Reading Reviews From Member: Gemma Doyle
  
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Review #1, by Gemma DoyleThe middle of the world: My brothers and how much I love them

21st June 2009:
Wow, this is a really great story idea. However, it falls a little flat with the execution (no offense -- it's probably because you're writing in a language you probably rarely use). I know when I had Spanish class last year, and had to write things in Spanish, it was really quite difficult. It might be easier to write it originally in German and then translate it -- I don't know.

If you need a beta for English mistakes (I know nothing about German, sorry), just say so. I can help, and I know it must be really hard trying to learn English as a second language.

It's a bit clustered, and awfully short. Most chapters average about 1,000 words (I know, when you're just starting out, it seems tough, but you'll get there). Try more detail and add more dialogue, but please separate the quotes a bit more. It's a little confusing and at times I wasn't quite sure who was talking.

On a lighter note: I don't usually read the character list by the story, so I rather stupidly went into it assuming it was Lily Evans -- Lily Potter's grandmother, so when she said her name was Lily Potter to the boy, I was like what? lol

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Review #2, by Gemma DoyleLoose Ends: Prologue

28th January 2009:
Aw, this is such a good story. Great writing style!!! I love it.

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Gemma, for the review!

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Review #3, by Gemma DoyleAll the Pretty Faces: I. Prologue

28th January 2009:
This is rather interesting, a new spin, I suppose. Anyway, I really like your writing style. Will look for updates!!!

Author's Response: thankyou, i'm glad you like it. and, i'm realy happy you like my writing style, thankyou so much! i'll update as son as i can.

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Review #4, by Gemma DoyleAfter She Awoke: The Wedding

28th January 2009:
I am really enjoying this story. You're such a wonderful writer! Update, please!

Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I'm working on writing more, but it's a slow process. I will get another chapter out as soon as I can. Thanks for the review! :)

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Review #5, by Gemma DoyleAfter She Awoke: The Golden Haired Girl

27th January 2009:
Great story! I love it, and Stephanie. She's a great character.

Author's Response: I love Stephanie too. Thanks for the review! :)

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