I must say that you are clearly a capable writer with great enthusiasm. I really enjoyed reading your story, to me, it seemed to have something other stories lack, to which I applaude you! :) on a more technical note, I would suggest watching your spelling and punctuation in some places. You had one or two slip ups but other than that is was fairly well written. Hope to be reading more soon :DAuthor's Response: Well I always try to make them a little different so no one gets bored with the OC, because I am a fanatic about the Marauders, and I do love Remus/OC's a lot. But they always seem the same in a way.
Sometimes I think I'm just moving the characters on to fast, and I want it to be a more slow relationship type, but seems I'm sort of failing at that. But still thank you!
My grammar does seem to be the number one problem and I know I should watch out for that. I do try my best, I really do.
The second chapter is up and the third is being validated, and the fourth is being written so those should all be coming very soon.
- Alexa Report Review
LOL to that whole chappy!! i really needed a good laugh! danke for giving it to me! XD
xxxAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked the chapter- I've been working on the next one, but I'm drowning in other duties. Hopefully, it'll be up soon. I keep chipping away at it. Thanks, again, for reviewing! Report Review
Whoop! Great chappy!!Cant wait for more!! Well done!! LOVE THIS STORY =] xxxAuthor's Response: Thank you! Report Review
Ok...I have one word to describe this story...EPIC!! Well, I could describe it in many words but I don't think that it would have the same dramatic effect!
Firstly, before I go on, I would like to apologize sincerely for not reviewing before this, I just had to finish this story before I left any review.
Right now that that is out of the way, I would just like to say that you are a fantastic writer. You are capable of making the reader feel real, raw emotion. After reading chapter 14, it was about 3 in the morning and as I was getting into bed, I was thinking...Why am I feeling so happy? I went through a million and one reasons in my head but none seemed legit. I figured out after a while it was because of Lucy and what she had said about her 'students'. I have never felt that happy in my life and I am not just saying that for the sake of this review, I am being 100% honest!
I am really into this story and love how each character is described. One thing though that has caught my attention is that they seem to be a lot more mature than one would expect the average 12 year old to be. Also, I don't think it would have been possible for James, Sirius and Peter to accomplish becoming an animagus at the age of 11.
I'm not sure if you just said this for the sake of the story of if you didn't realise it as you were writing (I know how easy that is to happen =]) but I just thought I would ask anyway. I promise to review every chapter from here on out! =]
Well done, Brilliant work!
xxxAuthor's Response: Wow... thanks! This has to be one of the best reviews I've ever gotten since I posted this story!!! Thanks! You wouldn't believe how happy you just made me, honest! ^-^ I don't mind if you haven't reviewed until now; the fact that you liked it so much you couldn't stop means a lot to me, so trust me, you don't have to apologzie!
I am so completely ecstatic that Lucy's story has made you so happy (and at 3 in the morning at that!); it makes me feel great! I loved writing what Lucy said about her "students"; it made me feel like I was giving everyone a piece of Lucy; an invaluable glimpse into her mind... Or something along those lines.
I'm really, really glad you like how I did the characters, by the way. I worked really, really hard on them. I try to make them as real as possible, and as individual as I can... Which can be really, really hard sometimes.
They can be really mature sometimes, especially for twelve, I know. But I kinda figure that the majority of them are pretty bright (whether they want to admit it or not, like, for example, James). It's true, though, that they are pretty mature: I'm glad you caught that, actually. I am going to try to tune them down just a bit, though, so I really appreciate the comment on that.
I also am impressed by the Animagus comment: It's true that they're waaay too young to be able to transform... And that James would probably not tell his parents about it, either, to be frank. I think, in the series, the group learned about Remus and became Animagi in their fifth year, to be honest, but I tweaked it (a lot) to make it fit a little more comfortably into Lucy's story. (Mostly because I figure that, since Lucy had basically had Remus figured for a long time without actually acknowledging it, I might as well have cut the guys some slack and made them just a little more observant. And talented, I suppose, with the whole Animagi thing.) I knew it was most likely in their fifth year, but I used up some of my "creative author liscense" tokens on that little magic boost of theirs.
I knew that they were way way waaay too young to be Animagi and trust me, it's been bothering my "Marauder timeclock" thing. ^-^ I'm dealing with it, though, because it just kinda makes it easier for the story to flow better. Because this way the guys had a chance to "know" about it before Lucy. Because even though she kind of knew before them, her actually KNOWING it before James, Sirius, and Peter would've made it harder and even more confusing than it probably already is.
I really, really appreciate the great review you left me and I'm glad for all the great input you gave me. And thanks so much for the review promise; it made me smile. And since you caught up to the last chapter already, I guess you'll have more time to. I don't mind if you don't review each and every one; I'm glad for just this one. Thank you, though, and I look foreward to your next review. I'll do my best to update Lucy's story ASAP, okay?
~fullmoontonightO Report Review
Holy Mother of God! I abso LOVED this chappy! It was hilarious! Can't wait to be reading more!! I preferred the old one..only because the Lily in the new one looks weird..and slightly emancipated! Anyways..great work! Well done!xxxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for the great review! I'm glad you liked the chapter. I don't think I'll be able to get the next chapter up before the queue closes tomorrow, but I'll have it ready for September first. And thank you for your opinion on the banners! I appreciate it, as well as the fantastic review! Thank you, again! Report Review
haha this chappy was hilarious!! I loved it! Can't wait to be reading more! I really think that you should write a book or something and get it published! You are so good and you may as well benefit financially from something your great at! Well done, great work! xxxAuthor's Response: Wow, thank you! I actually did used to want to be an author, but writing isn't something I can see doing forever.
Nonetheless, that you think my writing is good enough! :) Report Review
THis was a great chappy! I really enjoyed reading it! Even with all the sad and bad events that happened (hehe sad and bad =P) andways, just thought i would leave the review you want! Dunno if it will do much good but sure! Great work! Well done! xxxAuthor's Response: I love all reviews! They make my day! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! Report Review
Holy Mother of God!! I really enjoyed this chappy! Is that a sick thing to say because of Hermione's condition? Well anyway I'm glad that Malfoy is trying to help her! And I can't wait for more...well done great work! xxx Report Review
OMG i beg of you PLEASE do not finish this story!!! It is absolutely fantastic! I have been so absorbed in it for the past few days! I love it! If this story really is over, please consider writing a sequel!!! Brilliant work, fantastically written! Well done!! xxx Report Review
Holy mother of God, I abso love this story! It is original and awesome! I really enjoyed reading all the chappies and I can't wait to be reading more! Well Done! Great Work xxxAuthor's Response: I'm blushing. I didn't even know I did that. Thank you so much! As soon as my other story's chapter is validated, the next chapter goes into the queue :)
-Impossibilities Report Review
Hey again...I read the first chappy ages ago and i was beginning to think that you had abandoned this story! But I stand corrected! This chappy was great, i really liked it! I'm really glad you didn't abandon it! Btw, just a guess but is this 'Bob' figure in any chance Mr Potter?? =P cant wait for more!! xxxAuthor's Response: Hmmm, as obvious as i know it looks - i don't want to give anything away yet ... *mischevious chuckle*
But don't worry - that is one mystery that doesn't remain so for long. There'll be plenty of other one's to worry about instead ...
Thank you so much for reveiwing!!
-Wise Eyes Report Review
holy crap!!! that ending was TOTALLY unexpected!! i really liked this chappy it was really good well done!! xxxAuthor's Response: Always need a surprise:)
Thank you so much for the review:) Report Review
woah! this was such a good chappy!! I am truly sorry for not leaving any reviews since chappy 3! its just that i had to read on...and even though it took ages (=]) im glad i did instead of just giving up! This is a really good story and i really enjoy reading it! Well done!! xxxAuthor's Response: Thanks for reading =] Glad you liked it.
I'm still writing the next chapter. Been busy with work and stuff though, but since I don't have any writer's block at the moment, it shouldn't be too long now before I finish. Report Review
Ewww!! Peter Pettigrew?! Stupid, stupid Susie! =] and she is fairly dumb too not to notice that it is Remus Val likes! haha all in all this was a very entertaining chappy! Can't wait to be reading more! Well done!! xxxAuthor's Response: Haha :D Why, thank you! xD And yes, Susie has her... less brilliant moment. Doesn't make her stupid, really - just... a bit oblivious. Yeah, Susie is OBLIVIOUS :D Report Review
hey..i have just started reading the chappy there and it says that potions was last on Mondays but then it says that they head down to the dungeons for their first class of the year ritual?
Despite that I really like your story, i remember reading it a while back but i have forgotten the story line so i have to read it all again! =] yay for me i guess! lol I'm going to try to keep up with it better this time around! Great work, well done! xxxAuthor's Response: Ah, thanks! The second one was right. They had Potions first thing on Monday. I've already changed it.
Hahaha, the story is so long, I'm not surprised people have to go back to read from the beginning.
Thanks for reading & reviewing! =] Report Review
Woah! Holy Crap!! Wonder how he is going to react to her saying that to him!! Great work well done!xxxAuthor's Response: yeah, maisy was a bit of a nasty, huh? not too friendly me thinks. he should get over it, hook up with lily or something...
i joke, of course. how twisted would that be? messing with fate Report Review
Don't worry! You totally didn't ruin your story! you made it even better! Honestly, you need to have more confidence in yourself! This story is brill! and this chappy was great!! well done! xxxAuthor's Response: thanks! I\\\'m so relieved, you have no idea. Yeah I\\\'d probably need more confidence, but posting a story is so scary! especially when it\\\'s my first story ever. but it keeps getting easier :) Report Review
i really liked this chappy! Finally Sirius sees reason...though mainly because of his brother...but sees reason none the less! =D its sad that Janelle has to go back to being lonely for so long but Hooray for Sirius he has come back to talk to her!! Yay!!! *glares for the cliffie* *hugs for the update* =P xxx Report Review
haha well after Aldan and Lupin's antics maybe that is why Will hates the family so much! I love the idea of Remus being a shrink i think he would do a great job! Brill chappy and hope you have a great vacation!! well done.xxxAuthor's Response: Yeah. Will\\\'s not a bad kid, he just doesn\\\'t thrive on immaturity like the rest of the family does.
Thank you! Report Review
Ok i feel like a right bitch for not leaving you ANY reviews before now but i had to read on further with your story! I have to say that i really enjoy reading it! it has just the right amount of drama, action, comedy etc! I can not believe that english is not your first language...well i am presuming this because you said you were...Swedish was it? Sorry my memory isn't the best! =P But seriously, i couldn't even IMAGINE writing a story in a different language! I have only just begun writing..and that is in english! I don't think i would be able to write a good enough story just yet! but i am hoping to change that! =D Well anyway back to the story, i really think that you should continue writing because you really do have a knack for it! Also, if you don't have a beta already, i wouldn't mind doing the job for you! Your english isn't bad at all, you just have a slip up every once and a while but that is fantastic! well done! fantastic work! xxxAuthor's Response: Wow! Thank you so much! :) I\\\'m Swedish yeah, and I admit it\\\'s a bit difficult do write in a different language. But I\\\'ve never written a fanfic in Swedish either, so it\\\'s all new to me.
I don\\\'t have a beta, and if you\\\'re interested it would be great! thanks again!! Report Review
Holy Crap! Poor Sirius!! thats horrible what she is doing to him! granted it is understandable though i could kill Linda for putting that thought into her head! But...it is int he story so it must be important! love the chappy though...very well written! great work! xxxAuthor's Response: thankyou!
i know i bloody love sirius, bless him
let's hope validation happens soon:) Report Review
Haha!! I love it! it truly was a hilarious chappy! Especially when she said the thing about him being a product of incest! Haha i really liked it and i hope to be reading more soon! but take as long as you need!! i dont want to pressurize you! great work! well done! xxxAuthor's Response: Aw, thanks a lot! It means so much to me. I'm glad you like it!
Thanks for the review! Report Review
Ok you being Lily is well cool...but i swear i could kill you after leaving that cliffy with Mary and then moving into Lily mode!! but i loves you anyway cuz you are AWESOME! lol but holy crap! lily KISSING snape!?!? that is just WRONG?! ewww bad mental pics like! but this chappy was well written and i really enjoyed reading it! great work! well done! xxxAuthor's Response: Yeah, I am really sorry about the double cliffy! Both get sorted out soon though I proise :) I know! Lily and Snape? ewww. :D thank you muchly :) Report Review
Awww this chapter was really cute! though tbh im not the biggest fan of hearing bria thoughts but it was a good story...great even...and it was nice to hear and see anna and the others in a different light! great work!! xxxAuthor's Response: I know Bria's mind isn't quite as exciting as Anna's, but I think it's been a nice transition and become more bearable.
Thank you! :D Report Review
Love It!! Cant wait for more...SEE IM BACK!!! lol but anyway, i really like this chappy and i cant wait to read more! though have a great vacation and even if the chappies are 'sporadic and spaced' then so be it as they are great! and you deserve a break!! :P xxxAuthor's Response: Haha, well, thank you!
Ugh, I went on an insane writing streak to get all those chapters done in time. So, I think I may just kick back and relax at not-home for a little while. :D Report Review
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