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Review #1, by rocken_stockinsSeverely, Severus: The Most Official Finder of the Potter in the Flying Car

16th October 2009:
Woot! It was great, as always... I especially liked this part:

"'Minerva!' I whispered to the least attractive person on the outside steps (and indeed within a five mile radius)."

Utter genius.

10/10

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Review #2, by rocken_stockinsAccording to Plan: An Awkward Intro, A French Monarch, and A Row

28th August 2009:
What can I say? It's great!
I think it's fantastic that you decided to do something so...anti-establishment. =P Really, I don't think there's enough focus put on the minorities of the HP-verse and it's great that you would start something like this.
Update soon, I'll be waiting,
rocken_stockins

Author's Response: haha, thanks!
i'm indian myself, so going with a minority was a pretty natural choice.
thanks again!


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Review #3, by rocken_stockinsThe Beguiler: The Pitch

26th February 2009:
AH! Why so short?? I loved it, absolutely loved it and am so looking forward to the sequel. Please write more soon, you've been developing such a cute little story, and so dramatic, too! Very teen angst, if that makes any sense. Anyway, it's what we all know and love and crave so more soon, por favor!

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Review #4, by rocken_stockinsLily Evans Dyes Her Hair: The First.

5th January 2009:
Oh, it's beautiful! The movement from one short choppy sentence to another perfectly shows her flow of thought and even the memories described are perfectly credible of Petunia! This is amazing and a definite favourite.

Author's Response: thankyou!
im really pleased with how this turned out


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Review #5, by rocken_stockinsThe Talent Show: A Series of Awkward Situations

26th December 2008:
Woah. I'm really happy with this chapter, for the most part. There are some typos, misspellings and etc. but the actual story itself was good. It started off where the last chapter ended with that same feeling of the friends doing their thing but then it completely flipped around which shows how volatile James can be concerning Lily. He still cares for her deeply but he's not willing to let her mess him up again; however, that doesn't stop him from protecting her. All in all he's a mess, a giant bundle of hormones just raging, much like Harry was in his fifth year. Otherwise I don't think he would have punched Remus.

Really good chapter, but I suggest you go back and fix the errors to make it easier to read. And as always, longer chapters would be greatly appreciated! Good work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, like I said, I LOVE your reviews!!!

I was looking over that earlier today and I was cringing as I read it, I'll definitely get to editing it quickly. My sister was away for the time I was typing it out, and she is my editor, so I should probably have waited for her :)

You explain my story EXACTLY how I want people to think of it, thank you SO much.



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Review #6, by rocken_stockinsThe Talent Show: A bit of planning

26th December 2008:
I always love fillers, they really help to get the right tone set. I loved this chapter because we get to see a little deeper into Lily and Haley's relationship and Sirius and James' which is always slightly overshadowed in romance writing. Also, it's an amusing read; it really is funny and I especially loved this part:

“Brice is hot, sure, but you could do better anyway.” He looked to the fire and saw a first year giving him a funny look. “It’s a last name!” he said quickly. “Sides, don’t you have somewhere to be?” and the first year scurried off to his corner.

As it should be.

Good chapter, but perhaps you can make them longer.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm definitely trying to keep it well rounded.

And thank you, I liked that part myself XD

And no worries, they'll get longer I promise :))

thank you for the review!! I really love yours, contructive critism=love


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Review #7, by rocken_stockinsThe Talent Show: Chapter One

26th December 2008:
I like it. It sounds really good, you have a good plot going and everything but it's rather short. Also, there was a lot of detail about what Lily was wearing in the morning which is rather unimportant but I could see you tried to mix it into different sentences rather than saying it all in a bulk paragraph which was good. I'd love to read more so keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you very much :) I tend to go into over detail with what she wears, trying to create a good visual, but I'll try to keep from doing that :)

They are very short, which bugs me, I'll definately try to lengthen them :)

thank you very much!


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