Nice start. The characterization of the characters in this is very good. I hope you will continue.Author's Response: Yay! My first review! So professional sounding. *striaghtens tie* Yes ole chap, I do believe i shall continue with it after the Writer's Duel is completed. Might you indulge in the competition as well? LOL I hope you were inerested in the first chapter enough to read the second when it comes up, which will be this month, and updates will come more frequently after that! Thanks for reviewing! *bows to you* Report Review
A brilliant beginning, but there are a few minor flaws. I like the way you're going with this and like i said, it begins very nicely.
I'm guessing that it is Harry's birthday, but i don't think you've mentioned it, forgive me if i'm wrong!
Also, you have made Harry think very lightly about the prophesy when it is mentioned. It's a pretty huge thing, so i'd kinda emphasize it slightly more than thinking about Dumbledore helping him.
I hope you will carry this on!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'll definately flush out the details of the prophecy a bit. My only thought is that he's had half of the summer to think about it, so not much new is going to come up. But it definately seems appropriate to fill in some background on it. And btw, it is not yet Harry's birthday, but rather he is just recieving some moral support from his friends. Thanks again! Report Review
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