I thought it was great :) I'm honoured that I inspired such a raw, emotional piece of writing. Well done you :)
BEB xAuthor's Response: Wow! 'raw, emotional piece of writing'. That just made my day! I'm honoured that you went and read my story :) Thanks so much.
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Great first chapter, I'm hooked. You've positioned the story with a wonderfully unique plotline that has developed at a really great pace without rushing the reader. You've also structured the words and sentences with a brilliant clarity and flow which makes it easy to read. Overall I really enjoyed it and can't wait to read more!Author's Response: Wow, thank you. It's very nice to hear this. Aha, I'm glad you're liking it. I wondered if I'd packed too much into this first chapter, but it appears to be paying off better than I even thought it would, so thank you!
Ooh, this review has made me so happy!
Thank you so much, and I hope you enjoy the coming chapters (: Report Review
I adored this chapter; I think Harry's awkwardness, discomfort and genuine nervousness about his r/s with Ginny was perfect. It echoes the OOTP Harry where he's with Cho; his embarrassment, dislike of crying women and so forth. Yet you built on that and tied it up with Ginny which I felt, was done beautifully.
I wasn't expecting a Molly POV but I think it made a nice switch. I love how you've really bundled so much info and thoughts into her internal monologue; I imagine that she truly does think like that :) Hundreds of things at once with realisations popping up at every turn.
Overall, I thought it was a really sweet chapter. I think you've handled everyone's response to grief, new relationships and the post-war effects uniquely and in a very dignified way. 100/10, my love and I look forward to reading on xAuthor's Response: thanks so much for the wonderful review I'm really glad you like my story, I like putting Mollys POV in so we can get her opinion on whats happening as I think she is an esssential character in the story, the mother hen who will continue to watch out for everyone.
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Wow; blown away. Brilliant portrayal of all the characters and true to the story. Their emotions following the war were beautifully executed and exactly how I would imagine them to be. I had a right little giggle with the “CHOSEN ONE DEFEATS VOLDEMORT, THEN KILLED BY DERANGED EX-GIRLFRIEND”. Classic! I'm looking forward to reading the rest!!Author's Response: hey thank you so much for the review, this so lovely thank you, Your story is amazing and I am amazed by praise from such an amazing author I really hope you continue to read and enjoy my story as much as I enjoy yours! Report Review
Poor Lily :( But Nigel sounds quite dashing so I have a hope for her! Loving what you're doing, 10/10 my love!Author's Response: i kno poor lily but nigel is a "special" kid ;) thanks for the review i love em! ill be updating soon! Report Review
Heya - I popped by to have a read after your recommendation in my reviews :) I really like your story - especially the way you write dialogue. It flows well and feels natural, making it really easy to read. I'll be keeping my eyes open for more :)Author's Response: oh wow thanks! it made me really happy that you reviewed!i lovvve your story and thanks for the compliments! ill be updating soon so ull see chapter 3 soon! Report Review
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