This is such a beautiful story!
I've only recently started reading Sirius/Lily and I really like the way you portray them, particularly as they are together without Lily cheating on James. AND the amount of detail that goes into everything is also incredible. The dialogue between the characters and Lily's thoughts have been written so well, and the descriptions and I think you've written it perfectly, with just enough romance but not so much that its.icky. :P
I also love Vanessa, she seems to be a really interesting character so far, and I can't wait to read more/see how she develops in the rest of the story.
Rosie :)Author's Response: Thank you!
Yes, I absolutely hate Lily cheating on James and besides, I can never see Sirius going THAT far, no matter the circumstances.
I also hate icky romance, which is why this story was challenging to me. I'd never written this much romance before, not without some good measure of angst, lol.
Vanessa is a very old character from one of my first stories (which is now - Thank God - deleted from this site. It was awful, really :))). I enjoy writing her because, since she took shape and evolved in my head so long ago, it feels more like writing about a person I know extremely well than a character I invented. I'm glad you liked her, especially since she's such an unpleasant character in this story.
Thank you so much for taking the time to review, and I apologize for taking so long to respond - I haven't been here in ages, really. Your review made me feel all warm and fuzzy. Thank you so much!
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o *dun dun dun* :D
I really hope your computer starts working again so that I can have more to read!! And because I hate the cliffhangers you keep leaving! :D
10/10Author's Response: My computers working again, it's really old, so it keeps having problems. Thank yo again for the lovely reviews! Report Review
EXCELLENT? How was that even a quessstion? :P
I like that this chapter was longer, making it even better! I think that your writing has improved (sorry that i haven't read in a while :D)
and I can't wait for more!Author's Response: Hi! I know it's been like 2 years and you've probably forgotten this story, in all honesty, so had I, but thank you anyway! Report Review
Just thought I'd leave a review in here somewhere. Another fantastic story already!!! (and there's a long way to go, even better!!) I really can't think of much more than I love everything about your writing, the plot and the actual writing as well. And you describe the emotions fantastically as well! Poor Remus :(
10/10Author's Response: Aw thank you. Thats really nice of you to say so. I love this story so its always good to hear that peopl Report Review
I LOVED IT!!! And I didn't want it to end :(
Off to read more of your stories, because I need more
;DAuthor's Response: hehe thank you! I have started an AU sequel to this one which isn't as stylised in structure but I'm enjoying it just the same. Report Review
I think this story is amazing!!!
I love the way you write, describe everything and the plot as well. I don't think I have read a FF that has James with someone other than Lily for awhile and I like how you swap between the two time frames.
;DAuthor's Response: Thank you.
This one was a challenge for me and one I throughly enjoyed, so its really good to know someone likes reading it. Thank you!! Report Review
No, not the end of the story for now!! I absolutely love it! PLEASE update soon, I want more!!!
;DAuthor's Response: Its definitely not d end of d story.. i've chappies in d as day say 'pipe-line' which will soon b here.. I am very happy dat u love it n ur amazin ratin is so lovely.. Abt updatin, well, for now, 2 b candid, i am concentratin on my other story 'A Tryst With Destiny' but i'll probably try n squeeze a chappie or two 4 dis story as well hopefully once wen d que opens. Nevertheless, thanx a lot 4 ur really heartfelt n kind reviews.. n outstandin ratin of course.. a 10/10 is astoundin and much appreciated as always. I guess u shud please read my other story as well, d one i mention, i think u'll like it.. its Draco/Hermione pairin as well. Anyways, one more thin which i wanna say is Stay tuned please.. :) :) Report Review
Oh no. Polyjuice Potion? Woah, intense ideas coming on! I think this is one of the best plots I have seen on here in forever!! And so very different to any other stories I have read (in a good way of course!)
10/10Author's Response: Well, abt d potion.. am not sayin nythin, won't say here wat it was but to make it simpler, No, it was not polyjuice potion, a lill wrong ur speculation is.. but i hope u like wat i've planned involvin d potion in d forthcomin chappies.. I am so-so happy n joyful dat u njoy d diff. ideas i compile my stories wid n d last comment was awesome! I am thrilled dat u like my lill, i mean long story so much.. n thanx a lot 4 ur excellent ratin n stupendous 10/10.. it made my day oh week actually!! :) :) Report Review
How was it? FANTASTIC!!! Great plot idea, really!! (sorry to sounds repetitive...)
Can't wait to read more!Author's Response: Yay!! I am so very thrilled dat u like it so much.. *smiles very widely n jofully*
Thanx 4 tellin me dis.. it made my day! Thanx a lot 4 ur splendid comments.. its so kind of u Report Review
And it keeps getting better and better!!Author's Response: Thanx 4 d cute comment *laughs* I am happy dat it intrigues u more n more.. I hope u like d other chappies 2.. :) :) Report Review
Oh no!! I think you wrote this chapter particularly well, and the idea of Ron and Hermione not working is pretty original!
;DAuthor's Response: I am so glad dat u appreciate d indigenous quality of my ideas n abt d well-written comment, million thanx 4 dat.. its always a pleasure to get compliments on my writin skills n styles.. Abt dis chappie, well, even its one of my favs. among all in dis story so far 'cause i think d emotions r on a loose here n d unexpected betrayl from otherwise loyal Ron made his character a lill treacherous. Nonetheless, thanx 4 ur motivatin review :) Report Review
Intense!! I love the plot on the story, the only thing I can really think of is maybe make the chapters longer, coz I want to read more!! (I have the same problem as well!!)
;DAuthor's Response: I am extremly happy dat u appreciate d plot-line of my story.. dat cud b d best comment ever 'cause it forms d prime essence of d story.. thanx a lot 4 tellin me dat *smiles jubilantly* n abt makin chappies longer, well, i admit initial chappies were quite short but den i extended d words gradually n d forthcomin chappies wud definitely b longer.. Nontheless, Thanx once again 4 ur warm words.. :) Report Review
Oo cliffie!! I really like the way you have set the scene and shown how both main characters feel right now. Can't wait to read more!!
;DAuthor's Response: Hello rosie sirius93
I am so happy dat u like my long story so much.. ur comments really mean a lot 'cause wat u read was my very first attempt at writin a fan-fic n i was kinda hopeful of gettin various aspects right.. but by ur review, i guess i cud do so n i am so thrilled dat u like my portrayl of thoughts n characterisation.. Thanx 4 ur really kind n sweet review.. n sure, next chappie is dere n i hope u like it too.. :) :) Report Review
The only bad thing about the chapter being short is that I wanted more!!! Shame the queue is shut for now, I wanted an update!! And I agree, the validators need a break, they go through so many chapters all the time!
;DAuthor's Response: THANK-YOU! I know it's short, I can't seem to be able to keep going with writing the chapters at the minute. You're right- the validators need a break, but that means I'll be able to write and write. Report Review
Love the characterisation, and I like reading a story that is different!
Can't wait for more, PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!
;DAuthor's Response: wow! i like ur reviews because they make me happy. u'll just have to wait 4 more.
Thanx 4 readind and reviewing with that rating. it makes me wanting to write more. stay tuned please!!!^_^
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Sounds like a great idea for a story, would never have thought to have them hating each other :S
Can't wait to see what happens next!!
;DAuthor's Response: this idea came out of nowhere so i knw it will be interesting. thanx 4 reading and reviewing with that rating.^_^
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I loved the arguing at the beginning, reminds me of my sister and myself lately.lol
Again, dialogue fantastic and the last bit was the best. I want to know what happens next!
;DAuthor's Response: THANK YOU AGAIN! I loved writing the dialogue at the beginning, it reminds me of my sister and myself as well. I am writing the next chapter now, It'll be up ASAP. Report Review
Another thank you?! :P
Happy (belated) b'day to your mum ;D
I love how you write the relationship between Albus and Katherine, so so sweet!!
Another fantastic chapter, can't wait to keep reading!!Author's Response: THANK YOU! Their relationship is sweet isn't it? Report Review
BRILLIANT! )and now I get the title... :P)
That was really well written and I can't wait to read more, UPDATE SOON!
10/10Author's Response: THANK YOU AGAIN! I will, the next chapter is half-written. Report Review
A thank you?! :D
And you live in France? Epically JEALOUS!!!
Anyway, THAT WAS AWESOME!! You are getting better and better by the chapter! I loved Meryl, very creative! :P
And I thought you characterized everyone brilliantly, especially Katherine's mum!!
10/10Author's Response: THANK YOU! It's great to know you like it, and Meryl was just something I thought up on the spot. Katherine's mum will come up more and more. 10/10? THANKS! Report Review
Another great chapter! I think you are portraying Albus and Katherine's relationship well!! Can't wait to see what happens with the show and poor Vera.
;DAuthor's Response: THANK YOU! It's good you think I'm portraying Albus and Katherine well, and I know, poor Vera! Report Review
That was fantastic!!! I never really thought of it from his POV very much and you wrote it brilliantly!!! Great songfic!!!
Can't wait for another story/chapter!
;DAuthor's Response: Thank u 4 ur fantastic review. This idea came out of nothing, well, it came when i was hearing that music so i couldn't resist without writing it.
Anyway, thanx 4 reading and reviewing my story with that rating. It means a lot to me.
I sent the next chapter of my novel and it should be up or by today or by tomorrow.^_^
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Naw, that was so sweet! Neville was so cute, I think you characterised him so well, showing how nervous he was and the letter was exactly something I would've imagined him writing.
;DAuthor's Response: Thank u, ur awesome!!! I love ur reviews and they have made my day. The letter wasn't something i had imagine him to write but this chapter was writen by me and my friend so she helped me in that part.
Thanx 4 reading and reviewing my story, especially the 10/10!!!^_^
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Oh wow, that was brilliant! You come up with the best plots!! I can't wait to see what happens next, update really really soon, PLEASE!!!
I did notice a couple of spelling/grammar errors, would you like me to beta your stories for you? If you do, you can find me on TDA under Rosie11 and just leave a post and I'll get back to you!!
;DAuthor's Response: Thank you!!! I have three chapters done and the second should be done REALLY soon!!! I cant take all the credit, EdSRocksMySocks on youtube made videos, which got deleted (supid youtube) and kindly let me develop the plot to it :D. Sure, ill get on TDA right now and post it to yo!! thanks again!! Report Review
FIRST REVIEW! YAY!
Your story is finally up!! Great beginning, can't wait to see what happens next. And I must say I didn't notice any spelling/grammar errors.. lol
p.s. Happy Easter
xDAuthor's Response: Thanx Rosie!
I know and all thanks 2 you there are no spelling mistakes!!!
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