Hey this is LyrisLovegood from the forum with your review.
First off I am terrible at reviews so bare with me.
I could really feel the emotions from both James and Lily in this chapter. It really made me believe that James genuinely likes her but the fact that Lily is so stubborn makes it hard for anything to happen. I'm getting the vibe that Lily doesn't want to let her guard down just in-case James hurt her? But I might be wrong.
I felt sympathetic towards James when Lily knocked him back once more...especially having said that he loves her. I would not want to feel James rejection :( and I know it was wrong of him to hurt her in that way but people make mistake and say or in this case write things they don't mean in pure anger and rage. I could relate to that a lot.
Your story flowed really nicely, but that's my view anyway haha.
Anyway I really hope Lilly see sense soon and get with James :PAuthor's Response: Aww, thank you! This is a lovely review, don't worry!
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Awww that was so sweet. Woop finally they're together :) (keep it that way lol).
Argh I want to see how everything plan out. Update please I love this story so much. Is one of my favourite.
Hehe I like the characteristic of Ro - he seems cool lol. And Oz is driving everyone mad haha.
10/10Author's Response: yeeey i know! seemed to take me many more chapters that id have liked but theyre finally there! i didnt want to rush right into it tho so im glad you were patient! don't owrry its not going to be one of those jobs where theyre together for like a chapter then ignore each other (cough - the first few chapters - cough)
i hope you keep reading it! Report Review
My first review on this story - sorry I haven't review the others :)
Anywho I love this story is so entertaining, hehe the playing footies remind me of me and my friends - we had some fun.
I love the way the story flow, wish I could write like that.
And your writing is wonderful. Love this chapter and I can't wait to read more.
P.s I actually stalk the recently updated story haha just in case I see yours.
10/10Author's Response: oh thanks so much, really glad to hear it! The next chapter shouldnt be long and I do actually have the whole thing planned out so its all there ready to be written properly!i hope you continue reading and id love to hear what you think about the rest! Report Review
Oooh once again I really like this story.
I'm going to fav it.
Wow this is so intense I can't wait to read more.
10/10Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing,twice!!! I'm glad you like it the next chapter is halfway written! Just wait a bit! Report Review
Wow I like this story already.
Is so well written I can't wait to read more.
10/10Author's Response: Thanks! You're such a sweetheart! Report Review
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