YAY!!! I'm so glad you picked back up on writing! I like to think it has to do with me. :) I assume you'll let me continue in that delusion. I can't wait until your next chapter!! Write fast! :) No pressure or anything. ;) Report Review
I love your story and I would love love love it if you started writing again...although I would be somewhat mollified if you just told how you'd planned to end it. :) Report Review
I've been rather engrossed in reading your absolutely amazing story, so I haven't gotten around to reviewing like I ought. But I have class tomorrow and Brock is going to come home and yell at me for still being up lol so I'm gonna review before I get kicked off.
I LOVE YOUR STORY. YOU ARE AWESOME, AND I REALLY REALLY HOPE YOU PICK BACK UP ON IT SO I CAN CONTINUE READING. :) Artemis is wonderfully sarcastic, and reminds me of you lol. Sirius sounds like a very yummy dessert I'd love to scarf down...if only he were real, and I wasn't married... I love your transition with Lily and James, the fiery red definitely can't resist a certain someone. :)
Anyway, I regretfully have to go to sleep. But I shall be back tomorrow and reading. Report Review
Can't remember if I reviewed this before, but I still love this story. :) Report Review
Oh wow. That was beautiful. I love especially how you have made everything so clear without using words. There's something about no dialogue, that intangibility, that brings you closer to the heart of a story, further into the mind of a character.
Lily is portrayed as such a vulnerable, real person. I've read all of those other stories where she's vicious and angry and then eventually, slowly realizes that she doesn't hate him. But here, it's like she's on the verge of shattering, and every time she pushes him away, she really just wants him to come closer. And here, she's lost him, and it jolts her into that awareness, that terrible fear of losing him.
And then James. I could fall in love with him, if he was the way you paint him. That final defeat, I can see it, the wound, the pain on his face as his shoulders slump, his eyes lose their sparkle, and for once he almost believes that he's lost the most important thing in his life.
A year ago or not, this story is excellent and beautiful and poignant. I'm glad you left names out of the story, too, by the way. Gives this a better sense of the universal theme, that this could happen. Not to mention it leaves out that unnecessary detail that would otherwise distract or detract from the story itself.
Oh, and the song was a very good fit to this. :DAuthor's Response: Wow! Thanks a lot for that amazing review!
About dialogue, yes, I do agree that it gives you something different, also from the characters, that's why I left that out, just as well as names. It makes it more, as you say, close.
You've read Lily exactly as I tried to make her. Somehting JKR said once, about Lily not really hating James, kind of got to me and some time later I wrote this, making her different from everything I'd written before. Everyone has a weak point, and here Lily was simply abuot to shatter because of loosing James.
I'm in love with James! Haha, well, he's lost hope too, and I believe if he hadn't gone after Lily this time, it would have been over. They both almost lost each other.
Well, and this time it's just closer to two years since I wrote it, it was my first one-shot. I like the sone too, it's one of my favourites.
Thanks again for the amazing review! :D Report Review
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