Favourite part: "He'd seen her hit him before, she had a nice backhand."

Tips: 1. Try writing something on your own(not with a friend), that way it gets more personal and you feel more connected to the story cause it's "your own". 2. Don't have such great gaps between each "paragraph", it's kinda distracting. 3. Big no-no on these *. 4. Try to always expand your vocabulary; use the thesaurus to find new combinations of words - keep your readers intrigued and on their toes with each sentence.

Keep practicing! Writing gets easier with each word you type - really ^^

Good luck, my dear ^^

*Maria

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Haha, can't wait for the next one :)

*Maria

Author's Response: thank you (:

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Superb, as per usual :)
And I hope you rid yourself of that writer's block. I know how annoying it is to press 'backspace' more often than any of the letters on your keyboard.

Anxiously awaiting the next chapter!

*Maria

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YAAY! Finally.
And, okay, I must admit that I haven't really understood all those Star Wars references before -- but I watched all six movies a couple of days ago AND NOW I GET EVERYTHING! Which makes it all so much easier *content sigh*

Great chapter, keep em comin'.

*Maria

Author's Response: YAAY! :D
Ahaha, it must have been very confusing to read this story and not understand the references :/ BUT GOOD FOR YOU FOR FINALLY COMING TO THE LIGHT SIDE.

Thank you so much ♥

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Liked this:

"Morgan and I are very similar in our stubbornness. She was relentless in her attempts to get me to play Quodpot. I was relentless in telling her no."

Keep writing! (Found out about your story via tumblr, btw :p)

*Maria

Author's Response: Thank you! At least someone is paying attention to my self promotion over there lol. I hope you keep reading as well!!

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Aaah!!! This was so so good, honey! Frightfully suspenseful and you had me at the edge of my seat :) Great story, my friend - can't wait for the sequel :D

Love u!

*Maria

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I liked it. And I laughed a bit at this: "The car should have gone to the waste disposal long before the time when Mrs. Parkinson was still a nice sight to look at in a bikini."

Keep up the good work, hon :)

*Maria

Author's Response: oh thank you so much! I can't believe you read and reviewed my story! I love your stories xxx

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I like the idea! :)

One tiny, little thing that bothered me though... The correct way to write the he said, she said, I said thing is:

"You tell mum I'm going out, I'll tell mum and dad you've been dating Rose Weasley since fifth year," I threaten.

Use a comma, see? :)

Another example:

"Larissa, table 5 is ready to order," Tanya tells me.

Looking forward to see where this story goes! ^^ This is definitely getting favorited :)

*Maria

Author's Response: Ah, thank you so much for that! I get confused sometimes, haha :)

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Yaay ! They're back together! :D I love them ^^

*Maria

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Aww! So bittersweet :/

Well written, honey!

*Maria

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Cute :) But I missed Al! Don't get me wrong, I like Louis, but... he's no Al, you know? :p

Keep writing, honey -- you do it so well ^^

*Maria

Author's Response: oh yes I know Al is not Louis, but don't worry there will be plenty of Al in the future. Thank you so much for the kind review and support, you are so sweet (:

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Liked how you threw in Astoria in there ;) Very smart.

Keep writing :)

Thanks for reading and reviewing :)

*Maria

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Aw, very sweet :)

*Maria

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Fantastically written story. Please update asap - I may suffer from awesomeness-withdrawal if you don't. And it won't be pretty. (Just ask my roomate, she's seen it before.)

*Maria

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Oooh!! He SO obliviated her!

Great chapter :)

*Maria

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No!

Short, but good.

*Maria

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Ah, miss Brilliance - thou art back! Please update quickly, hon :)

Loving this. (10/10)

*Maria

Author's Response: oh thank you so much!!! this review spread a huge smile on my face, it's brilliant, thank you! I'll try and update soon (:

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You, very, very talented girl! I am proud to call you my friend :)

Very powerful chapter indeed.

I, for one, think(hope, is more like it) that Draco will come 'round and help Kaya.

*Maria(10/10)

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Love the idea! Wonderfully written :)

*Maria

Author's Response: Why thank you kindly
Thanks much for the review :)
Emily x

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I've been so engaged in the story that I've just jumped from one chapter to the next without even having the time to write a little review. So the reason to my lack of responding hasn't been because I didn't enjoy it, but rather the complete opposite!

Now that we've cleared that up, I have to say that this is an amazing story, and kudos to you for keeping all of us on the edge of our seats CONSTANTLY - it isn't an easy feat.

Hope shcool's treating you nicely, if not I'll just have to go over there and whoop some ass - nobody hurts my favourite author :p(that made me sound real badass!)

And now last, but most importantly: UPDATE! I may think you're Merlin's gift to fanfiction, but I will get very agitated if I have to wait like a month... (or another two days, that's basically the end of my patience-rope)

*gives homemade cookies for being amazing*

*Maria(10/10)

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Not bad at all, hon - don't beat yourself up :)

You're funny. I like that.

Please post the next chapter as soon as you can. Ditch homework/your job if you need to. Maria needs her fanfics!

*Maria(10/10)

Author's Response: Oh thank you so much! And I'll try and ditch my studying, but I'm already so far behind, I hate school! I swear I will write something today! Thanks for the amazing review

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Me loves me some fluff!

Keep the fluffy candy cotton coming! (see what I did there?)

*Maria(10/10)

Author's Response: oh; i see what you did there haha! thank you!

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You're a funny one, you are :)

I especially liked the parts between Cece and Dom. Like this:

"Those are my clothes!"

"Well maybe you should join them on the floor!"

Keep it up!

*Maria(10/10)

Author's Response: oh thanks a lot!

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Dude, you crack me up.

Keep letting the love flow! I like where you're going with this story.

*Maria(10/10)

Author's Response: Dude, I'm glad you like my humor.

I'll try to share the love some more. Thanks for the review!

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Nice turn of events! I'm confused about the changes and stuff, but I'm sure the next few chapters will clear things up nicely :)

*Maria

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