It seems you have a very unique idea and I believe I will enjoy this new point of view on Harry's life. In the series, Privet Drive is simply this far off, want-to-forget prison, but for your main character it is the house next door! Interesting.
PS: I'm on a mission to give as many reviews as I can. I'm sick of receiving none myself, though receiving many reads. Its odd how that works, eh? Report Review
I'm excited to start reading this one! A great, captivating first chapter!Author's Response: Thanks! I look forward to getting new reviews from you (since this story is already finished it's nice to have someone else read it!) Report Review
I love scenes like this, the ones that force you to write about something you have never directly experienced (like stumbling into a shack with a dead body staring directly at you). Instead, the author most use other experiences from their own life similar to the scene at hand. I believe you may have dropped that scene from your own life into this chapter (the cat, perhaps?).
I've loved ever bit of this novel so far, and I cannot see turning toward sudden failure in the near future. This is going at the top of my Favorites list. Congraduations on being my first Favorites novel in all of three years I have been a part of this site!
Happy writing!Author's Response: I HAVE seen partially decomposed animals before, horrible as it is. Made me want to puke! I tried to capture the horror of seeing that but it is very difficult to do! I hope I didn't fail too badly at it. =o
I am so flattered that you have added mine to your favorites! I hope you continue with the story, and thank you so much for the reviews!
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I read your A/N in the summary and I felt my stomach drop. I have read some downright awful first-person stories on this site and others, but yours is not included in the stereotype. Again, I love where this novel is going and I'm going to plug through to the next chapter!Author's Response: Aw, really? I certainly hope mine doesn't join that list of awful! I would keep going with that third person, but like I said, it is so difficult to me for some reason. It is a major challenge, which is good, but I just had so much I wanted to write and so quickly, that I didn't want to take the time. =] Thank you for the review! Report Review
I hope you go far with Rowena! I'm loving it already! I clicked on your name in the authors online box at random, and am sure glad I did. This character has so much potential. Her initial voluntary separation from groups or posses combined with her obvious drive for knowledge and discovery are going to be important keystones in developing her character's depth!
I was working on my current novel, but I think this is worthy of forgoing my previous engagements and continuing with this promising novel!
Keep it up, and happy writing!Author's Response: Thank you so much! And I'm glad you picked up on that. =] It is an important part of her character! Again, thank you very much for the review!
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You've definitely got the bare-bones down in this one-shot, and it could use some filling in. Hopefully, when your partner logs on and sees this, that author will have a bountiful amount of ideas to share and discuss with you. I like the way the story has turned out currently, but I am excited at its potential! Report Review
You'll hate me for not knowing the song, but like me for the double thumbs up I'm giving my laptop right now!
I'm currently working on latest story, and decided to take a break and check out the recent stories. I'm so glad I found yours! I love the Angst, its perfect for a part I'm working on right now. But enough about me, let's talk about your piece.
Its wonderful. The mellow, almost numb, sadness Snape experiences is like a wound that never heals. The pain is not instantaneous or sharp; it is almost like that of a stubborn bruise. Many parts of "More Than a Memory" did, however, offer those jabs of sadness. I particularly enjoyed the section dedicated to the photo album, and this quote is amazing, “'When they don't move, they capture one exact moment, and sometimes that's exactly what I want to see,'". I can't explain why that struck me as brilliant; as the author, maybe you secretly know why.
I loved it. Keep writing!
EliteAuthor's Response: Aw, that's ok! Not everyone's into country. It's a good song, though, if you get the chance to look it up on Youtube or something.
I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I was definitely going for a numb feeling so I am glad that worked. I don't really know how I came up with that quote, it just sort of popped into my head. I'm so glad you liked it! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
It made me think about who was saying what, and who was being referenced. Many other stories (including my own) simply place the character in the scene which requires no thought or analyzing from the reader. Your piece above forces the reader to pick up clues and solve the story before he/she finishes it. Again, nice job!Author's Response: Thank you! I like to keep people guessing, it makes the story more entertaining. :) (besides, not too many books give full background checks right away do they? ;] )
I enjoyed the story, and liked the idea of an alternate universe one-shot immediately after Voldemort's death. Your story kept me interested, but I believe that it needs refined to make it slightly more believable to the reader. Try to imagine the feelings you would experience if your role model/ friend's-circle-leader suddenly died. Such feelings could be mind numbing shock and range to uncontrollable rage. Putting yourself in your characters' positions, or drawing upon your own experiences will increase your story's believability and add to its depth.
*Loved the last two sentences. Perfect use of fragment.Author's Response: Thank you for the advice, I'll definately put that into consideration. Later in the story, Bellatrix will do some much more outrageous actions, I promise. Thanks for reading it, I'm already done with Chapter 2, and it's awaiting validation! Report Review
High contrast to my writing style, but I envy yours. Such feeling and passion... incredible. My eyes are watering, and the hair on the back of my neck hasn't subsided. Great job!
WittAuthor's Response: Oh! Thanks! It's so nice to see that someone is still reading a one-shot after so long! I really love this one! Your review made my day! Report Review
"Walls are exploding – doors are exploding – ceilings are exploding – people are exploding, but just then, there is a deafening crash as the doors to the Great Hall are ripped open..."
Ha, if you can pull something like this out of your ass, then you have talent, buddy. Keep it up, I laughed and laughed. Its ridiculous, but its supposed to be; its retarded, but its supposed to be; its surprisingly believable at parts (such as Hermione's and Ron's general mannerisms), but its supposed to be.
Fast paced and funny. Loved it. Report Review
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