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Review #1, by Gryffin_DuckLace And Paper Flowers: Bomb Shield

17th April 2016:
I really cannot say enough good things about this fic, Kaitlin. :) It's so short, but you've managed to convey so many emotions and images in very few words. As I've already mentioned, I am so impressed with how you can pack so much into short fics.

My favorite part of this is the lace and paper flowers image. There is something so beautiful about the phrase and it immediately makes me think of a young, blonde girl running through an overgrown field full of wildflowers on a warm, sunny summer day. I know that image isn't in your fic, but I can see Victoire as that little girl, who then comes home to the chaos that is her home life.

This made me think a lot about Victoire's family. I've only ever seen them portrayed as a happy, perfect family, which is also how I wrote them in my Albus series. But this makes so much sense. Bill suffered severe trauma and wouldn't have come through that unscathed. And Victoire, as the eldest, would so clearly step into that protective role with her younger siblings.

I like how you used second person and kept it vague as to who it was about. It made me want to keep reading to figure out who it was.

And then, at the end, you brought back the lace and paper flowers. I love it. That image tied the story together so well. This is definitely one of my favorites on the archive right now and I'm so glad you asked me to read it over for you! And thank you for the shout out in your author's note. That was very sweet. :)

I'm going to have to read some of your other stuff now!

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Review #2, by Gryffin_DuckThe Ultimate Betrayal: The Ultimate Encounter

5th April 2016:
What an intriguing plot! I've always found Percy an interesting character whose motives and beliefs we only get a fleeting glance at in canon. He's incredibly loyal and tends to blindly follow authority, which would make him susceptible to Voldemort.

I really enjoyed the way you wrote Percy's thought process in this. I think you kept him very canon, despite the fact that this is AU. It was easy to believe that 'yes, this is Percy.' He wasn't out of character. I especially liked how you described his friendship with Thicknesse. It makes sense that Thicknesse would be the link between Percy and Voldemort.

In the second paragraph you used 'principal' when you should've used 'principle.' That was the only grammar/spelling issue that stood out to me.

What I would love to read would be a more drawn out story (perhaps a short story or novella) of Percy's thinking that led up to his going to the meeting with Thicknesse. Essentially, the first part of this one-shot drawn out into a short story. I think there's a lot there and you really could delve into it more if you wanted to. But I realize this itself is a novel, so you had to do some backstory to get to the actual novel part.

I also would've liked to hear exactly what Voldemort was saying that Percy thought made so much sense. Voldemort was such a fantastic manipulator. Him twisting his words and his beliefs for his new recruits would be fascinating.

I think this was a great chapter! You definitely laid the groundwork for something really interesting. I haven't read a lot of AU novels, let alone ones that take place during the seven books, but I like this so far! :)

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Review #3, by Gryffin_DuckInto The Light: Descent

24th January 2016:
Hello again, SunshineDaisies! I'm here with your last review (well, unless you request again, which you are free to do!)

After reading the prologue I was excited to read this next chapter. As I mentioned in my last review, I really liked the prologue set up. The first two paragraphs of this chapter seemed to follow in the same style, although that dropped off after you delved into Lily's mind. I think it could work really well if you started every chapter in that style (which you might've already done).

I feel as if I really got a sense as to Lily's personality and what she's going through in this chapter. Her angst came across quite well and I could easily tell how torn up she was about Snape and James (and a bit torn up over Oliver as well). I did think it was terrible of Oliver to break up with her while she was late to class, though. Not a fan of him because of that. But it only added to Lily's angst, so it worked for the story.

What subject does Zimmermann teach? I got the sense that it's Charms, but you might want to edit in what he teaches somewhere.

I'd love to learn more about Lily's roommates. Even if you somehow worked in a random fact about each one of them I think the reader would feel a bit more attached to them.

Aww, James and Lily have declared a truce! Which means it's only a matter of time before they start falling for each other.

For purely selfish reasons, I'd love to see a bit more Remus. :D I definitely enjoyed this chapter. Feel free to request again! :)

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Review #4, by Gryffin_DuckInto The Light: Prologue

8th January 2016:
Hello, SunshineDaisies! I'm here with your requested review. I like the way you've set this up. The prologue is short, but filled with information. It drew me in immediately, with the comparison of the two boys.

I like how you gave an overview of the story within the prologue, but also provided necessary background information (such as how James and Snape were raised). I think the style of the prologue works very well and sets up what should be an intense story.

You've done a great job with characterization in a short amount of words, which is perfect for a prologue. I think the reader can already get a good sense of James, Snape, and Lily just from this first chapter. But you've also left me wanting more, which is good!

I'll talk more about the plot when I review the second chapter. But so far I think it's very well written! :)

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Review #5, by Gryffin_DuckThe Fortunate Ones: Chapter 2

7th January 2016:
Hello again! Back with your second review. Again, I really love your Mary as a narrator. Her uncertainties about what she's feeling about Lily really come through and they make perfect sense.

I like how Lily was the one to initiate the kiss. Mary comes off as too shy to have been the one to initiate. Plus, it also gave insight into Lily's character. Lily must not've known about Mary's feelings, but she went for the kiss anyway, which shows that she's very outgoing and perhaps a bit reckless. It fits.

I think you've done a great job with capturing the reader's attention. You certainly got mine! This fic is very unique, which is hard to do with Marauders Era. I like that you've chosen to write about Mary, rather than a random OC (which I see a lot of in Marauders fics). I haven't come across any tense issues. I really enjoyed reading these two chapters. Feel free to stop by my review thread for more reviews if you'd like! :)

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Review #6, by Gryffin_DuckThe Fortunate Ones: Chapter 1

4th January 2016:
Hi, U_C! Getting started with your first review. I'm one chapter in right now and I'm hooked. This chapter was absolutely adorable. You've made Mary into an excellent narrator and I found it really easy to fall right into the story with her.

The thing that struck me most about this chapter, however, was the description. You have managed to describe Hogwarts in a completely unique way, which is something I rarely see. Usually descriptions of the Great Hall and the like are very reminiscent of JK Rowling's descriptions, which makes sense because we've all read the HP books. But yours are your own, and thus they are completely Mary, and I love that.

I haven't read a lot of LBTQA fics at HPFF and I believe this is the first one with two girls I've read. And I love it. Mary's emotions about her possible crush on Lily seem very appropriate for an 11 year old who hasn't had a crush on any girls before. She's unsure of what's happening, but she's open to it, and the two combined are very realistic.

I only found a few (small) issues in this chapter. The first is that Hagrid says three to a boat, but in canon it's four to a boat. It's a very tiny detail and I think you can definitely leave it as three if the plot needs it, but I thought I'd mention it. The second is that during Remus's sorting Mary describes him as the quiet boy from the boat next to theirs, but when you'd described the boys in the boat, you described them all as being loud and didn't mention a quiet one.

Lastly, just a typo. This line- Of course. I always I am, -there is an extra 'I' after 'always.'

Again, I love this so far. It's rare to find unique Marauders fics and sometimes I feel that I've read all the good ones out there, but this is definitely evidence that I just need to keep looking. Can't wait to read the next chapter! :)

Author's Response: Hiya!! :)

Oh yay! I'm thrilled that you liked it! I've become really attached to Mary, so I'm glad that she's coming off that way!

Oh wow. I honestly just described The Great Hall (and Dumbledore for that matter) exactly as I'd always imagined in my head. That's so cool to hear that it was a unique description! That made my night. :D

I really only started getting into that genre (reading and writing it) last year, and I've fallen in love. I really enjoy exploring all different walks of life in fic. You don't see it represented as much in main stream literature, which is a shame. I'm really happy that it's coming across as authentic.

Just for the purpose of this story I have it as three, so Lily, Mary and Severus could be alone together in the boat. :) Whoops! I went back and added that. In my head I knew he was quiet, but I must have forgotten to actually express that haha. Thanks for pointing that out!

I fixed the typo, too! There's always at least one thing that I miss. Thanks again!!

Ahh yay! I'm seriously so happy to hear that! The next chapter does get a little steamy, just throwing that out there. ;)

Thank you so much for the incredibly lovely review!! I truly appreciate the feedback!! I hope you enjoy the next chapter!! *hugs*

xoxo Meg

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Review #7, by Gryffin_DuckJust the Way You Are: Just Joshua

3rd March 2015:
Oh, I'm intrigued! Love, love, love this plot idea. I've never read a fan fic with transgendered characters and I'm so glad you decided to take it on. I haven't read many published works with transgendered characters either, so I don't have much authority to say so, but I think you've handled it very well so far!

I am so glad Joshua's father is supportive of him. That will help so much. Hopefully his mom will get on board soon, too.

I can't wait to see the other topics you're going to tackle! Fics that deal with "real life" issues are my favorite. Looking forward to the next chapter! :)

Author's Response: Hey!

I'm so glad you like the idea and decided to read this, I hope you'll continue to like it. If you're looking to read any more, I've found a couple of good one-shots and I'm waiting on apondinabluebox to post a novel. :P

I'm glad you think so. It's taken me so long to post because I'm all about the research for this story.

Joshua is also very glad. His dad is always supportive and a part of the reason why will come into the novel later. His mum - both his parents really - have a ways to go, his mum more so because of how she was brought up. But they love their kids more than anything.

I hope you'll like what's to come, especially with the dealing of the other issues.

Thank you so much for leaving a review!


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Review #8, by Gryffin_Duck'Eyes' with an 'L': Boom

23rd January 2015:
This was so fascinating! I love reading stories about how wizards deal with Muggle illness and disability (or rather, different ability). I've also always wanted to tackle the issue of deafness in the wizarding world, but haven't gotten around to it.

I really loved this. Despite the fact that it's a one-shot, you managed to pack in enough history of Lily's deafness that her story was understood. I'm assuming that first bit where she wakes up sick was when she went deaf? Did she get meningitis? Because the medication used to cure that often results in people going deaf.

The Lily/Snape interactions were really great. I love how he embraced signing and her deafness. And it all fit with canon! The bit where he calls her a mudblood was so heartbreaking.

And the Lily/James bits. Aww! So, so great. I love Lily/James. :)

Author's Response: Hello! Yee! Thank you so much!

I was really really stoked to get this prompt because I'm currently studying American Sign Language, and I loved the idea of writing a story that had a strong Sign component. Luckily Isobel was willing to translate stuff into British Sign Language, and offer suggestions for how to describe BSL (and she came up with clever ideas for confusion--like the 'grass' thing.)

Yes it was meningitis! I briefly confirm that when they activate her cochlear. I realize a lot of that is pretty vague, and the intro is somewhat intentionally confusing, but I hope it worked as an /effect/ ;)

I had a lot of fun with Snape in this story, because it's like "AWW HE'S SUCH A SWEETIE" then "NVM YOU HAVE PROBLEMS, BRO." James was definitely tricky, because I wanted him to be kind of cocky and a prat like the canon flashbacks, but still likable enough to make the ending cute. I'm so glad you thought it worked!

Thanks sososo much for this review!


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Review #9, by Gryffin_DuckThe New Pride of Portree: A Pack of Wild Dogs

28th April 2014:
I didn't realize how far behind I'd gotten in this... But there is something nice about having four new chapters to read!

The awkward was so thick in this one. I love it. I don't think Fitz is going to be able to ignore that kiss so easily. And another awful match. At least Jinx caught the Snitch, and Molly managed to play despite her injury.

Ooo, a retreat! Can't wait to read about that. Great chapter! :)

Author's Response: Awkwardness is everywhere here. Nope, he won't be able to pretend that one didn't happen - it definitely escalated things for both of them. They aren't a winning team yet, no ;)

Thanks for reviewing, hon!

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Review #10, by Gryffin_DuckWolf Calling: Some Family Time

20th January 2014:
I love the Weasley family scenes. The part where Nana Molly told Louis he was too skinny was my favorite. I can definitely see her doing that with her grandkids. Lily ranting about James was really funny. It's great getting to see the other Weasley cousins in this fic.

Ooo, things are getting exciting! I hope they're able to catch that werewolf. Looks like he's able to put up quite a fight, though.

Louis and Elsie need to realize they'd make a good couple. I love how Elsie pushed the emergency button in the elevator in order to talk to Louis, as that seems to happen all the time in various medical TV shows.

You left one of your notes to yourself in this chapter, right where Louis first mentions Healing Technicians. Just thought I'd point that out for when you edit. Great chapter! Can't wait for the next! :)

Author's Response: Thanks, Sarah! Glad you are still enjoying it! I'm actually thinking of diving back in to finish this fic up. I can't just leave it a wip when I was having so much fun writing it. I'm still done writing fanfic, but I'm not done writing this.

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Review #11, by Gryffin_DuckThe New Pride of Portree: Magpies and Mistakes

26th November 2013:
Yay! They finally kissed! Probably wasn't the best of circumstances- just coming off a loss and spending the whole night in a pub. But still, they kissed! I imagine the next training session will be really awkward, but hopefully they get over that quickly.

I had a feeling they'd lose to the Magpies, but not quite so spectacularly. I'm guessing it was the nerves that really got them, especially Molly. But as long as they beat the Cannons, they won't be completely hopeless. I just hope they get it together and stop blaming each other, because if they don't start acting like a team they'll never win. Great chapter! :)

Author's Response: Yes! I loved writing that scene, so I'm glad you liked it. They will definitely have some issues adjusting to having kissed, though.

Half the team is used to always losing, and the other half is used to sitting on the bench. First time being starters for half this lot, that's intimidating. Definitely a likelihood for stage fright (or whatever the sporting equivalent is).

Thanks so much for reviewing! I'm really glad you're enjoying the story :)

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Review #12, by Gryffin_DuckThe New Pride of Portree: Drills and Defense

26th November 2013:
Aww, I loved this chapter! It's so nice to see Molly and Fitz finally getting along. I'm glad McCormack talked with him, otherwise he would probably still be too stubborn to realize Molly had been right. I only hope that when they do get together, it doesn't screw up the team.

Molly's idea to get Jinks to actually do his job was hilarious. Hopefully he takes it to heart and continues to listen and practice. I wouldn't put it past Molly to do exactly what she said she would do. Great chapter! Off to read the next now. :)

Author's Response: It's about time they did! McCormack pretty much comes around when someone needs a good solid kick in the rear end. She's good at that. XD

It was certainly effective! Jinks like the ladies. And in a small town, he needs to not have a bad reputation or no one would go near him. Molly would totally actually do it, too. lol... Thanks so much for reviewing!

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Review #13, by Gryffin_DuckThe New Pride of Portree: Flight and Family

16th October 2013:
I'd been waiting for a Fitz chapter! This one really made me feel sorry for him (although he'd surely be irritated if he knew that). It's got to be awful to be living your dream and then have it destroyed in seconds. Still, he could stand to be a bit nicer to those who help him. Hugo was very professional, and Fitz ought to be grateful for that. And given the amount of Weasleys, Fitz has no chance of never running into a relative of Molly's.

I adore the way you write the Weasley family. I think the chapters where a bunch of them interact (which often seem to revolve around dinner, haha) are my favorite. Lucy and Hilarion are adorable and I'm so glad they've got a daughter! Percy as a doting grandfather is so sweet. I'm really glad he's so proud of his daughters.

Oh, Molly. Somehow I don't think her plan of secretive drills for the players is going to go over very well with Fitz. I'm not sure anything would go over well with him, for that matter. Perhaps once they win a match he'll start to realize Molly has the right idea. Great chapter! Can't wait for the next! :)

Author's Response: He would totally be irritated. He's a prickly sort of guy about his injury and people feeling sorry for him. Though I totally feel sorry for him too. Poor guy. He definitely needs to work on his anger issues. Having been such a huge star before his injury, he doesn't have a lot of true friends who'll give him some real talk about his attitude.

Ubiquitous Weasleys ;) I love to write them en famille, it's so fun. It is usually dinner, isn't it? They're not going to get together without food though, so hey. Makin' it work. Percy is a proud papa, and grandpapa. And not just to be competitive with his brothers ;)

Nope, not going to go down well at all. You'll see soon. Thank you so much for reviewing! I really appreciate it.

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Review #14, by Gryffin_DuckWolf Calling: To Craft a Hypothesis

16th October 2013:
Ooo, I didn't know you were going in the direction of a cure! I really hope Louis is eventually successful, both for the sake of werewolves everywhere, and for Louis himself. He'd get so much respect, both from his colleagues and his family. Maybe they'd finally see him as an adult. I'm really interested to see where you go in terms of Louis looking for the cure. I've had a few ideas in terms of what sort of cure would be found (might eventually write about it, but who knows).

Aww, Louis messed things up with Elsie. For now. I have confidence that they'll work past it, though. After all, they weren't really in a relationship at this point. All hope is not lost!

I'll never get tired of the scenes where Fleur steps in and forces Louis to come over for food or whatever. I especially loved the part where Bill just sat on the couch, knowing full well that he couldn't do a thing to persuade Fleur otherwise.

One thing- Wolfsbane is one word. ;) Great chapter! Can't wait for the next! :)

Author's Response: You'll find out more of the direction Louis will take in ch 13 when I post it. It was kind of in the back of my head, but I was mostly focusing on the mystery part of the plot first before I expanded the story line. I didn't want to overload readers with so much information all at once.

Nah, Louis didn't really mess up. Elsie is just all over the place and can't decide what she wants. Or rather she isn't being completely straight with Louis. It's all about playing games with these two, or so it seems for now. Nope, no relationship so far.

Yeah, I love writing Fleur with Louis so much. I fancy him a mummy's boy, without a doubt. Those scenes are some of my favorite gems to write.

Oh, yeah, I think autocorrect on my computer separated it and I just missed it. Thanks for pointing it out. :)

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Review #15, by Gryffin_DuckThe New Pride of Portree: The New Lineup

15th September 2013:
Molly is awesome. I am loving all the interactions between her and Fitz. I kind of feel sorry for Fitz, who clearly has no idea how to be a coach, but he ought to put aside his pride (pun totally intended) and let Molly help him. Together they could get the team into shape.

Yikes, injured by a fan. I hadn't expected that. It's one thing to get permanently injured from Quidditch, but from a fan? That's much worse.

I really like the team so far, especially the lazy Seeker. Can't wait to see how he reacts to Molly's training (because I have a feeling Molly is going to take charge despite Fitz's not wanting her to). Great chapter! :)

Author's Response: I feel bad for him, too. He really has no idea what he's doing, the poor guy, he just can't admit it. Molly's a naturally take-charge person, so she'll definitely be helping whether he wants her to or not. Jinks is growing on me ;) I'm glad you like him and the rest of the team. Thank you for reviewing!

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Review #16, by Gryffin_DuckWolf Calling: If You Can't Find 'Em

11th September 2013:
I really hope the werewolf is on the registry, although I have a feeling they aren't, because it'd be better for the plot. Guess I'll find out, though. Ugh, the thought of protesting all werewolves because of what this one werewolf is doing is so sad.

Poor Louis. He's so confused about Elsie, but I love it all the same. I really like them together. Louis is so quiet, which offsets Elsie, who seems very loud and boisterous.

Loved the addition of Albus and Lily in this chapter! Lily needs to realize Lysander isn't for her and get together with Frank. They'd make a cute couple. It must be hard for Louis having Lily being a reporter. I like to think she'd do an unbiased interview, but you never know. Great chapter! :)

Author's Response: Yeah, the match is definitely found in a different set of records, not those of the werewolf registry, so no worries there. Yeah, but that's politics, right? Something bad happens and the group that is related to what happened is targeted even if it's just one person. It's a terrible truth.

Well, Elsie is sending mixed signals. Going hot and cold on him. But you find out exactly why she doesn't want to talk/hang out with him in chapter 13 when she stands up for what she wants from Louis by being straight with him. Not sure when I'll post that, but hopefully within the next week or two. I want to have, at least, chapter 14 finished and chapter 15 started before I update.

Yeah, you're right, you never know with Lily. Poor Frank, but he'll get what he wants from Lily, eventually. Hopefully. If he doesn't, then perhaps I'll have another fanfic plot after all. I've noticed how most of my fanfics are companions as the basically line up well with each other (I mainly speak of Why Not, Because I Love You, and Wolf Calling since I slipped in a cameo of Molly & Finn in ch 12 to show where they are after BILY). Thanks for the review, Sarah! Sorry it's taken me so long to reply. :)

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Review #17, by Gryffin_DuckThe New Pride of Portree: The Harpy With the Mohawk

22nd August 2013:
Wow, you got this chapter up fast! I love your version of Molly II so I can't wait to see where this goes.

I love how Molly said yes before dinner was even served. Not that I blame her, since she hasn't seen much play in four years. McCormack makes me laugh. Can't wait to see more of her.

I'm very intrigued by Fitz, especially his injury and why he stopped playing. I suspect there's more to it than just your average injury. Yay, more Lucy and Hilarion! Love them. Can't wait for the next chapter! :)

Author's Response: It just came into my head! I love when that happens. I'm sure later chapters will have to be beaten into submission, but I try to revel in it when it comes easily.

Molly is decisive, isn't she? She's been feeling itchy with her life so this is a good change for her. McCormack was fun to write, can't wait to show more of her.

Ah more to come on Fitz. There's a backstory there, yes ;) And cameos from Lucy and Hilarion! I love a cameo. Thank you for reviewing! *hugs*

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Review #18, by Gryffin_DuckWolf Calling: Caught Off Guard

2nd August 2013:
THEY KISSED! OH HAPPY DAY! I loved how wonderfully awkward the whole exchange was, with Elsie trying to tell Louis she likes him and Louis being so clueless and not getting it. ADORABLE.

ANYWAY. Backtracking. I am so glad Victoire took Remus to see Jonah. That friendship will be great for both of them. I hope to see some interactions between the two later on.

I love the way you've written Fleur. She reminds me so much of Mrs. Weasley. Louis is trying to so hard to be grown up, but Fleur just wants to keep mothering him as much as she can. I love it. But it was probably good for Louis to get away from his flatmates and get some decent sleep before he had to go to work.

The part where the little girl died was so sad. I really hope Louis and his crew are able to find who is attacking all these kids.

Can't wait to see more Louis and Elsie interactions in later chapters! :)

Author's Response: Yeah, figured tensions were running high and that's usually how kisses happen. Especially kisses that weren't meant to happen. They had to face their FEELINGS for each other eventually. Sad that it happened given the circumstances that happened prior to the kiss, but that's life.

Of course, hopefully I'll be able to show a scene with Remus and Jonah playing together. I wanted to at least show Remus in this chapter to add the cute to soften what followed later in the ER with the latest victim.

Yay, I'm so glad you like how I'm writing Fleur! Of all the parents of the next generation, I imagine Fleur as being the most like Mrs. Weasley. I guess because Mrs. Weasley wasn't taken with Fleur at first until the end of Half-Blood Prince and I can imagine them growing closer after that scene over Bill's bed in the hospital wing. And of course Fleur would mother Louis still since he's her only son and youngest; he'll always be her baby. One of my aunts is like that with my cousin and he's 24 now.

Yeah, death is always sad but I felt it was time for a death to happen to jolt all the characters to reality. More on the werewolf in the next chapter. Also, politics. Ooh la la.

Thanks for reviewing, Sarah! :D ♥

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Review #19, by Gryffin_DuckWolf Calling: Falling Into A Schedule

12th July 2013:
I knew nothing happened between them! Poor Hugo, though, having to be taken home by a coworker to sleep it off. I do like him and Elsie together, though, so I hope something comes from that.

Yay, Frank! I hope he talks to Lily. Sounds like Lysander isn't the man for her, but Frank seems so sweet. They'd be good together. I hope to see Lily in the fic soon!

Sounds like Hugo is getting the hang of work, which is good. The image of a guy with a Quaffle up his nose is hilarious. I can only imagine what else Hugo sees when he works spell damage.

I still hope Victoire lets Remus meet Jonah. It'd be so good for both of them. Great chapter! Can't wait for the next! :)

Author's Response: I'm assuming you mean Louis instead of Hugo :P Hahah

Nope, Elsie can take care of herself, that's for sure. And I can see Louis with a woman a few years his senior, too. I wanted to shake it up a bit since most men go for younger women in stories/movies.

More on Frank later. Also I'm planning on writing a chapter at the burrow with the whole clan present... but it'll be a couple more chapters off (probably ch 11 or 12 since I have important plot stuff to write before I get to it).

Yeah, that would be quite a funny image. Thanks for reviewing! ♥

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Review #20, by Gryffin_DuckWolf Calling: An Unexpected Night

3rd July 2013:
Hi Leslie! Haha, I told you you'd have to remind me. :P I'm still in post-LeakyCon exhaustion, but I'm very glad you reminded me to read and review! This chapter is one of my favorites so far.

I love the idea of Remus visiting Jonah, and the scene where Louis asked Victoire gave a lot of good insight into both of their characters. Louis reminded me of a whiny little brother when he was begging Victoire, which he probably is sometimes considering he has two older sisters. And Victoire is so protective of Remus, but that's a good thing, especially considering he's a werewolf. Still, I think it would be good for both Remus and Jonah for the two of them to meet. I hope Victoire says yes!

Yay, Albus and Rose! I'm glad they got some time in the fic. Rose's line about the werewolf possibly being a girl was great, and very Rose (or at least how I imagine her). I definitely see Albus as a workaholic, too.

Ooo, Louis and Elsie!!! I have a feeling nothing actually happened, but I could be wrong. Still, I like the two of them together since I can see Louis with a girl a little older. Great chapter and I can't wait for the next! :)

Author's Response: You still got here eventually ♥ And I'm glad this was one of your favorites because I greatly enjoyed writing it.

I loved writing that scene between Victoire and Louis. Any sibling scenes I write are always fun for me. I guess because I model it on how I am with my sister and cousins (I have 8 cousins on my mom's side that I grew up playing with on a fairly regular basis; and of those 8 I lived next door to 3 so we basically saw them every day).

Yeah, no way around that. Albus is definitely the type to grow into a workaholic. I've just always seen him as being more studious out of the Potter children; more driven like Harry. And I imagine Rose as being a mirror of her mom, but still with the stubbornness of her father in her.

Glad you like Louis and Elsie together because there's more to come with them. ♥ Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #21, by Gryffin_DuckThe Fallen: The Fallen

13th May 2013:
This was so heart wrenching! As soon as I clicked on this in the queue I knew it would be super sad, but I'm so glad I clicked it because I adore Remus fics.

The effect of James & Lily's deaths on Remus is so rarely explored in FF, yet I think their deaths affected him greatly. After they died, he was essentially alone in the world (assuming his parents were dead, which I think can be a safe assumption).

I think you got his emotions spot on in this, from the anger to the sadness to the hopelessness. It sort of reminds me of a Remus fic I wrote a while back called Strings, where Remus first learns of James & Lily's deaths.

The quote you used in the summary was perfect! It fit the story and the situation wonderfully. Great one-shot! :)

Author's Response: I'm glad that heart wrenching as that was aiming for, though I'm sorry I made you feel sad!

I agree, that their deaths must have had a massive impact on him. I think that's partly why I wrote it, because there really was nothing about it, and I never read about the funeral either so I wanted to explore it.

I'm glad his emotions came through, as they were so mixed I was worried that people would get confused! I actually listened to the podcast of Strings and I really loved it. I'll definitely have to go and review it when I have find some time :D

I saw that quote and I knew it would work, so I'm glad that you liked it! Thanks for this really lovely review :D


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Review #22, by Gryffin_DuckWolf Calling: A Pattern

10th May 2013:
Finally had time to read this! I'm glad Louis got introduced to the rest of the team. Maybe now he'll be able to settle in and figure out his place amongst them. And hopefully his finding the pattern of the locations will help him prove his worth!

Aw, I think Louis's fondness for Jonah will only aid in the search, despite Elsie's views. I think it'll make Louis more determined to find the culprit! Great chapter and I can't wait for the next! :)

Author's Response: Thanks, Sarah! Louis does have quite the heart and I wanted to show that by making him great with kids. Even if the pattern doesn't end up being a new revelation in the werewolf case, it's still Louis's first revelation that he makes toward committing himself to the research. (:

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Review #23, by Gryffin_DuckMidnight Over Broadway: Welcome Home

19th April 2013:
So, as you know, I read this entire fic yesterday. Once I started I couldn't stop! I'm going to leave a giant review here, at the end, but I'll probably go back and review random chapters after if I forget to add something to this or there's something specific I want to comment on.

This might be my favorite of all your Rose stories so far. I love them all, but this one had me hooked from the beginning and hit me in all the different types of feels. But what I also love about it is that it took place in NYC! I've seen a few fics that take place in NYC, but I've never seen one with the amount of detail you've done, both in terms of the US's magical community and general knowledge of NYC.

In terms of knowledge of NYC, I loved all the little details you put in. I felt like I could've gone on a tour of the city and lived the fic through its geography just based on the details. I've been to most of the places Rose went to in this (all of the touristy spots) so it was really fun to imagine the Weasleys and Scorpius there!

Okay, I think I'm done nerding out over NYC, at least for now. I'll move onto the plot. Ambrosia! What a nasty woman. I love her as a villain, but hate her as a person and I'm glad they finally caught her!

Your plot was so intricate, the way you weaved Ambrosia, a British villain, into the underground world of the NYC wizard crime scene. And you even drew politicians into it! So great.

All the new characters were hilarious, especially Mimi. I love how Rose didn't figure out that she was a man, and when Scorpius told her it was the funniest thing ever. I hope we'll see her again if you do another one!

I'm really glad Rose got arrested just so Ron and Hermione would have an excuse to come to the city and be a part of the story. I LOVE the way you write adult Ron and Hermione, especially the relationship between the two. It's just how I imagine it would be. The bits where Scorpius and random members of the public get uncomfortable around their arguments are the best.

And Ron's love of food. Can't write a Ron fic without it! I do hope he was able to get a knish from a street vendor before he went back to England.

Scorpius as a dad might be the sweetest thing in the world. I love how you have him being the one who primarily takes care of Ramses while Rose is off hunting down bad guys. I've said it before, but I'll say it again, your Rose/Scorpius dynamic makes me not totally dislike the ship! It was nice to see Rose get worried about Ramses, though. Her mothering instincts are there; she just has to dig a bit deeper to find them.

I'm sure I'm forgetting something, but when I think of it I'll put it in a review of one of the previous chapters. I hope you write another one! Great story! :)

Author's Response: Oh thanks for the big review! I loved reading it! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story.

I had a lot of fun writing this. It's more detective-y in this one than her usual, since she's not going after a bounty and isn't motivated by money as she usually is (since Scorpius's gallery show is making money, she's not as broke). And setting it in the US was fun, since I got to drop her out of her element. She is really set in her pathways around London and her usual contacts. She's a creature of habit in a lot of ways. Making her work in NYC made her expand a bit. I have been to NYC a few times, and you know I'm a Ravenclaw with research ;) so I tried to really immerse the story in the city.

I can just see the Weasleys trotting around the city with Hermione reading out of the guidebook with Scorpius while Ron slouches along trying to be cool and rolling his eyes at his wife, and Rose gets distracted by everything other than what they're supposed to be looking at. XD

Ambrosia is a nasty piece of work, which makes for a good villain. She really wants to be the kingpin of somewhere, and since London didn't work out, New York will have to do. Until Rose manages to mess her up again.

Mimi was ridiculous amounts of fun to write, especially since Rose didn't notice she was actually a drag queen. Scorpius of course, did immediately but didn't feel the need to comment on it (cause he's that kind of guy) until he realized Rose didn't know.

Rose getting arrested, oh it was bound to happen sooner or later. Good thing Hatchcock was looking out for her or she would've been too flustered to call her mom as her lawyer. Bringing in Ron and Hermione was probably my favorite part of the story - they're so much fun to write, and they bring in so many new possibilities. It let Rose quit floundering too. She needed a partner along. And of course Ron wants to check out all the new foods!

Scorpius is definitely the primary caregiver, but then he is the responsible one. Rose would get distracted and forget to feed the baby or something. I never liked this ship until I started writing it. It was like Rose knocked on my brain and moved in, and brought Scorpius along with her. I don't know. XD

Thank you so much for the fabulous review!

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Review #24, by Gryffin_DuckWolf Calling: Official

10th April 2013:
Aww, I loved this fluffy chapter! Louis is definitely good with kids and I'm not surprised, since he has a nephew. The scene with Jonah was so sweet and made me smile just reading it. I bet it was a lot of fun to write.

I'm glad Louis feels so confident about doing his shifts on his own and I hope he's able let that confidence spread into his research. Although I'm sure that will be difficult considering the people he's teamed up with.

Fuller made me laugh. She reminded me of Bailey on Grey's Anatomy as well as the character I have in charge of St. Mungo's in Beyond the Shadow. It's so fun writing bossy people in charge. Great chapter! I can't wait for the next! :)

Author's Response: It was a lot of fun to write ;) And more Jonah coming soon, too. He'll make another appearance in chapter seven.

Yes, Louis has confidence issues when drama occurs so things should get interesting. Plus there's a character (not going to name any names) that will stir up some added drama that will may or may not distract him from the research (even if will be temporarily).

I agree, bossy people in charge make for some fun writing. Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #25, by Gryffin_DuckWolf Calling: Doubt

30th March 2013:
Aw, yay, Victoire is pregnant! I knew that's what the news was! I hope that the baby isn't a werewolf, but it could go either way, of course. And I'm happy Dom is engaged, too. A lot happening for Louis's family!

And a lot happening for Louis, too! I kind of felt bad for him while he was meeting the research team, since none of them seemed all that enthused that he was there. I hope the rest of the team is a bit kinder, although I have a feeling he'll win them over yet. I'm still undecided about Thomas, since he seems to have Louis's best interests at heart, yet I hated that comment he made about it always being Miranda's time of the month. But that's what makes a good character! I'm really interested to get to know the research members as the story continues.

Aw, little Remus! He made me happy. Such a little sweetheart. And I loved Victoire being all motherly and Louis ignoring everything she said. I just love all the family banter. Great chapter! Can't wait for the next! :)

Author's Response: I have an idea where Victoire's pregnancy is concerned, but I'm not sure if I'll follow through. I'll decide when I reach that point.

Yeah, that darn research team just won't give poor Louis a break, huh. There will be a couple who will be nicer, or otherwise tolerate Louis, and you'll see them make appearances in chapter six (one made an initial appearance in chapter five). Ah, Thomas is a good guy, but he is also a man and men make comments like that on occasion (even the good ones); plus, Thomas is still young himself (early to mid thirties) so he can still act immature because men generally never stop acting like idiots (saying stupid stuff) through their twenties and thirties at the very least. At least from the judgment I have of them that is.

I love writing Remus, he really is a cute kid. All kids are fun to write. Glad you enjoyed all the family togetherness and banter, more to come. Thanks again for reviewing! (:

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