure they were safe XD
Harry and Ron are being great bum-jerks though, forreal. I mean, why the heck can't they just accept that Ginny and Draco are happy together and leave them be? Gosh, did Voldemort scar them so much that they only see Dark Wizards wherever something doesn't go their way?
Oh, but I suspected something like this might happen during the America chapter. I had been expecting Harry or Ron or Hermione to confront the couple while they were in Virginia; instead, Harry just didn't realized he was seeing Ginny when he decided he was still in love with her. I swear, guys get on my nerves with that insensitive, I-want-you-so-you-have-to-want-me crap. Ginny and Draco are happy and in love though, so Ron and Harry need to just butt out. Report Review
The dream has me curious about the couple's future, but I really would have liked less dream and more story, tbh. I appreciate the timeline though. A lot of authors stuff their stories with tons of unnecessary filler and that becomes annoying. You get straight to the heart of the story, which is really nice ^_^ Report Review
Oooh, it's another romantic, fluffy chapter! I love these, they make me grin and giggle. Giggling doesn't really match while listening to My Chemical Romance, but I almost never match, so yeah XD
It's nice to see Draco get some sense about him and make a real effort into preserving and strengthening his marriage with Ginny. He's making a lot of really sweet, sensitive gestures, and when we're in his head we can understand that he is making conscious efforts to make her happy. It's really adorable.
I especially found the last paragraph cute, even if worded funny in some places. Report Review
Just from this chapter alone I can see that yes, Ginny did put in a lot of effort to their marriage. Where Draco was satisfied just shagging and fighting, Ginny wanted to get to know the man she'd been joined with, and to become friends of sorts. I personally feel the same way, like if I was put into an arranged marriage, I would put in special effort to get to know this person. Draco's been a right git about it all. Report Review
Awww, I really liked this chapter. It was really sweet and cute, both couples. Report Review
Um... Wow. I guess that fixes my complaints from the last chapter though. Must have been the nerves or something XD
But yeah, their personalities come across well while they were fighting, how headstrong they both are, and stubborn. A little background on the fight would have been nice, but the result was... interesting XD Report Review
I think I can understand Ginny's reasoning behind agreeing to the ceremony. Why keep searching for love you know you've lost, when you have security dancing right in your face? It's sort of sad, because your will is taken, but at the same time, you don't have to stand for your heart getting broken.
Writing a few paragraphs about the dinner might have been interesting, so that we could see what you meant by stating that the dinner felt almost natural. To me, "natual" for the Weasley family would have been different from "natural" for the Malfoy family. Loud and relaxed versus quiet and formal. Not only that but, the families are still getting acquainted, so...
Heh, the awkward sex comments. On the one hand, neither Ginny nor Draco are the types to hold their tongue, but at the same time... There hasn't been that segue-way into the pair being all friendly-like with one another. Report Review
You have a curious start here XD I think that some of the dialogue is a little unrealistic, but under the circumstances you've created, a universe where the Malfoys are not Dark wizards, I think it's a plausible situation. Ginny is a very capable witch, and independent as a result of growing up the youngest of seven children, and being the only daughter. Even if Lucius did not like it, he would do nothing less but go into Arthur's office proudly, and state his proposal confidently. Lucius Malfoy is not the type to be a step behind anyone. Report Review
You have me curious. Report Review
Wow, it is so weird finally catching up to the current point in the series. Now I have to actually wait to read chapters. I don't think I like it. Anticipation and all that XD
... Is it bad that while I do agree that a shovel is a terrible way to die, I also find it hilarious that the shovel is Heggs' signature weapon of choice? I mean, it's sort of random, really. Like, why a shovel? Why not a curse or AK? Baseball/Beater's bat? It's just... idk I'm a bad person, Ambrosia and her shovel makes me giggle.
Rose has a serious task ahead of her, it sounds complicated, even for her. And I wouldn't put it past Heggs to have put her work monkeys to background checking Rose since they bumped into one another the other day. If I were Ambrosia -- a slightly saner version of Ambrosia, mind you -- I would think it awfully convenient that the girl who'd ruined my plans the last time around was back again. Just putting that out there.Author's Response: Hey yeah you're all caught up! I'm still working on the next chapter, it may be late this week before it's done. Hopefully not into next week, but I'm not sure yet.
Ah the shovel. The shovel is because A Weirder Shade of Midnight was a NaNoWriMo novel, and the Traveling Shovel of Death is a NaNo tradition. Having written Ambrosia using conjured shovels as a murder weapon (leaves no magical trace for the wizarding cops to trace, unlike using a wand) in that novel, I kept going with it in this one for her re-appearance. It's her signature murder! ha. Oh my.
This is going to be a very convoluted case, such as Rose often happens into, although this one may be the most convoluted yet. Ambrosia is not going to take kindly to Rose's reappearance and meddling. Ah archenemies! All the craziest people have them. ;)
Thank you so much for reviewing! Report Review
Gosh, this whole chapter was so sweet! You know. Aside from the whole Aurora-being-a-ranting-brat part. But still, I love that Draco hasn't deviated from his typical personality, just found himself a softer side and a reason to show it. He's still the same `bum-jerk when he wants to be XD Report Review
Just when things seem to have settled -- mostly -- and our questions answered -- mostly -- and Hermione's world gaining some type of peace... More pops up. Training, and Bellatrix's book. I'm curious as to what might come up in Hermione Rosier's jounral, and wonder who *cough* might end up with the Ankh of the Dead locket? Report Review
I do think that you have done a good job revealing the information logically. Some explanations were a bit roundabout, but generally, the point got across and I could understand what it was that you were telling us. My curiosity now is what the duties of "the Chosen One" are and what happens when she meets her "better half"? Is the Chosen One normally a female?
The one thing that does not seem quite realistic however, is that Voldemort is divulging all of this in front of his entire congregation I guess I could call it. I mean Hermione had to go directly to the Dark Lord to receive answers for her questions. Only a select few had pieces of information, so obviously this is a pretty well-guarded secret. I don't understand why ALL of the Death Eaters are present for the tell-all. Report Review
Huh. This is an interesting story. I'm a little confused as to what exactly is supposed to have happened, or what's going on, or who Lightning even is but... I'm curious.Author's Response: Thanks. I wrote like three other chapters, but I can't find where I saved them. It's kind of sad, really. Report Review
Quick question that I thought about randomly before even starting to read the chapter: which books does this novel coincide with? Obviously at least some information from OotP is used since the Order is brought up, but it it totally compliant, or just semi-compliant?
It's interesting that Hermione and Harry are like two sides of the same coin. Or maybe the same side of two different coins? I mean, the Dark killed Harry's family, the Light destroyed Hermione's; he grew up abused by unloving Muggles, she was raised carefully by very loving Muggles; Harry is the Chosen One for his side, Hermione is the Chosen one for her's. Report Review
Bring on the darkness. I do think that is my favorite part of the story so far. You know. Aside from the mystery and the Dramione-ness and delicious drama.
I know that you are in the process of revising and have a few other fics going on, but if you still have those other thirteen chapters left (you did say seventeen were planned, and I believe I have four more chapters to read), please, PLEASE continue the story. I've checked you page every few weeks for the last few years, just in the hope that you've decided to return and finish the story. As one of the first and my favorite fic on this site, I would be completely ECCSTATIC if you did *luffles* Report Review
When did Draco use Talontega to heal Hermione? I could have sworn he used a different spell back in Chapter Five?
Once again, a character looses respect from me. I mean, picking petty fights over something so trivial is one thing; physically attacking her? Given, Hermione was the first one to strike, but it wasn't as if it was unprovoked. Not only that, but Harry should one, have more sense than to bully since he LIVES with a bully and two, not hit a girl! I know that the Dursleys didn't do much raising when it came to Harry, but I would have thought he had SOME type of common sense? *sigh* Report Review
Honestly, if you don't like or enjoy what you're writing, what's the point? Especially when it comes to fanfiction, you should write for yourself first, and post because you want other people to enjoy the story as well. Simple as that.
I understand Hermione's frustration. It's her life that's being played with. I can't stand it when people make decisions regarding what I will/won't do, what I do/don't like, and what my opinions are. It's a huge pile of poppycock, rude, and lightweight disrespectful, not to mention annoying a'f. Draco and Blaise really are darlings though. I wish Hermione would understand that they're tied up in all of this just as much as she is.
One final note that is really a pet peeve of mine: to = going TO a place or TO do something. Too = also, as well, a lot. Report Review
I really kind of want to just chop Pansy Parkinson in the throat. Am I allowed to do that? Chop her in the throat? Please say yes.
Aurora Rosier is such a deliciously vile, sadistic, evil female that it's awesome. Reminds me of a much more sane version of Bellatrix LeStrange. I can't wait to see more of the real Aurora, as opposed to Aurora Hermione. Report Review
Oooh, that was delicious though. I'd have thought that Harry'd have enough sense not to go picking a fight, but apparently he let Ron and Ginny influence him too much. It's a shame, really, because I really do think that without the Weasleys, Harry and Hermione could still be friends right now. Oh well.
I sort of wish that Blaise could have been involved with more of the last few chapters. It would have been nice to watch that relationship develop as well, you know? Report Review
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